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Mr. Skeleton's Spooky Tooth Show

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Howdy all. Here's a little hallowe'en song. I envision it to be done in a vaudeville-ish arrangement; I have a melody I could use already, but before I stretch it over this (if I can, that is), I wanna see if it makes sense, the meter is good, etc. Thanks for your time!

 

Mr. Skeleton's Spooky Tooth Show

 

Mr. skeleton turned to gelatin
When he found himself on stage
The hushed crowd was more unsettling
Then a short stint in the grave

 

But he braved it out
It was tough no doubt
When he found his sound
Oh he went to town

 

He got some super creepy tones
Out of that bone xylophone
But he's singing 'em notes baritone
It's Mister Skel'ton's Spooky Tooth Show

 

Mr. Skeleton cued the organ
Featured a pair of floating hands
Then the werewolf barbershop quartet
Were in howlin' harmony, oh yeah

 

But his tux 'n top hat
And that aw shucks act
Sharpened out his flats
For the Monster Mash

 

He got some super creepy tones
Out of that bone xylophone
But he's singing 'em notes baritone
It's Mister Skeleton's Spooky Tooth Show

 

There's a round of applause
For our maestro and his band
It's scary how good it went
For a puppet and his friends

 

I'm not much a ventriloquist
Hope we're doing Vegas
No accapella show tunes
We're gonna need the whole creepy crew

 

Gonna need those super creepy tones
Out of that bone xylophone
He'll be singing 'em notes baritone
It's Mister Skeleton's Spooky Tooth Show

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Well I liked it, very kooky

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I love this. Think it could use a bunch of work to really make it consistently outstanding though.

Aside from one word ("creepy"), which you used in the chorus already, these three stanzas are devoid of any reference to Hallowe'en:


But he braved it out
It was tough no doubt
When he found his sound
Oh he went to town

There's a round of applause
For our maestro and his band
It's scary how good it went
For a puppet and his friends

I'm not much a ventriloquist
Hope we're doing Vegas
No accapella show tunes
We're gonna need the whole creepy crew

That first stanza about braving it out in particular seems weak.


In the chorus, this line:
But he's singing 'em notes baritone
Doesn't make any sense to me. I like the WORD baritone, but what does it have to do with Hallowe'en or anything creepy? And why did you start that line with the word "but"?


Other than that the lyric really pops and there are some absolutely stellar lines. The titular line is my favourite. Great image.

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