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About Tracy somebody

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  • Birthday 10/10/09

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    anyone constantly reinventing themselves

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  1. In My Own House

    V Enormous building in my dreams where I belong It's dark, it's grand, it has secrets and Wailing beasts in chambers that I don't understand But I can't stop singing their songs B/Change The carpet's red, the furniture mahogany See right through the ghosts that sit and bother me They have informal meetings masses quiet as a mouse Where they kick my arse and tell me I'm wrong Yeah they kick my arse and tell me I don't belong In my own house V Doubts been creeping underdoor where I hold strong A deadly sand that spreads the band of Wailing beasts in chambers that I'll never understand Yet I'm still singing their songs In my own house I can't stop singing their songs In my own house 'Cause they're catchy and they're true If not about me, at least about you In my own house I can't stop singing their songs In my own house
  2. Maybe the next time

    Hey Paul, I usually LOVE your stuff, and I think there is great writing here too. I really like the verses and think that they don't need much work, the chorus is what I was having trouble with. I think my problem is 'catch you the next time'. Dibs me next time - could that be a thing? I LOVE the fade, it cements the whole song. You're such a funny, clever writer, you must be a riot in real life.
  3. Love to be Childish

    Hi Ashfi, I love the vibe of this, you are definitely exuding sunshine with this lyric. I like the simplicity of it as well, in its' own way childish, cute, fun! I did wonder though if you might consider changing the title to I'm Not Ever Getting Old as a more relatable title for the audience. Either way great write
  4. Money is a man-made thing

    Hello, I wanted to thank everyone for their comments on this lyric, it was really interesting reading. I can see validity in everyone's opinions . I wrote this to remind myself of how quick money can change the things I like about myself. I've never had a good relationship with money. For my 40th birthday, I was treated to a pedicure spa treatment, blue foaming water, massage chair, the lot. Well I loved the experience, but was I uncomfortable with the situation! I felt positively awful whilst I looked down upon this poor woman who worked at basically floor level on my FEET! And whilst my feet had never looked more beautiful, I felt very guilty about the whole thing. That's the me I like. That didn't last long but, I saved to get another spa pedicure about 3 months later, and I couldn't snap my fingers at the woman fast enough! I need reminding! It was also a comment on how people will exploit themselves until there's nothing left! Money corrupts and if that's the ultimate point I made, I'm happy. P.S. Agreed that a bridge could kick it up nicely, I'll think on it. Thanks everyone! ...Whether my opinions be trash or treasure , it was my pleasure
  5. 02 - My lyric competition entry

    Hi fabkebab, I have to admit that I confused myself before I even started reading your lyric and it was a while before things re-routed for me. I ASSumed that 02 was the year 2002, so Sorry, this is embarrassing, but supporting my already wacked theory, there was a birth in 2002. Anyway I won't go on from there. It is a beautifully written lyric, but I couldn't appreciate it to it's full extent in this case. ...Whether my opinions be trash or treasure , it was my pleasure
  6. Punching Bag

    I get the feeling this lyric has sort of been mapped out on a fight. I think those first short sentences are jabs, Then the left/rights jabs, left/rights again I could see it that way anyway Whilst, I didn't find the lyric irresistible, I did think it achieved exactly what it wanted to and was really cleverly executed. ...Whether my opinions be trash or treasure , it was my pleasure
  7. Going Slowly

    Hi Ty, I thought this lyric had some really strong elements to it, and I enjoyed so much about it that I'm going to show you how I would edit it, to keep all the shining bits. Then I would jump straight to the chorus I know I have trimmed a lot, but I tried to stay focussed on the imagery that had a continuous theme, plus this was GREAT writing! ...Whether my opinions be trash or treasure , it was my pleasure
  8. Cold Water

    Hi Sofia, I think this is a great, well thought out lyric, I love the attention you have given to the hook in the chorus. I love the flow of the first 3 lines of the first verse, but line 4 pulls me up. I think putting it more simply helps in 2 ways, flow and de-clutter. Instead of saying Try 'Cuts through me, built my own knife.' It's another option . Similarly, where you have Try 'When I run, I will run all the way'. I know the meaning isn't exactly the same, but do you think it sounds/flows better? That's some FANTASTIC! writing Makes me want to work harder on my own! ...Whether my opinions be trash or treasure , it was my pleasure
  9. Money is a man-made thing

    Money is a Man-Made Thing V1 Where's your soul Who's in control Do you listen to the words you say V2 Do you crave To savour fame Or would you do it anyway? C Just remember don't surrender - to it Money is a man-made thing Short odds or long it's never wrong - you are Money is a man-made thing V3 Lived life high I touched the sky And I prefer the poorer me *Bridge Added* Everything we're given is a gift Humans feel the need to tariff it For some sense of control We are willing to sell our souls.. C Just remember don't surrender - to it Money is a man-made thing Short odds or long it's never wrong - you are Money is a man-made thing
  10. Untitled

    Hi, brad4846, I enjoyed reading Untitled, it had a strong rhythm and my favourite imagery in the lyric was this verse (and aside from that, I love the last 2 lines)... I thought these were the weakest lines of the lyric, but with some tweaking, I reckon they could be the most powerful... Nice write.
  11. A Boy Kiss A Boy

    Hi EmilyEmily, this lyric certainly has the elements of a good workable song. I particularly like the PC and it's interwoven movement. I'm having trouble with the wording of your hook 'A boy kiss a boy, A girl kiss a girl', I think it detracts the ear. For me, the only suggestion I can provide is 'boy kisses boy, girl kisses girl' which isn't ground-breaking, but in my opinion, it makes the same point in a more universal way. I thought the bridge could have had more substance, but apart from that it's a strong lyric. Nice .
  12. Devil in Disguise

    Salutations teeporter44! I thought the first three verses flowed well and you kept my interest. In my opinion re: PC the line 'don't take her dance' could be improved to 'don't do her dance' or even 'don't take her hand'. The fourth line of the Chorus reads She brings drown, I'm assuming that's a typo. I also really liked your refrain... Yeah sure Elvis used she's the devil in disguise, but I'm sure this could be made to work regardless. A good write, teeporter44 well done.
  13. The new look

    Salutations! I LOVE the new Header/Font! and I love that I can keep the old Muse colour scheme in living memory . One thing I used to find helpful was the time at the bottom of the page (especially for entry deadlines). I am really enjoying the new changes as I find them (and read about them) on the site . Thanks for all the work you are putting in Alistair .
  14. September Lyric Contest

    Congratulations to: John Voorpostel & Empty Junction, my top pick and what a stellar lyric! And congrats also to Paul Canuck for another great lyric! I also liked Dancing in the Rain and in the Blink of An Eye. What an interesting all round result! Thanks Neal!
  15. Worried about the noise

    So some backstory... My youngest son (now 19) was complaining to me the other day about how I always chose his brother's side in arguments when they were growing up and that obviously he wasn't my favourite son. The 'Favourite son' happened to deal with autism and needed life a certain way - in order to avoid MELTDOWN. When I explained to my questioning son that my decisions were mostly motivated by fear of oncoming meltdowns rather than actually weighing up the situation to see what was indeed fair (I'm human right?) he not only felt much better, but we also have a better understanding of each other. Worried About The Noise I didn't see it from your side cause I was worried about the noise I like having a place to live a place i can afford haven't moved a thimble in a million years and I'd like to avoid. I didn't see it from your side cause I was worried about the noise I never stopped for a moment to see how it looked to you you didn't lose any fight no-one judged you I didn't see it from your side cause I was worried about the noise The decicion does support the hypothesis I'm glad you felt free to come out with this Now you know why I'd still make the same choice I didn't see it from your side cause I was worried about the noise
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