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Toys were us 

 

If you’re looking 

For shop's that’s nice

That sells LEGO

At twice the price

Or that has a

Barbie price tag

High enough it

Would make ken gag

 

Well don’t come looking for us

Cause we are Toys were us

Toys were us, Toys were us

Toys were us, Cause we went bust

 

If bad service

Is what you want

From a worker

At a storefront

Or want to hear

A gift card bought

Is useless and

It’s worth is naught

 

Well don’t come looking for us

Cause we are Toys were us

Toys were us, Toys were us

Toys were us, Cause we went bust

 

Your smile turned

Into a frown

Unemployment

Gettin' you down

Don’t look at it 

Don't think we're not

As bankruptcy 

Sad for your loss

Look at it as

But we are off

Democracy 

To Barbados

 

But don’t come looking for us

Cause we are Toys were us

Toys were us, Toys were us

Toys were us, Cause we went bust

 

 

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Lol!

couple of minors 

 

For a shop that's nice or for shops that are nice?

 

may be 

 

Is/its useless now? 

 

Loved " Make Ken gag" lol nice one 

 

 

 

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Yea suh, dis a gud

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I like this. Maybe a spot for "thrown under our own bus" in the chorus?

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Hi Mick

Very funny and clever lyrics I look forward to hearing the song, 

 

 

A little side story

In the midlands UK there is a industrial area called- the Black Country, they have there own slang

like yow for you and dow for don't, Toys Are Us was known as Toys Am We 

 

All the Best

Mike

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The title for this is absolute gold!!

 

Would you mind if I took the title and wrote a different lyric?

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My only nit was the want/storefront rhyme - not very close in sound, but maybe so in an Aussie accent?

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Hi Mick

 

Like fab says - the title alone is golden! :lol:

I have a few prosody nits - ignore at will:

 

price tag

ken gag

 

you want

store front

 

bankruptcy

Democracy 

 

As you can see above, the words rhyme, but the emphasis is on different syllables in conversation.

Also, I don't think rhyming us with us in the first two lines of the chorus works.

 

Great idea Mick - keep at it and this could be hilarious IMHO :lol:

Paul

 

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@Mr Distraction thanks for the comments... In my head I was sticking to a lazy Jamaican speak

@fabkebab I guess so I don’t own it

@A Musical Key "thrown under our own bus" gives the impression that it was uncontrolled bankruptcy whicich I doubt it was

@Mike B yes the wan in want in Australian sounds like won from wonton 

@PaulCanuck in my head the lines were in a Jamaican accent so the words are flatter and seem to work

 

 

 

 

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26 minutes ago, mick70 said:

 

@fabkebab I guess so I don’t own it

 

 

 

Copyright laws aside, etc - As far as I am concerned you own the idea, and if I wrote something I would consider it a co-write! But I am not going to try without you saying "yes" instead of "I guess so" :-)

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38 minutes ago, mick70 said:

 

@Mike B yes the wan in want in Australian sounds like won from wonton 

 

 

 'won(ton)' in the US is pronounced like 'juan(ton)' (rhymes with 'dawn').

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47 minutes ago, fabkebab said:

Copyright laws aside, etc - As far as I am concerned you own the idea, and if I wrote something I would consider it a co-write! But I am not going to try without you saying "yes" instead of "I guess so" 🙂

Then consider it a co-write

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35 minutes ago, Mike B said:

 'won(ton)' in the US is pronounced like 'juan(ton)' (rhymes with 'dawn').

🤯 ok lets try saying it’s pronounced w-on-t

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17 hours ago, mick70 said:

@A Musical Key "thrown under our own bus" gives the impression that it was uncontrolled bankruptcy whicich I doubt it was

Since when are lyrics factually accurate? 🙂

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@PaulCanuckTried a different ending

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