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  1. Least Said

    Thanks for your comment Barneyboy I didn't think the language was that much of a stretch, but okay. I have to admit I wanted to come up with this whole story about how the girl was picking chilis off the vine when she had a cut on her hand, and her father was trying to......but I can't be bothered. You caught me out, the third verse needs work . Thank you for your help Barneyboy, I appreciate it. Oh and my dad always said the more you scream and carry on (= having a whinge) about things, the more they hurt because you are continuing to focus on them (Not that it wouldn't hurt anyway ).
  2. Least Said

    Least Said: Soonest Mended Tracy Edridge C. 2017. V1 In my tower I was living like rapunzel when I was young A handsome Prince he came a calling, I let my hair become undone He vowed to catch me in his warm arms as I leaned out on the ledge Then he turned his pretty back on me and I careened towards my death C But, least said: soonest mended I kept silent with my pain Least said: soonest mended and I'll be smiling once again So I dont mention everytime you pinch my sore and sorry heart Cause least said soonest mended, learned that lesson from the start V2 You know my brother he liked to help me, didn't know he helped himself Could not believe that he'd put money, over good people like myself And when I found out, I didn't react, I was so stunned by what he'd done Brother freaked out and then he walked out and he was angry for months to come C But, least said: soonest mended I keep silent with my pain Least said: soonest mended and I'll be smiling once again So I don't mention everytime you pinch my sore and sorry heart Cause least said soonest mended, I learned that lesson from the start V3 I used to pigsqueal like farmers daughter, my daddy'd rush in to keep me calm Don't put no chili on your wounds dear, you need a cool and soothing balm The more you whinging the more it hurts now, so just be still and trust it goes Least said soonest mended and that's all you need to know
  3. Breakup Ballad lyrics

    Hi Margaret Maude I think this is really lovely, I mean I was impressed. In the interest of trimming, I think the lyric works a bit better like this. Keep or sweep (whatever you do with this I feel it's going to be amazing anyway!) Verse 1 Yesterday, I met you in the garden Trailing behind me We stood upon the gravel in the morning Waiting for something Pre-chorus Anything to happen Was it you, was it me? How did this happen How did rain fall on your cheek and shame on mine? When I looked into your eyes I died Verse 2 Yesterday, you told me that you loved me You left me speechless And I, being the fool in all the madness Heard three words, but couldn’t speak them Pre-chorus Everything will happen Wasn’t you, wasn’t me, yet it has happened Rain will fall on your cheek and shame on mine. For a long time Chorus You loved me but I let you go Crushed you deep inside your soul Took you in and threw you out The fire was quietly burning out You held me tight in your arms Yet my heart felt oh, so far Your love’s tearing me apart Into shards Bridge Oh, oh oh oh oh [x4] Pre-chorus Anything can happen Wasn’t you wasn’t me, yet this has happened How did rain fall on your cheek and shame on mine? Chorus You loved me but I let you go Crushed you deep inside your soul Took you in and threw you out The fire was quietly burning out Loved you but I didn’t know The flame was slowly growing cold My mind was slowly getting old Drew our love to a close And I’m acting fine hope you won’t know Wear a smile just for show I see you’re at an all time low But please my darling don’t lose hope Someday she will come along A girl who might have heard this song before And will not sing to you This melody ‘bout what went wrong with us We have both been damaged This is our Breakup Ballad Verse 4/ ending Yesterday, I left you in the garden My head and my heart were aching Nobody told me it would hurt Doing the heartbreaking Fantastic write !
  4. Love's a Game

    Hi Barneyboy I liked the lyric, I especially like the first two verses, the makeup line is really tangible. I can't get past this line though, it trips me up no end . The only other line I'm not 100% sold on is Could it be deep seated tension? I don't know. I really love the bridge .
  5. By the Time the Rumour Got to Me

    Hope I'm not too late to the party, the flow on this is really good Paul, and I love the poignancy of it, the unique feel. Paul, the only tweak that jumps at me from the lyric is, And gossipers happily feed it. Great write. Love your versatility as a lyricist.
  6. Ban The Burqa

    Barneyboy Thank you, I am really glad that you replied to this topic, and I actually agree with a lot of the comments you make. Looking at this as a straight lyric, your points make sense. The present tense would be better, sounds like a forced rhyme for kill (which it is), the chorus is crap (my words) objectively that is all correct and I agree with you, I worked within the boundaries of another song and those are the weak points because of it. Your critical eye is really on point here and you took a lot of time on it, I really appreciate it. Thank you so much! One thing I will answer, the burqa could conceal bombs and other weaponry beneath it and therefore be used in terror strikes. (not my opinion, just answering). =Bob= thank you for your colourful input PaulCanuck, Should I stay or should I go now? Rock The Casbah, the good old days! Thanks for your comments, I tend to get tunnel vision, so it's nice when someone pulls me out of my own head to see broader options for my lyrics.
  7. You Make It Easy To Be Sweet

    Hi, this is a good write overall, well done, there are a couple of typo/word errors that I can help you with. I think this is a beautiful verse even if it is not without cliché, it flows really well. I think you mean "I wanna tell you you're wonderful" and 'I need you like a poet needs a rhyme' A strong and wonderful write
  8. Shut Up and Let Me Gloat

    I hope that drop gave you some relief, as this lyric did me! I laughed out loud during the second verse and I'll admit the cork didn't pop until the final verse, but this is sweet and tantalising and leaves a fragrant note on the palate when finished. Well done to you sir and may you gloat long and hard!
  9. "Sunlight"

    Hi Brady and welcome to the Musesongwriters.com Lyrics Feedback Forum, we're happy to receive your first post! I think this is a great write, I love the sunshine imagery you've used and I can hear a melody and flow as I read it, so well done. Seriously, apart from this, which I'm guessing is a typo "So now we’re going to amy home," I think you've created a coherent working lyric, a muso might want to trim it down a little, but everything fits. Thanks for posting and sharing it with us!
  10. My Awesome Sauce

    Hi Paul, I love the Awesomeness of your Sauce! I had an issue with, 'Cause that's where I get off, would love it shortened, "To where I get off". Also trying to think of a more foodish word for your zippin' home line, maybe nippin' or tearin' or lickin' or roarin'. Ohhhh, I see . Another great write.
  11. Ban The Burqa

    Hi spanishbuddha, so glad for your comment . I have sent you a pm about the video. Thanks again!
  12. Ban The Burqa

    Pauline Hansen, a political Australian figure has been in the news a lot promoting her political party, One Nation's 'ban the burqa' campaign. After having The Clash's classic 'Rock The Casbah' playing in my head for days, things started to evolve. 'Shareef don't like it' became "Pauline don't like it" and the rest followed organically. Brandis= Attorney-General, George Brandis I also have a video idea for this as well, which could be lots of fun! Ban The Burqa V1 Now Pauline she told One Nation Not gonna let the matter drop We're gonna keep on saying They gotta wear a skirt and top V2 And if they're getting mad at that Don't they know that she falls ill Every time she sees Islamic women Looking dressed to kill C Pauline don't like it Ban the Burqa Ban the Burqa Pauline don't like it Ban the Burqa Ban the Burqa V3 Now over in the Senate She wore a black one in Brandis says her circus Is an appalling thing V4 But as the polling changed direction Reflecting what the people like Pauline she's got a fashion sense To stop the terror strikes C Pauline don't like it Ban the Burqa Ban the Burqa Pauline don't like it Ban the Burqa Ban the Burqa Musical interlude with various provocative sounds C Pauline don't like it Ban the Burqa Ban the Burqa Pauline don't like it Ban the Burqa Ban the Burqa Adlib Pauline don't like it She says it's un-Australian! Ban the Burqa Ban the Burqa Pauline don't like it Welcome to One Nation! Ban the Burqa Ban the Burqa Pauline don't like it You know she really hates it Ban the Burqa Ban the Burqa
  13. In My Own House

    V Enormous building in my dreams where I belong It's dark, it's grand, it has secrets and Wailing beasts in chambers that I don't understand But I can't stop singing their songs B/Change The carpet's red, the furniture mahogany See right through the ghosts that sit and bother me They have informal meetings masses quiet as a mouse Where they kick my arse and tell me I'm wrong Yeah they kick my arse and tell me I don't belong In my own house V Doubts been creeping underdoor where I hold strong A deadly sand that spreads the band of Wailing beasts in chambers that I'll never understand Yet I'm still singing their songs In my own house I can't stop singing their songs In my own house 'Cause they're catchy and they're true If not about me, at least about you In my own house I can't stop singing their songs In my own house
  14. Maybe the next time

    Hey Paul, I usually LOVE your stuff, and I think there is great writing here too. I really like the verses and think that they don't need much work, the chorus is what I was having trouble with. I think my problem is 'catch you the next time'. Dibs me next time - could that be a thing? I LOVE the fade, it cements the whole song. You're such a funny, clever writer, you must be a riot in real life.
  15. Love to be Childish

    Hi Ashfi, I love the vibe of this, you are definitely exuding sunshine with this lyric. I like the simplicity of it as well, in its' own way childish, cute, fun! I did wonder though if you might consider changing the title to I'm Not Ever Getting Old as a more relatable title for the audience. Either way great write
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