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Clemo

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Clemo last won the day on January 9

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About Clemo

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    Inspirational Muse
  • Birthday 01/04/1946

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  • Gender
    Male
  • Location
    France
  • Interests
    Songwriting, House renovation, Animals ,Gardening,
    Green politics.

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  • Lyricist, Composer or Both?
    Both
  • Musical Influences?
    Beatles, Cohen, Dylan, Van Morrison
  1. tomcat

    Hi Bernd theres something refreshingly different about your style of writing good song lyric i feel lyric needs more of a end to it - a moral or an unexpected twist would give it a climax all the best Mike
  2. Change to -with a smile

    Hi Art thanks for your interest, Yes I have had a few close friends pass, lately and this lyric was hard to write, this is my fourth attempt at getting somewhere near where it needed to be, and a big thanks to all who have helped with their suggestions, i think the music needs to be a slow country folk . all the best Mike
  3. CAN'T STOP NOW

    Hi I liked your lyric, certainly has a dance feel to it i had a few nits but others have covered them best of luck, look forward to hearing this with music all the best mike
  4. Things people say or sing

    It's very common in Birmingham uk, to use the word sooooo at the end of a statement, I usually question with sooooo what? They usually have a look of bewilderment followed by silence
  5. Change to -with a smile

    With A Smile (V1) I stayed with an old friend who'd been ill for while Although he'd changed a lot I still knew his smile Disease crept in and slowly owned his blood No-one saw it coming, everyone was stunned (Ch) I watched him as he braved another day He never gave up, that wasn't his way He even smiled when he started slipping under He'd say no need worry it's ok (V2) He used to be a fire chief fought dangers all around Flames 'n smoke and deadly wreckage crashing down With floors and stairways collapsing, the risks were high But when saving people's lives he came out with a smile (Ch) I watched him as he braved another day He never gave up, that wasn't his way He even smiled when he started slipping under He'd say "no need to worry it's ok" (V3) So what now, he has left us and has gone His wife and kids in floods of tears, staring on He's in our hearts and minds for evermore A brave man to the last, he gave his all (V4) He left us with a courage renewed Never give in until the battle is through Fight for every inch of every given mile And if you should lose, go out with a smile
  6. Things people say or sing

    I heard that some one sang Im a yorkstone fireplace, - nothing like the lyric! but still fun
  7. With a smile

    Hi Andy and thanks for your valued advice on this I will take on your new ideas all the very best mike
  8. With a smile

    With A Smile (V1) I stayed with an old friend who'd been ill for while He'd changed a lot but I recognised his smile An illness crept in and slowly owned his blood No-one saw it coming, everyone was stunned (Ch) I watched him as he braved another day He never gave up, that wasn't his way He even smiled when he started slipping under He said no need to worry, it's ok (V2) He used to be a fire chief battling fire and heat Striving till everyone was safe Always fighting on, never giving to despair Losing hope was not his belief (Ch) I watched him as he braved another day He never gave up, that wasn't his way He even smiled when he started slipping under He said No need to worry it's ok (V3) So what now, he has left us and has gone His wife and kids in tears, staring on He's in our hearts and minds for evermore A brave man to the last, he gave his all (V4) He left us with a courage renewed Don't give up until the battle is through Fight every inch of every given mile And if you lose, go out with a smile
  9. Gone Foever

    gone forever Walking paths where I once trod it's impossible to return To that once ago of another age Where I spent my leasure, now has changed forever Like a wind that blows away footprints in the dust Yet the sun still shines above and the grass still grows below Moments of today seem short and fleeting Becoming a brand new yesterday Before they know today has ended. This racing aging time will stand still for no one. What is this world if not a place called now, Living in the moment is an impossibility When the future needs planning somehow When recalling the friends I used to know There is a sadness in the gladness in times we once shared Never realising that our meeting could be the last time ever Without so much as a final fond farewell Fortune quickly disappears into the past Adventures that could have been, become missed chances A golden chain breaking in our hearts and minds As each day separates us more without care, From our past treasure's that we often try to recall With a fondness of love and ties ever binding we say goodbye
  10. Screen addiction

    Hi Song Wolfe i completely agree with the sentiment of the lyrics. A couple of tweeks if I may, abuse to fingers is a trifle, wasting good time is more important and the fact that it causes isolation and introversion. v2 line 2 not sure ( cells ) is needed good lyric as usual from you, hope this helps all the best Mike
  11. You Made Me

    It grabbed my interest early part of lyric but there wasnt enough info towards the end i felt it could have told us more All the best Mike
  12. Not so long ago

    I'm not to good at criting a lyric but i know what i like and this says it all nice one Steve, all the best Mike
  13. With a smile

    Thanks Barnyboy you are one good critic, and i think you have some very good points that need attention thanks also Steeve i like your sugestion, less written more said. With everbodies advice on this it looks like a rewrite is needed. Big thanks to you all for your advice, your time and effort is appreciated all the very best mike
  14. With a smile

    Hi Andy and yes long time no see, mores the pity thanks for crits they have woken me up to a further interest in this lyric I think I got depressed with 4 of my mates passing away over the last couple of years. Both you and patty have given me fresh ideas which I greatfully thank you for Thanks also to Kuya and your views, What a lovely site this is, and I'm very grateful to all my friends that are here. A big thanks also to Alistair and all the others who devote their time and effort to make this site, what it is. Have A great new year everyone all my very best Mike
  15. With a smile

    Hi Patty, and thanks for your insight I take your points and reconsider my lyric. thanks for your time thought and effort All the best Mike
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