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cindyrella

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cindyrella last won the day on May 17

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About cindyrella

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    the Beatles, Simon and Garfunkle, Carole King, James Taylor, Alan Jackson, Martina McBride, Willie Nelson, The Eagles
  1. Thanks! Been crazy busy and my hubby's been sick so I haven't gotten back on here lately.
  2. Thanks all! I see what you mean about the different mix of my words. I will work on it some more (as I can since I am also doing 50/90:))
  3. I have trouble as well on understanding the verses. I do like the feel of it and the pre chorus especially.
  4. I changed quite a few things and then just got stuck. How is this one? Pompous Ass © 2017 indy Prince Always so arrogant Ego out of hand Why’d I even bother To try and understand? Always so self important Nothing that you wouldn’t say I wish now that’d I let you Up and fade away Chorus Cause stupid I don’t need to know Latin To appreciate a rose And honey I don’t need to know Chaucer To write some pretty prose Yeah jerk, I'll be fine Though you think you have more class I'm so tired of all your uppity ways You f*cking pompous ass! Always so egotistic Blowin’ your own horn I wish I’d not wasted my time Listening to your scorn I'll find some normal guy Who'll love me as I am So get lost you snobby pig I no longer give a damn Repeat Chorus
  5. Thanks everyone! Great ideas and I want some more punch. I 'll rewrite it.
  6. Pretty nice throughout! I too am not crazy about the Ooh La La but that might change with hearing it.
  7. An older one I dug out and changed quite a few things. I want it to have lots of attitude-does it have enough? Pompous Ass © 2017 indy Prince Always so arrogant Ego out of hand Why’d I even bother To try and understand? Always so self important Nothing that you wouldn’t say I wish now that’d I let you Up and fade away Chorus Cause baby I don’t need to know Latin To appreciate a rose And baby I don’t need to know Chaucer To write a pretty prose Yeah baby, I ain’t fragile So don’t treat me like I’m glass I’m tired of you talking down to me You prideful pompous ass! Always so egotistic Blowin’ your own horn I wish I’d not wasted my time Listening to your scorn Always so conceited The way you love to boast I wish I’d never known you But baby now you’re toast Repeat Chorus
  8. I really like this! Great images in that pre chorus. It is romantic without being overly sappy. Nice one.
  9. Thanks for your comments and ideas. I think making it funnier would really make it relatable. Let me think on this.
  10. I like the honesty it this. I do think maybe a bit of slower pace might work a bit better.
  11. I wrote this little lyric and a Canadian friend did the music and vocals with his sweet kids. It makes me smile! http://fawm.org/songs/70365/ I Love Animals (And they love me) © 2017 Cindy Prince I love to talk to animals And I'm sure they can tell That I like them just as they are All kinds of animals Like me as well From fish to pretty jaguars Chorus Oh, I love animals (and they love me) From turtles in ponds and monkeys in a tree I love to see them best when they are running free Oh, I love animals (and they love me) Bridge Which are my favorites? It's hard to decide I even love bugs And big birds that glide Animals out in Africa Like lions in a pride So which are my favorites? Couldn't do it if I tried Repeat chorus
  12. I like the short but powerful lines Paul. It reminds me of a song I wrote called Labels. I do agree that the bridge could be improved.
  13. Thanks everyone! Great ideas for making this one shine. I do like the sugar high and the bridge does need work. I'll be looking closer at these great ideas.
  14. Thanks! Yes, I want it to be clear and fun too.
  15. I like the idea but it isn't very smooth. Ideas? Drive-Thru Baby © 2017 Cindy Prince Every day I come back Maybe it's those sparkling blue eyes Or maybe the way you say “Only a Coke, or just fries?” My heart starts to race I have to swallow to say “Just a Coke this time” Repeated four times a day Chorus Cause you’re a drive-thru baby You take my order You take my heart Yeah, you’re a drive-thru baby I want to love you But how do I start? I ask how you are But I want to ask you out Just when I get up the nerve I again start to doubt Why is this so hard? Around you I become shy I just look sheepish Then timidly wave goodbye Repeat chorus Bridge I finally asked for a date and it will be no fast-food chain Maybe all of my drive-thrus haven’t been all in vain Last chorus Cause you’re a drive-thru baby You take my order You take my heart Yeah, you’re a drive-thru baby I want to love you Maybe this is the start