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Neal K

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About Neal K

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    Guitars are good things
  • Birthday 25/10/1961

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    Kelowna, BC, Canada

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  1. Neal K

    Angry Words (The Fight)

    A basic beginner's rule to songwriting is to maintain the same point of view throughout the song. So, if it starts in first person, it should remain in first person. If it starts in third person, it should remain in third person. This isn't just picky grammar. Maintaining a consistent point of view is important because it helps the listener understand who the characters are: I, she, you, me, us, etc. The point of view in this song bounces around. In the first verse, the singer is addressing the subject of the song directly: Door slams, you’re leavin’ me alone But in the chorus, the point of view abruptly switches and you are no longer addressing the subject directly: She’s gone, You switch back and forth throughout the song, from calling her "you" to calling her "she." Because you wrote it, you know that you are talking about the same person. But the listener might not. It actually sounds like two different people.
  2. Google is your friend: https://reverb.com/ca/news/how-to-choose-the-right-bass-strings I've played bass in a few country bands and I've found the strings don't really matter. They'll last forever and if they are not broken or crusty there's no real reason to change them. I know professional bass guitarists who never change their strings.
  3. Neal K

    Is this any good?

    Sorry, I agree with Hobo. While there is some variation in instrumentation, it doesn't really go anywhere. There is no melody, no contrast, no dynamics, nothing that makes for a compelling piece of music. It's like the start of something.... It's the plate that you put the meal on, but there is no meal, nothing delicious to eat.
  4. Neal K

    The saddest number ones ever...

    LOL, three of the top sad songs are not even "sad" songs... they're just slow songs.
  5. I listened to this and I didn't hear anything out of whack on the track. Sure, it changes throughout the song, but I think it's actually quite good. The singing is way out of tune in some points. Like, way, way out on some of the high notes. You can work to improve your singing, but you can also write melodies that match your range, without such dynamic links.
  6. Neal K

    So what's new on the horizon for August?

    Are you offering to run it?
  7. Neal K

    Chord Progressions

    Then of course there are those famous one-chord songs: Get this Party Started, by Pink, the amazing Chain of Fools, and the soul classic, Shotgun. Now there’s an idea for a contest.
  8. Honestly? I think it needs work. Your vocals are pretty off key and the words are hard to understand. The song and the performance could really use some dynamics. My next comment is a personal taste thing, so take no offence. You could present yourself better. The jeans/tee shirt/backward hat thing is a little sloppy (remember, just my opinion). You don't have to wear a tux, but a little style goes a long way.
  9. Neal K

    You can't, I can't (edited 06/13/18)

    It would be a good idea for you to google some of your favorite country songs and have a look at the lyrics. You'll probably find that: 1) They all have a strong rhyming scheme. Yours does not. 2) They have a consistent tense... the lyric is in the past, the present, or the future, but not in all three. Your lyric jumps around in time which makes it hard to follow. 3) Many will have a story line: a beginning, a middle, and an end... just like a short story. Yours has no real story. 4) The language is consistent, meaning if the singer sounds "country" in one verse, he or she cannot sound like a city slicker in the next. Throwing the word "ain't" into this lyric does not make it a country song. 5) They will likely use images to describe things, rather than just coming right out and saying it. Once you've really, really studied what makes a lyric work... try again. Good luck
  10. Neal K

    June Song Contest

    Regarding the scoring system, I didn't like it either. I just copied what was used in the previous month because I thought this was a new system. I would have preferred the old system but I didn't want to flip flop back and forth.
  11. Neal K

    June Song Contest

    The winners are: 1st Place: Love and Joy ScenesFromPalacio 2nd Place: New School fabkebab 3rd Place: Dreaming of You Jason Kalman Thanks to everyone who entered, and special thanks to our non contestant voters: Peko, BarneyBoy, IronKnee and Mike B. Love and Joy ScenesFromPalacio 7.0 8.0 6.0 3.0 10.0 8.5 7.5 5.0 6.0 8.0 7.0 6.5 5.5 5.0 7.5 9.0 4.0 113.5 New School fabkebab 8.0 9.0 5.5 2.5 7.0 7.0 7.0 8.0 4.0 8.0 9.0 8.0 5.0 5.0 6.0 7.5 6.5 113.0 Dreaming of You Jason Kalman 7.5 6.0 5.0 3.0 6.0 8.5 8.5 6.0 7.0 6.5 8.0 6.5 7.5 5.0 6.0 8.5 6.0 111.5 The Truth Comes Stumbling In Paul Canuck 7.5 6.0 7.5 3.0 7.0 6.5 6.0 7.0 4.5 7.5 8.0 6.5 7.0 5.0 6.5 6.0 7.0 108.5 I'm Not Givin' Up on Love GocartMoz 6.0 6.0 6.0 2.0 7.0 7.5 5.0 7.0 6.0 8.0 7.0 6.0 7.0 7.0 7.0 7.0 6.0 107.5 Right There and Then MopTop 6.0 5.0 5.0 3.0 8.0 6.5 4.0 5.0 5.0 9.0 7.0 7.5 5.0 7.5 6.0 7.0 4.5 101.0 Forever Eric Borgos 5.0 5.0 7.0 4.0 6.0 6.0 6.5 6.0 4.0 7.0 8.0 5.5 5.0 5.0 5.5 7.0 6.0 98.5 Bottle Short Order Kook 3.5 5.0 6.0 3.0 7.0 9.0 6.0 6.0 4.0 7.5 8.0 5.0 5.5 5.5 6.0 6.5 3.0 96.5 Start in This Town Murphster 5.5 5.0 7.0 3.0 4.0 6.0 5.5 6.0 5.0 7.5 7.0 4.0 6.0 8.0 6.0 6.5 2.5 94.5 Sunday Christian tunesmithth 6.0 7.0 3.0 2.5 5.0 6.0 6.5 4.0 4.0 7.5 8.0 6.5 5.5 2.0 4.0 6.0 6.0 89.5 Tomahawk RoadDog 4.0 5.0 6.0 2.0 5.0 7.0 5.5 6.0 4.0 7.0 6.0 4.0 4.5 5.0 6.5 5.5 4.5 87.5 Summertime Song onewholovesrock 6.5 6.0 4.0 3.0 5.0 6.5 5.0 5.0 5.0 7.5 6.0 4.5 5.5 2.0 5.5 4.0 6.0 87.0 New Life Around the Bend Donnie 3.0 6.0 4.0 3.5 3.0 5.5 3.5 7.0 4.0 6.5 7.5 4.5 5.5 5.0 5.5 5.0 4.0 83.0
  12. Neal K

    June Song Contest

    Sorry for the delay.... it’ll now be Sunday night before I post the results.
  13. Neal K

    June Song Contest

    I will post the results tomorrow, July 5th
  14. Neal K

    June Song Contest

    Time to score! Please read the scoring rules carefully How to score: Score each song this way: 10 - This is the best song I have ever heard in my entire life 2...9 - Somewhere in between... 1 - This song needs a complete overhaul IMHO Put your score for each song to the left of the title. Don't score your own song - it may or may not be given the average of the scores you give others So the list you PM to me should look like this: 8 - Song Title 1 5 - Song Title 2 8.5 - Song Title 3 etc... Here is the list of entries (did you read the scoring instructions? :-): Sunday Christian Summertime Song New School The Truth Comes Stumbling In Dreaming of You Tomahawk Bottle Forever Right There and Then Love and Joy New Life Around the Bend I’m Not Giving Up On Love Star In This Town (Daydream Believer) You have until Midnight EST Monday July2 2018 to send me your scores. Good luck everyone!
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