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Fi Wester

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Fi Wester last won the day on October 12 2017

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About Fi Wester

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    TX, USA
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    music, ceramics, literature, nature

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  1. Fi Wester

    You Asked

    I haven’t written in a long time, this is a first rusty attempt at getting back into lyrics. V1 Ooh, baby, don’t we match I got the hopeless and you bring the romance I’m not in love, I’m just an addict Thirsting for a hit of your paparazzi madness Chorus Hit the floor cause the bombs overhead Oh, they’d die to get to you before we get back to bed Wrap this up before tonight becomes a date with the dead One door, one breath, you asked, I said (repeat) V2 Hand in hand in hair Together always, together nowhere I’m not in love, it’s just a fever I’ll bring the nightmare cause you’re always the dreamer Chorus Hit the floor cause the bombs overhead Oh, they’d die to get to you before we get back to bed Wrap this up before tonight becomes a date with the dead One door, one breath, you asked, I said (repeat) Bridge I’m scared of my own sentiment Is this all pretend? I’m sorry I don’t trust me I don’t trust the way that this will end Chorus Hit the floor cause the bombs overhead Oh, they’d die to get to you before we get back to bed Wrap this up before tonight becomes a date with the dead One door, one breath, you asked, I said
  2. Fi Wester

    Kaleidoscope

    I like this a lot, it’s quite vague and your imagery opens the lyrics up to interpretation. It’s very poetic, I had a hard time picking out the meter. Would love to hear the song! Keep it up!
  3. Fi Wester

    SERTRALINE

    I really enjoy all the simile and metaphor in here. Nice work!
  4. Fi Wester

    Always Waiting

    Overall I enjoyed this lyric. I like the first verse as exposition to the rest of the piece. Just two nits: "loud guitar..." I'm not if "loud" really brings anything to the table in terms of characterizing the girl on stage. And the "I'm no Einstein" line threw me off a bit, it didn't seem to fit with the rest of the bridge. Otherwise, well done.
  5. Fi Wester

    All Unicorns & Rainbows

    I liked the original "fade me" line, I thought it went well with the next "I need darker colours" line. Darker made me think of stronger, which is the opposite of something that's faded. All in all, great job!
  6. Fi Wester

    The Population of Lonelyville

    I gave a high score on this in the contest, really liked the ending too!
  7. Fi Wester

    Thank God for Girlfriends

    Great work! I love it, but I do think the song would be stronger if the bridge came last, like the VVCVVCBCC format HoboSage suggested.
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  9. Fi Wester

    You You You

    I love this lyric and I think everyone knows someone like this. You have the perfect amount of humor in this piece and it’s an enjoyable read. Just one nit: the last line of the chorus is “How come everything is always you,” which sounds almost jealous, as if the narrator is saying “why are you so special.” I think some rewording might help clarify the narrator’s opinion on this person.
  10. Fi Wester

    Past the Grey

    Just updated it. Thank you all for the feedback.
  11. Fi Wester

    Kaleidoscope Baby

    Thanks. I was envisioning a rock and roll sound for this song, but I don’t have a melody yet.
  12. Fi Wester

    Past the Grey

    Thank you for your thoughts! This is really helpful and I will think about it carefully. I like your ideas a lot.
  13. Fi Wester

    Past the Grey

    Thank you for your input! Yes, I wrote this after I got past a time in my life that I thought I wouldn’t make through.
  14. Fi Wester

    Past the Grey

    I have a melody for this already. It's a short and simple song, almost like a lullaby. Edit: Thank you all for your feedback! Here's the second version. I tried to change the idea of the song to add another dimension to the message and make it less repetitive, see what you think. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Past the Grey I know where you've been I've seen it too the place where the sky is never blue but I, like you, can also say But you, like I, will also say "I walked past through the grey." The Earth moves far and life goes fast Yet these nights don't seem to pass But I, like you, can also say But you, like I, will also say "I walked past through the grey." Do you hear the music That pretty sound? It’s telling you to stick around So you, like I, can also say "I walked past through the grey." See those twinkling lights so far away? (this bridge is new) That’s the reason we’re going to stay Take my hand, join the parade Let’s go there, out of the grey The Earth moves far and life goes fast Yet these nights don't seem to pass But I, like you, can also say "I walked past the grey." Though these nights don't seem to pass We're here for each other, we'll make them go fast Till you and I, we both can say "We walked through the grey."
  15. Fi Wester

    Feeling you

    Great first post! One thing that confused me a bit was the way that the first verse has this aspect of the you breaking your lover's heart and wanting to fix that. Then it seemed to me that the second and third verse didn't have that and were almost backtracking to when you both were happy in love. And then the fourth verse and and bridge goes back to the idea of wanting to right the wrong the you've done. Maybe that's what you were going for, but it confused me, so you might want to rearrange your verses there. Just my opinion, take it or leave it. All in all, though, good job and congrats on your first post!
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