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    Writing Song Lyics - Listening to music

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  1. James L Kleinheksel

    I Got Blues

    Revised
  2. James L Kleinheksel

    Don't Need'em Anymore

    Hi Tongue-Tied, i think this is a great lyric. I love the imagery. I would like to offer a few suggestions. Chorus And my eyes can't see you like before I think that extra syllable would help and eliminate the exact rhyme even though it is used again . V 2 Like rhodium reduced to dross I think that it's important that this line makes sense. I I like the use of seldom used words and I like the fact that you are writing for yourself. Cheers, Jim
  3. James L Kleinheksel

    Crash To The Ground

    Hi Ty, Good to hear from you again. You are correct, I don't care that I came in last place again. On the other hand, I do have nine lyrics that were made into songs on the Kompoz website which were scrutinized brutally on Muse. I had the song, Winning, by Santana in mind when I wrote this. Try reading it to that melody. I believe that George from Kompoz could make this into a great tune the way it is now. It may need a little revision but I believe that it will work the way that it is written. I realize that most people don't understand my lyrics and that's fine. Also realize that I can't stand lyrics written about relationships. The idea has been done to death, many of the entries were done on this subject. If that's what is popular then I guess that I am so far out of touch with popular music that I can't relate. I suppose that I will reside by myself in the odd corner of lyric writing. i.e. I Got Blues. I like to wander far outside of the parameters of popular lyric writing. If you have any suggestions to improve this lyric please reply.. Thanks Ty
  4. James L Kleinheksel

    Crash To The Ground

    Revised Crash To The Ground James L Kleinheksel © Copyright 2018 Intro I was just having fun never meant any harm Grabbed my jacket and my good luck charm I think my good luck has again been found Just no way I can crash to the ground Friday Night I was out on the run With a lust for poker and a wild hair I broke away but it was all in fun It must be - I had a fever My girl left me there And I could not retrieve her But then again I thought I could win And all the fun I was having then Turned around and I lost my skin Now I’m back on the outside And I’m looking in Now I crashed to the ground My girl came back after I begged for hours I sold my watch, to buy her some flowers One of these days I’m gonna win There’s just no way I can go there again Ain’t gonna - crash to the ground I was just having fun But it all turned around I was up in the clouds Then I crashed to the ground My tainted luck Had again been found Every time I get close to winning Fate comes around And reminds me I’m sinning Never thought I could do it again Crash to the ground And all the fun I was having then Turned upside down And she left me again Then I crashed the ground Outro I was just having fun never meant any harm But soon found out It costs a leg and an arm One of these days I’m gonna win Ain’t no way that I’ll do it again Crash to the ground But now crashed to the ground I crashed to the ground I crashed to the ground Original Back On The Ground James L Kleinheksel © Copyright 2018 Intro I was just having fun never meant any harm Grabbed my jacket and my good luck charm There’s just no way that I’ll go there again Fall back on the ground Friday Night I was out on the run With a lust for poker and a wild hair I broke away but it was all in fun It must be - I had a fever My girl left me there And I could not retrieve her But then again I thought I could win And all the fun I was having then Turned around and I lost my skin Now I’m back on the outside And I’m looking in Now I’m back on the ground My girl came back after I begged for hours I sold my watch, to buy her some flowers One of these days I’m gonna win There’s just no way I can go there again Go back on the ground I was just having fun But it all turned around I was up in the clouds Then I crashed to the ground My tainted luck Had again been found Every time I get close to winning Fate comes around And reminds me I’m sinning Never thought I could do it again Fall back on the ground And all the fun I was having then Turned upside down And she left me again Now I’m back on the ground Outro I was just having fun never meant any harm But soon found out t costs a leg and an arm One of these days I’m gonna win There’s just no way I can go there again Fall back on the ground Now I’m back on the ground
  5. James L Kleinheksel

    I Got Blues

    Hi Ron99, malcom & John Kanickl, Thank you all very much for taking an interest in my lyrics. I have posted the revised version of the lyric. John, if you would like to offer more suggestions, I would be delighted to see them.
  6. James L Kleinheksel

    I Got Blues

    Hi UnitedByRhyme, Thank you very much for understanding and appreciating my lyric. I made one change, see if you notice, and tell me if you like it. Jim
  7. James L Kleinheksel

    I Got Blues

    Hi mick70, 9thStLine, Kuya & RepeatingZERO Thank you all for your comments. Mick70, no I don't think it would be too repetitive when composed and sung correctly. I realize that it's simple and appears to be easy to write, but in reality it took me a while to create the idea. 9thStLine, there is no message. Does there need to be a message? It is a song lyric, a form of expression. Kuya, The "i got blues" lines are not the strange point of view. It is in a few of the other lines. It is not intended to make sense, it's intended to be a gritty hillbilly rock tune. "Boring dreadful job", changed, thanks. "I was gave a million dollars", I wasn't going for proper grammar in this line, the extra syllable would have thrown of the flow of the melody in my opinion. As always, your opinion is valued and appreciated. Thank you for the kind words. RepeatingZero, Thank you very much for the high compliment. Many people don't get my lyrics, so it is always welcome news when someone can see past the written words and get a melody in their head. I tend to write lyrics which far from the norm. My rhyming schemes are often different from what is taught in lyric writing school, and I like to push it to the limit when writing. This particular lyric is simple but with the right melody and vocalist, I believe could be a real lively tune. I very much apologize for not reviewing the lyrics of others as I should. I have taken a new job which does not allow me much time for reviewing or even writing new lyrics. I Got Blues is from 2015, I pulled it out of my library and edited the piece to be ready for critique. I really do appreciate all of your critiques and I will try to critique others lyrics as i should. Jim
  8. James L Kleinheksel

    I Got Blues

    I Got Blues James L Kleinheksel © Copyright 2018 Ooooo Ooooo Ooooo Ooooo Now listen to me And my strange view I was told how to be But I had to refuse Ooooo Ooooo I got blues I got blues I got blues I got holes in my pockets Where my money run through I got blues I got blues I got blues I got a dreadful bullshit job And a paper with bad news I got blues I got blues I got blues I got a tiny little shack That I never get to use I got blues I got blues I got blues I got too much information But I still got no clues I got blues I got blues I got blues Instrumental Bridge Ya know Now I got a fired today So I got five more tattoos And I got a splittin’ headache From a fifth of cheap booze I got blue I got blues I got blues I was gave a million dollars It turned out to be a ruse I got blues I got blues I got blues I got people in my face And a very short fuse I got blues I got blues I got blues There’s folks that ripped me off There’s too many to accuse I got blues I got blues I got blues I played ten thousand shows Got a thousand bad reviews I got blues I got blues I got blues I got a bad streak goin’ There ain’t nothin’ left to lose Ya know again and again I been payin’ my dues But ya know it’s always me That’s gonna get the screws So oooo So oooo I got blues, I got blues , I got blues Now ya know I got blues, I got blues, I got blues Original Version I Got Blues James L Kleinheksel © Copyright 2018 Ooooo Ooooo Now listen to me And my stange point of view I got blues I got blues I got blues I was told to conform But I just had to refuse I got blues I got blues I got blues I got holes in my pockets Where my money runs through I got blues I got blues I got blues I got a dreadful bullshit job And a paper with bad news I got blues I got blues I got blues I got a tiny little house That I never get to use I got blues I got blues I got blues I got too much information But I still got no clues I got blues I got blues I got blues I got a splitting headache From a fifth of cheap booze I got blues I got blues I got blues Now I got a fired today So I got five more tattoos I got blues I got blues I got blues I got a bad streak goin’ There ain’t nothin’ left to lose I got blues I got blues I got blues I was gave a million dollars It turned out to be a ruse I got blues I got blues I got blues I got people in my face And a very short fuse I got blues I got blues I got blues There’s folks that ripped me off There’s too many to accuse I got blues I got blues I got blues I played ten thousand shows Got a thousand bad reviews I got blues I got blues I got blues I’m so tired and weary Now I gotta take a snooze Ya know, over and over, I paid my dues But ya know it’s me that gets always the screws I got blues, I got blues , I got blues I got blues, I got blues, I got blues
  9. James L Kleinheksel

    I Don't Care

    Hi Ron, Thank you very much for your critique. According to Webster's dictionary the word forlorn, means, DEF. # 1 a: BEREFT, FORSAKEN b: isolation or desertion DESOLATE # 2 MISERABLE, WRETCHED #3 nearly hopeless. I will copt and paste the lyrics of one of my favorite songs to make this point. Not that I wish to prove you wrong but to show you a little bit of where I am coming from and what type of songs I like. I don't like most popular songs as I believe that the best songs have not received great exposure. After reading the following lyrics, please listen to this song ten times. I believe that you will love it and understand better why I write the way that I do. Boy Ian Hunter Genocidal tendencies are silly to extreme After all you're still quite small you don't know where you've been You was only swearing yesterday Oh you want to win the world away But now you got nothing to say-ay-ay Boy you're getting out of hand You've got to make a stand So put the coke away Boy you got the do the show Got to let the people know You got the strength to stay I can see you run I can see you hide Oh your heart is aching Lost in a dream of what might have been You're the guide You're the number one And your knees are shaking Stand and deliver in an endless dream Schizophrenic, photogenic, aggravates me so Only yes-men Have a guess man Watch the spirit go Batman zips the monster as he bleeds And gets up on the buzz he needs And a kid on the street just reads And reads, and reads, and reads And reads, and reads, and reads Boy it's them hard case city blues Cagney is the news Does the giant ring a bell Boy it's the Hudson East river cruise It's the Empire State buffoons Oh you know the story well Do you have to run Do you have to hide There's a new tomorrow Yes you're a mess But you're more than less When this battles won You can look inside Oh you did not borrow Yes you're the best But you still can't rest You know, you know The carnival is closed Your street's alive with ghosts But a friend says don't look back Don't look back, don't look round Your vision is your fate Through long electric nights When a woman helps you write Na na na, na na na Na Na na na, na na na Cheer up mate, put the dramas in the past See you did not have to fast Euphemism lasts and lasts and lasts And lasts, and lasts, and lasts And lasts, and lasts Boy if you've got an axe to grind Be thankful for this time For it gives you what you need Boy you've got an eighty-eight to play It'll tell you what to say It'll tell you when to breathe Boy take a turnpike heading West Turn the people on to Beau Geste 'Cause that's what you did the best Boy play the pipes 'til they're old and worn Sing the words 'til they fall forlorn Like the pieces of a jigsaw jet Boy don't let the Earth get in your face Its a middle-aged displace Its the middle ages snide Boy we're a million miles away And to think its so insane Take a chance on a one way ride Boy shoot a rocket clean out of your mind Oh these people ain't your kind No they ain't your kind at all Boy shoot a rocket clean out of your brain No these people ain't the same You can hear another call Boy the other book starts with no They don't show us how to grow They only show us how to win Boy the secret's in the bicycle shed Ain't no answers now they're dead To seek is a mortal sin Hey you know boy let your madness be the clue Songwriters: Ian Hunter / Mick Ronson Boy lyrics © Sony/ATV Music Publishing LLC Notice the lack of prosody and the rhyming scheme is all over the place. Yet, Ian Hunter pulls this off flawlessly. All over my hopes are strewn - I rather like the way this sounds " A lot of your lyrics seem to be about philosophical hopelessness, without the personal suicidal ideation. About my speed. I think this is how a lot of people are beginning to feel. So much negative potential looming in our world." I am happy to see that there are people out there who think similarly to myself. When I was young I never saw anyone my age who was unhappy. Since around 1980 I watched this country slide downhill at about 3 mph, accelerating to 25 mph in the 90's. The way that I see it, we are now speeding downhill at 100 mph. If people were willing to look below the surface of what they see and hear, I am sure that they would concur. But we are now programmed by our audio & visual world and most people take it at face value. It saddens me to the core when I see that this country, which had the chance to be great, has turned into a place for which I no longer have respect. We have a president who is probably going to be our undoing. We have school school children on powerful drugs to control their behavior. Look at the last lines of The Pledge Of Allegiance, "with liberty and justice for all". Liberty means the freedom to do as you please. And justice for all, Seriously? When did this ever happen? I could go on for days but I won't comment any further. I will copy and paste my lyrics "A Million Miles", and leave it as that. Again Ron, thanks for your comments and critique. A Million Miles (From Where We Oughta Be) James L Kleinheksel © Copyright 2016 Last one standing take down the flag Fold it neatly and place it in a bag For posterity's sake Maybe they can see what great nation used to be Yo turn off the lights and close the door Man this is the end the start of the war Take with you only what you need From the liquidation of the land of greed We had some fun it was a good run It's all over now and the time has come This is the death of the land of the free Cause we’ve strayed a million miles From where we oughta be Where we oughta be The last stop’s ahead, it’s the war of the classes And all orchestrated to divide the masses It’s red versus blue, boy versus girl Black versus white and rich versus poor And all sides against the middle As Nero stands by and tunes his fiddle Ha ha ha haw haw haw Don't you worry it'll be over soon Absolutely no one's gonna be immune This is the end that you couldn’t foresee Cause we’ve strayed a million miles From where we oughta be Yo, It's too late to turn this monster around We can only stand by and watch it go down Swept away into the sea of despair Without any lifeboats waitin’ for us out there You know by now the whole thing was fixed Only an illusion, just a grand parlor trick Hey there ain’t nothing left here to redeem All of your money, your hopes, and all your dreams And there ain’t nothing left you can save It’s dismantled now, the home of the brave It’s all in the past, nothing left to see Cause we've strayed a million miles From where we oughta be Click on the link below to hear the song javascript:KOMPOZ.PLAYER.playToggled('sidebar-805055'); Thanks, Jim
  10. James L Kleinheksel

    I Don't Care

    Hi RobertK, Thank you for taking the time to review my lyrics. I realize that the prosody is way off on this piece but when I write I have a melody in my head which works very well. Patty and Paul point this out quite a bit. I'm happy that you recognized the irony of the point of view of the narrator. The reason that I didn't single out any particular person is because it is not aimed at one person. if I would to name them all, or all of the groups, there would be too many to list in one song lyric. However, I will keep working on this one. Thanks again, Jim
  11. James L Kleinheksel

    I Don't Care

    Hi Mick70, I believe that the title of the lyrics and the body speak for themselves. The narrator is stating that he/ she really doesn't care. Everything has gone too far and is out of control of the common man. By man,I mean mankind, which includes both women and men. If you have read any of my other lyrics you will find that I constantly complain about the current state of affairs. I do however value your comments and will take them into consideration. Thanks, Jim
  12. James L Kleinheksel

    I Don't Care

    I Don’t Care James L Kleinheksel ©Copyright 2016 Now I really don’t care anymore Since all my hopes have fallen forlorn I don’t care who deals the cards And I don’t care who’s in charge I really don’t care I don’t wanna see There’s nothin like it used to be All over my hopes are strewn And there ain’t nothin’ I can do Ain’t nobody gonna play fair But I’ll tell you right now I really don’t care This is a picture of hopelessness It’s a picture fear You can tell me it’s not But I really don’t care I ain’t gonna worry like before I really don’t care, not anymore All these folks thinkin' they’re fine They keep tryin’ to change my mind How did I reach such despair There’s people to blame But I really don’t care Instrumental Bridge It’s too late to turn back now Ain’t nobody would even know how Some folks laugh some are scared But not me I really don’t care Everything great has gone away Nothin’s comin’ back it gone to stay Look at all what’s been done Look very closely if you dare Ya know I’d do it myself But I really don’t care
  13. James L Kleinheksel

    I Don't Want Em Anymore

    Hi A Musical Key, Jazzraptor, & Kuya Thank you all very much for your comments. The "shine shine" in the second line of verse one was a mistake. I thought that I had edited that line but evidently it had not been edited. It should be now. I realize that almost of of my lyrics are too long but I happen to love long, non repetitive songs. My all time favorite song is Master Of Sparks by ZZ Top. Maybe a tie with Mississippi by Dylan. I think that the rhyming scheme in Master of Sparks is the best that I have ever seen or heard. Check it out. I used this rhyming scheme in my lyric, The Perfect Line. I certainly didn't pull it off as well as Billy Gibbons but I don't think that it was horrible with the right melody behind it. I posted I Don't Want Em Anymore on the Kompoz music collaboration site and it was picked up and made into a song the same day that it was posted. It was done to the Funk genre which really disappointed me. Also, they cut the third verse but that's not the first time that has happened to me. Kuya, I didn't think of the connection to Knockin' On Heaven's Door but that is very similar to what I had in mind. Thanks. I have taken a new job in February which doesn't allow me to spend much time on what I love, lyric writing and critiquing. That is the reason that I haven't been on Muse very much since then. I will try to find some time to work on this lyric. I will also try to post the song in the completed song feedback area. My Kompoz account is all screwed up, I am unable to download my own work and I can't get the site to fix it as nobody monitors the site. But I'll give it a shot anyway. Thanks again, Jim
  14. James L Kleinheksel

    I Don't Want Em Anymore

    Revised I Don't Want Em Anymore James L Kleinheksel ©Copyright 2018 A lot of gold in this land I see Everything that had a shine I used to keep a lot for me I thought I had to make it mine Much misfortune along the way Misdirection and disarray On this road I traveled so long I'm bored and lonely full of regret Somewhere, somehow It all went wrong All I do now is try to forget The shiny things I had before Well I don’t want em anymore No I don’t want em anymore No I don’t want em anymore Lost out here in this circus land I keep on hiding from the crowd All the things that I had planned I’m sure would never be allowed Everything’s gone without a trace So take me to a different place Show me something new instead Everything I wanted back then It leaves out of my tired head And I can’t go back there again Now all the things I once longed for Well I don’t want em anymore No I don't want em anymore No I don’t want em anymore Instrumental Bridge Everything I had’s been lost Now it’s all back there in the past At such a devastating cost I knew that it could never last All the things I had back then I can never get em back again And all the bridges that I burned Somewhere it had all gone bad Beyond the point of no return There’s nothing left but feeling sad Now all the things I had before Well I don’t want em anymore No I don’t want em anymore Don’t want em anymore Don’t want em anymore Don’t want em anymore I Don't Want Em Anymore James L Kleinheksel ©Copyright 2018 A lot of gold in this land I see Everything that had a shine I used to keep a lot for me I thought I had to make it mine Much misfortune along the way Misdirection and disarray On this road I traveled so long I'm bored and lonely full of regret Somewhere, somehow It all went wrong All I do now is try to forget The shiny things I had before Well I don’t want em anymore No I don’t want em anymore No I don’t want em anymore Lost out here in this circus land I keep on hiding from the crowd All the things that I had planned I’m sure would never be allowed Everything’s gone without a trace So take me to a different place Show me something new instead Everything I wanted back then It leaves out of my tired head And I can’t get it back again Now all the things I once longed for Well I don’t want em anymore No I don't want em anymore No I don’t want em anymore Instrumental Bridge Everything I had’s been lost Now it’s all back there in the past At such a devastating cost I knew that it could never last All the things I had back then I can never get em back again And all the bridges that I burned Somewhere it had all gone bad Beyond the point of no return There’s nothing left but feeling sad Now all the things I had before Well I don’t want em anymore No I don’t want em anymore Don’t want em anymore Don’t want em anymore Don’t want em anymore
  15. James L Kleinheksel

    Gonna Lose It Anyway

    Gonna Lose It Anyway James L Kleinheksel © Copyright 2018 The cards are shuffled were about to begin Over and over you try your luck If you don't win at first you can try again Somehow on the losing side you're stuck So shuffle the cards or give it a spin Sooner or later you’re bound to win All you can wish for all you can pray You’ll live to fight just one more day You roll the dice and come what may But you know, yeah you know You’re gonna lose it anyway Yeah You’re gonna lose it anyway Some are born with what they need But anyway you play it you come up short Then there’s others driven by and greed It's just the nature of this twisted sport You're life is spent in a futile attempt To set things right the way they're meant All you can wish for all you can pray You’ll live to fight just one more day You roll the dice and come what may But you know, yeah you know You’re gonna lose it anyway Yeah You’re gonna lose it anyway In this cruel world in which you’re thrown You can’t poke around now that’s taboo You believe it true but it’s all unknown There ain’t nothin’ left that you can do You by now you can't change a thing It makes no difference what you bring So hold on tight now and don’t let go There’s so much, that you don’t know You roll the dice and come what may But you know, yeah you know You’re gonna lose it anyway Yeah You’re gonna lose it anyway
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