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Ok.  Accepting entries through the end of the month, Pacific time, as always.  ( I lifted these rules verbatim from Iggy's January rules, except for the timelines.) thanks Iggy; hope you don't mind.

March Lyric Contest  laugh.gif

The timeline is:

 

• Entries will be accepted now through Midnight Pacific Daylight Time (PDT) Tuesday March 28

• Voting (scorecards) will take place March 29 thru April 2.

• Don't start voting until I officially post the scoring instructions.

• I'll post the results on March 29 when I have them!

 

cool.gifHere are the rules:cool.gif

 

 

1) It has to be an original lyric that has not been posted on this site previously

 

2) Send your submission to me (fabkebab) via private message and I will post it anonymously on your behalf. The names of each lyric writer will be revealed at the end of the contest.

 

3) Once you enter your lyric, you cannot change or revise it, or submit another in its place.

 

4) I will submit it as is, so watch your format and your spelling. I will not change any of your errors after the lyric has been posted.

 

5) If you enter, you must submit scores for the other lyrics when the submission portion of the contest ends.

 

All Musers are welcome to submit songs as contestants or score the songs as non-contestants. Any questions or problems should be sent to me (fabkebab) via private message (PM).

 

special rule for march - I will also anonymously submit a lyric of my own, which will be scored but will not be eligible to win. I will not actually vote, to remove any chance of bias

 

smile.gifENJOY and GOOD LUCK!! smile.gif

 

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Getaway Plan

 

Verse 1:
Everybody with their heads
buried in their phones
working working for a life
made of bills and loans

Take me to an island
oh so far away
settle down on the beach
for permanent vacay

Pre-Chorus:
Live every minute
like its happy hour
plant little seeds of love
and let them flower

Chorus:
Gotta find a way to run
while we still can...
my getaway plan

Verse 2:
I wanna get lost
in the palm trees
take a lazy nap
feel the summer breeze

Tradin' stress for a drink
a pink umbrella
fun n laughter in the air
keep ya chill and mellow

Pre-Chorus:
Live every minute
like its happy hour
plant little seeds of love
and let them flower

Chorus:
Gotta find a way to run
while we still can...
my getaway plan

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Suicide is no solution

 

Verse 1

Sitting around on a Saturday night

Listing to some old Bob Dylan tunes

Songs about, love, peace and sorrow

Be making that decision soon

 

Verse 2

Life without direction

Emotions stored deep within

You’ve become a rock of granite

Worn down, by a incessant winds

 

Chorus

Taking the easy way out

Ain’t as easy as it seems

Your spirit inside will call to you

The life inside you screams

 

Verse 3

Don’t know where to find the path

Look in the streets or up above

Who keeps the answers to your questions

By the way, what is love

 

Verse 4

A funny thing you noticed

On the way to do the deed

There were many others, just like you

Not cared for, hurt in need

 

Chorus

 

Verse 5

When the parents were forgotten

They would take away your keys

You’ve been through this life for so long now

You could leave here with such ease

 

Verse6

No one seemed to comprehend

You’re weak impassioned pleas

The others with you, understood

But none of them were free

 

Chorus

 

Verse 7

Suicide is no solution

All your teachers cried

You said it did not matter

Cause they were not by your side

 

Verse 8

Self pity is a heavy load to bare

Find a friend to lend a hand

Look up in the sky and smell the air

Your life is part of a bigger plan

 

Bridge

Life in this world

Life in this world

 

Chorus

 

Verse 9

Find the answers to your questions

That you’ve been holding for so long

You may find it on a mountain top

You may even hear it in this song

 

Chorus

 

Fade out repeat

Suicide is no solution

It’s no solution

Suicide is no solution

It’s no solution…

 

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The Ballad Of My Ex-wife

 

This's the ballad of my ex-wife; my former better half.                        
Please excuse the sarcasm. I'll cry if I don't laugh.
(Refrain) Please excuse the sarcasm; he'll cry if he don't laugh.        

              

Got pregnant on our first date.  Her brothers they had guns. 
We married in a hurry. Then came the little one.
(Refrain) They married in a hurry; then came the little one.

 

She called the po-lice on me. She started 2 house fires. 
Damn near destroyed my ATV. she punctured all four tires.
(Refrain) Damn near destroyed his ATV; she punctured all 4 tires.

 

She even crashed my fishing boat. And gave me a disease.
She ran the car without no oil, until the engine seized.
(Refrain) She ran the car without no oil, until the engine seized.

 

She maxed out all my credit cards. My truck got repossessed. 
She pissed off code enforcement and she tipped off IRS.
(Refrain) She pissed off code enforcement and she tipped off IRS. 

 

She turned my kid against me. She wouldn't feed my dogs.
The  house is in foreclosure. Got me fired from my job. 
(Refrain) The house is in foreclosure; got him fired from his job. 

 

She's getting half my pension. She's taking half my pay. 
You know I wouldn't mind so much, but the sex was just ok.
(Refrain) You know he wouldn't mind so much, but the sex was just OK.

 

We got restraining orders. Can't get within a mile. 
But even from that far away, what kills me is her smile.
(Refrain) But even from that far away, what kills him is her smile.

 

You know I'd never do it, but yet the truth be told.
If I shot her when I wanted, I'd be long out on parole.
(Refrain) If he shot her when he wanted, he'd be long out on parole.

 

So be careful what you take home, when're stupid drunk and stoned. 
Cuz the screwin' that you're doin', ain't worth the screwin' that's to come. 
(Refrain) Cuz the screwin' that you're doin', ain't worth the screwin' that's to come.

 

(Spoken) Cuz the screwin' that you're doin' ain't worth the screwin' that's to come. 

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Because Of You

                                    Written by ***********************

 

 

 

Well baby here we are

My god we’ve come so far

We built this dream together

Now always and forever

 

You know I’ll be right here

It’s the promise that I made

I used to pray at night I’d find the right guy

Now my dream came true you’re here right by my side

 

Because of you

You made my life worth living

So caring always giving

You’ve turned my life around

 

Because of you

You are what love’s all about

Life has more meaning now

Baby there’s no doubt

 

Standing at the alter

Tears flowing like running water

As strong vows were softly being said

I held your hand so tightly

 

Chills ran down my spine

Then finally you may kiss your bride

I still think about where I would be

If you hadn’t come along to sweep me off of my feet

 

Because of you

You made my life worth living

So caring always giving

You’ve turned my life around

 

Because of you

You are what love’s all about

Life has more meaning now

Baby there’s no doubt

 

Because of you

You are what love’s all about

Life has more meaning now

Baby there’s no doubt

 

Life has more meaning now

Baby it’s because of you

 

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Carnivore
 

 (F/X: Sound of rain)

 

(Verse 1)

Flicking rusted nails in a factory yard
As the night draws in and it rains so hard,
Swapping dirty jokes
And telling tall tales,
Future reaching out
Assembly lines or jail.

 

(Pre Chorus)
Small town, same ol' talk,
Same ol' faces,
They never run if they can walk.
But that won’t be my fate
That is not my way,
I got so much more to do
I got so much more to say.

(Chorus)
Growing up like a carnivore
I'm gonna chase that dream some more,
I got a ravenous heart
And a restless soul
I need to stalk that dream once more.

 

(Verse 2)
Scrapping busted keys along lines of cars
Days tick down as we count our scars,
Hearing gossip drum
On corrugated roofs,
Pay-check handcuffs
Nothing-ever-happens news.

 

(Pre Chorus)
Small town, same ol' talk,
Same ol' faces,

Never run if they can walk.
But that won’t be my fate
That is not my way,
I got so much more to do
I got so much more to say.

 

(Chorus)
Growing up like a carnivore
I'm gonna chase that dream some more,
I got a ravenous heart
And a restless soul
I need to stalk that dream once more.

 

(Bridge)
So I grabbed a bust up bike and a half tank of fuel
I pawned my sorry life and said goodbye to you,
I drove that wheezing bike onto a ferry's deck
Set off for some place I’d not found yet.
Bartered a scrunched up map and a grumpy mule
Spent my cash and enjoyed the view,
Walked that mule up a mountainside

Wind in my hair and I’m still alive.

 

(Chorus)
Growing up like a carnivore
I'm gonna chase that dream some more,
I got a ravenous heart
And a restless soul
I need to stalk that dream once more.

 

(Bridge - acoustic)

But sometimes on a quiet night

I remember the ol’ faces,

The tall tales and dirty jokes we told

Street names and familiar places.

And nostalgia tints those memories

Gifts them airs and graces,

Playing cards by the light of the moon

Davy swearing as Nigel palmed aces.

 

(Verse 3)

Chasing sunsets glimpsed on travel cards
Party nights in exotic bars,
But seeing nothing change
Except the clothes we wear
I’d still be flicking nails

If I was there.

 

(Partial Chorus)
Growing up like a carnivore

Growing up like a carnivore

Growing up, hear me roar …

 

(F/X: Sound of a lion roaring)

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My Army Men

 

Pshhhhh, pshhhhh
Ghu, ghu, ghu... pish-ow!
Rat-a-tat-tat-tat

I got my men - my army men

 

You can line up all your stuffies
Think o' takin' Pillow Ridge
Even send your barrel o' monkeys
Over Coffee Table Bridge

 

But my plastic guns are waiting
Soon you'll hear your fluffies scream
When they feel our bullets strafing
And they hit my wall of green

 

Cause I got my men - my army men
I got my men - my army men
Pshhhhh, pshhhhh, pshhhhh, pish-ow!

 

Jim, there with the bent up rifle
He's the toughest in the pack
If his buddies fall in battle
He's the one that's got the back

 

Of my men
My army men
Rat-a-tat-tat-tat
pish-ow! pish-ow!

 

{br}
Ol' Gramps lost his voice in the war
Dad says he inhaled some gas
Sits there watching me from his corner
In distress
He's a mess.

 

...........

 

We're on Electric Heater Cliff
Mom calls "Lunch!", I leave the room
But the thermostat has tripped
Soldiers melting, spewing fumes...

 

Oh, my men!
My army men!

 

Nearly fifty years have gone
I still swim in this disgrace
Lost my heroes.. every one
I still see that twisted face

 

Of my men
My army men..
I lost my men..
My army men.

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Standing  On the Corner 

            

He pulled up his torn hoodie

As the rain began to pour

I passed him in the early morn

And he was still there long past 4

 

Looked to be maybe 30

I stopped passed him my umbrella

Something about him touched my heart

But I drove on poor fella

Pre-ch:

It’s been haunting me the thought

Of that young man standing on the corner

Ch:

Don’t know who’s telling me

Don’t know what I’m supposed to do

But he’s a case for the coroner

If he's there standing on the corner

V:

Some people are telling me

He’s been standing there 3 years straight

Got this calling a mother’s mission

No time to waste no time to wait

Pre-ch:

My body’s shaking feeling chills

Seeing that man standing on the corner

Ch:

Don’t know who’s telling me

Don’t know what I’m supposed to do

But he’s a case for the coroner

If he's there standing on the corner.

Br:

Son I’ve seen you here every day

May I ask why

What he said broke me down

As I cried the tears would not stop

My mom dropped me off

And I’ve been waiting for her to pick me up

Ch:

Don’t know who’s telling me

But I know what I’m gonna do

You can’t have him Mr. coroner

No more days standing on the corner

Fade:

You’re coming with me sweet child

No more standing

Nor more alone

You’re going home

It’s time for you to go home

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STREETS OF COEUR D’ALENE

(Verse)

We were walking down the streets of Coeur d’Alene

You could not stand still

The crowd had gathered for the big parade

Up on Independence Hill

 

We stopped and listened to a street musician

Down at Sunset Park

You said you’d like to get down to the water

Before it got too dark

 

(Chorus)

We were both so unafraid

Too young and foolish to see this was not forever

On the streets of Coeur d’Alene

Blinded by not knowing any better

 

(Verse)

I hailed a taxi to the Wall of Fallen Heroes

Up at Cherry Hill

You said you could not understand such violence

I said I hope you never will

 

Then it was night and you were feeling restless

Down on Hubbard Street

We sat and watched the ripples in the water

Felt the sand beneath our feet

 

(Chorus)

We were both so innocent

Just two kids, pretending we knew better

On the streets of Coeur d’Alene

Learning slowly, that nothing lasts forever

 

(Bridge)

And I tried to hold that night

To keep it safe from the years that rust our senses

But in that cold moon light

We felt the stirring of life’s consequences

 

(Chorus)

I still think about that day

And though the years have left me old and weathered

On the streets of Coeur d’Alene

We’re still young lovers believing in forever

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In the Gathering Dark

 

Verse
Fine jewels have a glitter
It’s hard to ignore
Trapped in the gleam
I keep wanting more
The evidence is mounting
They've pulled off a crime
I realize they're wasting my time

 

(Chorus)
Can’t always believe
What my eyes are seeing
Still haven’t seen
What I believe in
Know I’ll need faith
When seasons are stark
I’ll keep my eyes open…
In the gathering dark

 

Verse
It takes a constant struggle
To do what is right
Judgment runs loose
Abandon holds tight
A freezing wind’s howling
I cling to the light
Drawing me toward points far in the night

 

(Chorus)
Can’t always believe
What my eyes are seeing
Still haven’t seen
What I believe in
Know I’ll need faith
When seasons are stark
I’ll keep my eyes open…
In the gathering dark

 

(Bridge)
I ask all the hardest questions
The answers that come
Weigh less than smoke
My fate must be 
To wrestle the angel
As day turns to night
I won’t give up hope


(Chorus)
Can’t always believe
What my eyes are seeing
Still haven’t seen
What I believe in
Know I’ll need faith
When seasons are stark
I’ll keep my eyes open…
In the gathering dark
(Repeat)

 

(Instrumental)

 

(Outro)
I won’t give up hope

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Ryan the legendary sealion

 

1/ Once there was a big sealion
Black and sleek his name was Ryan
Working the day shift at the zoo
But he felt an itch to try something new

 

Ryan, Ryan
The Legendary Sea lion

 

2/ Gathered his things in a great big bundle
Said if the lion is the king of the jungle
Then I should be king of the sea
And my subjects surely are waiting for me

 

Ryan, Ryan !

 

3/ He flopped right out and down the street
Little flippers instead of feet
Each city block and road he crossed
Until he realized he was lost

 

Ryan, Ryan
The Legendary Sea lion

 

4/ So a man stepped up said "I am Joe"
Just tell me where you want to go
Oh and climb into this metal crate
Its quite comfy, you will find it’s great

 

Ryan, Ryan!

 

5/ The journey was long, and Ryan felt spent
As the crate door opened to a circus tent
"Get out" said Joe, "you stupid fool"
"Balance this ball and get on that stool!"


Ryan, Ryan
The Legendary Sea lion
 

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Over and over

Every night she goes to bed she cries herself to sleep 
instead of dreaming, dreaming of someone to love
No matter how her empty heart breaks she remains alone
Without a lover or another she could call her own

 

Ch- over and over his words return  
The love we give is the love we take
Over and over in her memory the burn 
She's taking all the blame for it
The torment and the shame of it
Not guilty, but she's paying for it
Over and over, over and over again

 

Br, Her daddy used to visit in the middle of the night
She promised not to tell a living soul
But the memories still haunt her. she knows it wasn't right
The pictures are so vivid, they make her blood run cold

 

She thinks about her father every now and then
If only he would say it's not her fault
Lord she needs forgiveness she's suffered long enough
Then when she went to bed at night she could dream of love

Ch-

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If a man got paid for Kindness

(He’d be a Millionaire)

 

Verse 1

Wages are all he’s ever made

But he’s made them on his own

Carpentry is an honest trade

Good enough for God’s own Son

 

Verse 2

He does his best for others

Though sometimes it’s a test

If he had his druthers

He’d be fishing with the rest

 

Chorus

His financial world is in a mess

Far beyond repair

But if a man got paid for kindness

He’d be a millionaire

 

Verse 3

Retirement is a cruel joke

He says, he’ll work until he dies

One shot a day; one hand rolled smoke

Helps him to rest at night

 

Verse 4

Weekends he volunteers

Building for the community

Works to help house the homeless

Serving humanity

 

Chorus

His financial world is in a mess

Far beyond repair

But if a man got paid for kindness

He’d be a millionaire

 

Tag

Yes, if a man got paid for kindness

He’d be a millionaire

 

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Poem from my Bathroom Wall

By: ********************

 

-Verse 1-

Well now I’m sitting here in my bathtub

My bathtub filled with filth

And of the innocence lost

And of the innocence killed

And of the salt that runs

Through the ancient fields

I’m sitting here wondering

If God will heal the world

 

-Verse 2-

Well I’m sitting here in my bathtub

My bathtub filled with filth

And of the world’s icy frost

And of the blood that’s being spilled

And of the fish who swim

Without their own gills

I’m sitting here wondering

If God will heal the world

 

-Harmonica Solo-

 

-Verse 3-

Well I’m sitting here in my bathtub

My bathtub filled with filth

And of the dragon’s fire

Burning people at will

And of the gunpowder smoke

That’s fogging up Calvary Hill

Oh, God won’t you please

Please help heal this world

 

-Musical Bridge-

 

-Verse 4-

Well I’m sitting here in my bathtub

My bathtub filled with filth

And of the jealous people

And of people consumed by their guilt

And of those who proclaim

“I alone control my will”

I’m sitting here wondering

If God will heal the world

 

-Harmonica/Guitar to the end of song-

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The Greens and the Golds
 
Verse 1
Storm clouds gath'ring in the blue sky of day
Heads in the sand? – oh yeah, we’ll be ok
It’ll blow over soon, sunbath on the moon
Gaze back in wonder - whistle Major Tom’s tune
 
Pre chorus
Will we stagger and stumble, gamble and crumple
Fiddle in the rubble of Rome
Wake-up in time before the last line
of our history’s set down in stone
 
Chorus  1
And the greens and the golds
So ancient and old, that teems with life in the sea
Bleached skeleton white
distressed by the fight, with warm currents
that seduce you and me
from reality
 
Chorus  2
And the blues and the greys
in every spreading wave
Foams rabid on the ebbing tide     
And the whales and plankton have no holy sanctum
from the debris we’re casting aside
A devil’s been untied      
                             
Verse 2
Then a warm wind starts blowing, it twists and it turns
Funnels down to old Smithy’s home
He dives for cover while it’s torn to shreds
They said he was lucky still living amongst the dead
 
Pre chorus
Will we stagger and stumble, gamble and crumple
Fiddle in the rubble of Rome
Wake-up in time before the last line
of our history’s set down in stone
 
Chorus  1
And the greens and the golds
So ancient and old, that teems with life in the sea
Bleached skeleton white
distressed by the fight, with warm currents
that seduce you and me
From reality
 
Chorus 3
And the planets on acid                                              
choked down by the gasses, that spew from rich wealthy and few 
The face-mask cities
that everyone pities, invades our TV news                        
It’s ours to choose
 
Instrumental
 
Tag
It’s ours to loose…

 

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REDEMPTION

 

The life I’ve lived can’t be masked anymore
By the fear and shame or guilt that I carry
The words I’ve spoken have been brittle and sharp
And I’ve spent my time resentful and angry

 

I know I’ve hurt many more than I should
Willfully lying, playing games with the truth
I’ve used my charms and my body quite freely
To flatter myself by being pursued  

 

PC
But now in this moment when the whole world is silent
I raise my voice and sing for...

 

CH
Redemption
To free me
Redemption
To teach me
Redemption to wash
The stain from my eyes
Redemption
To show me
Redemption
To hold me
Redemption to carry me
Up to the sky

 

Oh how I hunger for that which is greater
I humble myself to receive the unknown
I’ll make amends to all I’ve mistreated
I’ll tend to their hearts and I’ll soothe their souls

 

I pray this journey takes me to places
I’ve only dreamed of in times of despair
A kingdom of peace where all is forgiven
A triumph of love that I may share

 

PC
And now in this moment when the whole world is silent
I raise my voice and sing for...

 

CH
Redemption
To free me
Redemption
To teach me
Redemption to wash
The stain from my eyes
Redemption
To show me
Redemption
To hold me
Redemption to carry me
Up to the sky

 

BR
To all of my friends
To all of my lovers
And all of the others
That lie in between
Hear me sing for...

 

CH
Redemption
To free me
Redemption
To teach me
Redemption to wash
The stain from my eyes
Redemption
To show me
Redemption
To hold me
Redemption to carry me
Up to the sky

 

Repeat chorus

 

 

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ITS ALL IN THE STARS  

 

V1

It's the pull of the moon            

Of Saturn and Mars                       

The braid of their orbits                                        

Tangled in stars                                                               

The path of each planet            

We want to believe             

Determines our future            

And what we'll achieve                                        

 

Chorus:

It's all in the stars

That burn clear and bright           

We're dreaming the secrets                            

They whisper each night

 

V2

We take what we're given         

With all we've been taught                        

Remembering lessons                           

From hard battles fought                  

Compelled by beliefs         

We've  learned  to obey                 

Sometimes we hunt                                      

And sometimes we're prey

  

V3

That hot smell of money                   

Sweet honey of fame                            

Poisons our wisdom                           

And darkens love's flame                         

The pressure of work,

Those hard nights alone

The ringing, by chance              

Of a small telephone

 

Chorus:

It's all in the stars

That burn clear and bright           

We're dreaming the secrets                            

They whisper each night

 

V4

We live in this chaos

Each path is unique

Lurching and stumbling

The strong and the weak

Riding down rivers   

Through which our time flows

Taking us finally                              

To where we must  go                   

 

Bridge:

So howl at the moon

As you rise with the tide                                   

From your first startled cries                                        y           

To your breathless goodbye                              

                                            

Chorus:

It's all in the stars

That burn clear and bright           

We're dreaming the secrets                            

They whisper each night

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Voting (scorecards) will take place  through Midnight (PST) Saturday, Sunday April 2nd (ignore my earlier comment about the 1st.

PLEASE READ BEFORE SUBMITTING YOUR SCORES:

1. Please title your post, "LYRIC SCORES."

2. When you send me your scores, put the number to the right of the song title, in the empty cell provided

3. Also important…leave a blank spot for your song, but keep the title in the list. For example, if your song title is "Cat Vomit Soup," your scores should look like this:

 

Lyric Score
   
someone elses lyric 3
cat vomit soup mine
someone elses lyric 2

 

4. Please read and rate each lyric using the scoring table below (Scores of 1.0 and 5.0 should be rare). Copy and paste the list at the bottom of this post and insert your score to the left of each title. Then send your scores to me them to me (fabkebab) in a Private Message before Midnight (EST) Saturday, December 31st.

- Do not rank the songs, from 5 down to 1; use the criteria below

- Do not rank the songs against each other; use the criteria below

- Do not score your own lyric

If you are a contestant, you must provide scores or your entry will be disqualified (except for the moderators entry, which cannot win but will have scores posted)

Ask yourself how well the lyric flows/rhymes. Does it create emotions? Can you imagine it set to music?

1.0 - Excellent.

1.5 - Almost Excellent

2.0 - Very Good

2.5 - Good

3.0 - Above Average

3.5 - Average

4.0 - Below Average

4.5 - Poor

5.0 - Very Poor

 

 

Here are the lyrics:

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Lyric Score
Getaway Plan  
Suicide is no solution  
The ballad of my ex-wife  
Because of you  
Carnivore  
My army men  
Standing on the corner  
The streets of coeur d'alene  
In the gathering dark  
Ryan the legendary sealion  
Over and over  
If a man got paid for kindness  
Poem from my Bathroom Wall  
The Greens And The Golds  
Redemption  
Its all in the stars  

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Please vote even if you don't have an entry !!

 

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3 hours ago, fabkebab said:

Then send your scores to me them to me (paulcanuck) in a Private Message before Midnight (EST) Saturday, December 31st.

 

Fact checker required.

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Sorry about this.... if you submitted your scores to Paul, please resubmit them to me :-)

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On 3/16/2017 at 10:10 PM, fabkebab said:

 

 

• Entries will be accepted now through Midnight Pacific Daylight Time (PDT) Tuesday March 28

• Voting (scorecards) will take place March 29 thru April 2.

 

 

 

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Still looking for one last voter to submit scores,  the voting is very close as far as I can see, with a number of lyrics who could still win!

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Hi everyone - 

 

Thanks to everyone who participated, including two non-entrants - @spanishbuddha and @A Musical Key

 

 

Our winners were as follows

 

1st place  Iggy with "Its all in the stars" 

 

2nd place AndyLeF with "The Greens And The Golds"

 

Well done to both of you!!

 

 

here are the full scores, including my effort and another user who was not able to submit scores this time around (or I lost them.... always make sure to contact me if you dont get a notification that I got your scores!)

 

Next month we will have a challenge topic so something to prepare for!!

 

 

 

Iggy Its all in the stars 2.5 3 2.5 4 2.5 3 1 3.5 2 3 3 3 1.5 2 2 2.5 41
AndyLeF The Greens And The Golds 2.5 1 1.5 4 3 1.5 2.5 4 3 3.5 3.5 3 3 4 1 3 44
discatticus The streets of coeur d'alene 3 3.5 3 2.5 3 2 2 3.5 3 3.5 3.5 2.5 2 3 2 2.5 44.5
EmilyEmily Redemption 2 2.5 3 4 3 2.5 2.5 2 2 3 3.5 3 2.5 4 4 3 46.5
graybeard If a man got paid for kindness 3 4.5 2.5 3.5 4 2.5 3 2.5 3 4 3 3.5 3 4 2 3.5 51.5
kuya The ballad of my ex-wife 3 4 2 3.5 3 2 3.5 4.5 3 4 3.5 3.5 1.5 4 4 3 52
PaulCanuck My army men 3 4 2 3 3 1.5 3.5 3.5 3 4.5 3.5 3.5 3 4 4 3 52
fabkebab Ryan the legendary sealion 4 4 1.5 3 3 2.5 4 3 3 3.5 3.5 3.5 3 4 3 4 52.5
Eric Borgos Getaway Plan 2.5 3 3 4 3 3.5 3 3.5 4 3.5 3 3.5 3.5 3.5 4 3.5 54
Lyrical In the gathering dark 3 3 2.5 4 3.5 2.5 3.5 3.5 4 4 3.5 3.5 3 3.5 3 4 54
SongWolfe Carnivore 3 4.5 3 4 3.5 3 2 4 3 4 3.5 3 3 4 4 3 54.5
RGMixProject Suicide is no solution 3 3 2.5 4 4 2.5 2.5 4 4 4 3 4 4 4 4 3.5 56
Barneyboy Standing on the corner 4 4.5 3.5 3.5 3.5 2.5 3.5 3 4 3.5 3.5 4 3 3.5 3 4 56.5
Clemo Over and over 3 4.5 3 4 3.5 3.5 2.5 4 4 4 3.5 3.5 3.5 4 3 4 57.5
BlueLewie Poem from my Bathroom Wall 3.5 5 3 4 4 3 2 3.5 4 4 3.5 3.5 3 4 4 4 58
MBlack Because of you                                 80

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Congrats to Iggy and Andy and Discaticus and all who entered. Iggy it's nice to have you back! A lot of good stuff this month. Tough competition.  Thank you Fab for running this.  

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:wub:Congrats to Andy and Discatticus:wub:

 

default_rolleyes.gifAnd to all the contestants!!default_rolleyes.gif

 

 

:lol:And a big thank you.. to all who found my lyrics worthy:D

 

It feels good to be back among the living.....

I had quite the clonk to my head  but things are slowly drifting back into focus....

 

iggy

 

;)special thanks to Fabkebab for running this competition....Well Done!:blink:

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Yes, congratulations to the winners and also to Fabkebab for running things so well.

 

I thought 'It's all in the stars' was a deserving winner. My other personal favourite was The streets of Coeur d'Alene.

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Congratulations to Iggy, Andy and Discatticus and to all of the writers who entered. It was a fun contest.

 

Thank you Fabkebab for running the show.

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Congrats to Iggy, Andy and Disca !

Your work stood above the crowd :D.

But there were no slackers in this race - well done evryone - the bar is high!

Thanks Fab for running the show :)

 

Paul

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Congratulations to Iggy! Good to have you back where you belong! And to Andy as well, whose writing was excellent.

 

My top pick's were Iggy's and kuya's lyrics followed by Streets of Coeur d'Alene and Redemption.

 

Thanks to fabkebab for running the show.

 

--Doug

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Great imagination and impressive range of hooks presented this month - well done everyone! :)

 

Well done Iggy - so, that's your secret - a 'good' clonk on the head to get the lyric lines flowing! :D  Hope you are recovering well :)

 

Many thanks to those scorers who gave my effort  a couple of "1"s and "1.5"s - a first for me! :)

 

My favs were Emily's "Redemption" - huge chorus potential here and I could hear the lyric as a fully fledged, stadium type anthem song in my ears as I read through it and Iggy's subtle and gorgeous "All in the Stars".

 

Thanks to fabkebab for running the contest :)

 

Andy

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