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The Christmas Bell That Wouldn't Ring

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Fresh from the lyrics section - thanks to those who helped out there.

Comments/advice welcomed :)


The Christmas Bell That Wouldn't Ring
Copyright (c) 2017 Tennyson Road Music

It happened every year at Christmas
The kids would decorate the Christmas tree
They got a box of bells from the basement shelves
And hung them up so carefully

But they always had a tiny problem
When they gave each bell a little shake
One didn't make a sound, so they knew that they'd found
The Christmas bell that wouldn't ring

He was such a lovely golden colour
And he could shine like any star you've seen
But as cruel as it sounds, they didn't like him around
So they stuck him at the back of the tree

 He could hear the gong
 Of the big bell's song
 At the start of every Christmas day
 But it was hard to be
 Hanging quietly
 When he knew he had a part to play


Then one Christmas eve' he hung there waiting
When Santa came upon the scene
And it was just by chance, he took a sideways glance
And saw our shiny friend behind the tree

A helper who had come with Santa
Sprang to action when she saw him wink
She tapped her hammer quick, and had his clapper fixed
In the time it takes an elf to blink

And that bell began to ring!
And his ring was a beautiful thing!!

 Now when he hears the bong
 Of the big bell's song
 At the start of every Christmas day
 He's at the front of the tree
 Ringing gleefully
 He knows his part by heart, I'm happy to say!


So the moral of this little story
Is everybody's got a part to play
Until you play your part, keep a song in your heart
Like the Christmas bell that wouldn't ring

Until you play your part, keep a song in your heart
Like the Christmas bell that wouldn't ring !!

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Damn good "bell"-ody ;) Definitely has that classic Christmas song sound that makes me want to smash every radio as well ;) If I had to nit... the non rhyming "shake" to "ring" is a bit jarring. I have no idea how to fix it though and I imagine you've already racked your brain on it to no avail, so it is what is. I could imagine the verse that comes in around the 2 minute mark could slow down and just depart from the groove for a bit for added drama. Couple places where the vocals could be tighter. Overall, good job though. If you can get it on the market, it could be a cash cow :)

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Well Paul you have a certain knack for transporting me back to my childhood in the early 1970's -   I picture Rudolph and Bumbles and the whole gang.  It's like a snapshot of holiday cheer classic from my youth!  And it should go without saying but I love the message of never give up!!!   We all could use a dose of that every now and then, yours truly included.   At least that is what I hear in this.   You have given this one a treatment that is at once nostalgic and  fresh, and that approach never gets old.  Well done!

 

Merry Xmas,

Pete

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On 12/7/2017 at 17:10, GaryHale said:

Damn you, PaulCanuck, for infecting me with an ear-worm!

Sorry about that - thanks for listening :)

 

On 12/7/2017 at 17:28, Kerry Parr said:

Damn good "bell"-ody ;) Definitely has that classic Christmas song sound that makes me want to smash every radio as well ;) If I had to nit... the non rhyming "shake" to "ring" is a bit jarring. I have no idea how to fix it though and I imagine you've already racked your brain on it to no avail, so it is what is. I could imagine the verse that comes in around the 2 minute mark could slow down and just depart from the groove for a bit for added drama. Couple places where the vocals could be tighter. Overall, good job though. If you can get it on the market, it could be a cash cow :)

Thanks Kerry - haha yeah tou're right - shake/ring is a stretch rhyming wise :) I have a theory that the further apart a rhyming couplet, the more you can stretch the rhyme because the human brain tends to forget the previous sound the longer ago it happened. Prob I'm full of sh*t on that theory but that's my excuse. So now all I can hear is the slow-down you suggested at 2:00. Think I'll do that though it's a bit of work :( Thanks for the great comments!

 

On 12/7/2017 at 21:13, RoadDog said:

Well Paul you have a certain knack for transporting me back to my childhood in the early 1970's -   I picture Rudolph and Bumbles and the whole gang.  It's like a snapshot of holiday cheer classic from my youth!  And it should go without saying but I love the message of never give up!!!   We all could use a dose of that every now and then, yours truly included.   At least that is what I hear in this.   You have given this one a treatment that is at once nostalgic and  fresh, and that approach never gets old.  Well done!

 

Merry Xmas,

Pete

Hi Pete - getting that comment a lot about bringing back feelings of youth - so I'm happy to hear that. :) Thanks for listening and the kind remarks - merry xmas to you too!

 

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Paul,

 

Very fun and commerically viable, I'd say.

 

I love the bells sounds, and especially that sneaky tune you tuck in at the end.  What was that one again? :D

 

If you want your second verse to rhyme, here is an option:

On 12/7/2017 at 08:31, PaulCanuck said:

But they always had a tiny problem
When they gave each bell a little shake
One didn't make a sound, so they knew that they'd found
The Christmas bell that wouldn't ring

But they always had a tiny problem

As they tested each bell on the string

One didn't make a sound, so they knew that they'd found

The Christmas bell that wouldn't ring

 

I also like:

In the time it takes an elf to blink

 

 

Nice job, all around!

 

 

 

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What a great, fun song!!! Excellent all the way around. Very airplay worthy.  Thanks for sharing.  Your overall mix is wonderful.  Are you sure you don't wanna give some "mixology" lessons?

 

 

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Fantastic Christmas song!

 

No nits other than that xylophone or whatever instrument you are using for the main licks are a bit harsh to the ears at volume.

 

Strong vocals, and solid mix (other than that one thing). Great ending!

 

Peace,

TC

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holy crap Paul! AN INSTANT CHRISTMAS CLASSIC!! definitely captures that 'christmas spirit'.

 

i dont say this lightly at all:  This Needs To Be On the Radio!! seriously!

 

superbly arranged and produced! loving those bells, especially the 'jingle bells' melody at the very end.

 

Merry Christmas! :D

 

-brad

 

 

 

 

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