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    Lyric/Poetry writing, travel, jogging, walking, swimming, nature & the outdoors, taking care of Jet the cat, helping my mom, reading, getting away from the rat race going on around me.

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    Lyricist who often has a melody in mind when writing.

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  1. Pirate Booty

    (Check the link below) That wooden leg line gave rise to this grade B film early on when I first read your lyric. Guess anything is possible. What do you think? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jmMApNy48Sc
  2. Pirate Booty

    You're really on a roll lately, Mick. I enjoy reading your material. Very creative and enjoyable. Now with that said, back to surgery I know you probably don't want, but please consider altering a few things as mentioned below. Up and down the Ivory Coast She is the pirate with the most Leg carved in all the right places I would think LEGS CURVED OR "BODY CURVED OR BODY CURVES in all the right places, would get the men to wave that flag ecstatically even more. Maybe even enjoy being butchered. With no hint of female laces Drooling eyes on many faces The male pirates think she’s the best They want to grab her treasure chest V1 Up and down the Ivory Coast She is the pirate with the most Body curves in all the right places Drooling eyes on many faces The male pirates think she’s the best They want to grab her treasure chest Could even expand the chorus below to have the hook and lines repeat: Pirate beauty Shake your booty X marks the spot Pirate beauty Shake your booty She's the captain Who is hot ...................................Hmm sounds Caribbean.......reggae? Sean Paul? Really enjoyed it Mick with or without the changes, but I just wanted to give you some ideas to chew on. One other thing! I don't eat potato chips, so the title didn't remind me of anything but you could call it " Pirate Beauty" as Patty suggested. That works well too but then again, the booty certainly is better as far as window dressing is concerned I suppose. Only reason I've suggested what I have in the actual write is because you're trying to create an image of a female pirate that the male pirates and other men are attracted to and I can't picture a chick with a wooden leg and no hint of female laces (even shoes) being a stimulant for Captain Hook and others. Thanks for sharing
  3. Short Changed

    V3 Female Vocalist I think I like this better: Me too With careful words, he laid it on the line The light came on as he laid it on the line If I wasn’t his, he wasn’t mine If I wasn't his, he wasn't mine I saw the flaw in my freedom plan I saw the flaw in my dating scheme I didn’t count on this loving man I didn't expect to find my dream Yes, definitely much better. Very good in fact!
  4. Young love - lyric critique

    For Verse 3: How about using the old country fair instead of an old dive bar? Verse 3 A few years had passed and we met once again At the ol' country fair with a bunch of friends
  5. Young love - lyric critique

    Consider working on the lines I pointed out. Other than that it's relatable and I think an audience would like it. Oh one other thing. This song could use a hook. The title in the window dressing, "Young Love". Did I miss it? I don't see it in the lyric. Maybe you could have it repeat a couple of times in the chorus in some way or maybe even a bridge. Just a thought. To answer your questions "I tried to to take this from 16 to present day"... I think it works. "i would like to know if the story makes sense, if the timing is right, if it’s too cliche or redundant etc". Story makes sense. Not too cliche to me. Only thing I don't like is the dive bar and the line about not having much money after college. "it it definitely has a country feel to it (at least that is what I hear melodically)". I could picture country. Cheers
  6. Short Changed

    Hi, Patty - Good to see you and it's good to see you making progress with Short Changed. I'm not a big fan of the pre-chorus. I've always imagined a PC as some sort of build up that leads into the chorus and I don't get that sense with what you've got. Consider revamping all of the pre-choruses. I offered some suggestions but only to illustrate what I thought was more of a build up than what I imagined with the lines you've got. I like the duet version. Cheers Carl
  7. My Spirit is Free I'm like a spaceship High in the sky Looking in on all my thoughts With a wondering sigh Why do my feet Never touch the earth When I lie down to sleep There's a rebirth Animated lifeforms Surreal shapes Unknown figures Peering through drapes Black & white images Meaning unclear Exploring a world Far but still near Psychic premonitions Visions I see At night I'm released My spirit is free I'm a clairvoyant Breaking new ground Observing my inner world Discoveries profound Vacuum of thought Much like a wormhole Between universes Home to the soul Animated lifeforms Surreal shapes Unknown figures Peering through drapes Black & white images Meaning unclear Exploring a world Far but still near Psychic premonitions Visions I see At night I'm released My spirit is free Buried are treasures locked in the mind Inactive through life until I can find Wavelengths, channels, frequencies deep Dimensions within aroused when I sleep Animated lifeforms Surreal shapes Unknown figures Peering through drapes Black & white images Meaning unclear Exploring a world Far but still near Psychic premonitions Visions I see At night I'm released My spirit is free Carl B © 2018
  8. What genre...?

    Different and very peaceful to listen to. I like it. Ambient. New age? I'm not technical regarding names in music but the sound at 1:11 and then at 1:17 and several times after those points until the ending, is very similar to instrumental sounds from Madonna's "Frozen" hit which I like (meaning both your track, hers and the sound in question.) Somehow I could see this transformed and sped up into a vibrant dance song. But, I like what you've got the way it is. It's relaxing, soothing, thought provoking and even ethereal. In case you're wondering what I am talking about here is a link to "Frozen" by Madonna. At about 1:30-1:32 in, lasting to about 1:40 and repeats till the end like in yours, which I love in both cases. Check it out below.
  9. Cavalry

    Everything about this tune is excellent. Easy on the senses to listen to and enjoy and more than once or twice! Cheers
  10. It's really good, Dan, but I must admit I'm left wondering what lies below the surface. It would be really cool and interesting to watch the perspective's dreams or thought process unwind. Cheers
  11. I think this sounds really nice but can you post the lyric to go with the song? Didn't see the words once clicking on the link. Thanks for sharing
  12. I seem to like just about every song you've posted on this site, and this one is included. The video is like an animated video meets reality. It's different and that I like along with the colorful artwork/design on the cover. Wondering if you created this too. Cheers & thanks for sharing!
  13. The Politician

    You're on a roll. Love it, the way it is. Great piece of poetry that universally depicts most of the bums that have held some form of office. And for the record, on your Jesus write, I was busting your chops about the title. Most will see it as you depict it, but dirty minds like mine will take it a step beyond. Again, this one is precise and to the point and universal enough (for me) to not need anything more unless you're looking to take it somewhere specific.
  14. Stranger

    I like it. It's catchy. Sounds radio friendly to me. Nice rhythmic vibe. I don't know about rap or hip hop though. Sounds like a pop song, not that this matters. It's really good. Can you post the lyric? Didn't see the words on the sound cloud link when listening to the tune.
  15. What would Jesus be packing?

    I'd guess about 6 inches. Sorry if that's offensive to some but the way it's worded here (at least in the title overview) kind of implies it. Perhaps a cultural variation in the interpretation of words within the English language? Packing has more than one meaning and I tend to use the urban dictionary as my bible in the word department. Besides guns are so phallic. https://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=packing
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