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  1. Maybe We'd Still Be In Love

    Part 2... Keep in mind that this is like the first in depth song review I've attempted. Definitely take my comments for what they're worth. Overall, very well produced... Sreyashi has a great voice as well. Keep up the good work
  2. Maybe We'd Still Be In Love

    I feel awkward giving advice and critiques of others songs being such a novice myself... but I'll do my best My feedback on in green after each stanza (is that a common word for verses & choruses in a song? heh) Dang... that is all I have time for right now.... I'll come back later for part 2 heh
  3. Till You Came Along

    I like it as well! Guitar and vocal harmonies sounded good to me. I almost think you could just cut the repeated verse and shorten the song just a bit. This may be a weird question... but are those real drums? They sound great and I would love to get something similar on my tracks... but I'm no drummer.
  4. Nokno - Spaceship

    Seems like a good start to a backing track to me. I'd expand on it, work in some dynamics and maybe add a melody to it. For some reason I heard someone rapping over it in my head
  5. August 2017 Song Contest - Results R in!

    Thanks! This was really fun to take part in.
  6. Thanks... I do have a couple monitors I bought at guitar center for about $150 each as well. One thing I realized after posting this is that I was mixing with waaaay to high of volume. I lowered all the tracks, exported to wav & uploaded a couple tracks to wavemod.com and landr.com... both sound better than what I did on my own.
  7. Mrs. Rainbow

    There was a lot of cool stuff going on there, musically. The vocal arrangement and harmonies were my favorite part of the song. I don't really get the lyrics, but I'm not sure I'm supposed to. They are quite abstract... unless I'm being dense or naive. I'm guessing the wizard of oz reference in the end was intentional, given that even the melody was similar.
  8. One Day Is Enough

    Ya... I definitely agree it is coming off as preachy with the rewrite... which is the main reason I don't like it anymore, that wasn't the original intention. I think the lyrics are going in the closet... hopefully I can revive the musical aspect... I do still like that
  9. One Day Is Enough

    Does this make any more sense, lyrically? I'm starting to think that the idea of this one just isn't working... may be time to move on :S Thanks again! ONE DAY IS ENOUGH the bars are gone chains are broken you're feeling free a joy unspoken you'll find a road rebuffed cause one day, one day is enough your aim is set yet too distant circle back prove resistant you'll find a life unloved cause one day, one day is enough Ya one day is enough to see your mistaken animosity think what it is you think but don't believe that you're free so turn your head look at the faces don't waste away warm embraces a lonely heart will rise above cause one day, one day is enough eyes are blue, seen as red jets away, it's is different on the mend you'll dance together in the end once again misguided visions there's nothing there fabrications shine on through the bluff cause one day, one day is enough Ya one day is enough to see your mistaken animosity think what it is you think but don't believe that you're free
  10. One Day Is Enough

    Thanks for the thoughtful feedback! I was intentionally vague with this one... and I can see that it worked, heh. I'm not going to dive into the deeper meaning behind each line, but the intended overall theme of the song is "The grass is not greener". There is no real story, as you pointed out... but a collection of statements reaffirming that fact. I think the best way to look at it might be someone talking to a friend who has recently left a spouse.... but maybe that doesn't work either :S Even with that in mind... I can see the line "we'll dance together" doesn't make sense... perhaps I should change that to "you'll dance together". Anyway... thanks again, I'll stew on it and see what comes out
  11. Awesome! Very easy to just sit back and chill to I think: cigar + wine + Bielka = relaxation and reflection
  12. Y Fly

    Very nice.... As others have said, some of the words are hard to understand here and there without reading along with the lyrics. I really wanted you to hit the line "I'm trying so hard to leave" hard... especially the last syllable, ending that stanza on a high to head into the last verse... if that makes any sense :S well done!
  13. Bae

    I liked it. I'm no mixing expert, but I think with some vocal mixing cleanup it has a lot of potential. I had a hard time hearing or understanding these lines at least: "I know firmly where my motives lay" "Flying like a cannonball" "until a precipitous stop" From verse 2 on was my favorite... I really dug the vibe from there on. Well done!
  14. Let's Get Together

    Very well done! Really fun to listen to. For me, the line "Sop it up like a big ol' plate of biscuits and gravy" put me off of what was an otherwise great overall message in the song... unless I'm missing the reference. Can I ask how you record the vocals? They are very clear and sit in the song well, I wish I could get mine recorded like that!
  15. Hi... here is a song I have been working on. I think it might be a bit long or maybe require some more dynamics at this length... not sure yet. I played around with fake drums and didn't like anything so just left it without. Thanks! One Day Is Enough https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B3EWfIc5Ik-QdWpiOUlDNDBBOXM/view?usp=sharing the bars are gone chains are broken feeling free (not intended to be first person... change to "you're feeling free") a joy unspoken you think that life is tough but one day, one day is enough once again misguided visions nothing there (there's nothing there) fabrications you think the grind is rough but one day, one day is enough see what it is i see your mistaken animosity think what it is you think but don't believe that you're free the road will leave you feeling frozen look again change the moment shine on through the bluff cause one day, one day is enough eyes are blue, seen as red jets away, it's is different on the mend we'll dance together ... (will change to "you'll dance together", Thanks, Jim) in the end turn your head look at the faces don't look away read the sage's a lonely heart will rise above cause one day, one day is enough see what it is i see your mistaken animosity think what it is you think but don't believe that you're free *EDIT* sorry had the wrong link
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