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jonie

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About jonie

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  • Birthday 21/03/54

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    http://lyricadia.com/jonie-hajduk

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    Reading, UK

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  1. I can see why you might be reluctant to compose this. It sounds written more for the writer to say than the listener to hear. Writing can be very cathartic and I have experienced the benefit of it myself so would never knock the exercise of undertaking it. But hey, we have our own troubles to wade in. A lure is often needed to get us to wade in the troubles of others. A clever hook, a memorable or inspirational line, a unique way of describing the troubles, a glimmer of light (you provide) at the end of a long dark tunnel, accessible to sufferers of their own demons and the unkindness of life. I have no suggestions unless you were willing to rewrite it to appeal to listeners looking to not only identify or commiserate with the plight of the writer/singer but take away something more than his/her expression of pain and sadness.
  2. My heart aches. I was praying for her treatment to go well followed by a full recovery. I am still praying for her and her family. I know I haven't commented prior to this, but it wasn't because of any lack of concern. Sometimes I just don't know how to help, except to offer prayers and positive thoughts. Please tell her to hang in there. Hope isn't a last resort, it's the light the miracle rides in on. Thank you for keeping us up to date, Kim.
  3. I think this would make for a good songwriting prompt. Someone provides a hook everyone else has to write a lyric to. It's sort of how this place does things. As a contestant, if you like what it resulted in, you've won. It doesn't get any better than that. There may be some ethical constraints surrounding this sort of thing when you're playing in the stratosphere. At the level we reside in? Not so much. Show him yours and he might show you his. Congratulate each other on a job well done and move on.
  4. I'll admit that my interest in participating here has waned considerably and as other interests have occupied my time, I haven't participated at all in almost a year. Though I can't see myself ever being anywhere near as involved as I once was, I find your idea of a prompts and songwriting exercises forum compelling and worthwhile and will keep an eye out for it.
  5. Happy Birthday!

  6. No, just once - The 3rd non-contestant voter was MikeB. Sorry about that.
  7. Without further ado, the winners are: First Place Neal K No Step 2nd Place iggy Flesh and Blood 3rd Place fabkebab This Phone Congratulations to the winners and a huge thank you to the 3 non-contestant voters, Mikey2, kimberlyinnc and MikeB The detailed scoring is as follows:
  8. HATE IN THE STREETS It's holy rollers Shoulder to shoulder Thinking their soldiers Hate in the streets Hate in the streets Judging all the time Another crossed line Saying its a crime Hate in the streets Hate in the streets Calling in the troops Turning loop de loops From the brutes to the dupes Hate in the streets Hate in the streets Ma'a as-salaama Goes another bomber Blame it on the Mama Hate in the streets Hate in the streets There's hate in the streets Divide and repeat Hate in the streets Hate in the streets Hate in the streets What we gonna do Down to me and you Gotta break thru This Hate in the streets
  9. Flesh and Blood Verse 1 Sun comes up and the sun goes down Put another quarter in the merry-go-round Everybody thinking that they're in the lead All the painted ponies going just the same speed But someday soon I'm gonna break free from this crazy running round, my pony and me riding open meadows under summer skies far from the spinning of these make believe lives We'll be riding .......................running so free running in sweet meadows ...... my little pony and me Verse 2 Buzzing Neon colors, whirling bright and clean Thundering calliope , the perfect machine All around, the flashing lights are keepin' us blind The brass ring's the only thing on anyone's mind I'm gonna' run free , bust out of this race this up and down riding, while we're staying in place My flesh and blood pony ..breathing fast and free Sunshine's surely waiting ... for my pony and me We'll be riding .......running so free Running in sweet meadows ....... my little pony and me Verse 3 "Step right up" I hear the barker say "You know that If you want it, you're gonna haf'ta play" But once that ride has started it's never gonna stop spinning round in circles till all the riders drop My pony jumps the fences, and we never look back finally free from that endless track I can feel him shiver, his eyes open wide waking from the dream ... shaking off all these lies And we're riding .......running so free We're are running in sweet meadows ...... my little pony and me
  10. Darkness Floods My Valley V: Crushed beneath my sorrow Spirit shattered deep Pressure holds the future Silence dares I sleep Darkness floods my valley Morning is broken I’m staring into emptiness Breathless Frozen V2: Thrust into love’s absence Hunger dies inside Hatred fills the vacuum Memories bleed with pride Darkness floods my valley Twilight is severed I’m slipping into heaviness Hopeless Withered B: You suffocate me Eliminate me I’ll find peace In the blackness Once released From this madness Refrain: Darkness floods my valley Passion has no reason I’m falling into endlessness Helpless Beaten V3: Pushed beyond illusion Fighting reckless whim Begging for the ending Ready to give in Darkness floods my valley My spirit is grieving I’m fading into nothingness Lifeless Kneeling
  11. Love’s Respite Verse 1 Traveling on worn tires and prayers Following Freedom’s Silver Star Has a way of peeling back the layers To reveal who we really are Verse 2 Night’s reflections fill me with sorrow Memory’s flames begin to grow Jagged lines in my rearview mirror Channel a river’s flow Bridge There’s a spot where love is planted Where Freedom’s flag is raised Where peace is found and rest is granted And love lies silent in the grave Verse 3 Five hundred miles of road between us Been a while since I’ve gone that far A tank of gas, a few hundred dollars And Libby’s old blue car
  12. No Step (V1) She was too young to remember much of anything When I gave her mother that wedding ring It was just the two of them living alone I kinda married them both and we made us a home So she don’t know a time when I wasn’t there Or remember that pretty little dress she wore The day I swore… (C1) There’d be no step: I’d be her father We might not be blood, but she’d be my daughter No promises made, no words were spoken But that bond could never be broken (V2) There were skinned knees and braces, Barbies and bikes Ballet lessons and back country hikes I helped dress her cat and I fixed broken toys And listened to troubles about homework and boys Sometimes I worried; most times I prayed And when people called me her step-dad I said, forget that… (C2) There was no step, I was her father We might not be blood, but she was my daughter No promises made, no words were spoken But that bond can never be broken (Bridge) It’s thirty-seven steps down the aisle to the alter I counted them yesterday Thirty-seven steps that I walk beside her Before l give her away, Now she lifts her veil and I wipe away a tear As she kisses my cheek and whispers in my ear…. (C3) There is no step, you are my father And I’m so proud to say that I am your daughter Today I make a promise, and vows will be spoken. But our bond will never be broken No, our bond will never be broken
  13. Apples Don't Fall Very far From the Tree (vs) He locked up my pop back when I was 13 Now that wiley old cop has put the handcuffs on me He threw me in the cell, and as he jangled the keys He said "Apples don't fall very far from the tree" My wife and my son had to pack up and leave I guess a life on the run ain't all it's cracked up to be Sent an eMail today I hope that she'll let him read What I've been meanin' to say, I wish my Dad had told me (ch) Apples don't fall very far from the tree So take after your Mom, and don't be following me Don't ever tackle the law. Don't let the cycle repeat Apples don't fall very far from the tree I thought my father was strong, I thought my mother was weak I saw her soldiering on, I saw him drop to his knees 'Though I knew it was wrong, I followed his lead Apples don't fall very far from the tree (ch) Apples don't fall very far from the tree So take after your Mom, and don't be following me Don't you tackle the law. Don't let the cycle repeat Apples don't fall very far from the tree (vs) You take the lead from your Dad, But my boy would swing that around. He took a seed that was bad, And made it spring from the ground (bridge) (He showed me) apples can shine, and apples are sweet! And an apple can roll out where the sun sets it free! If they ever re-write life's rules, I'll give 'em one to delete "Apples don't fall very far from the tree" So go on - pull up those rules, double-click, press "Delete" Where it says "Apples don't fall very far from the tree"
  14. Falling Star V1 Shining in the world's eyes Is so much to lose If striking lightning's trying to light you up in the news V2 Refining incandescence You've been known for years To be reclining in the lining of the atmosphere C Every 5 minutes they say A star has had its' day Watch it go...there it goes Another falling star Watch it go...there it goes Another falling star B Stars I liked seeing, To get a twinkling feeling, A 'Far away' to believe in. Gazed at you so many times Wishing I was in your sky... C Every 5 minutes they say A star has had its' day Watch it go...there it goes Another falling star Watch it go...there it goes Another falling star OC The end of an empire In bright Nova fire Watch it go...there it goes Another falling star Watch it go...there it goes Another falling star
  15. Christmas make it home tonight (Vs) Paw prints fading blowing snow Children crying please come home Wind chilled faces frozen toes Christmas make it home tonight Sun is dropping sky turns black Children praying lost your tracks Flashlight dimming must turn back Christmas make it home tonight (Ch) Christmas make it home tonight For belly rubs and loving kisses Christmas make it home tonight For playful dreams and doggy wishes (Vs) Weather turning snow again Children missing their old friend Hoping for a happy end Christmas make it home tonight Muffled barking far away Children yelling Ha! Hurray! Christmas jumping found her way Christmas made it home tonight (Ch) Christmas made it home tonight For belly rubs and loving kisses Christmas made it home tonight For playful dreams and doggy wishes