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Haven't been doing many new lyrics (let alone songs) recently as summer has me (the usual) busy, and also doing the prep work for my upcoming album.  Cranked this one out fairly quickly, I'm thinking its going to be fairly hard rock type sound.

 

Under the Bridge

 

V1

You pop up

Like an angry jack-in-the-box

An attitude

With a mind full of rocks

Attention

Is all you really seek

Causing trouble

Every time you speak

 

Ch

Crawling out from under the bridge

Won’t you please go back

We don’t like trolls around here

That’s the hard facts

           Go back! Under the bridge

 

V2

Your mouth spews

Nothing but garbage and hate

No other purpose

Than to stir up and agitate

Nothing useful

In your sad little life

We don’t believe

In all your fake news jive

 

Ch

 

Br

Dirty nasty little troll

With an evil little soul

Wouldn’t touch you with a ten-foot pole

Crawl back into your hole

 

Ch

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This feels like it came out quickly. But I mean that in a good way. Like you just sat down and the words just came pouring out. Of course I love the subject matter. That being said. It also feels like a first draft. But a very good draft that can easily be edited and reworked to be something very cool. 

 Verses are the strongest in my opinion. Chorus feels a bit weak. Bridge I’m not sure on. 

 I know my lyric critiques suck! 😀 I’m not much into offering improvement ideas after only a couple read throughs 

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Hi Mike, 

        Snappy little lyric!   In the chorus he's crawling out from under the bridge but in the bridge he needs to get back in his hole. Somewhat contradictory images.  It could be a hole under the bridge, I suppose.  Of the chorus and bridge, I think the bridge is stronger.  Maybe first line of chorus could be something like 

 

Crawl out and you spew your bile

 

      Bile is an easy rhyme for many things.  The crawling out imagery can remain without mentioning a bridge. My two cents. Will there be guitar?  Hehe. 

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Good comments, yes a very quick write/first draft. The title came to me first.  'Into Your Hole' definitely won't work as a title/hook.

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Hi Mike B, 

I took some liberty with this. Ignore at your earliest convenience!

 

Under the Bridge



V1

You pop up

Like an angry jack-in-the-box

An attitude  With a filthy keystroke

With And a mind heart full of rocks   

Attention You delight yourself

 

Is all you really seek     you spread foul seed

 

Causing trouble  

 

Every time you speak



Ch

Crawling You crawled out from under the bridge

Won’t you please go back

We don’t like trolls around here   I won’t be the next victim


That’s the hard facts      of your 1st degree troll attack

          Go back!

What’s it like to live under the bridge?

           Go back!

What’s it like to live under the bridge?



V2

Your mouth spews  dirty fingers move

Nothing but garbage   spewing venom and hate

No other purpose    on your cyber soapbox  


Than to stir it up and   you perturb and agitate

Nothing useful  no understanding

In your sad  little life

We don’t believe  just a slobbering little troll

 In all your  with your fake news jive



Ch



Br

Dirty nasty little troll

With an evil little soul

Wouldn’t touch you with a ten-foot pole

Crawl back into your hole



Ch
 

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Won't you please go back?

 

Feels too polite for an army of trolls swarming your bridge.

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