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  1. https://soundcloud.com/alexxxiii/revolution This is just a song I started a while ago and have been mulling over. Was stuck on the lyrics and just had the guitar riff going over in my head, but finally managed to finish it, so really looking for feedback! Thanks Lyrics: I tell myself to keep breathing Inhale once more exhale again Remind my heart to keep beating In case this time it forgets We’ve got kids growing up on TV screens Watching other people achieve their dreams Watching but they don't hear a thing Fueling old minds with hatred Turning on the news just to fall back to sleep Watching but they ain't listening Times change but they don’t move on Still stuck with the same bygones And we’re wondering why we still ain’t got real change Wars rage like fires burning on our fears what they thrive on Are you really wondering why things stay the same We are the people We are the noice We are the voice We are the sound as we scream it loud we are the people we are alive we are arrived we are born, to live our revolution What we gonna do when the world runs out of time Are you gonna run around with a sign saying the end is nigh What we gonna do when we finally realise We can’t just sit around mumbling in corners pointing at the other side take a deep breath in then breathe it out again stop pretending that everything's alright and get up, stand up, make the most of your time Chorus
  2. Better Than Revenge

    Thanks for the reply @Aneanani! I totally understand that the lyrics are slightly confusing. I was intending it to mean that saying goodbye to someone toxic and moving on is better than trying to get revenge on them as it only hurts them and you more - but I understand the line does seem quite confusing. I guess there is still the residue of the relationship - hence the lines like "not that bitter", but I understand it is slightly on the fence about who's perspective it's from and who is over the relationship etc - thank you so much for the thorough feedback, really helpful
  3. Better Than Revenge

    Thank you so much @Barneyboy for such detailed feedback - so helpful!! I totally understand that it may be slightly confusing. I think the idea is that in the first verse I was waiting around for someone who was dragging things out. They weren't coming home and weren't calling me up. Then they said "I'll live without you" and so I said goodbye and left the situation. And so, the second verse is then after we've parted ways, hearing them asking about whether I'm struggling from it and me saying they won't see me upset or hurting because I've moved on. in the Chorus, the "you want to see me cry" -> sort of saying that actually moving on is better than making someone suffer and want you back and so I've moved on but this person is trying to see me hurting and I'm just saying if you want to see me sad then you're not going to because I really have said goodbye and moved on and they need to too, as "Goodbye is better than revenge". In the third verse....the "in my memories part" was just saying that they will always be there (you shouldn't try to erase memories of that person as that is not really coping with the breakup) but you keep that in the past and you're not going to revisit it by going back to that person i.e. you have moved on. Then in the second pre-chorus link: the idea is that that person is not going to be going home with you like they used to as you're not with them and you're not calling them when you pick up your phone like you used to i.e. you're calling other people and seeing other people because you're not dwelling on it and you've said goodbye. I think the idea is that saying goodbye and actually moving on is better than trying to make them suffer or getting them back for things (i.e revenge - as this isn't really moving on at all) - but I get the confusion. Thanks again
  4. Better Than Revenge

    Thanks @chazmataz! I totally agree about the "Goodbye - eye" - will think about how to make this fit better!
  5. A song I came up with. The melody is a bit too high for me but I liked it so decided to try and sing it as best I could! Just looking for comments about the songwriting/lyrics/memorability/flow etc. thanks Lyrics: Seven hours and still no callI wait for youI been out in the freezing coldJust like I doNow you say you'll live without meoh baby, you ain't go a clueSo I'll take all my love awayand watch what you doI heard you've been running roundasking after my nameTurns out when I kicked you outLife just wasn't the sameYou really gonna stand there cryingstop whining, I ain't got the timeI did everything you asked and trust me I'm doing fineYou're going home on your ownCause I lost your number When I deleted it from my phoneGoodbye, it's better than revengeI don't want any part of your loveand I sure don't miss your friendsif you wanna see me cry, then you're wasting your time'cause goodbye, it's better than revengeLetters and Old photographsyou posted right to my dooryou really think those little thingswould leave me wanting you moreI don't want to think about youno thank you, what's it going to takeyou'll live in my memories in the past you will stayYou're getting drunk on your owncause you're not the one I call when I pick up my phone[chorus]Heartbreak only leads to one thing (Revenge)And heartbreak only leaves you one thing (Revenge)But I'm not that bitter, So I won't do the sameBecause revenge is for heartbreakersbut I'm better than revenge[Chorus]
  6. Walls?

    Thanks @Oswlek! Thanks for the detailed critique - so helpful as I never would have noticed this, but when I listen back to the points you've said you are right and it does sound slightly odd, so thank you so much!! Will have a play around and see what I can do. Would love it if you could let me know what chord you think, if you have time. Thanks again
  7. Walls?

    Just a song a wrote yesterday and roughly recorded - so very lo-fi. But just looking for critique on the song itself/lyrics/ melody/ repetitively etc! Thanks Recorded live take of vocals and guitar in one mic and harmonies added in post - so very raw/rough again. Lyrics: Aren’t you tired on building boxes to put people in Judging by names and skins and places where lives begin Aren’t you tired Aren’t you lonely Looking out from within It all looks so exhausting Your compartmentalising How would you feel To be defined Do you know of the things we could achieve If you’d only open your mind And, Let down your walls Let people in Let down your walls Let love win Are you scared of what you don’t know Of the things that you’ve been told Ignorance is blissful But kindness defeats it all How would you feel To be defined Do you know of the things we could achieve If you’d only open your mind Don’t build a wall Walls don’t solve a thing Please don’t build a wall Walls solve nothing So let down your walls Let people in Let down your walls Let people in, Let Love win, Let people in, Let love win, Let people in
  8. Beating Hearts

    Ah @Mike B -think it might be the slight reverb - thanks for drawing this to my attention! Thanks @claytonbus, will do!
  9. She - Collaboration

    Thanks @Music by Drew - you are totally right about the intro. We recorded separately and so fitting the parts together proved a task and we decided to stick with the longer intro for simplicity, but I totally understand what you're saying - and thanks for the suggestions on how to fix it Thanks @lyriCAL
  10. New collaboration with a great singer-songwriter, Revival Choir. All criticism very welcome - thanks
  11. Fake Love

    Thanks @Oswlek! I am experimenting with various arrangements to give it a fuller sound - but thanks for the suggestions :)) I will post the lyrics now! Thanks for listening
  12. Beating Hearts

    Thanks @Mike B! Do you mean when the harmony comes in, as I did not double the vocal all the way through, it's just played live with the guitar on one mic? I am going to come back to it and look over the lyrics too - thanks for the suggestions
  13. Beating Hearts

    Thanks @Music by Drew! I will give this a go - thanks for the suggestion
  14. My new song - looking for criticism on the song itself, the lyrics, the memorability etc. The song is about the friends I grew up with and how it feels to come home! Thanks Lyrics: I’m gonna run, gonna run run away far away from this town Back to the place that I know where I’m home and my friends all around They know my heart they know my mind The show my love they keep me kind He’s the wind he’s the rain and the ripples on my face are them When we go out we go in we drink up then we do it again In my life everything seems to change But those familiar faces stay the same They stay the same No they never change They give me rhythm Hearts beat as one I feel the rhythm Like a beating drum Souls bound together never far apart We all like by our beating heards They give me love give me love like they’ve nothing to lose And yes they’re a mess but the best they’ve got nothing to prove They are the blood in my veins and they make up my skin The are the places I’ve been And in the end we’re all human In the end we’ll all the same Despite the difference that lies between us The same old rhythm runs through out veins They are the rhythm Hearts beat as one I feel the rhythm Like a beating drum Souls bound together never far apart We’re all bound by our beating hearts
  15. Fake Love

    Thanks @RoadDog! I've uploaded them to the track now!!
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