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FrankeeLeeFabian

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About FrankeeLeeFabian

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    United States
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    Ghost Hunting, Automatic Writing, Telekinesis

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    Lorde, Lana Del Rey, Julian Baker,St. Vincent, Waxahatchee

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  1. FrankeeLeeFabian

    NOTHING HERE

    Hi Alistair, I'll play around with your suggestion. When I wrote the chorus it was meant to be sung very slow and sad, almost dirge-like in parts, with the repetition meant to amplify the resignation of the situation. Having said that, I do find your suggestion intriguing and I'll see how it matches up with my sense of the overall lyric. Many thanks for your thoughts.
  2. FrankeeLeeFabian

    NOTHING HERE

    Thank you, Mike, for reading and commenting. Greatly appreciated. Thank you, Snabbu, for reading and commenting. I notice you do quite a bit of extensive comments but I don't believe I've read any of your lyrics. That always helps me to better understand where someone might be coming from in terms of how they incorporate their suggestions into their own work. Maybe you can post some of your lyrics for us to read? Thank you , Peko. appreciate your generous comments and suggestions. Thank you, Jim, for your comments. (I think you're fixated on the "folk" label. It's more alternative/indie.)
  3. FrankeeLeeFabian

    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    Alfred Hitchcock was the Harvey Weisnstein of his time. Yeah, like being choked, shot, lynched or profiled because you were born black... just normal gratuitous violence, no biggie. Suck it up, black man, and quit complaining.
  4. FrankeeLeeFabian

    Thoughts on Offensive Lyrics

    There are no more "general audiences," (if ever there truly were). That conceit vanished a long time ago... it's a Spotify world.
  5. FrankeeLeeFabian

    This is America (What do you think of this?)

    Donald Glover is the creator, writer, executive producer and star of perhaps the best show on television - Atlanta. He is a creative powerhouse and stunningly original and insightful. But it appears as if the great majority of people on this site are unfamiliar with him and his work... must be attributed to the greying demographic on this site. If you have time you should watch season 1 & 2 of Atlanta. You'll appreciate the wisdom, tone, humor and pathos of the series and you'll see how his creativity and observations on being born black in America have been shaped.
  6. Deep and true. Nice.
  7. FrankeeLeeFabian

    NOTHING HERE

    Haven't been around for a while. This is something I'm working on. It may be complete. Nothing Here ©FrankeeLee Fabian 2018 Your hands don’t excite me Your kiss leaves me cold And the secrets we’ve shared They’ve all been told Don’t say you still want me It won’t change my mind I’m not chasing that dream I left it behind I waited years to feel the world spin And I’ll never do that, ever again Now there’s nothing here It’s over, it’s empty There’s nothing left You don’t even tempt me No, there’s nothing here There’s nothing here There’s nothing here There’s nothing here Inst. My hearts cloaked in steel, now I can’t feel it beat I’ll chase down my future With the soles of my feet Don’t stand in my way You’re yesterday’s news You’re useless to me Like an old pair of shoes I waited years to feel the world spin And I’ll never do that, ever again Now there’s nothing here It’s over, it’s empty There’s nothing left You don’t even tempt me No, there’s nothing here There’s nothing here There’s nothing here There’s nothing here Maybe there’s love Maybe there’s fate Maybe there’s anger Maybe there’s hate Whatever it is I know I can’t wait But there’s nothing here It’s over, it’s empty There’s nothing left You can’t even tempt me No, there’s nothing here There’s nothing here There’s nothing here There’s nothing here
  8. FrankeeLeeFabian

    WATCH HOW A POP HIT IS MADE

    https://www.nytimes.com/video/arts/music/100000005858557/watch-how-a-pop-hit-is-made.html Keep watching when the first one ends. Lots of great insights. Ed Sheeran follows... and more.
  9. FrankeeLeeFabian

    Collaboration Contest Discussion

    Wow! Some of these collaborations are great! Very impressive.
  10. FrankeeLeeFabian

    brown eyes

    I like this a lot. It has such a great feel to it. I'm a big fan of simple, unadorned music, infused with vulnerability. I like your style and presentation. I enjoyed the listen!
  11. FrankeeLeeFabian

    I Can Teach You To Fly - edited

    I like this very much. It has a wonderful feel, overall. Very moving and emotional. I'm thinking that maybe you did the different chorus at the end in place of a bridge? Personally, I'd love to see a bridge in this. I think it could add a very powerful element to your lyric. One thought I had was a few minor changes in tense, here and there. For example: You built build up your castles in air, But they crumbled, crumble and turned all turn to dust. Very nice lyric with lots and lots of wonderful moments.
  12. FrankeeLeeFabian

    Kaleidoscope

    I like this lyric a lot. There are so many wonderful moments in it and an abundance of feeling and movement. It's very rich with melancholy and hope. I enjoyed reading this and I'd be very hesitant to offer you any changes... it reads so delicate I wouldn't want to splinter or shatter it.
  13. FrankeeLeeFabian

    My Valentine

    I didn't read through all of this but did you consider evaporates? Fades also works as does abates
  14. FrankeeLeeFabian

    Dream This World Away

    Andy, very good comments. I'm reviewing them and thinking about your suggestions. I was describing that moment in the morning right before the world awakens... there is still silence, yes? However, I do like your suggestion of perhaps switching silence to restless in the second verse. Going over all of your comments. Thank you for being so thorough and insightful. SOK, Others have commented on the meter but when I "sing" it there is a smooth flow, although, perhaps I was "high" when I was singing - LOL! - so yes, I will brainstorm. Your Denny's comment made me laugh. Thank you for stopping by. Jonie, I just liked the way it sounded. You have provided me with a great deal of information to digest and consider. Please excuse me if I don't respond to each point you brought up but believe me when I tell you that (a) - I really appreciate you being so specific and (b) I am studiously reviewing all of your suggestions with an open mind and a very serious approach. I truly appreciate all of your observations and comments. Thank you very much for your time and incisive observations. ---------- Jim, thank you for finding some portions of this "fine" "good" and "decent." I like your suggestion about changing the position of the bridge and I'm considering that. The Beatles song book is not something that I am intimately familiar with. Of course I'm aware of their historical place in contemporary music and I'm familiar with many of their songs but the truth is I didn't grow up with them and I don't have the same connection to them that so many others on this site have... no offense. (Just out of curiosity, I notice that you comment on quite a few lyrics but don't post any of your own... why is that? Personally, when I read the lyrics of someone who comments it helps me to to weigh and focus their comments as they may apply to their own lyrics, if that makes sense. Plus, it seems like it's more of a shared and communal experience and in keeping with the overall mission of this site.) Thanks for your thoughts and kind comments.
  15. FrankeeLeeFabian

    Subway Girls

    SOK, yes, in that verse it's bravado. You got it. Kuya, I think it would make such a cool video! I'm so happy that you like it and your comments are really encouraging to me. Thank you so much. Jim, A Broadway show tune? Really? That's interesting. Have to think about that one.
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