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My new song...God's Plan

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Hello everyone, it's been a while since I have posted but I have a new song that I just wrote and would like some feedback on it. I recorded it on my laptop in my kitchen at the table this morning so I am not looking for mixing, or sound recording advice. What I would like to know is how the song impacts you, if at all, and why or why not. I have found this site to be very helpful in fine tuning my songs and am very thankful to everyone who contributes.

 

 

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Well it does have an emotional impact, a melancholy overall feel which I think really works well. I kept waiting for a powerful chorus but it never came. the guitar playing at the end is very nice and I felt like it would work well leading into the powerfully sung chorus I kept waiting on. Overall I thought is was good and kept me interested till the end.

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I really like the sound of this......would like to read the lyrics as the music plays, however. Love the vocal!!

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Hello SlowD, 

        I also enjoyed this. Everything I've heard from you I've liked.  I think there isn't enough musical contrast between the verses and the chorus. 

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I really enjoyed this. Except for maybe recording it cleaner, there's not a lot I'd change. Good stuff

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Your voice has this really nice quality to it...reminds me of Blaze Foley a bit. It's great for what you're singing...Solid story-telling, good guitar playing....would love a chorus shift...but that's just me. 

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So I worked on this song based on feedback from this site. I added a more defined chorus and added some instrumentation. It is still in the works so feedback is appreciated.

 

Thank you all.

 

https://soundcloud.com/billy-gallant-2/gods-plan-1

 

Your family grew up on the land

They got their from by their own hand

They got their clothes the same way

Your family was raised by the land

 

My family grew up in the city

We had to get our food from the man

We got our clothes the same way

My family was raised by the city

 

Does anyone know god's plan?

Has anyone seen her hand?

How can anyone know god's plan?

Has anyone seen her hand?

 

You grew up in a small town

you always knew everyone around

you always knew where you belonged

You were raised by a small town

 

Does anyone know god's plan?

Has anyone seen her hand?

How can anyone know god's plan?

Has anyone seen her hand?

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I love the lyric. As people are saying add chorus. 

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