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    Lyric/Poetry writing, travel, jogging, walking, swimming, nature & the outdoors, meditation, dancing, taking care of Jet the cat, helping my mom, reading, getting away from the rat race going on around me.

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  1. spanishbuddha


    Sounds cathartic and personal. Relationship abuse as a topic could certainly have emotional appeal in that the audience is empathetic to a character who has been physically or emotionally abused by someone else, but the problem for me is that the POV sounds a bit masochistic. Guy is abusive in some way, perhaps emotionally, physically yet the POV (point of view) still wants him in her life and is afraid he will eventually disappear. I think, at one point she even says she'll take the bullets for him. She's hoping he'll change, and when he's nice, gets her hopes up high to only repeat the same old thing, yet she still wants him and what bugs me is the ending. Instead of gaining the courage and strength to walk away, the abuser in this situation is the catalyst for the necessary change that happens when he finally moves away from the area the point of view is in. So, in my mind, the ending contradicts the fear the point of view clearly states she has that this guy will disappear, which he does. I just wish the disappearance had been on the main character's own terms and not because of unforeseen circumstances that were out of her control. Reason I say this is because the POV didn't resolve this conflict on her own terms (based on the writing) which leads me to believe it could happen again. Might consider altering the ending, where he moves away. If that is the reality and this is you consider yourself lucky but I would find another ending that puts the driver's seat in the hands of the victim. I think people will identify more with the position in the write because the way you have it, the point of view didn't resolve anything. Also, can't imagine anyone regardless of whatever appeal this has for anyone, wanting to sing a line like this ; "You beat me no matter what I do". Might shift a word or two, like "beat". Typos (below)? I'm is constant fear I'm is constant danger But then you say me name Just some thoughts as I always find it of value to see how what it is I write comes across to others. Perhaps it's not fair to think the same of others? I don't know. Feel free to ignore if you don't like what I've said, but this is my reaction. You did put it up for critique.
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    Enjoyed this one. It's very clever but has the flavor of floccinaucinihilipilification as far as a song goes. Keep writing. Very creative.
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    Your song has strong sentimental value. I like it. The video enhances the beauty and lives of these adorable little Puffins. There's a whole world going on out there beyond the human experience we should be more mindful of and sensitive towards. Thank you for sharing
  4. spanishbuddha

    Sorry, lover

    Why would one (in the writing) keep saying she or he is sorry when it's quite obvious that she or he is not sorry?
  5. Speaks the truth, Dan. Drug em' up to shut em' up is how a lot of problems are dealt with today, unfortunately. Thanks for posting! I love the title.
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    Rhymes 8

    Cut off, disconnected There's a price when you're free It can lead to isolation Could be you, could be me Next Topic: Sunrise
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    This is excellent. I love it. Sounding very radio friendly. Welcome!
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    I'll give it a 4. Why? Did nothing for me. Couldn't make out the words and the voice had no emotion and sounded robotic. Technical component I'll leave for someone who makes music to dissect. Oh and one thing I did appreciate is that this does sound like a nightmare. You're welcome.
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    Open Box

    It's a blend between someone opening a box or a gift that has something he wants inside of it with the idea that the box symbolizes a girl of interest, who is possibly closed or has been closed to him and he is trying to either bring her back to life and or make her interested in him. That's how I see it. Hmmm. Not sure I care for the idea of referencing a love interest as a box. I get that she's not open to either him or the world perhaps, generally speaking but it's almost as if she's an object for the POV, point of view to toy with, play with and in trying to get to know her or bring her out of her shell, he's annoyed or frustrated, getting tired. And then the title. Why open box? He opened her? ....or so he says, yet he's not satisfied with what he's found. Maybe "Open Door or Open the Door" with a few word shifts could personify this better getting rid of the idea that the love interest is like a light switch or even a box for the point of view's amusings and then include the title hook in a way that impacts, has clear meaning and even repeats. I just don't like the concept of someone with high expectations playing with or using someone like a wind up toy and that's how this comes off to me. Attitude in lyric also comes off as egotistical. Not at all surprised the girl isn't interested. This one is all about the point of view with an over-inflated opinion of himself. Maybe the perspective in the write is the open box, living in his imagination.
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    Rhymes 8

    Will leave the blow up dolls for you Would rather visit a farm to pet the sheep The intention for this one isn't up my alley And really gives me the creeps Next Topic: The Way of the Peaceful Warrior
  11. Tom There's nothing disappointing about this. It's beautiful, man. Perhaps a few technical nits here and there but I think the whole song sounds great. Cheers Carl
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    Rhymes 8

    Buffy the vampire slayer Supernatural drama Where a girl chosen by fate Battles forces that cause Sunnydale trauma With help from her friends, the Scooby gang And a guiding watcher named Giles The show was a favorite Along with the X-files. Next Topic: X-Files Quick sidetrack have a look Mr. D Looks delicious - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Mgd0YfKqozg, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RYOCgKYaPD0 Chocolate Pizza! Below....... Yum! In France, they serve this beauty which is absolutely delicious too. A chocolate sandwich on French bread of course. Heehee Anyway, I'm sorry. Now that an appetite is building. Back to................. Next Topic: The X-Files
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    Rhymes 8

    He was 400 pounds of jelly She was 300 pounds of flab And when they got together in bed A lot of beef was up for grabs Couple of peas in a pod The size of an SUV They were two bumping uglies A sight for all to see Next Topic: Chocolate Pizza
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    This Is Divorce

    If this is the point of view's divorce from feelings for someone else, then I don't sense a divorce and the title seems paradoxical. I sense anguish and frustration, maybe even pain coming from the part of the point of view in the verses. He's telling everyone he's over it and moving on with the chorus, but the verses have him reflecting on the feelings of guilt and pain, with self blame, pity, and proclaiming it's a two way street with the share of guilt falling on the love interest too. That's how what's written above comes across to me. If this is divorce is going to be the hook, then I'd at least like to feel it myself. So, in a nutshell you've got a guy reflecting the way it is or was and then says this is it, no more feeling. This is divorce, in which case some imagery could help but again, I don't sense a divorce here, the POV still feels something and is hurting. If this is divorce, then I don't think he needs to go back over the reasons why this or that happened and who if anyone is to blame. Just some thoughts. Perhaps others will view what you wrote differently. Oh and I would begin the first verse & second verse without "I". Feel like..... and continue from there.
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    Rhymes 8

    Fishing!!! Cast the line Into the pond Water ripples Fish have spawned Patiently wait Until you hook A feisty catch That tonight we'll cook Next Topic: Auto Shows