Charlie.p.smith2

Hey, so I've been working on the song a little and have the first draft done. This is it. Any feedback is much appreciated. She opened her eyes. Saw the note and smiled. It read, see you tomorrow. She waited for that day But tomorrow never came. Trapped and hopeless she'd done it again. Them words they stick, Like ice and a fire, that burns deep down, deep down inside her. She's losing grip; she take another sip, to numb the flames, to numb the pain. "I'll see you tomorrow" × 2 When the pain is gone, and the deed is done. The bottle lies empty, last pill in her hand, she's going now, she can barely stand. "I'll see you tomorrow" × 2 *Instrumental* Them words they stick, Like ice and a fire, that burns deep down, deep down inside her. She's losing grip; she take another sip, to numb the flames, to numb the pain. "I'll see you tomorrow" × 2 When the pain is gone, and the deed is done. There's no going back, last pill in her hand. Her eyes, they close and her soul drifts away. Back to sleep, no note, no pain. "I'll see you tomorrow" *Much softer* "I'll see you tomorrow"

This is a cute song, I can imagine a sweet melody to this would be great.

Hey, this is my first ever attempt at lyrics. I haven't completed the song yet, just wanted some feedback on the first verse. She opened her eyes read a note by her side It says "see you tomorrow" She waited for that day But tomorrow never came Her smile lost in her memories.