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  1. Zritch1015

    Beneficial

    I dig the input it’s very insightful, didn’t put a lot of thought into this one just kind of went with it but I’ll consider your thoughts and work on it 👍
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    Beneficial

    BENEFICIAL: V1: No strings attached signed into contract in the moment When the feelings came into play our goal was to disown them Now you say these words of love I carry the burden It wasn’t ever meant to be I know for certain Ch: This deal was just to meet our needs But factor in some jealousy Show me what it’s like to fight a war It’s not about you and me Or anything that we could be None of this to me is worth fighting for V2: I think I’m catching on as you list off your demands Meeting both my parents going out and holding hands We had agreed upon it not coming this far Failed by design I should have seen it from the start Ch: This deal was just to meet our needs But factor in some jealousy Show me what it’s like to fight a war It’s not about you and me Or anything that we could be None of this to me is worth fighting for Bridge: Ironic, bubonic Love is a disease I won’t contract Platonic, moronic When I say no I’m put under attack V3: Cast your words to burn the bridge I swear you’ll regret you did And if you try to return You’ll be the one to get burned Ch: This deal was just to meet our needs But factor in some jealousy Show me what it’s like to fight a war It’s not about you and me Or anything that we could be None of this to me is worth fighting for
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    Heaven or Hell

    @James L Kleinheksel your advice was very insightful and helped a bunch. Here’s what I came up with for a first revision: HEAVEN OR HELL: V1: In a case of two extremes Devoid of any subtlety A never ending struggle between A lifeless mind or infinite energy Never caught in the middle ground Bouncing back and forth forever Will there ever be peace within Can I bring my two worlds together Ch: Now I need some clarity A way to get these thoughts aligned Always moving back and forth While I smile and pretend I’m fine Today I may rule the world Tomorrow I will dig my grave Heaven or hell it seems I can’t find the calm in between V2: Every day consistently There’s two voices inside my head One always building me up The other telling me I’m better dead Listening to what each has to say Controls the outcome of each day I don’t know which voice I’ll hear When one speaks up the other disappears Ch: Now I need some clarity A way to get these thoughts aligned Always moving back and forth While I smile and pretend I’m fine Today I may rule the world Tomorrow I will dig my grave Heaven or hell it seems I can’t find the calm in between Bridge: Depressive mania A walking contradiction None of this makes sense But that’s part of the affliction All I can do is try my best And carry this weight on my chest Move forward and leave the rest behind Every day a new challenge in my mind How will I face the day today V3: I can pretend that I have control The damage has taken a visible toll Always question when faced with doubt If some things are worth living without Could it be I am insane Is all of this my fault to blame Filling up inside with so much shame This illness that I cannot contain It’s always one or the other Ch: Now I need some clarity A way to get these thoughts aligned Always moving back and forth While I smile and pretend I’m fine Today I may rule the world Tomorrow I will dig my grave Heaven or hell it seems I can’t find the calm in between
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    Walkin' Money--Final, I think!

    I really dig this one, the rhyme scheme works amazingly and flows well, the repetition in the verses with the little changes is nice. The last line in the bridge struck me as anti climatic and I feel like it could pay off more to revise that but otherwise I am a fan
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    Heaven or Hell

    HEAVEN OR HELL: V1: In a case of two extremes Devoid of subtlety A constant battle between A lifeless mind or infinite energy Never caught in the middle ground Bouncing back and forth forever Will there ever be peace within Can I bring my two worlds together Ch: I need some clarity Or a way to get these thoughts aligned Moving back and forth While I smile and pretend I’m fine I either rule the world Or dig halfway to my grave Heaven or hell it seems I can’t find a calm in between V2: Sometimes it feels like There’s two voices inside my head One always building me up The other telling me I’m better dead The day I realized And understood what they meant I came one step closer To independence from them Ch: I need some clarity Or a way to get these thoughts aligned Moving back and forth While I smile and pretend I’m fine I either rule the world Or dig halfway to my grave Heaven or hell it seems I can’t find a calm in between Bridge: Depressive mania A walking contradiction Maybe it doesn’t make sense Maybe that’s the affliction All I can do is my best With this weight on my chest Leave behind the rest Each and every day a brand new test How will I face the day today V3: Sometimes I like to think I can control my thinking Until I fill up with doubt The symptoms I can’t figure out I could be insane I could be inhumane The illness can’t be contained Now I understand my brain It’s one or the other Ch: I need some clarity Or a way to get these thoughts aligned Moving back and forth While I smile and pretend I’m fine I either rule the world Or dig halfway to my grave Heaven or hell it seems I can’t find a calm in between
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    How love dies

    Thanks for the input, Im attempting different styles as I usually write a song without a chorus but I can see how without the summary and too many verses it gets repetitive
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    Screen addiction

    Really like the topic of this lyric, the way you phrase things flows well and it demonstrates how you mean well by trying to break the addiction. It’s easy to visualize and feel things from your perspective the way it’s written, well done
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    How love dies

    HOW LOVE DIES: Intro: Take me back to the beginning To the moments when my heart felt something more The memories don’t sustain the pleasure And looking back I see it’s nothing anymore V1: We were young but thought we were mature Because I had my life together and because you were a mother But in our brains we were both insecure You can’t love someone else if you hate yourself When we met it was bad timing We couldn’t fix each other though we kept trying Fake a smile with some false words But the look in our eyes shows we both hurt This is not what we wanted it to be V2: As time passed we grew ever closer Taking on the role of husband and father While I tried my best to take the weight off your chest I gave it everything I had My time was spent caring for This woman I adored, and her daughter Until I ran out of energy And realized I wasn’t happy I wasn’t living for me V3: The fights were rough and left us scathed The burns upon my skin tell the story Scars that never heal they just exist Just do my best to live with them I never gave up on the hope An imaginary light shining from above When darkness and confusion was all I saw Any hope that was left is gone I’m lost and don’t know what to do V4: it didn’t work, I think we’ve failed I’m giving up, this ship has sailed I’m moving on, still looking back Thinking about all we had That I let go This is so disappointing Because I thought that we were meant for something Why do you always try to keep in touch I want to be alone and you should leave me as such So now I’m gone and you want my attention You’ll never get it directly But I still think about the life I used to live And pretend that I was always happy It all seems better when you’re looking back Truth is it’s just post breakup retrospect Outro: Take me back to the beginning To the moments when my heart felt something more The memories don’t sustain the pleasure And looking back I see it’s nothing anymore
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    The Same

    THE SAME: V1 Mesmerized by lucid dreams Contemplating what they mean Close my eyes it seems I'm falling into sleep Waking brings another chore Another day, another bore I just can't figure out How to break the cycle Ch Repetition fills my mind The same routine The same old life I know I need to make a change I'm waiting on the same old things Waiting for my time to begin can't go on another day Knowing everything stays the same V2 It appears fate has left me in the dust I am forgotten, I'm stuck inside this rut I would give anything to break free Won't somebody help me I believed things happened for a reason Why can I not find mine I have nothing to show for my wasted fucking time Ch Repetition fills my mind The same routine The same old life I know I need to make a change I'm waiting on the same old things Waiting for my time to begin can't go on another day Knowing everything stays the same Bridge It's driving me mad I'm going insane Lost in my head No one else to blame I let it slip Out of my sight I only find My peace at night While I'm asleep Nothing can hurt me And when I dream I escape reality Ch bridge Repetition fills my mind The same bullshit The same goodbyes Why is it everything must end I'm wishing for A better life Where everything will be alright But wishing is how I got here in the first place Ch Repetition fills my mind The same routine The same old life I know I need to make a change I'm waiting on the same old things Waiting for my time to begin can't go on another day Knowing everything stays the same
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    Baby Bird

    Although I can’t picture what the age and story of the person singing this is, I really enjoyed the rhyme scheme and flow of the lyrics
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    Ungrateful

    Very good input, I agree and will have to take another look into it
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    Ungrateful

    Hey everybody, could use some help finishing up this piece that’s got me stumped. Any critiques are helpful! contains swear words UNGRATEFUL: Maybe it’s okay if you’re unhappy Maybe it’s okay if you’re in pain I can’t believe what you’re saying to me It’s like wires are crossed in your brain I never would’ve thought That you feel like you deserve Everything I brought as yours Like you rule my world Never been so confused Question my own sanity The way you twist my words And hold them against me You don’t own me It’s funny how you think that you’re entitled And gain leverage by using your child Sunken so low like a bottom feeder Hateful disgraceful you are ungrateful Remembering to breathe so I don’t lose my temper Your reasoning is fucked and I know better I won’t waste my time on a never ending loss The end wasn’t worth the cost My investment will not be returned All in all it’s just another bridge burned It’s funny how you think that you’re entitled And gain leverage by using your child Sunken so low like a bottom feeder Hateful disgraceful you are ungrateful You are ungrateful Time I will never get back Trying to reason with a lunatic Your heart is barely beating You have no future your life has no meaning It’s funny how you think that you’re entitled And gain leverage by using your child Sunken so low like a bottom feeder Hateful disgraceful you are ungrateful It’s funny how you think that you’re entitled And gain leverage by using your child Sunken so low like a bottom feeder Hateful disgraceful you are ungrateful Look at me now I’m better than ever Look at you now Your free ride is severed Look at me now My lifeblood is flowing Look at you now Your real self is showing Look at me now Look at you now Look at me now Look at you so fucking ungrateful
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    Damage Done

    That’s good, I like the dark themes but I feel like it could use another verse or even a bridge with more lyrics for how many times the chorus plays
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    Narcissist

    Thank you!
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    Narcissist

    Self righteous and justified Invalidation is control in disguise I’m not out of my mind Just made to feel it by the look in your eyes Hey, narcissist No longer will I live to serve Your purpose Or die in your name You, narcissist You’re dead to me and all your lies Are worthless They fall on deaf ears The moment that I realized this was wrong I should have left but I played along To see how far you’d go, I didn’t know It’s pathological from the way you’ve grown Hey, narcissist No longer will I live to serve Your purpose Or die in your name You, narcissist You’re dead to me and all your lies Are worthless They fall on deaf ears You said you’d never be like her The one who raised you with an iron fist and fear You claimed you’re different all along I thought you were strong but I was wrong You’re just like the monster that raised you Hey, narcissist No longer will I live to serve Your purpose Or die in your name You, narcissist You’re dead to me and all your lies Are worthless They fall on deaf ears Hey, narcissist No longer will I live to serve Your purpose Or die in your name You, narcissist You’re dead to me and all your lies Are worthless They fall on deaf ears
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