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[[ This one began with something in this world -- Diplacusis dysharmonica, Diplacusis echoica -- and turned into a spirit walking at night in my peripheral hearing and mocking me, and this became a song to be sung with chants and drums and a chorus of mocking spirits singing in insect voices. ]]

 

[the predicament of the soul]

A spirit coiled

in the curl

of my ear

talks to me

like a lurker

in the other room.

I cannot tell

above the wind

that whistles by:

is this the me

who's talking? Whose

tongue is this?

My mind or spirit

coiled within

my inner ear?

Whose tongue is curled

in my left ear?

Come out now!

 

[one explanation of the soul's predicament]

They say

the mocking ghost

will walk your words

back home.

They say

the mocking ghost

will turn your tale

around.

They say

the mocking ghost

will live in your

left ear.

 

[chant of the mocking ghost in insect voices]

They say

the mocking ghost

They say

the mocking ghost

They say

the mocking ghost

 

[wonderment from within]

My mind

or flight of birds?

My mind

or branches aching?

My mind

or not my mind?

 

[another explanation of the soul's predicament]

They say 

the mocking ghost

will show

another you.

They say

the mocking ghost

will bend the light

round you.

They say

the mocking ghost

will live in your

left ear.

 

[chant of the mocking ghost in insect voices]

They say

the mocking ghost

They say

the mocking ghost

They say

the mocking ghost

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1 hour ago, malcolm said:

[[ This one began with something in this world -- Diplacusis dysharmonica, Diplacusis echoica -- and turned into a spirit walking at night in my peripheral hearing and mocking me, and this became a song to be sung with chants and drums and a chorus of mocking spirits singing in insect voices. ]]

 

[the predicament of the soul]

A spirit coiled

in the curl

of my ear

talks to me

like a lurker

in the other room.

I cannot tell

above the wind

that whistles by:

is this the me

who's talking? Whose

tongue is this?

My mind or spirit

coiled within

my inner ear?

Whose tongue is curled

in my left ear?

Come out now!

 

[one explanation of the soul's predicament]

They say

the mocking ghost

will walk your words

back home.

They say

the mocking ghost

will turn your tale

around.

They say

the mocking ghost

will live in your

left ear.

 

[chant of the mocking ghost in insect voices]

They say

the mocking ghost

They say

the mocking ghost

They say

the mocking ghost

 

[wonderment from within]

My mind

or flight of birds?

My mind

or branches aching?

My mind

or not my mind?

 

[another explanation of the soul's predicament]

They say 

the mocking ghost

will show

another you.

They say

the mocking ghost

will bend the light

round you.

They say

the mocking ghost

will live in your

left ear.

 

[chant of the mocking ghost in insect voices]

They say

the mocking ghost

They say

the mocking ghost

They say

the mocking ghost

Ok, a chanting song with insects doing the chanting.  Just exactly what are you looking for as regards critiques?

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17 hours ago, Barneyboy said:

Ok, a chanting song with insects doing the chanting.  Just exactly what are you looking for as regards critiques?

How's your entomology?

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1 hour ago, malcolm said:

How's your entomology?

I use Raid.

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