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AndyLeF

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    Essex, England
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    Life, the Universe and everything...

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    Any song with good melody and lyrics is going to catch my ear

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  1. Well done SongWolf - "Portraits of War" was the outstanding lyric for me this month - great perspective, images and theme. I also really enjoyed: "Lonely farmer", "Talk is Cheap", "I Still Think of Her" and "Only Ravens Know". Thanks to Iggy for organising and LB76/BlueLewie for taking the time to read and score - kudos guys! Andy
  2. Anyone see BBC's Howard Goodhall's review of The Beatles ground breaking album "Sgt Pepper's Lonely Hearts Club Band"? - just a wonderful revealing program in their approach to lyrics, composition and studio techniques - still relevant today. It' s here for anyone who missed it:
  3. Hey there Andy........where are you these days!? :D

  4. Very well done Iggy for organising and to Musical Key for guest voting; that takes a lot of time and is much appreciated. Some highly imaginative lyrics this month - loved "Mad Hatters Pad" and "Here on Vacation" - well done Kuya; a worthy winner. "Shadow Puppets" was very imaginative as well; would go down really well in a song genre you could sing to your kids and have 'em laughing at bed time. A question on the rules - has the extra average score idea been dropped? It used to be that everyone gets the average mark of their own scores as an addition mark? - this helps prevent 'tactical' voting (which is pretty mean spirited) where every mark given is on the lower end of the range... Andy
  5. Great imagination and impressive range of hooks presented this month - well done everyone! Well done Iggy - so, that's your secret - a 'good' clonk on the head to get the lyric lines flowing! Hope you are recovering well Many thanks to those scorers who gave my effort a couple of "1"s and "1.5"s - a first for me! My favs were Emily's "Redemption" - huge chorus potential here and I could hear the lyric as a fully fledged, stadium type anthem song in my ears as I read through it and Iggy's subtle and gorgeous "All in the Stars". Thanks to fabkebab for running the contest Andy
  6. Good range of lyrics this month with some very topical ones indeed! - well done everyone! Thanks iggy for your time running the contest this month! Andy
  7. Many thanks for some really excellent feedback guys Bob – "beneath my restless feet" – narration perspective has now changed which helps this a little here. - I like “smite”! - Yes, the shift to "tavern" maybe too abrupt; am considering options. - Thanks – I try really hard with images! Mike – I mislabeled v3 – and yes, I'll consider another verse. - “Upon” in the title works for me – they were lost on the rocks above the deep! - all though - I do agree with you, they certainly end up below/in the deep! Donna – starting with the chorus was deliberate to make the song different from the vast hordes of standard V Ch V Ch songs (of which I’ve done many as well!) - “‘neath” rather than “beneath” was deliberate – as someone mentioned; ship wreaks - are set in an old time frame so I’ve tried hard to introduce some rather old style words: - “smite”, “‘neath”, “‘dorn” – and more, if I can find them! - "Fog" is good but too specific; I let the readers imagination do some work her as “ghostly breath” is open to imagination: spray, mist, fog…. - “restless feet” – Randy mentioned the need to make things slightly unknown to pique interest – I’m in his camp! - Very good point here! – “fists seeking” is a sssss singers nightmare!! – “blows seeking” is much better thanks. - Agreed “uncaring rocks” is more interesting – thanks Donna  - Good catch on the multitude of “rocks” – have adjusted. - I like “beaten” instead of “falling” – thx  - Yes, “I” in V2 is a good candidate and will fit in well with the change of narration I’ve now adopted. Buc – thanks – think we are on the same page here. - “Around”/”Along” both work – “Around” works especially for an island – however overall “along” it is – thanks! - Your suggestion on trimming the bell line flows much better – thanks. - Your prompt on the “rolling waves are never ending” got me thinking and I’ve found “unrelenting”  - Yes, I didn’t like “execution” either; it was a ‘transition” word waiting for replacement. After a long time perusing the “tion” words I’ve found “capitulation” which is a bit better than “execution” - I'm still looking! - I get your point on “life rings” but a google search of “life belts” shows the round inflation devices I’m speaking of are still referred to as belts so think I’m ok there. - Yes, “like windows on the sea” is what I started out with but the melody I’ve got needed more, so I added those extra words – I may have to revisit that! Randy - you have a producer’s ear! – yes I’m already considering an echo on “abandon ship”  - Agree with your observation on “restless feet” - of liking something which is not quiet explainable and so leaves it up to imagination. I’ve adjusted the narrative perspective so hope it still is a bit ‘oblique’! Pre music draft: Lost Upon The Deep © 2016 Andy LeFevre Intro: Instrumental Chorus 1 Lost upon the deep ‘neath the waves we gently sleep Along the coast still see our ghostly breath And as the waves pound over rocks above our restless feet The echo of a bell rings out - abandon ship Verse 1 Breakers smite uncaring rocks In angry blows of retribution Unrelenting ‘til they submit Crumbled in capitulation Chorus 2 Lost upon the deep ‘neath the waves we gently sleep Along the coast still see our ghostly breath And as the waves pound over rocks above our restless feet The echo of a bell rings out - abandon ship Instrumental Verse 3 Lifebelts ‘dorn the tavern walls like window views out to the lost at sea I feel the panic hear the cries The unknown sailor me lies nearby Chorus 3 Tag Still some open window space sirens from the tavern walls If you turn your head you may still get a glimpse - of me
  8. Thanks everyone for initial comments - final pre-music draft below: I went on holiday to an island recently - it had loads of ship wreaks around it's rocky coast and a single tavern with many lifebelts reclaimed from the wreaks hanging on it's wall and this lyric came to me. I wasn't sure if it should be called "Abandon Ship" or "Lost Upon The Deep" - hope I've chosen the 'right' one?! Many thanks for any comments Andy Lost Upon The Deep © 2016 Andy LeFevre Intro: Instrumental Chorus 1 Lost upon the deep ‘neath the waves we gently sleep Along the coast still see our ghostly breath And as the waves pound over rocks above our restless feet The echo of a bell rings out - abandon ship Verse 1 Breakers smite uncaring rocks In angry blows of retribution Unrelenting ‘til they submit Crumbled in capitulation Chorus 2 Lost upon the deep ‘neath the waves we gently sleep Along the coast still see our ghostly breath And as the waves pound over rocks above our restless feet The echo of a bell rings out - abandon ship Instrumental Verse 3 Lifebelts ‘dorn the tavern walls like window views out to the lost at sea I feel the panic hear the cries The unknown sailor me lies nearby Chorus 3 Tag Still some open window space sirens from the tavern walls If you turn your head you may still get a glimpse of me
  9. Hi nc, Think you have a solid start here and the chorus and particularly V3 work really well - a few comments and suggestions below. Good luck with it! Andy
  10. Hey Donna - long time! This is pretty clear to me what's going on. You have some great imagery here and I have a few comments below - keep or sweep! Good story lyric! Andy I Still See the Boy V1 I still see the boy Though not in his bed Strange reverse speak here "though not" - kind of a long way round saying "he's out of his bed again!" so maybe the simpler: "He's out of his bed" would flow better? But kicking the dustbins at midnight instead Aged four, in scruffy pyjamas And often unfed I really like the dustbin kicking image here but struggle with the logic that a four year old could be out of the house kicking dustbins at midnight - however, that does become become clear later! V2 I still see the boy Being taken away His home now with strangers who’ll teach him to play Aged five, with two of his brothers Maybe "two of his" => "new"? (if he's been adopted into another family) Beside him that day Ok so I get the logic in v1 now - we are talking neglect of the boy Bridge Sometimes the boy tiptoes into my dreams Since it's clear the lyric is about "the boy" I think that can be replaced with "he" in the above line... Holding mixed crayons like hope in his hand He carefully fills in the contours xlnt 2 lines here! Of a sober mother and father This seems to me to be too direct and a rather a 'bolt all the bits together' kind of a line - they are good as a transition containing all the ideas before a really neat line saying the same thing more eloquently appears - imho more work on this line could find something really neat. …A family in fairytale land Great line I really like the intent in this bridge Donna! V3 I still see the boy Creating a space This line doesn't present any clear image to me - maybe you could work in "hiding place" or "den" or "tree house" or "Creating his space" or something with a clearer image? Deep in the garden, no tears on his face "No tears on his face" - again, the negative rather 'baggage' laden way of expressing the intent which could maybe more clearly be expressed with something like: "Deep in the garden now a grin on his face" and then the last line adjusts simply as: "He's finding his place"... But finding his place © 2016 Donna Devine[/size]
  11. Sounds familiar Donna! I've got notebooks and word docs galore - hundreds of potential titles that seemed at some point to have scope for development. Some only titles and others with many lyric lines - most of which are pretty poor but occasionally I find some nugget in there and - it's all about collecting enough nuggets together to start one off... Don't know if anyone watched "Gareth's Invictus Choir"...? (Think it maybe available on youtube as well). Absolutely brilliant riveting stuff; will move the viewer to tears AND there is an amazing lyric and song developed in the program - 3 weeks before being sung live by an amateur choir to 20,000 people at the opening of the Invictus games in Orlando! From a songwriter's point of view this program has everything - moving real life stories to find "nugget" lyric lines, lyric/song song development, performance aspects. I can't recommend viewing this highly enough for the songwriter. A trailer for the program can be found - Keep the tissues handy and be inspired...! Andy
  12. Some really good song writing ideas here for getting started or developing your ideas from some really good songwriters... 5 starting points for songwriting Hmmmm, they make it sound so 'easy'! Andy
  13. Wow - many thanks Justin, Paul, SW and Mike - fabulously constructive feedback and I pretty much agree with all comments. :) Have re-written many lines and added a bridge - think it's ready for the composing phase now - which is bound to introduce a little more tidying up! Cheers guys, Andy Dream Catcher 2016 © Andrew LeFevre Verse 1 Sunlight glistens on the waves rolling in Sea salt spray on our lips Catch our breath, climb the grey granite cliffs Glimpse lazy fishing skiffs Pre Chorus So at peace Feeling free Rediscovering you and me Chorus 1 This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, blue This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, true This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, you Verse 2 Breathing deeply in the cool ocean air There’s a wild wilderness here No stampeding herds of cars No street lights blind the stars Pre Chorus So at peace Feeling free Rediscovering you and me Chorus 2 This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, blue This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, true This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, you Verse 3 Seabirds calling in the blue overhead Timeless cries haunt the sky Ridge soaring masters they wheel and glide Oh to feel the way they fly Pre Chorus So at peace Feeling free Rediscovering you and me Chorus 3 This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, blue This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, true This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, you Bridge x2 It’s so simple Oh, this is where to live, forgive Just live, live, live Pre Chorus Chorus Tag (= repeat bridge & fade)
  14. [Updated changes added] Here's an intended wistful 'mood' lyric - intended for the weary traveller who finds peace in an unspoilt wildlife paradise somewhere and just wants to retreat out of the rat race. Does it succeed? - any comments/suggestions welcomed. Thanks, Andy Dream Catcher 2016 © Andrew LeFevre Verse 1 Sunlight glistens on the waves rolling in Sea salt spray on our lips Catch our breath, climb the grey granite cliffs Glimpse lazy fishing skiffs Pre Chorus So at peace Feeling free Rediscovering you and me Chorus 1 This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, blue This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, true This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, you Verse 2 Breathing deeply in the cool ocean air There’s virgin wilderness here No stampeding herds of cars No street lights blind the stars Pre Chorus So at peace Feeling free Rediscovering you and me Chorus 2 This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, blue This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, true This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, you Verse 3 Seabirds calling in the blue overhead Timeless cries haunt the sky Ridge soaring masters they wheel and glide Oh to feel the way they fly Pre Chorus So at peace Feeling free Rediscovering you and me Chorus 3 This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, blue This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, true This place is a dream catcher, a dream catcher, you Bridge x2 It’s so simple Oh, this is where to live, forgive Just live, live, live Pre Chorus Chorus Tag (= repeat bridge & fade)
  15. SW - I liked the first verse and it's nice surprise at the end line! Made me want to read more... You paint a rather depressed picture of what should be a great event for most people. I think you can get away with this (i.e. the listener wont select "next" on his play list) if you can make the verse and chorus slightly comical and give him some hope in the bridge which imho needs a re-write to play up the positive side. Some comments below - just imho Good luck with it! Cheers, Andy