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Gioratal

Writer's block

I'm trying to write a song (after a long time) and I'm blocked!

Main theme:

I'm trying to write about a situation where your life partner is feeling shitty and things are not going well for him/her. You are doing well and work hard for it and you look at your partner and thinks they can do better and they should stop blaming the circumstances for their problems like blaming a force of nature for destroying everything (out of your hand)

 

I want to use the "Force of nature" as a metaphor for "problems" and in overall tell a story from the "Happy" part of this relationship and how this "shitty" weather, can influence and ruin stuff.

 

First draft:

 

Verse 1:

Maybe it's the weather, 100 of raindrops in your heart.

They say it would get colder but you haven't felt warmth in a very long time.

Wake up every morning, and you feel like you left something behind

They say it would get harder, but harder is no harder when you're aching all the time.

 

Verse 2:

Forces of nature, washing you inside out

Laying on a feather, won't get you anywhere.

So stop blaming the weather, when you get stuck 

Forces of nature, washing you inside out.

 

Listen to the demo HERE

 

Here is a link to the project on Kompoz Let me know what you think?

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Blocked?  Write a song about fiber. :)

 

I don't think a verb like "washing" is a good choice.  I think "forces of nature, pushing/pulling you inside out" would work better.  Laying on a feather?  What's that's supposed to mean?  It sounds to me like they're just words to have a rhyme to "weather." I personally think you're too hung up on the whole "weather" thing.  I think the main forces of human nature giving us most of our problems are inertia and fear.  Stick with stuff about being trapped in the rut of your own thinking, being unable to break away and doomed to succumb to your habits, being afraid to make a change or take a chance - things like that.  The weather stuff seems like a different song to me.  "Forces of Nature" is a cool hook and title.  But, either have "forces of nature" be a metaphor for human nature, or have the song be about Mother Nature.  I don't think you should try and mix both in the same song.

 

Just my personal take on it.

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On 7/12/2017 at 04:31, Gioratal said:

I'm trying to write a song (after a long time) and I'm blocked!

Main theme:

I'm trying to write about a situation where your life partner is feeling shitty and things are not going well for him/her. You are doing well and work hard for it and you look at your partner and thinks they can do better and they should stop blaming the circumstances for their problems like blaming a force of nature for destroying everything (out of your hand)

 

I want to use the "Force of nature" as a metaphor for "problems" and in overall tell a story from the "Happy" part of this relationship and how this "shitty" weather, can influence and ruin stuff.

 

First draft:

 

Verse 1:

Maybe it's the weather, 100 of raindrops in your heart..... Maybe it's the weather pouring raining on your heart. 

They say it would get colder but you haven't felt warmth in a very long time.......As the forces of nature has cooled the warmth

Wake up every morning, and you feel like you left something behind

They say it would get harder, but harder is no harder when you're aching all the time.

 

Verse 2:

Forces of nature, washing you inside out

Laying on a feather, won't get you anywhere.

So stop blaming the weather, when you get stuck 

Forces of nature, washing you inside out.

 

Listen to the demo HERE

 

Here is a link to the project on Kompoz Let me know what you think?

Sounds like your force of nature metaphor, as used, works against your story idea.  I thought the idea was to stop blaming the forces of nature for his predicament. Sounds like v2 is blaming the force. Don't think this one is gonna go anywhere as written. 

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I don't believe in writer's block. It's up to you. It's all in the head. You have to unclog yourself. Just write something. I often find when I want to write something good I'll enjoy, it's not that I can't but often I am too tired or not motivated and or in some instances, trying too hard. Only way to undo that is by writing something. It doesn't have to be great or something you like, but write even when you don't feel like it and even if it is just a little. If the problem still persists write about how you feel at that moment and what is on your mind. 

 

As for Force of Nature...........here's mine. I wrote it 5 years ago. Maybe this can give you some ideas.

 

 

Force of Nature

 

Thought we had a future that would last, but I'm afraid

The sun no longer shines on the life we both had made

Picnics in the park and Chinese dining once our thing

Laughter over ice cream now a memory from last spring

There were no signs that you led a double life

Until I figured out that you had another wife

The long trips you'd take without me or the kids

Saying it was business when you headed to Madrid

 

If I were a force of nature

I'd strike you dead

Like a bolt of lightning

From overhead

So you better take cover

And you better take care

You're gonna be affected

By my heartache I swear

 

What bothers me the most is how you don't seem to care

Even after the facts have been established and shared

The PI on the case confirmed all my darkest thoughts

You were living two lives while I was feeling caught

Caught up in the lies and frozen by the fear

Shaken to the core of what comes next beyond the tears

You couldn't bring yourself to admit the truth

Left with indecision now I'm sparking like a fuse

 

If I were a force of nature

I'd strike you dead

Like a bolt of lightning

From overhead

So you better take cover

And you better take care

You're gonna be affected

By my heartache I swear

 

She must be real sexy

To have led you astray

Did her passion touch your heart

To the point where you would stay

It really doesn't matter

But it's sad to say

The only way to reach you

Is by going separate ways

 

If I were a force of nature

I'd strike you dead

Like a bolt of lightning

From overhead

So you better take cover

And you better take care

You're gonna be affected

By my heartache I swear

 

CarlB (c) 2012

 

 

 

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