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Ironknee

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Ironknee last won the day on March 4

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About Ironknee

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  • Birthday February 19

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    Hawaii
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    Just to add a few degrees to this sultry night, with the soulful sound of my saxophone, from out of my fifth-floor apartment window......located right by the old Chesterfield sign. You know the one, with that blinking light that just never seems to burn out.

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  • Musical Influences?
    Hypnotic guitars, Great harmonies, Thought provoking lyrics, & an emotionally charged melody.

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  1. Well.....a big thanks is in order, I guess Thanks The Nameless Untold....and sorry for all your trouble. Using those graphic worksheets can be tricky.
  2. Sooo glad to put this to rest Sorry!
  3. Hey folks.....does my score add up to 21.5 or is it me? And since I handed everyone a 2.5, shouldn't my average score be a 2.5?
  4. Oh...wow.......OK Thanks! -Tom
  5. Thanks for your thoughts Nameless.......but I still would like to know from the scorer himself.. It's not like I'm going to take up my revenge Yet, a 4 is still "below average", and I would like to know where that opinion is coming from..... -T
  6. I just want to say, before I head off to bed, that you shouldn't go after the Americana/country/folk here. Anyways.....if that were true about the puritan genre ruling class, I'd be bored out of my mind. I like the assortment we get here at the Muse. As far as the 1+1 rules, I think reverb, echo, delay, etc., all works nicely, as long as it's something that can be easily brought to the coffee house for a one-man show. Anyways...goodnight.......and rest assured, Steve, you have a tasteful tune......IMHO
  7. CONGRATS TO FAB........and everyone else Well, that was a bit anti-climactic I hate big ties And although I liked all of the songs, I did have my favorites. But, what I did, was I gave everyone a score of 2.5. Three - Seven - Oh - PaulCanuck....A very good song, all around, with a good melody, strong lyrics, and good music. The recording was nice. Don't Doubt My Heart - IyD..........Another very good song, all around, good melody, good lyrics, and decent music. Not my favorite recording of yours...but, still a good write Little Stones - Fabkebab...............A terrific piece of music, good melody, didn't understand the lyrics at all.....I was lost at the corn. And I really tried to understand the words afterwards (put my glasses on, and all)...a super recording, never-the-less. There You Are - ScenesFromPalacio....Another outstanding piece of music, good melody, easy and comprehensible lyrics....and a beautiful recording. The Better Man - Ironknee....just trying to write from the heart, instead from the head. Anyways......I would like to know why someone thought my song was below average? Did you think that the song was written in an unstable fashion? I think a 4 is pretty harsh.....what say you?? Thanks to the Nameless Untold for running this, and to all the voters.......especially, the four voters who didn't vote my song with their lowest score
  8. Hey there Mike......A real good song, and recording you have here. This really is my favorite from you. The lyrics are very good, with a relevant message for our times. I'm not too high on the verse melody, however. It sings a bit rigid and choppy, if you catch my meaning. I am, however, liking the melodies in the chorus and bridge.....very nice changeups The musical break is killer and just what the song was promising! Good job with that!! I love that lead guitar. The instrumental changup in the bridge was very nice, as well Nice arrangements, and produced really well.........this should be in the next monthly full production comp. Good stuff, Mike Kudos -Tom
  9. Hi Mike...thanks for stopping by. The pre-choruses, as you call them, have been written to act as a musical bridge into the chorus. Now, I know that, lyrically, the bridges differ; but, musically it is a proper bridge (IMHO). I'm not sure as to what you are trying to achieve with combining the two bridges into one? I'm afraid that too much repetition will kill this (or any other) song. Here, the distinction between the lyrics of the bridges keeps this song unchained to the terrible weight of repetition. Anyways.....again, if I am not catching your meaning, please elaborate.....I can never be bothered by conversation about my music Thanks again, Mike And thanks to all who have listened! -Tom
  10. Hey there JOe. I dig the performance, and love the lyrics that you so passionately deliver. A lot of heart and soul, with that terrifically resounding acoustic, makes this a fine folk piece. What make is your guitar? I dig your studio.....a lot like mine (only I don't have to dress so warmly ) Nice to hear / see you agian.......it's been a while, buddy! -Tom
  11. Thanks JOe......I am thrilled that you like it so much. It means a lot. Thanks for stopping by! Hey there Peter........thanks for listening and commenting. A studio would be great Thanks, again And thanks to all who have listened! -Tom
  12. As an instrumental....I rather liked this. -Tom
  13. I like this song, Mutrins... Good writing, and the performances are outstanding. I like the atmosphere, here, as well. Good stuff! -Tom
  14. Thanks Charlie. I appreciate you listening and commenting. And thanks for the encouragement Hey thanks for the crit, TC... Good observations, I would have to say. Lyrically, all those words could be easily weeded out. The 1st line of suggestions in the Examples, I would have to immediately agree with you. The 2nd and 3rd lines, however, I would have to ponder and weigh out, because there are notes to the melody that I consider fundamentally intrinsic. Something to "examine"......thanks! And thanks for listening!! And thanks to all who have listened! -Tom
  15. Got a new tune.....Hope you all like it. I think the concept of this song could very well be the reflection of any or all of us...however, there is one prominent figure that epitomized the inspiration of this song of mine.The clues are there; but if you don't consider all of the clues carefully, you could easily be lead astray from the intended culprit. As usual, any and all comments are welcome, while first impressions are welcome. Thanks, in advance.... -Tom THE BETTER MANBy Tom Tognacihttp://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13549508 There you go again, always out for bloodGot your fist high in the air, dragging history through the mudAnd in your mind, I guess, that makes you the better manAlways up for the fight with a bullhorn in your handsGot your three-piece suit, and all, shouting your demandsYea, we saw you on the evening news, but who’s the better man?The fancy clubs, the limousine, paid for by the sweat of someone else,Is more your style than any dream for something bigger than yourselfGood grief, man, can you tell me how you sleep at night?Are your haunts the heroes that you gave up without a fight?What do you see, man, when the mirror gets inside your head?Isn’t your heart screaming, standing up, just reaching out instead……for the better man?See, there you go again, like fuel on a blazeGot the zombies on the march, chanting their brand new catch phraseBurning bridges, and building walls….so, who’s the better man?Sowing the seeds of discontent, the fault’s always with someone elseEvery crises becomes an event, an advertisement to yourselfGood grief, man, can you tell me how you sleep at night?Are your haunts the heroes that you gave up without a fight?What do you see, man, when the mirror gets inside your head?Isn’t your heart screaming, standing up, just reaching out instead……for the better man?Another tragedy, you won’t let go to wasteGet your angry, outraged look, mold it to your faceMirror, mirror, on the wall, who’s the better man?