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  1. October Song Contest - RESULTS!

    Thanks Paul and congrats to the winners. Agree with others that this was a tight field- some cool tunes out there!
  2. Where The Sun Keeps Shining Down

    Took a couple of listens but I really like this. Very catchy chorus, nice tight mix and faultless vocals. Reminds me of Maroon 5.
  3. My Avalon

    David, wow, first of all thanks so much for taking the time to both listen to my track and provide such detailed feedback. I really appreciate it, especially from someone with your songwriting and production expertise. I'm secretly delighted that your feedback focuses on very specific production flaws and not any significant weakness in my songwriting ability/musicianship, especially given that I started recording songs less than a year ago. I haven't had the chance to investigate the 'crackles' and 'bumps' yet but I'm sure there is a simple explanation and it most likely relates to my clumsy editing of the vocal track, where i have tried to eliminate all the Pops and eSSes and have copied and pasted sections of other tracks. It's either that or my tendency to tap my foot on the mic stand when i'm recording... My recording set-up is very basic- I use free software (Audacity) on a knackered old laptop, and sing/play through a Behringer Xenyx 302USB mixer using a £20 microphone in my living room. I hope to get some better equipment one day but at present the budget is £0! Despite this, your feedback has motivated me to take a much closer look at the quality of my recording and see if there is anything obvious I can do differently/better to improve the sound. Any further advice you may have on this and future recordings would be very welcome. Thanks again and good luck in the October song contest! Dan
  4. Flotsam & Jetsam

    Cool song with a distinct 60s/early 70s vibe in terms of the vocal melody, harmonies and production. I'm hearing Bowie, Pink Floyd, Mamas and Papas.... Tasteful chords and, as with RoadDog, I especially enjoyed the Maj7th on 'universe'. I was wondering whether the song was unnecessarily long- to my ears the natural end point was around 3mins25 and I don't think the listener would be missing too much after that point. Undoubtedly a matter of personal taste, and the important thing is that I enjoyed the song very much.
  5. White Lake Country Club

    Hey Joe, I enjoyed your performance. It certainly takes balls to post a live video of a composition and then invite critical feedback! However i'm with HoboSage on the chord/lyrics mismatch. I hear Nirvana unplugged in the chords (great) and your vocal tone is Cobain-esque in places (cool), but the lyrics would be more suited to someone like Jimmy Buffett (hmmm). But I'm a stiff Brit and have never been to a fishfry so what do I know? if you've played the song at the club and people like it then take no notice and keep doing your thing!
  6. My Avalon

    Thanks, very good points. I had doubts about the song title too, but dismissed 'Avalon' due to the massive Roxy Music hit of the same name and thought 'Goodbye Avalon' might give away the ending of the story. Both good song titles though. Funny you should mention November Rain, that was definitely in my head as i was writing the song. The neighbours might have something to say about screaming vocals though...
  7. My Avalon

    Thanks very much for listening and thanks for the constructive feedback. I haven't really got a clue when it comes to mixing and mastering, so any tips you may have would be welcome.
  8. My Avalon

    thanks for taking the time to write this. Glad you approve of the early chorus. I do this a lot and the feedback has been mixed- some prefer songs to slowly build up to a chorus, others want to be hit with the hook in the first 30 seconds. I guess it's just a matter of being guided by the mood/style of the music on a song by song basis. Very pleased with the Pink Floyd power chord reference, although I confess I was thinking more of The Who when I wrote it into the song. I haven't played with the tempo and was slightly concerned that, at 130bpm, the song was a bit slow. I'll have a play around and see how it sounds. Thanks again for the feedback! Cheers, Dan
  9. My Avalon

    Thanks for listening, and for the positive feedback! I know what you mean about the electric piano- I've just started experimenting with a midi-keyboard and don't really know what I'm doing yet..
  10. Seerz

    I enjoyed this, made me smile. Funny, original lyrics set to familiar classic rock n'roll instrumentation and a reassuringly predictable song structure. My only criticism would be the lack of contrast between verse/chorus/bridge which might ordinarily be required to keep the listener's interest. In this case you probably get away with it because the emphasis is quite obviously on the excellent storytelling, with the musical experience being of lesser importance. Sorry to hear of your terrible Seerz experience! Dan
  11. Seasons of Life

    Enjoyed this, very soothing! Its a lovely song and a faultless vocal performance. Nice guitar tone too. I'm not a huge fan of talking sections in songs (eg All Saints 'Never Ever' makes me criinge), but I think you got away with it here!
  12. The Nearly Man

    Brilliant! Clever lyrics and a catchy melody throughout. Reminded me of the Lightning Seeds, but with a bit more humour!
  13. Rock 'n' Roll Citizen

    hey RoadDog, I really enjoyed this track (although I'm sure i heard it a few months ago, maybe on your Soundcloud page)- the lazy verse vocals, sing-along chorus, chunky guitars and sparse production. Reminded me a bit of Dinosaur Jr. I'd like to hear some bass in there (is there any bass in there?- my hearing is a bit dodgy) as this would really give it a bit more umph. Nice work though!
  14. My Avalon

    Hey RoadDog, thanks for your constructive comments! I'll see what I can do about the guitar mix. As for the vocal effects, that's just overdubs and a bit of reverb/compression- what you're hearing is my attempt to mask the fact i can't really sing! Good luck in the competition..
  15. My entry for the October Song Contest. My Avalon I am broken, I am weak, This mortal flesh its silence keeps, I hear the voices: 'give up, give in'. I lie alone, the truth untold, There's no more glory to behold, So many voices, But I'm not listening.... My spirit's strong, Even as these walls around me crumble to the ground. I'll carry on, And one day I will rise again, From my Avalon. My Avalon, My Avalon, Time stands still, Love lives on, My Avalon. I have loved and I have lost, I wear the scars and bear the cross, I hear the voices: 'You'll never win'. I've made choices I regret, A thousand promises unkept, So many voices, But I'm not listening..... My spirit's strong, Even as these walls around me crumble to the ground. I'll carry on, And one day I will rise again, From my Avalon. My Avalon, My Avalon, Time stands still, Love lives on, My Avalon. The time has come, To learn to love again, The lanterns of the past will light my way, For now I know not where or how, Or what the future holds, But I promise we will meet again some day. So goodbye Avalon. Goodbye Avalon. Have no fear, Life goes on............
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