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  1. Joe Vicas

    World of a child

    These are very nice lyrics. They portray a nice vision. But in my view, they are simply too nostalgic. I can’t comment on what little girls pretend to be, but I do know that most little boys pretend to be Spiderman, or the Hulk, or Iron Man these days. They are more into superheroes and I don’t know any that pretend to be knights fighting dragons. Your representation just seems to be a little too stereotypical of some past time. That’s not a bad thing, but I can’t see a lot of people, especially those with children that spend their time on computers and phones, relating to it.
  2. Joe Vicas

    Seems Like Only Yesterday

    Here is my first revision with audio. I concentrated on what seemed to be the consensus points offered by the members. The changes are obvious. There is not much left from the original version. When you listen to the audio, PLEASE remember that it’s a bare bones one-take track provided just so you can evaluate the lyric construction in a more meaningful way. I screwed up the guitar once or twice but this is just a rough sketch not meant to be a finished project. I don’t even know what the title of this song is going to be. 🙂 Once again, I would appreciate any and all comments. It’s obvious that I value them when you compare this version to the first one. I Recall Yesterday/Promising Vision V1 I recall yesterday It would not stop raining I recall yesterday Clouds of despair were draining V2 I recall yesterday I could not feel the sun I recall yesterday Emotions were entirely numb Chorus Then you drifted into my life In a soft collision Looking deep into your eyes Ignited a promising vision V3 I recall yesterday The winds of change blew gently I recall yesterday A whispered voice so friendly V4 I recall yesterday Warmth made me feel better I recall yesterday When we came together (Instrumental break) Chorus You drifted into my life In a soft collision Looking deep into your eyes Ignited a promising vision I recall yesterday http://soundcloud.com/joe-vicas/iry/s-yz3Iy
  3. Joe Vicas

    Seems Like Only Yesterday

    DinoRider - Thank you very much! I will check it out.
  4. Joe Vicas

    Here I Go Again

    I think the suggestions above are pretty insightful and the only comment I have to add is to say that the line "Your playing is way cool" jumped out at me for some reason. I'm thinking it's something a kid might say rather than an adult. I really like the twist at the end.
  5. Joe Vicas

    Alexa

    I'm one of those people where initially I was confused. When the light bulb went off, I thought this was a terrific idea and really liked it! My only comment would be that the line "I gave you life" came across to me at first as Alexa being a daughter, as someone else suggested above. Other than that, I think the song is very unique in a good way.
  6. Joe Vicas

    Seems Like Only Yesterday

    Thank you all for your feedback. Excellent suggestions that show the song needs a lot more work. This is the first time I ever posted a first draft attempt at lyrics and in the time between when I posted it and your comments, things already began to look different to me. I will be reworking this substantially and what happens as it progresses is anyone’s guess. :-) I do want to try to get rid of that “cliché” feeling and whether it is okay or not, I don’t like the idea that there may even be a hint of copyright infringement or plagiarism. Just to clear up any confusion, I did mean the word “homely” to mean “unattractive” but now I like the suggested “ugly” better. I do have one question. Is there a site that members use to host mp3 files so they can be shared here? I have a YouTube account, but I don’t want to post “work in progress” songs there. I don’t want them to be viewable by “the world”, just the people here. I do think posting a simple track where you can hear the melody would give a better idea of what the song is like. Again, thank you all for your comments!
  7. Joe Vicas

    Seems Like Only Yesterday

    This is a song I’m currently working on. It has a melody and the words all fit nicely but I’d like to hear what this community thinks of the bare lyrics. Any comments or suggestions are welcome. SEEMS LIKE ONLY YESTERDAY V1 Seems like only yesterday I felt forsaken Seems like only yesterday My self-worth was shaken V2 Seems like only yesterday I was lonely Seems like only yesterday I felt so homely Chorus Then you came into my life And picked up the shattered pieces You wandered out of the night To give my life new meaning V3 Seems like only yesterday It was raining Seems like only yesterday My sanity was waning V4 Seems like only yesterday I could not feel the sun Seems like only yesterday I thought about buying a gun Chorus Then you came into my life And picked up the shattered pieces You wandered out of the night To give my life new meaning Bridge I was such a broken man Until you became my friend How you did it, I can’t explain But you made me happy again (Instrumental section) V5 Seems like only yesterday My heart was opened Seems like only yesterday Feelings could finally be spoken V6 Seems like only yesterday Things changed for the better Seems like only yesterday Since we came together Chorus You came into my life And picked up the broken pieces You wandered out of the night To give my life new meaning Seems like only yesterday
  8. Joe Vicas

    (Another music video) OXIDANE - MS. UNDINE

    Terrific music, beautiful visuals, wonderful effects. Outstanding. I'd love to know what initially inspired this.
  9. I found this to be really interesting. It held my attention from start to finish. Nice job!
  10. Joe Vicas

    Selfie Queen

    Thank You very much!
  11. Joe Vicas

    Selfie Queen

    This will be the last completed video I post until I finish a new song. This one is recent. I wanted to write about a topical subject and I thought this fit the bill. I also thought that even if guys hate the song, they will probably like the slideshow. 🙂 Comments on song or video are welcome. As a BTW, if you’re curious, just go to YouTube and search ‘Joe Vicas” and you’ll see a whole bunch of music videos to watch if you are so inclined. Thank You. SELFIE QUEEN V1 She has a face that rivals Helen of Troy Her photos can’t be seen enough by internet boys She smiles, she winks, she laughs, and she pouts Guys on their devices eat their hearts out Chorus She’s the stuff that fuels passionate dreams She’s an internet Selfie Queen V2 How many likes can she get In comparison to younger nymphets? Photos of herself every hour of the day Builds her self-esteem in a glorified way Chorus She’s the stuff that fuels passionate dreams She’s an internet Selfie Queen Bridge She has lots of online friends She’s a big sensation She has lots of online friends Who like digital flirtation V3 She’s a viral thread, a must see meme Guys are left bursting at the seam Dozens of comments verify She’s the apple of the internet’s eye Chorus She’s the stuff that fuels passionate dreams She’s an internet Selfie Queen
  12. Tom - Ah!!! That clarifies it. I was aware of the phrase, but confused as to how you used it. Thank You. BTW, I looked at your YouTube channel and I also really liked your song, "The Real World" very much.
  13. Wow! I really liked this song a lot. I've wanted to write a song exactly like this but brother, you said everything I wanted to say better than I could have. The thing I love about it is that it's "timeless". You could have written this yesterday morning and everything in it is still valid. I do have one question. I don't understand the line "Bullshit walks but nobody's walking still". Sorry, but I just don't comprehend the point that's trying to be made. Putting the credits on the screen when there were no lyrics was very creative. I wish I had thought of doing that. As far as I'm concerned, "Bravo!"
  14. Joe Vicas

    Reach Out

    I love the concept and the song is nice but I had a hard time trying to listen to the song while reading the quotes posted in the video. It was simply too jarring for me. I honestly think it might have been a better idea to show the lyrics of the song with photos rather than quotes, no matter how good they are, I think they take away attention from the song itself.
  15. Joe Vicas

    "Lost Upon The Deep"

    I thought this was a very moving and emotional song. The only thing that just bothered me just a little, just enough to make me notice, was that in some places, the music overwhelmed the vocal and sometimes the bottom end was too strong. Other than that, I thought the vocal was terrific and loved the bell ringing appropriately. A very nice song.
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