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Bernd

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About Bernd

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  • Birthday 10/02/1953

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    http://bernd-harmsen.com
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    Male
  • Location
    Germany
  • Interests
    Songwriting, lyrics writing, Rock music

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  • Lyricist, Composer or Both?
    Lyricist, sometimes Composer as well, yet not exactly a Musician
  • Musical Influences?
    mainly Blues Rock and Hardrock, yet sometimes also Pop and even Folk
  1. tomcat

    Thanks a lot, guys (only guys this time, no kitty!), I prefer "smell" to "sense" which sounds more abstract to me and less catlike. But I like the "resist" that I will have to keep in mind. It wouldn't fit the meter as I'm hearing the song in my mind now - but that might change. It also did, actually, because I edited the first two lines in the chorus following the advice of two commentators from another board: no use hiding, I see you in the dark I 've come to you to leave my mark I'm not sure if there could be a twist or ending that would NOT damage the atmosphere of menace and promise (as someone put it). I think I prefer it as is. Thanks again, see you around, Bernd
  2. Take Me

    Good one, I like it :-) Cheers, Bernd
  3. tomcat

    No bridge, I'm hearing this as rock - with a cool guitar solo ;-) I can smell your hunger and arousal I know where your hand slides in the night never mind, I won't reveal your secret be assured I won't switch on the light no use to hide, I see you in the dark I have come so I can leave my mark spare your tears, and spare your fear I'm the tomcat - I'll take you while we're here you don't have to fight off your desire I don't see why you should feel ashamed I could be the answer to your wishes you know, nothing ventured, nothing gained no use to hide, I see you in the dark I have come so I can leave my mark spare your tears, and spare your fear I'm the tomcat - I'll take you while we're here
  4. the city is burning tonight

    Great ideas and great lines. I love those inner rhymes in the first two verses that drive the lyrics/song forward. Very good suggestions from 'spanishbuddha'!
  5. dead easy

    Thank you yet again, I appreciate your thoughts and contributions a lot although I do not adopt them this time. I will leave the line "if you don't give it a rest" in the chorus because I think the - now - consistent use of "you" in its generic sense ("one") actually leaves no room for misinterpretation. I also rewrote the bridge yet again because I still was not quite happy with it. It now goes: I admit I have a loose tongue it is true, I cannot keep mum no one who shows some sympathy instead they all just turn against me The (slight) change in attitude from remorse to reproach should suit a bridge (that is supposed to add a new perspective).
  6. dead easy

    Thank y'all a lot, I have rewritten the (most) parts that you mentioned, namely the bridge. I think using "you" its personal sense as well as in its gerneric sense could have caused some confusion so I decided to (try to) make it generic all through (there is still an "us", though...). Current version: just one joke upset the office mob one prank that cost me my job I didn't mean it dead easy to make a fool of yourself dead easy to get into a mess dead easy if you don't give it some thought dead easy if you don't give it a rest just one word - threw us off the track [who "us" refers to still remains unclear, I like to think of it as "me and the other(s) involved" ;-)] one straw broke the camel's back I didn't mean it dead easy... I admit I have a loose tongue it is true, I cannot keep mum why can't people just disagree [maybe not the greatest line anyway, but might be a bit better than "we"] I hate to have them turn against me dead easy...
  7. dead easy

    just one joke upset the office mob one prank that cost me my job I didn't mean it dead easy to make a fool of yourself dead easy to get into a mess dead easy if you don't give it some thought dead easy if you don't give it your best just one word - threw us off the track one straw broke your camel's back I didn't mean it dead easy to make a fool of yourself dead easy to get into a mess dead easy if you don't give it some thought dead easy if you don't give it your best I admit I have a loose tongue it is true, I cannot keep mum why can't we just disagree you don't have to turn against me dead easy to make a fool of yourself dead easy to get into a mess dead easy if you don't give it some thought dead easy if you don't give it your best
  8. WRITING VERSES

    When I write for other musicians I normally begin with the chorus as well. That must be the strongest part of the song and present the hook that usually also is the title. When both, the composer and I, are happy with the chorus - the heart of the song - I begin working on lift and verses. Bridge, if needed, usually comes last. As for the veres I ask myself: what (story) could lead up to what the chorus says. At this moment I have a chorus fragment that goes: I give you time to think come clear with what you feel I won't give up hope too soon that you'll be back with me So the story will have to be: they got together, became lovers yet somehow got seperated because she (male singer) got somewhat unhappy. Could have been some misunderstanding. She might have seen him with another girl. Another story could be that they fell in love during both their vacation, and because of the seperation once they had returned home the feeling cooled down, at least on her part (that was my first idea). Probably, this background will make one verse, maybe two - before the first chorus. In the second part I then could write over his time after they had drifted apart, his yearning, his hopes. In the bridge I then could describe how he tried to forget her, to get over it - yet didn't succeed. *** When I write my own folk songs I normally begin with the verses. Some don't even have a chorus. It could be a good exercice for you just trying to write an AAA song (only verses) instead of jumping right into the middle. The content, the story, could be anything. Among other things I retell Greek myths in some of my songs (Dionysos, Ganymede, Europa), for example. Once I retold a news story that I found hilarious (rule of thumb). There are more stories to be told than anybody could do in a lifetime.... Good luck! Bernd
  9. fool for two

    Thank you all! I corrected the typo and another little mistake. The part beginning "when I fell in love with you..." is the bridge. And yes, it repeats what's already been said. The new aspect I wanted to add is that "I" actually loved her attitude, her outspokenness - at first. I'll keep your suggestions in mind and see if I can come up with alternative phrases to replace the repetitions.
  10. April Rain

    I like the imagery. Quite romantic. Maybe "before new leaves began to show" instead of "blow"? I was also a bit irritated about the season you were talking about. The line "blowing down through the birch trees" doesn't work for me because of the stress that should lie on "trees" to rhyme with "breeze". Cheers, Bernd
  11. Black Queen

    As Paul suggested I'd also drive the ambiguity a bit further. The first two verses are great. The third verse is a bit of a disappointment - at least to me. The bridge is fine again. As for the chorus I'm not sure. It works for me as some kind of resolution, yet 'model' might add a little finesse, indeed. Kudos! Bernd
  12. fool for two

    [chorus verse verse chorus verse chorus bridge chorus] fool for one fool for two fool enough for me and you fool for one fool for two why are you doing what you do you've laid all our secrets bare we're the topic of the day just go to the market square to listen what the people say our weaknesses, our private life, all our foibles, all our faults public where the gossip's rife not a chance to call a halt fool for one fool for two fool enough for me and you fool for one fool for two why are you doing what you do our kids scorn of the class while we're the scorn of our town hear them snicker where we pass did you intend to play their clown? fool for one fool for two fool enough for me and you fool for one fool for two make fools of our children, too when I fell in love with you I found you open-hearted and outspoken I'd no idea there'd be a risk of a family life out in the open fool for one fool for two fool enough for me and you fool for one fool for two make fools of our children, too
  13. How do you know that the SONGS will be under two minutes long when there's only words? There may be an intro, a long instrumental part in the middle, and an outro. If Led Zeppelin had done them they'd last around 8 minutes each ;-) This is 1:49, by the way (150 bpm): you have lots of admirers you can afford to take your pick secretely I wait for you to get rid of your current prick I'm standing in the row, I'm next in line you won't keep me waiting, you are being kind I'll be served in a minute, so I'll be fine don't you worry little Baby, I'm next in line doin' my Friday shopping I think I've got all I need today I'll do the cooking I've got a few mouths to feed I'm standing in the row, I'm next in line they won't keep me waiting, they're all being kind I'll be served in a minute, so I'll be fine don't you worry little Baby, I'm next in line I've lived life to the fullest I hardly ever missed a trick the writing on the wall says soon my clock will cease to tick I'm standing in the row, I'm next in line they won't keep me waiting, they're all being kind I'll be served in a minute, so I'll be fine don't you worry little Baby, I'm next in line
  14. Sometimes it feels like you cannot stop the flood... I just published my third Rock Bernd album and have completed two new songs since. As I always like my latest song best my new favorite now is "all for free". It's free to download (nomen est omen). My favorite until yesterday was "too much", closely followed by "the angels' choir" (because these two songs are VERY different). Both are on "Rock Bernd III", my first compilation that does comprise no old stuff altogether as did "Rock Bernd" and "Rock Bernd II". All my stuff is "garage rock" - in it's literal sense ;-) Well, sort of, actually it would have to be "home office rock", but you'll get the drift. Here are samples from Rock Bernd III (older versions of sevaral songs are on my player as well): http://www.cdbaby.com/cd/berndharmsen3 (it's on Amazon, ITunes, Spotify etd. as well, of course) And here is my freebie (my personal favorite song as of today): http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13535650
  15. Anyone here use Spotify?

    It gets you exposure - and about 1 cent per 2 streams. If you're interested in the money you should become VERY famous first ;-) (as for others Spotify is included in my CD Baby deal) Cherrs, Bernd
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