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    Roundabout 18

    Was it all, just a hypnagogic dream With more than a single theme Reality can twist As the mind does insist On plotting with force An uncharted course Cruise control in bed
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    Rhymes 8

    When good intentions are misconstrued Should wavelengths not be eye to eye It's over and out Good luck and good bye Next Topic: Sasquatch
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    Stick Figures

    I like it. Depicts a character looking at himself? Perhaps in relation to someone else? A stick figure is simple and so basic it's underdeveloped. Sounds like someone who wants their life and or love to develop and grow but the chorus suggests there may have been a few bumps on the road and the changes that are needed to get through the hurdles may be due to the point of view. At present the life, the love interest is either underdeveloped or non-existent. Might wanna develop what's going on adding some detail. It's kind of general, but not that this is necessarily bad, it's not. If I have read the meaning correctly and or simply applied my own, I think it is a relatable theme. Another thought, perhaps the stick figure is a person (a love interest or significant other) that is not there yet, but imagined. I envision someone alone or lonely on a beach by him or herself, thinking, reflecting and drawing these stick figures to alleviate either boredom or loneliness. In which case, start to develop the figure, the picture and see where you go.
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    Daddy's Prize

    This is very powerful and disturbing at the same time. It's a tough one in that I can't imagine many wanting to sing it but attention is brought to a subject that is dark and often people don't want to look at and should and for that it's good. Only suggestion is the title and chorus hook where, "prize" is used. Not even sure it's about pleasure for this sick character either. Prize is something that is won, earned or achieved. Hmm. I suppose it works but a prize or even pleasure doesn't bring out the raw ugliness, vulgarity or awfulness of the whole situation in my view. Perhaps something like............ Daddy's thing was a kiss, a cry and have Daddy's thing repeat in each chorus. It's well written and again very powerful. In that regard I like it but the content is something I don't like and find disturbing. I think you've achieved your objective.
  5. Note to Alistair & Moderators: Had thought to post this in general music conversation originally but then gave it more thought. Don't know about any of you but the subject matter, the issues, the message and the graphic video drown out (at least for me) any semblance of afterthought on the music itself. Have a look. See what I mean and if you think it belongs in general music conversation, then by all means, feel free to move this thread to that forum. For Everybody: Hip Hop/Rap artist Childish Gambino has a new song and video out that has already reached 100,000,000 views in its first week. Yes, it's controversial. Granted the music is not my thing. Any thoughts on the video and message from this are welcome. Click on the link below to play the tune in question. It's really being promoted and all over the web there's talk about it debuting at number 1 on the billboard hot 100 by next week. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VYOjWnS4cMY
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    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    This video in my opinion is propaganda at its best. In my thoughts also I see the video as a statement that many on the web have analyzed to be motivated by racism. I think that's bullshit. The video of course is meant to shock but it also plays on fear. I also believe the target audience is very young. It's interesting how the video uses what appears to me to be South African students in uniform doing a South African dance in what appears to be some kind of fun for them. Why the correlation between South Africa and the U.S.? I thought this was America and I am left wondering what the artist is trying to say. The artist portrays a drug addict, who looks and appears fucking crazy. Perhaps there are multiple ways to look at this, but I see the crime and violence in the video as black on black despite the posturing and the choir. Guns are used to kill, but what about the people? If the viewer is blind to the graphic shooting and this one is not, then what about everyone in the video? They don't appear bothered by it. Video illustates the graphic violence within certain segments of communities in urban areas. To me, the video is meant to incite particularly the very young. Many but not all school age kids will unfortunately look at what's going on in this video as something cool. Some are angry, troubled and easily influenced and have weak minds that are hyper-reactive to things said or done. This video doesn't help. Also said before that it's being promoted. And what about the lyric? If many are blind to the shootings in the video then what about the words? I don't see anybody here, thus far, even commenting on the words to the song. Grandma said, "black man get your money, you're owed" or something like that. Owed? As in the money culture haze, inequality on a pay scale or reparations for slavery? The ending is interesting as the singer runs off with what appears to be a bunch of people chasing him, black and white in my thoughts. If the shootings are supposed to be symbolic of whites killing blacks then why is he running? The character is a bad seed and is running because he has killed. I also think the singer doesn't want peace. The choir scene although possibly symbolic of Charleston, depicts to me mainstream culture and this guy doesn't want peace, so he shoots them up. The white horse scene could depict some sort of a confrontation. I'm not Christian but the horse symbolism calls to mind the apocolypse, though I know very little about this. Still, it's interesting as the figure on the horse looks like death. From kids on bicyles, to dancing school kids in uniforms, to a lone chicken, to guys waving their fists of black power in all those 1980 and 1990 cars in the background, this looks like a call to arms for some sort of anarchy to me and I'll stand alone here to say it, I think there is a hidden message that among some is understood. This video isn't about the blackman's plight it's about self hatred and getting even. Where we go from here with this one lingers disturbingly. I teach, and I see the chaos and mindsets like the ones in this video on a day to day basis. One other thought on the ending. The main character runs off with what appears to be both blacks and whites chasing him. Maybe, just maybe he intended to offend both sides, both sides meaning blacks & whites. The only loser in this one is the audience.
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    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    Yes, it's about making a big hit that uniquely rides on the video's graphic power to do just that, but beyond that. What is the purpose or the intent and the affect on the viewer? What is the message? Is it up to the viewer to interpret in his or her own way or are we supposed to accept the social media and other media analysts views as the gospel on this? Even if some of the analysts on this one are correct in some of the historical references, what are we being told? Are we held hostage by the past? Is it supposed to be a mirror on us? Is this depicting the American culture in general? I don't think so or perhaps certain psychologies within specific communities of the country? Quite possible. Come on people, have we lost the ability to express and think here? Can't imagine anyone seeing that video and not wondering about it. The lyric too. It's a shitty lyric. How does it impact on you? Keep in mind I'm no fan of rap but occasionally there are a few tunes in the genre I like and even if I don't I'm open to listening to them and even discussing them if the opportunity presents.
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    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    It's pretty clear to me that this is being pushed on the general public & of course as said before promoted.
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    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    I'm sure that contributed. Marketing muscle helps.
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    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    I've seen the video on the thread above and others like it with their analysis. I don't completely buy it. In my opinion, that's what those who initially post these videos want the pubic to think and believe. I didn't find anything satirical about the video for the song. Repeating myself, yes it's very effective and clever, but my initial reaction is still the same. It's sick. What's also interesting is how this song rockets to number one in its first week on the billboard hot 100. Yes, it's been done infrequently before but I was told by a college professor in a course I took on the music industry that songs are pushed and promoted until they reach the top 40. From that point on, if a song sinks, swims, or floats depends on how it does in the public eye in terms of radio airplay and (at the time) sales in terms of tape cassettes which largely replaced the 45 record at that time and then CD's. I would imagine as I think I read, that billboard now takes into account youtube hits or views on a video for a song when making their chart calculations, because without youtube and the video, I can't imagine the song breaking top 40 radio in the states on mainstream pop stations. I surf and listen to a variety of stations daily. Have yet to hear this song on terrestrial radio, at least the pop stations. Anyone hear it yet on the radio? So, to me it's youtube and social media that is propelling the promotion for this song in addition to the social media analysts & marketing muscle all helping to of course fuel the video and spread the interest. Yes, all about making the money and tapping into the zombie consumer mentality with something that will go above their heads or does it? It will be interesting to see how long it remains at number one. My guess is the song itself falls flat and if it remains high for some time then its popularity is riding solely on the video's power. Oh yes, forgot to mention... It's official that this tune has made it to number one on the billboard hot 100 for week ending May 19th, 2018. First week on the chart.
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    Between the lines

    Interested in hearing the demo.
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    I like it. It's perfectly fine the way it is. Not sure the finale is necessary. For me, it's one of those lyrics that doesn't show or illustrate imagery that reaches out to grab some and mesmerize, yet the message is good, simple enough and I think relatable. The right music could bring the lyric alive more in a completed song.
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    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    The beauty in the responses is that we're all going to see some things alike and some things that perhaps are worlds apart. My perspective may be a bit different from many of the posters thus far (I work in the hood in a large urban school district), but again still digesting the video and words to the song. I'm honest in what I say even if I don't get it right but reserving my thoughts for now. In my view this is not about racism even though it references gestures from the past and a choir scene. So come on folks, weigh in! Plenty of room. The subject matter matters even if some of us or none of us get it and who's to say? There are plenty of media analysts out there spewing their opinions that to me are no different than anyone else's and they are nothing to be held above the crowd set in stone just because they say so, have something in print on the net or any other place for that matter.
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    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    No rap expert here but I did go to the trouble, mainly out of curiosity to decipher some of the lingo used in the song. Links provided may give more than one meaning to the words I posted I suspect many could run into trouble understanding. Source = Urban Dictionary Check out the links below if interested regarding a word in question. slippin' up https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Slippin' Up whippin' https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=whippin whippin' up (used in a specific context) https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=whippin up a brick trippin' https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=trippin strap https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=strap guerilla https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Guerilla blow https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Blow geekin' out https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Geekin' out fitted https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=fitted Gucci https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Gucci celly (#3) https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=celly Hunnid https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=hunnids bands https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Bands contraband https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=contraband the plug https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=The Plug Oaxaca https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Oaxaca blocka (#2) https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=blocka barcode (#1 or #4 or both) https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Barcode
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    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    Hope it's not an issue to post someone else's work. Lyrics appear posted on the net independent of songs all the time.
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    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    It's great to get so many weighing in their thoughts without attacking each other. The video is certainly attracting attention, but as I said early on the music and maybe even the lyric too have been drowned out. In fact, I think the lyric has taken a backseat. Here's the lyric minus the video, but yes if you watch the video the lyric is played along the bottom of the viewing screen. Does it have the same affect or different minus the video? I've watched the video multiple times and even played it without sound or music (if you can call it that) and without reading the words on the bottom of the screen in order to see what I think, but I am wondering what anyone thinks of the lyric standing alone and its meaning vs being written out in the video? Any difference as to one's interpretation of the song's meaning? If the words were not written out, spelled out in the video would any of the words stand out in the video after hearing them vocally from the singer? As far as the content in the video, I firmly believe a lot more is going on in this than what most thus far have already said. Still digesting however. There's so much symbolism. Anyway, here are the words on their own. Would words like this conjure up such a video (in your imagination)? Video is shocking & disturbing to me yet very clever in that it certainly gets one to think. Words wouldn't survive on their own in my estimation and to me seem to have escaped any scrutiny thus far. Note: Lyric is in quotes and acknowledgement is established that this is Donald Glover's lyric below. "This is America" - By Donald Glover "Yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah Yeah, yeah, yeah, go, go away Yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah Yeah, yeah, yeah, go, go away Yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah Yeah, yeah, yeah, go, go away Yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah Yeah, yeah, yeah, go, go away We just wanna party Party just for you We just want the money Money just for you I know you wanna party Party just for me Girl, you got me dancin' (yeah, girl, you got me dancin') Dance and shake the frame We just wanna party (yeah) Party just for you (yeah) We just want the money (yeah) Money just for you (you) I know you wanna party (yeah) Party just for me (yeah) Girl, you got me dancin' (yeah, girl, you got me dancin') Dance and shake the frame (you) This is America Don't catch you slippin' up Don't catch you slippin' up Look what I'm whippin' up This is America (woo) Don't catch you slippin' up Don't catch you slippin' up Look what I'm whippin' up This is America (skrrt, skrrt, woo) Don't catch you slippin' up (ayy) Look at how I'm livin' now Police be trippin' now (woo) Yeah, this is America (woo, ayy) Guns in my area (word, my area) I got the strap (ayy, ayy) I gotta carry 'em Yeah, yeah, I'ma go into this (ugh) Yeah, yeah, this is guerilla (woo) Yeah, yeah, I'ma go get the bag Yeah, yeah, or I'ma get the pad Yeah, yeah, I'm so cold like yeah (yeah) I'm so dope like yeah (woo) We gon' blow like yeah (straight up, uh) Ooh-ooh-ooh-ooh-ooh, tell somebody You go tell somebody Grandma told me Get your money, Black man (get your money) Get your money, Black man (get your money) Get your money, Black man (get your, Black man) Get your money, Black man (get your, Black man) Black man This is America (woo, ayy) Don't catch you slippin' up (woo, woo, don't catch you slippin', now) Don't catch you slippin' up (ayy, woah) Look what I'm whippin' up (Slime!) This is America (yeah, yeah) Don't catch you slippin' up (woah, ayy) Don't catch you slippin' up (ayy, woo) Look what I'm whippin' up (ayy) Look how I'm geekin' out (hey) I'm so fitted (I'm so fitted, woo) I'm on Gucci (I'm on Gucci) I'm so pretty (yeah, yeah) I'm gon' get it (ayy, I'm gon' get it) Watch me move (blaow) This a celly (ha) That's a tool (yeah) On my Kodak (woo, Black) Ooh, know that (yeah, know that, hold on) Get it (get it, get it) Ooh, work it (21) Hunnid bands, hunnid bands, hunnid bands (hunnid bands) Contraband, contraband, contraband (contraband) I got the plug on Oaxaca (woah) They gonna find you that blocka (blaow) Ooh-ooh-ooh-ooh-ooh, tell somebody America, I just checked my following list and You go tell somebody You mothafuckas owe me Grandma told me Get your money, Black man (Black man) Get your money, Black man (Black man) Get your money, Black man (Black man) Get your money, Black man Black man) Black man (one, two, three, get down) Ooh-ooh-ooh-ooh-ooh, tell somebody You go tell somebody Grandma told me, "Get your money, " Black man Get your money, Black man (Black man) Get your money, Black man (Black man) Get your money, Black man (Black man) Black man You just a Black man in this world You just a barcode, ayy You just a Black man in this world Drivin' expensive foreigns, ayy You just a big dawg, yeah I kenneled him in the backyard No proper life to a dog For a big dog" Songwriters: Donald Glover / Ludwig Goransson This Is America lyrics © Universal Music Publishing Group
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    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    I think the song goes way beyond guns. Not sure it even touches racism but definitely depicts a lot of chaos and violence. There is a street or hood lingo that is used readily in the lyric that takes this in my view to a whole new level beyond gun violence and racism and not only that but there is so much going on in this video as well that leaves a lot to think about. It would be interesting to hear what anyone thinks of the content and how the message projects to you the viewer.
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    Sin city

    At Sin city At Sin city Where you can lose your shirt Or increase your girth Where you might have a win Or get a wedding ring Or wake with a new wedding ring
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    Good job with blues writing. Easy to imagine these words set to music of this genre. I keep hearing or seeing ol' gushin' or ol' flowin' river instead of old mother river, but perhaps that's just me. Also, the title (to me) didn't seem to be centered on the five & dime or any junk or cheap material or goods that came flowing down or washed away as a result of the river. "The River" is simple and might be better suited as a title. In verse 2, (not that this matters but to some it does) in order to not repeat "Here comes" at the opening line the same as verse 1 how about "There goes the next town". Kind of left wanting a little bit more in the way of something said too and that's because I like it. Hey! You're getting me into and hooked on blues writes I can envision sung in a blues style. Thanks.
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    It Hurts

    Hi, Irwin Although I'd like to hear or see "It hurts" repeated more than once or twice in each of the choruses, It hurts, it hurts, baby oh baby it hurts, to give you an idea of what I mean, what you've got looks ready. Please share the recording once it's complete.
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    Greenbacks of america

    Hi, Mick My understanding of "Greenbacks" in your writing is that each person mentioned in what appears to be like a list song, all have had their faces on either a coin or dollar bill in the US. Dollar bills meaning $1, $2, etc, etc and up. These folks symbolize the foundation or strength and history of the country. I think this one has promise but needs to be developed a bit to make it more interesting. Hope you enjoy your travels through the states. I can only guess that you made it to Washington DC after reading over what was written.
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    Corn whisky (the death of Robert Johnson)

    Really good Malcolm. Definitely has a blues feel to it. Had to look up Robert Johnson, who I honestly had never heard of and knew nothing about to get some backstory which I can now see in the lyric. Didn't strike me as fun however. I thought the story was somewhat tragic but regardless I like what you wrote and can picture this with music. No major nits. Let's hear it! Cheers
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    the day the spacemen came to town

    Dived head first into the write bypassing what you wrote as a preamble (returning to it later) after seeing the title which made for nice window dressing. I honestly don't think I would have arrived at the US civil rights movement as the theme or idea behind what is written even after going back to read the introduction. My interpretation was purely extraterrestrial. Kind of wish you didn't make mention of your intent in order to see how others saw what was going on. But with all said, I do like this a lot. Message (as I see it), people (generally) speaking don't like those who look, think or perhaps act differently, not the same as they do. Fits right into the present situation and what's going on today regardless of past history, or possible attitudes among some towards alien visitors should they one day land or make contact. I have no qualms. It's really good and again I like it.
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    Always Believe (Something Wonderful)

    Very nice. I like this one. Only one line sticks out, where a single word I don't even think needs to be mentioned is used. V3 The boy grew up straight and the boy up strong Straight as in well balanced, stable or........... straight as in not gay? The latter making more sense as the next two lines that follow would imply it. Shouldn't there also be another grew between the second boy and up? The boy grew up loved and the boy grew up strong ....... might be better in my book. Growing up loved would more than likely mean he's able to find someone else to love regardless of being straight. Unless you were going for country, in my thoughts the use of the word "straight" could be better worded with something else as in the suggestion I gave.
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    Sock in Your Bed

    Hi, Ty The only part of this that bothers me or sticks out in some way is the ring line from the bridge. Maybe if it were worded differently. B We were more than a fling I was looking for a ring I was planning on buying you a ring Can you imagine the sting But, now.........Can you, can you, can you imagine the sting Anyhow, looks like you had fun writing multiple lyrics for the contest also.