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    Beatles, Lifehouse, The Script, Coldplay, Cake, Jason Mraz
  1. Till You Came Along

    @Triffid Hey, forgot to answer your question.... The drums are from Komplete8. It's a big package of instruments by Native Instruments. The drums were Studio Drummer. And, thanks! @Ecoraider Thanks for the listen and feedback. Yes, I've wondered if that sounded out of nowhere. I may change it.
  2. Till You Came Along

    @boydogtruck Good feedback. Yeah. The melodic range is narrow. I guess if I was a better singer I could change that. I tried to use harmonies to boost it a bit. @Gerry Nolan Thanks for the listen. Glad you liked it. @Triffid Thanks. Yeah... it might be better shorter. I'm not sure. I kind of like the first verse as a bookend. Maybe If I changed the melody up a bit?
  3. https://soundcloud.com/ravagetherain/till-you-came-along I started working on this a long time ago, got pretty far with it and then let it languish. Picked it up again and added some new parts. Is it ok to repeat the first verse? I had a slightly altered it, then thought it was ok being the same as the first verse. Till You Came Along Mile after mile Day after day Living my life As if it were great But something was missing Could feel it inside But I didn't know what And I never knew why Till you came along Till you came along Something was missing Till you came along It's not what you say It's not what you do The fortune teller told me your eyes would be blue I've been in love before All corvettes and curls And there once was a time I thought I was sure Till you came along Till you came along Something was missing Till you came along Am I just dreaming What I've been feeling When I'm lost Inside of your world On the horizon I open my eyes and Know I Belong here with you Mile after mile Day after day Living my life As if it were great But something was missing Could feel it inside But I didn't know what And I never knew why Till you came along Till you came along Something was missing Till you came along
  4. Girls On The Beach

    Like the image Fun, upbeat pop track Loved harmony vocals Kept me interested all the way through.
  5. She Is the Sun

    New version: https://soundcloud.com/ravagetherain/she-is-the-sun NOTE: Does the wah guitar sound at 1:22 and 1:44 pull this "out of genre"? I can just ditch the wah sound. @tcperkins Thanks for the listen and detailed feedback. Glad you liked that chorus lyric. Good point on bridge... Should be a bit better now... I changed it to: At the dreamers cafe We laughed and played In the dark of the night There were songs and sighs And there were little white lies. Yes on the drums, but I think I'm nearing the end of my patience with this one. I may add more chorus harmonies later... if I'm not off on some other track. Appreciate it! @Ironknee Thanks for the input, Tom. Lyrics are challenging. Sometimes I get feedback to add more details, or make it more general so it applies to more situations! Then I listen to stuff on the radio and have no clue what it's about! @Mike B Yes, the drums are from Kontakt. Hard to equal a real player without tons of customization. As you'll read above, I agreed on the bridge and modified it some. Hopefully, it adds more interest. Thanks for listening. @fabkebab Thanks for takin the time to listen and give feedback. I agree that the verses are less compelling, so I added more guitar riffs. (A guitarist's answer for everything) There's a bit more going on now. I've heard of Nada Surf, but don't know their music. @ClintLeonard Thanks, I think it would be good to add more vocals in the choruses. Good idea. I may at some point. For now, I think I'm calling this one a wrap and moving onto the next. Glad it sounded "Beatle-y".
  6. She's In Love

    Nice track. It reminded me a lot of the feel on Springsteen's all acoustic album. The trains were ok to me. I'd probably remove the screeching tracks part though I liked the lyrics... imagery "the sounds of steel" and "just got out of jail". It all works together to give that lonesome feel. Good vocals, too.
  7. This is one I worked on and dropped about a year ago. Picked it up a few weeks ago and started back on it. The verses are too high for me vocally, unfortunately, but I did my best. Vocals will get more fiddling with... not 100% done. By the time I figured out a way to have all 3 sections in my vocal range, the song was done and I can't bear going back and recutting them all! Lyrics: She is the Sun (c) E. Schweitzer 2016 VERSE 1 In between the pages of her book She has a sip of tea and gently sighs From the corner of her eye she sends a look I'm a believer every time our eyes collide PRE If dark clouds gather and I'm feeling down I'm always better when she comes around CHORUS She is the sun Above the moon Chasing shadows From my room She is the sun In the summer sky Stealing raindrops From July INTERLUDE VERSE 2 I love to watch her walking in the sand Laughing as she leans into the wind Her auburn hair slips between my hands As another day in paradise begins PRE If dark clouds gather and I'm feeling down I'm always better/happy when she comes around CHORUS She is the sun Above the moon Chasing shadows From my room She is the sun In the summer sky Stealing raindrops From July BRIDGE Every day we while away Every night there were songs and sighs And little white lies. CHORUS She is the sun Above the moon Chasing shadows From my room She is the sun In the summer sky Stealing raindrops From July She is the sun She is the sun
  8. Sea of Love

    Really like the song. Cute and fun. To me there's a bit of a disconnect between the song's essence and the production, which seems compressed a lot and sort of mildly aggressive, while the song itself is sweet. I'd like the vocals to be a bit more emphasized. If this were my tune, I'd try to warm it up.
  9. Before Too Long

    @GaryHale - Thanks, Gary! Yes, I go from a syncopated guitar part to a busy strumming for the rest of the tune and this break is where it gets introduced. I appreciate the props! @Jason Kalman - Glad you liked the mix. I worked hard on that instrumental section to get it to sound simple. Just the instrumentation. Thanks! @somefellow - That's funny, Tom. I was shooting for an optimistic sentiment. An empowering thing. It's hard for me to write in the middle. I tend to be either way up or down. Since the news usually covers the latter, I shoot for the former. @pbattersby - Glad you enjoyed the strings. I'm pretty new using them.... Getting the attack right can be tricky. Thanks for listening and commenting. @RoadDog - Not sure what it's called, that rhythm. Thanks for comment on that galaxy line. Fiddled with it for awhile before getting it the way it is now.
  10. Before Too Long

    @Oswlek Thank you. Good to know about Wilco. I've posted the lyrics since you listened. @ABull Thanks. Glad you liked.
  11. Been a long time since I posted a track. Glad to see it's survived the bumps in the road! https://soundcloud.com/ravagetherain/before-too-long-demo Open to any feedback. Especially interested in mix ideas and if the short break in the first verse works. Thanks! Here are the lyrics Before Too Long Eric Schweitzer We live, we dream To speak the truth and never hide We live from the heart To free the galaxy inside We laugh, we bleed To ourselves we will be true Through dust and ash You know there's nothing we can't do Before too long The world will be ours Before too long We'll fly among the stars And live our way Live our way Ba Da Da Da.... We dance, we sing And let tomorrow light our way We won't give up Stolen moments, fearless days Before too long The world will be ours Before too long We'll fly among the stars And live our way Live our way Ba Da Da Da... Hey! Hey! Hey! The world will be ours Hey! Hey! Hey! We'd die under the stars To live our way We'll live our way It'll be our day We'll live our way
  12. Ain't Got Me

    Cool tune! I really like the feel of the congas and the guitar. As others have noted, the vocal has an odd character. I also agree that it could benefit from a brief tonal trip somewhere else. Look forward to hearing it again.
  13. Bits and Pieces

    Nice tune. I think I agree with others on several points.... The verses need to stand out from the chorus more.... I think here I would drop some of the instruments/volume in the verses. I think stuck "inside" this hole would flow better in verse 1. The drums seem a bit off at the beginning of verse 3 "acquiese to your reason". I like how the second verse is shorter.... it adds motion to the song. Lots of nice stuff going on here. Cool sounds. Good song form. A few tweaks should help it pop.
  14. I posted a song in November... now I've made the changes I want and want to repost it. It's significantly revised (whatever that means :-) ). Do I reply at the bottom of the thread? Edit my original post? I doubt I should start a new one. Thx! Rick
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