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Ricky Layne

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  1. This has a nice feel to it. Sounds good to me. I like the lyrics and the message. I hear a Beach Boy vibe for sure! Good job Ricky
  2. Any and all comments are welcome and appreciated!!! TURNING BACK THE TIME It's Monday again but it was Monday yesterday You're bleeding again but you just bled out yesterday You'd rather live in a black hole Where time disobeys The event horizon protects you And keeps him at bay You turn around and realize You turn around and realize His paradigm has you confined Turning back the time Turning back the time Turning back the time (repeat 3 times) Your gut is aching everyday You fall again and again He just smiles He won't relent You turn around and realize His paradigm has you confined Turning back the time Turning back the time Turning back the time (repeat 3 times) It's his holiday... Psychopathic misbehavior Never understood the danger You are searching for a savior one Just one Just one Turning back the time Turning back the time Turning back the time (repeat 3 times)
  3. Bro what up!!! Awesome vocals. Mix sounds GREAT! Catchy chorus...actually it's all catchy Clear mix... I'm curious how many tracks you are mixing minus vocal tracks and drum tracks Nice to hear you again!!! Sounds really good man! Ricky
  4. Tom, Really like this a lot. Great feel and I really like the lyrics and delivery. I think with more practice the phrasing and timing will work out. I think you are close though! Ricky
  5. Sounds really good so far. I feel I hear the bass drum beat more than anything else though. I think the volume might be ok. It's the "sharper" sound of the bass beat that I notice. Might be able to soften it with a compressor or a different sample. It certainly doesn't sound terrible it's just the main thing I hear and could get distracting if you keep it up through most of the song as I am guessing you will. Nice so far. Ricky
  6. DinoRider, Appreciate your comments! You noted the one part of the song that really does stall. One of the reasons for that is that I cut/pasted the vocals and so the extended "holy you" vocals did not make this cut. I like your idea too. My plan at this point is to really extend those vocals in an interesting way maybe even trying to "morph" them into the choir. Thanks! Ricky
  7. Tom, Thank you for checking this one out. The synth may take a little more of a back seat as I try to rock this one up a bit. Also glad you like the lyrics. Ambiguous is usually my favorite kind of lyric. I appreciate you mentioning it as lyrics are a struggle for me. I too think this song could mean a lot of different things depending on the listeners perspective. Ricky
  8. Lost Boy, You are right with the guitars as they are just a tad too loud. I will be redoing this song from scratch adding acoustic drums and giving it more of a big rock feel I hope... I'm glad you like it so far. Ricky
  9. Andrushkiwt, Thank you for your comments. I don't hear and "major" issues in the instrument levels but I do appreciate you taking the time. I would rather have comments that help me fix things that are wrong with my songs then just give me a pat on the back and move on. Ricky
  10. This is a WIP that will mostly be torn back down and rerecorded. Any thoughts to help get this better are much appreciated. Thanks! THE HOLY YOU I used to wonder Who's to blame A silent hunter Death is your name It's not hard to see through It's not hard to see through the holy you It's not hard to see through It's not hard to see through the holy you Holy chanter Innocent saint Human hunter In a numbers game It's not hard to see through It's not hard to see through the holy you It's not hard to see through It's not hard to see through the holy you
  11. Thats a really good lyric Steve. Not sure I will use it for this song but Thank you!
  12. Thanks for the help guys. Joey---Excellent thoughts that I will consider. At this point I will move forward with the song title "The Holy You" and see where it takes me. It certainly could change throughout the process. gdc--- Thank for your thoughts. Helpful just to know it seems to work for most... Mike--- Great point! I am worried about that too. Right now it sounds like "It's not hard to see through the hole in you" which is another decent subject/title. I'll have to work on it and see where I go but thank you for the help. SongWolfe---I think you and Mike are correct. Thank you! FWIW --- At this point the song has very sparse verse lyrics. Just to give you guys an idea here is the first verse I have been singing to with the music (and it only has 2 verses) Verse Red regalia Innocent saint A wilting dahlia Should be ashamed Chorus It's not hard to see through It's not hard to see through the holy you It's not hard to see through It's not hard to see through the holy you
  13. I have a chorus line that I would like to write a song around. It's a rock song where lyrics are not SUPER important to me but I need to know if this line makes sense. I think it works but have never heard it said so maybe I'm wrong. Any thoughts would be great. The line is: "It's not hard to see through the holy you" If it doesn't work I will change it and work the song around another line/subject. Thanks!
  14. Music: SySemic Vocals: Ricky Layne Lyrics: Ricky Layne and SySemic Comments Appreciated http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=13270426&q=hi&newref=1 HIMALAYA One note One hope Can you feel the peace from miles away? Now the time has come for me To lift you up where we can breathe Let’s climb the hill so we can scream Release our anger Let's forget our broken home Leave it all and let go To the place we all belong Let’s start a fire on Himalaya Wipe the tears and wash our fears to cleanse our souls Fulfill desires with jubilation Rock the beat and feel the heat as we lose control One goal One home Would you follow me and hide away? We could live in harmony A cool kiss in a mountain breeze And climb up high for our release Forget the danger Let’s forget our broken home Leave it all and let go To the place we all belong Let’s start a fire on Himalaya Wipe the tears and wash our fears to cleanse our souls Fulfill desires with jubilation Rock the beat and feel the heat as we lose control Let’s start a fire on Himalaya Wipe the tears and wash our fears to cleanse our souls Fulfill desires with jubilation Feel the heat and rock the beat as we lose control Let’s start a fire on Himalaya Wipe the tears and wash our fears to cleanse our souls Fulfill desires with jubilation Rock the beat and feel the heat as we lose control Will you come home?
  15. This was a song that I wrote most of the lyrics and sang on. The original composer mixed it. We think it's 90% done but need any comments for final edit consideration. Thanks! HIMALAYA One note. One hope. Can you feel the peace from miles away? Now the time has come for me To lift you up where we can breathe Let’s climb the hill so we can scream Release our anger Let's forget our broken home Leave it all and let go To the place we all belong Let’s start a fire on Himalaya Wipe the tears and wash our fears to cleanse our souls Fulfill desires with jubilation Rock the beat and feel the heat as we lose control. One goal. One home. Would you follow me and hide away? We could live in harmony A cool kiss in a mountain breeze And climb up high for our release Forget the danger Let’s forget our broken home Leave it all and let go To the place we all belong Let’s start a fire on Himalaya Wipe the tears and wash our fears to cleanse our souls Fulfill desires with jubilation Rock the beat and feel the heat as we lose control. Let’s start a fire on Himalaya Wipe the tears and wash our fears to cleanse our souls Fulfill desires with jubilation Feel the heat and rock the beat as we lose control. Let’s start a fire on Himalaya Wipe the tears and wash our fears to cleanse our souls Fulfill desires with jubilation Rock the beat and feel the heat as we lose control.