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About Donnie

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    Muse In Training
  • Birthday 18/05/1953

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    http://www.soundclick.com/DonniePriest
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    Dallas, Georgia
  • Interests
    Spending time with family. Writing playing music, reading, and fastpitch softball umpire,

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  • Musical Influences?
    McCartney, Chapin, Fogelberg, Eagles, CCR, Chris Stapelton

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  1. Donnie

    June Song Contest

    There were so many great songs it was very hard to score. I'm amazed with all the talent on this site. Thank you to all that shared their music and feedback. Sunday Christian, One of my favorite songs. Nice production, vocals, and message. Summertime Song, Nice catchy song. Good one to play around a fire pit with a cold beer. New School, My favorite song in the contest. Love the music and vocals. The Truth Comes Stumbling In, Another one I scored high. Love the lyrics. Dreaming of You, Scored this high on the music and vocals. He is clearly smitten but may be a bit autistic. Don’t mean any disrespect, I work with autistic children. They often have the unexplained fear of things. Tomahawk, Loved the music, I got a little lost on the lyrics. Sorry Bottle, I gave this one a good score. This reminds me of southern blues. I liked it a lot. Forever, I liked the very descriptive lyrics. Right There and Then, Nice lyrics, reminds me of Beatles or maybe the Birds. Love and Joy, Liked the lyrics and production. I’m Not Giving up on Love, Great production; I love the lyrics of hope for the future. Star In this Town, Nice arrangement, I love the lyrics
  2. Donnie

    June Song Contest

    https://www.soundclick.com/html5/v4/player.cfm?type=single&songid=13307310&q=hi&newref=1 New life around the bend © 2012 By Donnie Priest When boozes and pills rule your day It’s a dangerous game to play And you’re not sure, which way to go On the path of lease resistances That’s no kind of existence What tomorrow brings, you don’t know (Chorus) When you’re lying in the gutter Your mind filled with all that clutter No place to look for a friend When you need a second chance You can’t get a second glance But I know there's a new life around the bend Music soothes the savage beast That’s my way, out of this place Singing and playing my guitar I’ll escape this incarceration Music is my rehabilitation I know I’m destine, to go far (Chorus) When you’re lying in the gutter Your mind filled with all that clutter No place to look for a friend When you need a second chance You can’t get a second glance But I know there's a new life around the bend (Bridge) I know in the great beyond Loved ones that have gone on I hold them close in my heart I hope to do them proud Singing out strong and loud I pray my music echoes off the stars (Chorus) When you’re lying in the gutter Your mind filled with all that clutter No place to look for a friend When you need a second chance You can’t get a second glance But I know there's a new life around the bend I know there’s a new life around the bend
  3. Donnie

    Voices Inside Myself

    Thank you for your suggestions, I have some work to do.
  4. Donnie

    Voices Inside Myself

    Thank you Mike, in my first draft, myself wasn't in it, nor was just. I used myself trying to use a quirky phrase, I guess quirky doesn't always work. I really didn't use just as a filler, but what you say is true. I was trying to say the demons were saying "just jump already" . You had some great points, thank you for your help.
  5. Donnie

    Voices Inside Myself

    Thank you for the feed back Jim, It is a tough subject, it's hard to find the right mix. Not having depression myself I don't know how it feels, I am trying to run off what my friend has told me. Still working on a rewrite. Thanks again,
  6. Donnie

    Voices Inside Myself

    Thank you for your feed back. A dear friend that is a local jazz singer here posted something discussing her struggles with depression. She has attempted suicide before and wanted to bring awareness concerning depression. I think the Katie Spade incident hit her hard. My friend had also tried to hang herself. I used some of her words, the darkness, God saving her from herself. I was trying to use some of her words to formulate a story of someone waking up after attempting suicide. I'm still working on it, this has been hard. Some songs come easy, but trying to convey the feelings of someone else has been difficult. I also didn't want to show the darkness without showing a way out. I've got my work cut out for me. I love a challenge.
  7. Donnie

    Hi Y'all

    Hi y'all, now that I'm not working full time, and I'm backing off on umpiring my fast pitch softball tournament schedule, it's time to work on music. I have a lot of songs to work on. I'll try to check in as much as possible. Thanks for the visit.
  8. Donnie

    Voices Inside Myself

    I feel your pain, I've changed the first two lines several time. Can't find the right fit. Still working on it. Thank you for your input.
  9. Donnie

    Voices Inside Myself

    Thank you, good suggestion. When I get the music with it I might have to re-work that line. And yes, the "to" was a typo. I know know how I missed it. Thank you for your feedback!
  10. Donnie

    Voices Inside Myself

    With all the resent suicides by celebrities and even a lady I worked with some time back, my friend Kayla, a local jazz singer, posted about her struggles with depression. It brought tears to my eyes and spawned this song. I'm working on music for it. I'm thinking maybe southern blues? When I get it dialed in the phrasing my change. It is some dark content, I tried to leave with in the outro a message of hope. I don't know if I succeeded. What do you think? It is definitely a work in progress. Voices Inside Myself © 2018 By Donnie Priest (To my friend Kayla and all those that suffer with depression) I woke up this morning, surprised to see you again Thought no one would really care, I was ready for this to end On the note by my pillow, with words I couldn’t describe The feeling that all my life, happiness has been a lie (chorus) The voices inside of myself, tell me I’m not good enough Standing on the edge of a cliff, just go ahead and jump When life got too hard for me, with the darkness all around It was the only choice I could see, I’m sorry I let you down With this pounding in my head, I wish I could explain I can’t look you in the eye, I’m feeling so ashamed I felt like I was falling, with nothing to hold on to I tried so hard to get it right, there’s nothing else I could do (chorus) The voices inside of myself, tell me I’m not good enough Standing on the edge of a cliff, just go ahead and jump When life got too hard for me, with darkness all around It was the only choice I could see, I’m sorry I let you down (bridge) I didn’t want to hurt you; I just wanted to be free Why God saved me from myself; I’m not worth it, can’t He see? As my life passed before my eyes, it was too late to change my mind I wasn’t brave enough for the fight, a mountain I couldn’t climb (outro) The voices inside of myself, tell me I’m not good enough Standing on the edge of a cliff, just go ahead and jump When life gets too hard to carry on, I’ll bow my head to pray I know I can’t do this all alone; please help me through another day I know I can’t do this all alone, God help me through another day I didn’t want to ask you for help, Sorry is not enough to say
  11. Donnie

    Human Doings and Human Beings

    Hi, I've been away from the site for a while and getting up to speed. I've had other things going on, but now that summer is here I've got more time to work on music. I get it, like the old saying. "work to live, not live to work." We spend so much time making a living we let other important things go by the wayside. I love the chorus! The thing that jumps out at me is your rhyming scheme in the verses. Other than a few tweaks this looks good. Human Doings and Human Beings All we work hard to achieve No more than streets of scattered leaves Driven to material dreams Gears turn like small machines These first four lines seems to be near rhymes, confused me a bit. I do this sometime and when I re-read it I say "Wow I didn't see that before. I guess i have a bit of OCD, everything has to fit. Wary of our fellow man We hide our hopes where we can Only give the surface things away dont you see there’s another way These four are AABB. I think I might try to mix it up some, maybe make all the verses ABAB. Just a thought, I get myself in trouble thinking sometimes. What do you do? As I said before, love the chorus I don't care If you’ll share With me how you are feeling What do you do? break the skin Let me in To what you are seeing You’re not a human doing You’re a human being Too eagerly we define ourselves Again maybe restructure the rhyme scheme. like books all neatly lined on shelves Tinker tailor, rich or poor Open them and there's a little more Read all the pages and look through We’re so much more than what we do Doctors, bakers, beggars and thieves Same branch, just different leaves What do you do? I don't care If you’ll share With me how you are feeling What do you do? surface skin Let me in To what you are seeing You’re not a human doing You’re a human being
  12. Donnie

    I remember Daddy

    I like this, it has real promise. So many of our heroes come home with PDSD and they don't get the help they need. With the right music it could work. A agree with someone who said the Sssshhh might be hard to sing. My suggestion is: Sssshhh my mama told me "Quiet my mama told me" As I climbed up in his lap Sssshhh and be real quiet "Quiet and be real still" While your Daddy takes a nap
  13. Donnie

    Don't Need'em Anymore

    I'm sorry, I haven't been on this site for a while. I'm intrigued with this song. It is obvious this person has stolen you heart and left you. Heart break can be devastating. But for me, we know little else. I guess I'm lazy, I don't want to work that hard to understand a story. I would suggest you listen to Dan Fogelburg's Tucson Arizona. It deals with dark subject matter, but little doubt as to what was going on. Also another good one is the Eagles, what do I do with my heart? If we knew Who, what, and why it helps us to better understand this person. It gets tough, I'm a struggling songwriter myself. Keep working on it, you'll get there.
  14. Donnie

    Alexa

    Hi Barneyboy, I like this a lot. I'm addicted to Siri on my phone myself. But we don't communicate very well at times. I think some didn't get it. This guy has this artificial intelligence and it screwing up his life. I like some of the suggestions, my only question is the last two lines in the chorus. I'm trying to play it out with music in my head and I just can't get "direction" and "connection" to flow. With the music it may work. Great work I would love it hear it when you get it put together.
  15. Donnie

    December Song Contest (1+1 Format)

    Hey thank you for the critic. Yep that line in the chorus is a bit squeezed, I could work on my phrasing there a bit. Congratulations to all the winners, this was fun lets do this again.
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