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Onewholovesrock

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Onewholovesrock last won the day on February 25

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About Onewholovesrock

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    Central Wisconsin
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    Music, Photography, Motorcycling, Good Beer.

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  1. Sounds killer Chaz! I know you worked hard on this and it shows. Can't wait to hear the next one. Scotto as always sounds great too! Bravo! JOe
  2. Good clear production. I think you have to sing this differently than you are currently. Your vocals need to be airy like RG already mentioned. Stop pronunciating your words so sharply. Let the words flow into each other without so much separation. Agreed, your song is lacking any build ups, hills or valleys. Guitar stays at a similar sounds throughout. Is the guitar from the box? I'm not sure that can ever replace a real person playing a real guitar. That might contribute to the lack of hills and valleys. Work on those issues and some drum issues and you should start getting somewhere. You have a great voice by the way!
  3. Yeah, I just tried. I can't quite hit that note good enough. It's right there, I just can't reach it. This is probably a song I'll sing occasionally live. Using a standard tuned guitar. I'm not sure how much different Dave's melody is from mine. I thought I used his pretty close. I went back to check but he pulled the sample down. So basically I'm pretty good with version 2.0. But I might try a 3.0 version and change up the verse words I'm holding like you (Oswlek) mentioned.
  4. Hey Nameless. Don't worry about it. It happens. It even happens at the Oscars.
  5. Dammit Os! Version 3.0? Here I thought everyone would say version 2.0 is perfect! Lol. I'll look into your critiques and play around with your suggestions. It's getting harder to change things as the song becomes more familiar. Almost like rewriting a favorite song. It took awhile to get used to the version 2.0 changes. I think I held back on the "Dare" devil word as people commented on version 1.0 that the chorus was probably not working vocally. So I kept everything in a comfortable vocal range this time around.
  6. Thanks Nameless!
  7. Version 2.0 Flying Daredevil In The Sky JOe VS. I am a symbol for you all I am the reason you aim high I am the reason you stand tall You are the reason that I fly CH. I am a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down and snatch up my prey VS. I am the reason one for all I am the reason some men fight I am the reason some men fall You are the reason I spread might CH. I am a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down and snatch up my prey BR. I fly for society I fight with ferocity I live for democracy I stand with nobility CH. I am a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down and snatch up my prey
  8. Yeah, thanks to Dave and everyone else I think I have a much improved version. Some felt I was over stretching my vocals in the chorus. I changed that to sound much better. I did a minor lyric change as I agreed with Mike about a certain line. I also took Chaz and Dave's advice and fixed how I sing the word Daredevil. Eventually I'll record it and post it.
  9. Roaddog. Thanks. Yeah the chorus is probably at the top of my range. But I don't think the chorus would sound good if I dropped it an octave. I just work on a better vocal performance. Tom. Good to hear someone liked the performance. I play a Martin guitar. Nothing to high end. But a solid guitar. The hat is worn sometimes more for appearance than warmth. But it works great for both purposes. Mike. Yeah the chorus is at my max range. But I'll probably leave it there for reasons I mentioned above. Like you said. The "snatch up my prey" and "kill" lines I wasn't 100% sold either at first. Thanks! Chaz, I would also like to hear a full band version of this. Like many of my other phone recorded songs. Lol. You are probably right on the money about how I'm singing Daredevil. I'll probably make the change similar to what David shows me below. Good ear! Thanks! David, thanks for the sample. That sounds so much better. I can't wait to try it out. Thank you! By the way, I don't think I've ever heard someone play and sing one of my songs outside of Downface. Even though it was only the chorus. It was still awesome hearing it. Very cool!
  10. I recently wrote this patriotic song. It's been awhile since I posted a song here. It's a live acoustic performance. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CRo01rpnhCI&t=13s Flying Daredevil In The Sky JOe VS. I am a symbol for you all I am the reason you aim high I am the reason you stand tall You are the reason that I fly CH. I am a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down and snatch up my prey VS. I am the reason one for all I am the reason some men fight I am the reason some men fall You are the reason I spread might CH. I am a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down and snatch up my prey BR. I fly for society I fight with ferocity I kill for democracy I glide with nobility CH. I am a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down and snatch up my prey
  11. I can definitely hear something like this on the radio. Maybe with an updated music sound. But I think the lyrics and the vocal performance are spot on for modern pop music. I say keep doing what you're doing. You have a good style. Not my usual type of music to listen to. But I did enjoy it and recognize the quality of it. Keep it up! JOe
  12. Yeah man! I'm digging this. Nice clear production. Sorry no mix critiques from me as I'm listening on my computer speakers. I think the vocals sound great. Especially the chorus vocals. The delayed sounding guitars sound killer. I'm looking for something to critique and I can't really find anything. Well, stating the obvious, this song like most other home recorded songs would sound much better with a real drummer playing real drums. I definitely don't think this song is too long. If anything, I wish it went on a little longer. Really nice job! JOe
  13. Don't trim anything! This is brilliant! It's the best new song I have heard in a long time. Great lyrics, great vocal melody and performance, really good guitar sound and performance. I'm not sure what else to say. BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! JOe
  14. Go on tour.
  15. Alright! Another Muse Fawmer. Glad to hear you enjoyed it. It must be cool hearing people create songs with your lyrics. I've never had that happen. I'm glad it's over. Lol. It was a battle this February. Work, family functions, practice with another musician, and of course a dreaded winter illness. I hit 14 post. But with music I think I reached 11 or 12. Seeya around the Muse! JOe