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Rerry33

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About Rerry33

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    Terry Kelly

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    Calgary, Alberta
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    According to my ex is building patio decks to high. So this is why I write.

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  • Lyricist, Composer or Both?
    I play guitar and write lyrics.
  • Musical Influences?
    My father

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  1. I Didn't Do

    Thanks Kerry that's good advice, I will use your suggestion brings clarity Tks man!
  2. I Didn't Do

    Here I'm am playing the part of a fool Try to hold on to what we had but it's no use Was it those secrets we shared Or was it the evening glare That made it hard to see Why it is you cry late at night when you think that I'm asleep Chorus But I said I would catch you if you were to fall And I would come running if you were to call I told you I would never Ever lose sight of you But I didn't do what you wanted me too No I didn't do what you wanted me too Is it love or hate Can we separate the two I was on elevated ground but emotionally drowning with you Every time I put my heart on the line it gets torn in too I'm gonna take this stance for go this chance of getting hurt by you Chorus But I said I would catch you if you were to fall And I would come running if you were to call I told you I would never Ever lose sight of you But I didn't do what you wanted me too No I didn't do what you wanted me too Even though your miles away I still don't know what to say to you It's alway's something different each day I'm finding it hard to know just what too do Although I try time and time again I can't win, will you ever let me in Chorus x2 But I said I would catch you if you were to fall And I would come running if you were to call I told you I would never Ever lose sight of you But I didn't do what you wanted me too No I didn't do what you wanted me too
  3. No Super Powers

    As always James you have an eye for the details! I rewrote the song and have a look at that and tell me where that can be improved also. I like how you break it down. I appreciate the time you take to critique my lyric's you make them better.
  4. No Super Powers

    You read my mind buddy! I feel it still needs some minor tweaking but it's a better version. I wrote this yesterday and with all the advice I received its overall theme changed. You took away how I was wandering around and focused my attention too sticking to the powers and not going off course with fillers. Thanks
  5. No Super Powers

    I did a rewrite with the suggestion I was given. Let me know what you think!
  6. One In A Million

    I like these lyrics. I got a power chord kind of feel from it. Had to read the chorus a few times to find a smooth feel to it but that's me not your Lyric, I enjoyed the read but I enjoy all your posts. Awesome Kerry I'm a fan.
  7. Tennessee

    Hey James, I like these lyrics although it could be shortened a little, nothing serious just less explaining in the courses. All the perils of dependency And a source which never ends I was hopin’ no one would see Too many things I can't defend Still the days keep stacking up And the past is close behind My lawyer has a weak rebuff Only one thing on my mind i feel I still get the same message with out those line. I really enjoyed the flow and the imagery that I visioned while reading this. Good job man and I don't mean to offend.
  8. Love Hotel

    HI Dani! I like the general idea of the lyric but I agree with other opinion's that it seems forced. With a little tweaking I feel you can turn this in to sometime very interesting. Your in good hands here, most muser's care and will give you good advice to help you develop your skills as a lyricist. They've helped me so much and I'm better for it. Keep up the writing I look forward to your next one Tks Terry
  9. No Super Powers

    Rewrite third edition I could never fly without a pair of wings Walking on water just ain't my thing I could try and climb Mount Everest Do all the things that you'd request I could try and be your Man of Steele But I could never lift an automobile I don't have the strength to pick up a car What alone throw the thing very far Chorus I'm not that guy who has all those Super Power's I always get wet whenever there's showers If Wonder Woman's is flying her invisible plane maybe I can have a talk with Bruce Wayne I don't have the power of green lantern's light I'm not ant man I can't shrink out of sight But you know there's one thing that I can do Is to be the hero that you always wanted me too I will never out run a speeding train Although I've tried time and time again I don't have eyes that can see trough you Mine can only see the things you want me too I don't have X-ray vision, none of that stuff You know I couldn't be that tough I'll try and do what all the hero's do Who spend their time saving girl's like you Chorus Im not that guy who all those has Super Power's I always get wet when ever there's showers If Wonder Woman is flying her invisible plane maybe I can have a talk with Bruce Wayne I don't have the power of Green Lanter's light I'm not Ant-man I can't shrink out of sight But you know there's one thing that I can do Is to be the hero that you always wanted me to Superman you know has his Kryptonite Green Lantern's weakness is yellow light I guess what it is I'm trying to say I'm not very super in any kind of way I could never be as speedy like the flash I couldn't even win a hundred meter dash I wouldn't make it not even half way But I'd keep on trying, getting stronger everyday Chorus x2 Im not that guy who has all these Super Power's I always get wet whenever there's shower If Wonder Woman's flying her invisible plane maybe I can have a talk with Bruce wayne I don't have the power of green lantern's light I'm not ant man I can't shrink out of sight But you know there's one thing that Ill always do Is to be the hero that you always want me to Copy right 2017
  10. Funeral of a war hero

    Great lyrics, very medalish I do believe. I get anger and pain from the lyrics and the story flows well. Keep it up .
  11. Exhale

    Hey Kerry I really like this, it reminds me of our lady peace. Good job man.
  12. Finding you

    Read it again, I've made some changes and tell me what you think Barneyboy. Thank you for going In depth on this lyric and giving me advice. Your time is valuable like everybody else's. I will use some of what you suggested. Thanks again fine sir.
  13. Finding you

    Your suggestions were dead on. The chorus wasn't originally part of that song. The second chorus was the original one and you picked up on that, that's amazing.
  14. Finding you

    Not at all, you confirmed the areas I thought about changing. I will revise it in the next few day.
  15. Punching Bag

    - Verse -It's the leftIt's the rightWho are making you mad - Who are causing you to fightChannel that anger all that rage uses it to break free of that cage It's the gaysIt's the straightsWho's causing all this pain? if you have a look in the mirrorSmiling there in vain - they clearly feel no shame Just a thought Mr! I very much enjoyed it. I agreed with Paul on the Race thing but that makes this piece a little edgy. If that's what you've set out to do then that's what you accomplished. Keep up the good work. Terry🎩🎩🎩 out of 5 lol
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