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    Lyricist and lyric writer
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    Lennon and McCartney, Don Everly,Phil Lynott, Jeff Lynne

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  1. Willsx13

    Take me or leave me

    Hey Jim! I changed the last lyric line, in verse 2. Bridges 1 and 2 are pretty much the same Please let me know what you think.
  2. Willsx13

    The first song you ever wrote?

    I was around 21 when I wrote my first song. Wrote songs on and off, the following years. Still did nothing with them I remember the title "Bringing me up, letting me down". Time flies, as I'm now 46 years old! Gasp!
  3. Willsx13

    Take me or leave me

    Just started on this one a couple of days ago Take Me Or Leave Me Verse 1 Here I am Take me or leave me Isn't it enough, I'm a nice guy I'm not shady, or deceiving I'm not perfect, but I try Bridge 1 I can't fix, all of your sorrows Hard enough, fixing mine But if I could, I'd fix em tomorrow And I'd, be here on time Verse 2 Here I am Take me or leave me I have faults, like you do But won't hurt, or demean Give you credit, where it's due Bridge 2 I can't fix, all your sorrows Hard enough, fixing mine If I could, I'd fix em' tomorrow And be here, right on time Verse 3 Here I am Take me or leave me Only so much, I can do But I'll help, when you need Do a job, and finish it through Bridge 3 I can't fix, all your problems Hard enough, fixing mine If I could, I'd fix em tomorrow And be here, right on time Verse 4 And here I am Take me or leave me Isn't it enough, I'm a nice guy Not shady, or deceiving Not perfect, but I try Yes you can Take me or leave me
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    Talk to me

  5. Willsx13

    Talk to me

    Thank you, TRS! ๐Ÿ™‚ Pop country is where I see this tune fitting in. I noticed the same issue of my songs not being descriptive enough. Once I got the melody in my head, then I'd write whatever I could, just as long as the lyrics and rhyme fit with the melody I'd be thinking of. Prior to coming back to muses songwriting board, I hadn't realized how much I left out, of the lyrics I wrote. Thought maybe the melody would make up for what I didn't include in it. Boy, was I wrong! lol I'm learning from others here, and I appreciate it.
  6. Willsx13

    My Biggest Fan

    I like it, Paul! Like the element of humor you've added to the verses.
  7. Willsx13

    Talk to me

    I first found the term pre-hook in John Braheny's book"The craft and business of songwriting". It is a pre-chorus. Also called a lift, setup or climb. The song needs work, and I won't say that it doesn't. Just need to so some tweaking, here and there. And I'm also paying attention to what you guys are posting, as well.
  8. Willsx13

    Talk to me

    I did not make up the word pre-hook. https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/pre-hook Normally it precedes the chorus, although that's not what I did above. I see what you mean about the 3rd verse, Mike. Just noticed I had six lyric lines, when I have five on the first two. Thanks for pointing that out to me. :-) I guess I'm having the issue again, of my song not being descriptive enough. I like your chorus suggestion as well. I'll have to try that. Thanks!
  9. Willsx13

    Talk to me

    It's not about me. Although I can relate to someone going through a difficult time, in adolescence .
  10. Willsx13

    Talk to me

    Verse 1 You come in late again Slam the cupboard door What's wrong with you You look so angry now Don't you love us, anymore Chorus 1 Talk to me, won't you please Why won't you speak I see the tears in your eyes Just wanna see you, flash a smile Just sit down, and talk to me Verse 2 Your Mom looked through your purse And you know what we found I wanna know why Can't you see you need help Can't you see, how this hurts Chorus 2 Talk to me, won't you please I'll be here when you need I can see the tears in your eyes Just want to see you, flash a smile Just sit down, and talk to me Verse 3 Starting to come round Happy to see, the drugs are gone Your new start is now Take it a day at a time Keep thinking, there's no way back down Chorus 3 Talk to me, won't you please I'm here when you need You just dry those eyes Just wanna see you, flash a smile Just sit down, and talk to me.
  11. Willsx13

    In Time

    Thanks for noticing this, and letting me know. Will change that line from "you" to "we".
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    In Time

  13. Willsx13

    In Time

    Thanks very much, TRS! ๐Ÿ™‚ And thanks to you and others for helping me out here.
  14. Willsx13

    Thereโ€™s No Comparison

    I like where this is going. Is this a Father talking to a Son/ or daughter? If you plan to add more to the chorus, perhaps: There's no comparison You'll learn once you're a man (if it's a son) You have growing up to do Gonna take time for you, to beat your Dad Just suggestions, of course.
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    In Time

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