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Onewholovesrock

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Onewholovesrock last won the day on February 25

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About Onewholovesrock

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    Central Wisconsin
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    Music, Photography, Motorcycling, Good Beer.

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  1. Everything you mentioned above that doesn't make sense to you does make sense to me. That being said I would have to try explaining why it makes sense. So that probably won't work as a lyric. First draft. This is what I'm looking for. Thanks! I do love the "I'd rather fuck Rush Limbaughs hand" line. And yes, If I had to choose between Donald Trump being president or fucking Rush Limbaughs hand. I would pick Donald Trump as President. That's why that line is so good.
  2. Yes, exactly Chaz. I probably agree. It just happened to take this turn and I followed it because it was easy. Maybe it's to far off the way it is to reel it back in. It is a first draft. Usually after a few comments on here I can start coming up with ideas to correct issues. Or scratch the whole piece. We'll see I guess. I don't want to call the other side stupid. I originally wanted this to be about how we really do have a good reason to protest, March etc. It is in no way that we are poor losers. It is about serious beliefs that we should and will stand up and protest for. And yes, many on the other side just can't understand that. They just can't wrap their heads around that idea.
  3. Recently Chaz posted a song. Somewhat political, somewhat not. I had "shut up, sit down, you lost" in my head for awhile. I listened to the song many times. lol. It is very catchy. Anyway, that song inspired me to write this one. It probably turned out more political than I was hoping for. But that's just kind of what happened. I had a rain day today so I wanted to get a song down. I'm open to any suggestions. Lyrics, music, vocals, guitars etc. This is a first draft. Thanks! JOe Speak Up - Stand Up and Shout Vs. I march for many reasons, I want to take a stand You sit and call me loser, you just can't understand I question your intelligence, who would vote for such a man You call him a President, I wouldn't even shake his hand Ch. Speak up stand up and shout This is America, not a Trump Hotel Speak up stand up and shout I walk for freedom I guess you couldn't tell Vs. I march in any season, I fight to protect our land You think you've won the battle, well you picked a dangerous man I question his arrogance, I just can't understand You made him a President, I'd rather fuck Rush Limbaughs hand Ch. Speak up stand up and shout This is America, not a Trump Hotel Speak up stand up and shout I walk for freedom I guess you couldn't tell Br. I know you don't understand, I know you can't understand I know it's over your head, over your head, over your head Ch. Speak up stand up and shout This is America, not a Trump Hotel Speak up stand up and shout I walk for freedom I guess you couldn't tell Speak up stand up and shout This is America, not the bowels of hell Speak up stand up and shout I march for freedom I guess you couldn't tell
  4. I definitely dig the vibe of this. Interesting lyrics with an interested vocal. I think this has an original sound to it. Which is needed to stand out. Maybe the intro acoustic chording gets a little monotonous. I feel the song is too short. With a sit back and chill kind of vibe. I want to sit back and listen longer than 2:37 Maybe through in a bridge and finish out with another chorus. Push it closer to 4 minutes. But overall, I really do enjoy the 2:37 worth of song.
  5. I dig the vocals for sure. Nice job. The only critique I have is maybe the guitar could use a few chord changes in the verses. It sounds repetitious as is.
  6. Sorry folks, not much into production these days. Enjoy! Flying Daredevil in the Sky Words, music and performance by Onewholovesrock (JOe) Flying Daredevil in the Sky Vs. I am a symbol for you all I am the reason you aim high I am the reason you stand tall You are the reason that I fly Ch. I'm a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down snatch up my prey Vs. I am the reason one for all I am the reason some men fight I am the reason some men fall You are the reason I spread might Ch. I'm a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down snatch up my prey Br. I fly for society I fight with ferocity I live for democracy I stand with nobility Ch. I'm a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everday Swoop down snatch up my prey
  7. I think you're close. I did read the lyrics first before listening. After just reading the lyrics I wasn't really that into them overall. But I think that about almost all lyrics I read, except for Iggy's lyrics. So that don't mean much coming from me. However, listening to the lyrics in the song I thought they sounded pretty good. I'm thinking maybe you should try ending the song closer to 3:20. I liked the simple recording. I thought your vocal sounded really good.
  8. Sounds killer Chaz! I know you worked hard on this and it shows. Can't wait to hear the next one. Scotto as always sounds great too! Bravo! JOe
  9. Good clear production. I think you have to sing this differently than you are currently. Your vocals need to be airy like RG already mentioned. Stop pronunciating your words so sharply. Let the words flow into each other without so much separation. Agreed, your song is lacking any build ups, hills or valleys. Guitar stays at a similar sounds throughout. Is the guitar from the box? I'm not sure that can ever replace a real person playing a real guitar. That might contribute to the lack of hills and valleys. Work on those issues and some drum issues and you should start getting somewhere. You have a great voice by the way!
  10. Yeah, I just tried. I can't quite hit that note good enough. It's right there, I just can't reach it. This is probably a song I'll sing occasionally live. Using a standard tuned guitar. I'm not sure how much different Dave's melody is from mine. I thought I used his pretty close. I went back to check but he pulled the sample down. So basically I'm pretty good with version 2.0. But I might try a 3.0 version and change up the verse words I'm holding like you (Oswlek) mentioned.
  11. Hey Nameless. Don't worry about it. It happens. It even happens at the Oscars.
  12. Dammit Os! Version 3.0? Here I thought everyone would say version 2.0 is perfect! Lol. I'll look into your critiques and play around with your suggestions. It's getting harder to change things as the song becomes more familiar. Almost like rewriting a favorite song. It took awhile to get used to the version 2.0 changes. I think I held back on the "Dare" devil word as people commented on version 1.0 that the chorus was probably not working vocally. So I kept everything in a comfortable vocal range this time around.
  13. Thanks Nameless!
  14. Version 2.0 Flying Daredevil In The Sky JOe VS. I am a symbol for you all I am the reason you aim high I am the reason you stand tall You are the reason that I fly CH. I am a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down and snatch up my prey VS. I am the reason one for all I am the reason some men fight I am the reason some men fall You are the reason I spread might CH. I am a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down and snatch up my prey BR. I fly for society I fight with ferocity I live for democracy I stand with nobility CH. I am a flying daredevil in the sky For strength and courage look up high I stretch my limits everyday Swoop down and snatch up my prey
  15. Yeah, thanks to Dave and everyone else I think I have a much improved version. Some felt I was over stretching my vocals in the chorus. I changed that to sound much better. I did a minor lyric change as I agreed with Mike about a certain line. I also took Chaz and Dave's advice and fixed how I sing the word Daredevil. Eventually I'll record it and post it.