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Maia Knight

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About Maia Knight

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    Muse In Training
  • Birthday April 28

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  • Gender
    Female
  • Location
    Toronto, Canada
  • Interests
    Songwriting, Soccer, Theatre, Politics

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  • Lyricist, Composer or Both?
    Lyrics
  • Musical Influences?
    Taylor Swift, Charlie Puth

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  1. Maia Knight

    Gone Gone Gone

    I love the rhythm of this song, overall I think this is really well written. I have one suggestion though, on the gone line what would it sound like if you wrote, "Now I'm gone. Gone, Gone, Gone. Instead of just the 3 gone's repeated?
  2. Thank you guys for all of your feedback so far, it has been very useful, I really appreciate it. In a previous version of this post the title of this song was "You can't, I can't," after getting feedback I have changed it to "Forbidden Crush Song." I am still working on incorporating all of your feedback into the new version but I wanted to show you what I had now. I have cut it down quite a bit and included a link of me singing it (the singing isn't great) so you can get a feel for the rhythm I am going for. https://soundcloud.com/maiak12/forbidden-crush/s-QPB5H Forbidden Crush Song I stood there, I saw you across the room -> I stand here, I see you across the room I try my best to play it cool, act natural Your words, the look in your eyes, they play in my mind I just don’t know what to do -> I am hypnotized by you This is immoral -> This ain't a love song This is so wrong -> More like forbidden crush song I aint a party girl, I’m just a sporty girl, so why do I feel so mixed up? Chorus: I want you to come here and kiss me and say that you love me, I’d melt in your arms, the world around us would disappear But you can’t and I can’t What would that say about you? So here i am, crying while writing bout you You stand there, you see me across the room You smile and approach me, tread lightly “Oh hey! How are you doing? It’s been so long, since we got to talk” I really love you *things are great! how are you?* (spoken) This is aint a love song More like forbidden crush song This is what I’d want you to know Chorus: I want you to come here and kiss me and say that you love me I’d melt in your arms, the world around us would disappear But you can’t and I can’t What would that say about you? So here i am, crying while writing bout you I leave town, try to begin again I wonder if you miss me, like I miss you -> Wrapped up in life, you slip out of mind Time goes on, I almost forget about you I stand here, I spot you across the street, you don’t see me I smile and approach you, be normal “Hey you! Oh my god it’s you! How are you doing? I haven’t seen you in so long” I hold my breath, I feel my heart race, it’s been awhile since I felt like this “It’s been forever, can we go for coffee or something? To catch up, after all this time” This is a love song Ain’t a forbidden crush song This is what I thought about years ago Chorus: I want you to come here and kiss me and say that you love me I’d melt in your arms, the world around us would disappear Now you can and I can We finally got our chance So here I am, smiling while writing bout you So here I am, smiling while writing bout you ( or alternatively this lyric instead of the last chorus This is a love song Ain’t a forbidden crush song Years ago I thought I wanted you to Chorus: Come here and kiss me and say that you love me I’d melt in your arms, the world around us would disappear But it turns out, your offer Is much better than I could ever ask It was worth the wait, you were worth the wait We finally got our chance So here I am, smiling while writing bout you So here I am, crying while writing bout you )
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