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  1. Anna J

    Home

    Verse 1 I've been running away, but the world keeps catching up to me, I've been fighting hard, but the fight keeps slipping out of me, I've been hiding away from time, but time don't stay hidden I've been searching for home, where home is forgotten. Verse 2 I've been dreaming dreams, not for me, but for others, I've been climbing hills, longer than I can remember, I've been hiding away from hell, and from heaven I've been searching for home, where home is forgotten. Chorus Then I looked into your eyes, And its like watching the stars, Light up the night, Deep as the ocean, Free as the skies. I look into your eyes, And feel, I feel home. Verse 3 I've been colour blind, but now I can see myself clearer, I've been caught up in tides, of seas, that you showed me were rivers, I've been hiding away from time, but now I know better, I'd been searching for home, where home was forgotten. Chorus Then I looked into your eyes, And it's like watching the stars, Light up the night, Deep as the ocean, Free as the skies. I look into your eyes, And feel, I feel home, I feel love, I feel faith, I feel trust. When I look into your eyes. Chorus When I look into your eyes, I'm watching the stars, Light up the night.
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    Temptation

    Love this! To me, the strongest parts are the prechorus lines. Small suggestion - you could tweak it a bit to.... with whom will you consort I just think it reads better this way...but I don't really know the music so... Otherwise, great job!
  3. Anna J

    My Angel

    I really liked it...I think it flows very smoothly, the message comes across as well. I was a bit doubtful about the lenght of the lines...but since its a rap it should work well! In short...it is angelic (pun intended) 🙂.
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    Forget

    I'm not too happy with the bridge either, hopefully, I'll come up with something soon. Thank you for your suggestions! I wanted to portray more that the singer is dying, rather than the fact that she's already dead. The first verse basically picks up from the discovery that she is dying...that also opens her eyes to the world and the fragility of life...and then it builds further up. This is the last of the sad lot for a while 😄. Thank you so much for the kind words!
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    Parchman

    I really like this lyric. It has a very cool vibe...plus I think it paints a very vivid picture which is amazing! So great job!
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    Diamond in the Rough update 6-22-18

    The only thing I could think off was this line. Minor change - Could make a sailor blush to the knee... I just think it'd flow bette Otherwise - i really love this!
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    Forget

    Verse 1 The sun it shone so bright But I had, lived my life, blinded The scars they come and go But my, heart bleeds, when I see him Pre-chorus Oh I wipe away my tears So he can't see them But he feels them I hold his hand tight Like he could save me But I can't be Saved Chorus So I pray When the days cut short and the nights never end When the clouds they part, just to float back again When the rivers dry, but the tears remain I'm hoping He finds someone To help him forget Verse 2 The clock is ticking down But I have, lived my life, in minutes The stars they call out loud I can, feel my heart, give in Pre-chorus Oh he wipes away his tears So I don't see them But I feel them He holds my hand tight Like it could save me But I can't be Saved Chorus So I pray When the days cut short and the nights never end When the clouds they part, just to float back again When the rivers dry, but the tears remain I'm hoping He finds someone To help him forget Bridge Forget all the pain Forget all the hurt Forget all the memories That bring back too much Forget all the heartbreak Forget all the loss Just remember my love And remember these words Chorus When the days cut short and the nights never end When the clouds they part, just to float back again When the rivers dry, but the tears remain I'm hoping You find someone Who helps you forget It breaks my heart But I'm hoping You find someone I want you to Find someone Who helps you forget
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    Daddy's Prize

    Jim - Once again, thank you for your input. I appreciate it! kuya - I'm really glad you shared the story with me. I absolutely see where you're coming from....and I'll probably incorporate something more positive in a new bridge (I wasn't too happy with this one). I also loved what you said about the happiest people writing the saddest songs. It really is a fascinating thought isn't it! Onewholovesrock - Thank you for your suggestions. As i said above, I'm working on the bridge. Let's see how that goes! 🙂 mick70 - Thank you for your kind review!! 😄
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    Daddy's Prize

    Thank you all so much! I'm really glad you understood my vision for this song. DonnaMarilyn - You've given me some great suggestions and I really appreciate that. I can definitely see, what you said, fit into the song so.....Thank you!
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    Don't Need'em Anymore

    This lyric has some beautiful lines...but to be honest I can't really grasp the whole meaning. The image thing song dorms is very hazy. It is poetic but.....i think it would be better if you developed it a bit. As Malcolm said - having no use for your heart and eyes makes sense....but the rest comes off as weird. An option could be that you centre the song around....what use is a broken heart? Or something of that sort. This could really turn into great though!
  11. Anna J

    Sin city

    I really like this. It's a fun lyric and has a nice ring to It!
  12. Anna J

    Daddy's Prize

    Note - Some of you have been worried by the content of this lyric, and i just wanted to clarify that this piece is not autobiographical in any way. Most of my pieces aren't. This is a subject matter that resonated with me and affected me deeply.....which is why I tried to portray it. Verse 1 The innocence in her heart Dying away in her eyes The memory of a laugh Fading away with the times And she whispers She screams Invisible To those seen To those seeing Chorus Daddy's prize was a kiss a cry Now haunting visions keep her up at night He took the colours left just black and blue And the red stains staining the mattress too Verse 2 The fire in her heart Burning down to smoke The gift of time Burdening her hopes And she whispers She screams Invisible To those seen To those seeing Chorus Daddy's pleasure was a kiss a cry Now haunting visions keep her up at night He took the colours left just black and blue And the red stains staining the mattress too Bridge And she screams out for help She calls out for love Hidden by glass Hidden and crushed Chorus Daddy's prize was a kiss a cry Now haunting visions keep her up at night He took the colours left just black and blue And the red stains staining the mattress too
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    I Can Teach You To Fly - edited

    Thank you all so much for your suggestions! They have been really helpful. Most of you have pointed out that a bridge would enhance the song. I have added one....and hopefully it develops the song a bit more! In an attempt to clarify the theme of the song.....it is about a person suffering from depression or suicidal tendencies but it can be taken even more broadly as well. Through the chorus....I wanted to portray the three main themes of hope (stars, light, moon, tide all show light in the dark and consistency in change), freedom (world, skies) and living life (dream, fly, love). That is also one of the reasons i don't want to shorten the chorus as was suggested. Another line I'd like to clear up is "And you bared.......hide away your heart." A soul is considered to be the purest of entities. What i meant to say was that the world was so brutal in nature that it stripped her of her innocence and purity till she was left bitter and upset. Through all the disappointment she has faced, she has learnt to hide away her heart, that is her hopes and desires. This is reiterated in the next line which says her castles crumbled and fell. Heart can also mean that she does not open herself up to love. In the next verse this idea is continued as she carves away her hopes and desires leaving behind a void. But her resentment at this is so strong, that it takes its toll on her mind (shards, they pierce your mind). Hope this cleared everything up a bit!
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    I Can Teach You To Fly - edited

    Sorry about that. It was a typo ☺. It's only teach
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    I Can Teach You To Fly - edited

    FrakeeLeeFabian - Thanks! I had been thinking over a bridge.....but i really couldn't figure out one that didn't sound over the top. I will....hopefully sort that out though! mick70 - Thanks for tge kind words! I'm glad you liked it
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