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girl_offline last won the day on August 19 2017

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About girl_offline

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  • Birthday 12/01/2002

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    https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCZSSjH3tEL41bgjezhtWw6w?view_as=subscriber

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    Female
  • Location
    Hong Kong SAR, China
  • Interests
    Drawing, dancing, reading, watching movies, writing songs, jamming to electronic pop

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  • Lyricist, Composer or Both?
    I write original songs with both music and lyrics.
  • Musical Influences?
    Rendezvous at Two, Aurora Aksnes, Ruelle, Halsey, Lady Gaga, Ed Sheeran, Jaymes Young

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  1. girl_offline

    Your Kinda Lady

    Thanks for the feedback, but can you explain why? Thanks
  2. girl_offline

    Your Kinda Lady

    Thanks a lot, I wanted the portray the persona as a 'lady' in the daytime in front of her boyfriend's parents and whatnot, but a naughty girl in the night time which is why you're exactly right about the parody thing - this song is supposed to be humorous and not to be taken seriously haha! Thank you for your feedback
  3. girl_offline

    Racing the Lions

    At the start of the song I was like 'ehhhhhh' And then the chorus came and I was like WOOOOOAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH Listening to the song was like going on a drug trip, and in a good way :)))) Really dreamy and mystical, unique as well I like that you've found your own distinct style and you have a very innocent-sounding voice, which is somehow perfect because it contrasts the intense instrumental and subject matter of the song. Really really great I would say that upgrading your microphone is the next step, since you seem interested in making a career out of music maybe?
  4. girl_offline

    Dreamin

    Is that your art? (love it) You definitely paint the picture of 'dreaming' in your synths. It's very hazy and it's got so much vibe, I feel like I'm floating in a dream sequence, which I assume must be your exact point great job
  5. girl_offline

    Your Kinda Lady

    Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, I wanted that line to be a little different than the others so that there's some variation in the chorus, but I can understand why it might sound a bit clunky! Definitely something to think about since this is literally the first recording I did of the song lol
  6. girl_offline

    Your Kinda Lady

    Thank you so much! Relatable music is my forte and I'm so glad that you like the song!
  7. girl_offline

    Your Kinda Lady

    Thanks!! Since music is just a hobby I haven't really thought about actually spending money on better gear and learning how to produce professionally, but I have thought about it a lot. I'm really glad you think my work is worthy of being properly produced
  8. girl_offline

    Fake Life

    Yas girl your voice is goals. If you recorded this professionally with the backing then it would be totally radio ready! I love R&B so much and you totally killed it with this catchy track and lyrics that aren't as cliche as I anticipated (no offence, lol. You did an amazing job) One thing I didn't like though is "and you need to just chill". Since the stress is on 'to', wouldn't it sound way better if the lyrics were 'and you just need to chill'? That way, the high note is on 'need', giving it an angstier edge as well as getting rid of the tongue-twister that is 'just chill', because you'll be singing 'to chill' which would probably be a lot smoother. Great job anyways, keep or sweep my idea
  9. girl_offline

    Feels Good

    Really fantastic production man, a very motivational feel-good jam!! Really like your stuff. Hope you hear a lot more from you
  10. WARNING: This song contains bad language and sexual themes. So I was listening to the rain and I decided to write a song and upload it before my soundcloud expires lol, I'm not gonna pay for the upgrade I know this kind of music might not be for everyone but I hope you'll enjoy and give feedback! Also I might have sung the wrong words in a few places Lyrics: Your Kinda Lady V1: Imma step up my game now You're driving me home to meet your family Right on our way now Boy, this ain't the time to make me your enemy Pre-chorus: Baby, tell me what I gotta do To make you understand that I'll be good, for you Baby, tell me what I gotta say To make you understand that I won't misbehave I don't really care if those motherfuckers stare at me The light is glowing red so babe, you better listen carefully Chorus: I'm the type of girl who'll treat your mama right I won't get in no fights, coz I'm just that kinda lady Then late at night I'm gon' get crazy freaky on you Under your papa's roof, coz I'm just that fucking shady V2: We're right at the door now Your brother lets us in and we get straight to eating Are you gonna give me a tour now? Pass by the bedroom, but we ain't gon' be sleeping (all night) Pre-chorus: Baby, tell me what I gotta do To make you understand that I'll be good, for you Baby, tell me what I gotta say To make you understand that I won't misbehave Chorus: I'm the type of girl who'll treat your mama right I won't get in no fights, coz I'm just that kinda lady Then late at night I'm gon' get crazy freaky on you Under your papa's roof, coz I'm just that fucking shady I don't really care about your sense of propriety No matter who's around, babe, you better get inside of me Chorus [x2]: I'm the type of girl who'll treat your mama right I won't get in no fights, coz I'm just that kinda lady Then late at night I'm gon' get crazy freaky on you Under your papa's roof, coz I'm just that fucking shady I just wanna be your baby Coz I'm just Your Kinda Lady
  11. girl_offline

    Swipe Right (studio)

    Hey Singing is something everyone can improve on if they put in the effort to work at it. I think the effect definitely helped because there are a few examples of songs, particularly in the punk genre, where the vocals are a cross of speaking and singing, kinda like what you got going on here. Your voice isn't bad, but pitch awareness could definitely be improved. My advice to you would be to record yourself singing as often as you can to tweak your own style and technique into something you're satisfied with. Performing live is also great for improvements, which I see you've been doing!! Good job. Consider taking voice lessons as well if you really wanna get better at singing. As for the song, I think the lyrics and the tune are great, though I have to admit (don't be offended please) the vocals put me off slightly because they weren't quite in tune with the track and the main melody was unclear at times, reducing the catchiness. But you definitely have the ability to improve your voice!! Great job and effort on the song.
  12. This is dark and dangerous, fits into the 'deadly rap' category, I think! This would be a great rap beat. This is really sick btw :)) really great job. What software do you use to make your beats? I'm trying to get into that too. Overall I think this is something that could be sampled and edited into something truly awesome if someone raps on top.
  13. So I entered this song into the May lyric contest because I was in the process of writing it and wanted to see how people reacted to it without the melody. I wrote this song after seeing the movie Call Me By Your Name (2017) and was extremely moved and affected by this beautiful film. I hoped to invoke the impression of a sensual Italian summer in this song, like in the movie. It's a low quality production like everything I produce but hopefully the song itself isn't low quality, haha! 😁 Lyrics: Call Me By Your Name Verse 1: Calm, quiet Walking through the water with you in my Arms, tight and Careful not to let you float away Pre-chorus: Your golden hair skims the surface The sunlight catches your eyes Your fingers wrapped round my wrist And I feel your skin against mine Chorus: You looked at me today And I knew that we were one You took my breath away Together we'll stay in the light of the sun Verse 2: Blood at the back of my tongue Words, biting hard, and threatening to tear us apart But our hearts are hungry and hard If we stay where we are, love, would you still float away? Pre-chorus: Your fingernails dig into my back And I whisper your name Face in your hair, I breathe the scent Every touch is never the same Bridge: Summer holds back the swell of time Over seasons' prime, she reigns But now as the flowers die, Will we ever find a way? Kiss me hard, love me violent, while The fleeting fire fades Bittersweet, the nectar dries As you call me by your name Chorus: You looked at me today And I knew that we were one Disarm me with your pain Together we'll stay in the light of the sun Ending: Bittersweet, the nectar dries As you call me by your name Take me back to that summertime And I'll call you by mine
  14. Hey guys, here's a song I wrote and scored a while ago using musescore. I don't have any fancy equipment but hope you like it! Critique is appreciated! Princess and the Pauper V1 Looking through her window, watching as the days go by Sunlight dies before her eyes Golden thread and satin, diadem and Latin lies Laced into her inner thighs Pre-chorus Quick, he is coming, and my heart is drumming His Highness is drawing near Climb in through the window; out in the world, I go It's your turn to stay in here Chorus I'm ready for the changeover Here, take my crown Love him good, just as I should And I will wear your frown I'm ready for a taste of the outside, to be free From this cursed dynasty where he will never touch me Where he will never touch me Instrumental V2 Digging her fingernails into the morning dirt Ankle deep in sunken earth Crumbling complexion and hollow reflection dies Unless her body's loved tonight Pre-chorus Quick, he is falling, my heart is a-warning His Highness is coming now Climb in through the window; out in the world, I go It's my turn to break my vow Chorus I'm ready for the changeover Here, take my crown Love him good, just as I should And I will wear your frown I'm ready for a taste of the outside, to be free From this cursed dynasty where he will never touch me Bridge Identical faces We exchange our places Intentional twist of fate You want love and beauty, I want my purity See the royal mess we've made I, the princess; you, the pauper We play the game Chorus [x2] I'm ready for the changeover Here, take my crown Love him good, just as I should And I will wear your frown I'm ready for a taste of the outside, to be free From this cursed dynasty where he will never touch me
  15. girl_offline

    The Way You Make Me Feel

    This is my favorite verse bro! I'm a huge fan of rap-singing? type verse/lyrics (idk how you describe this) but it makes the entire song more contemporary and hip. I could hear this on the radio! But maybe this is just my weird opinion; have you been classically trained in singing, by any chance? Because I feel that you take that kind of approach to singing this song instead of a more common and fitting 'pop' tone so many male pop singers use today. Which is totally fine by the way, because you have a beautiful voice, but maybe it's something to think about??? Idk, overall fantastic job with this song. I'd love to hear more from you!
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