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The realrush

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About The realrush

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  • Birthday December 4

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    Soundclick or songramp

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  • Musical Influences?
    SRV, Bob Dylan, Clapton, Van Morrison, Bonamassa
  1. Streets of Coeur D'alene

    I too found this lyric to be very descriptive and relatable! It made me think of times in my life that elicit such pleasant memories. If I had any criticism it would be the bridge I found the word choices a little strained but over-all a very nice lyric!
  2. All's Fair (revised 4-18-17)

    I really like the verses. Very simple and profound. I love the structure and am curious how it plays out in the music. I think the chorus needs some better word choices after the hook. I think for balance you need another verse about love. I like the comparison of war and love the similarities are quite real. With some tweeking this could be execellant lyric in my opinion! Nice job!
  3. Lay Down Your Burden

    Thanks to all of you folks that commented! I've taken some of the suggestions and edited the lyric! I think it's better! Thanks!
  4. Lay Down Your Burden

    Thanks Arthue for the listen and comments. I think you are right I think I will come up with a better drum and bass track that is more interesting, trim down the guitar solos, and shorten the song.
  5. Tomorrow Man

    I loved the lyric but was confused about who Tomoorow Man is or was. This message can't be stated enough to counter balance the attack on our environment. Excellent job!
  6. REDEMPTION

    Truth never grows old and this lyric is choke full of if truth. The introspection is right on point and heartfelt! Baring one's soul is cathartic and cleansing. I would guess this lyric made you feel better about what has transpired in your life. It would do that for me anyway. I can hear the chorus in a rock context belting out Redemption. The verses are reflective and self- effacing! I enjoyed the read and commend you on your ability to understand your weaknesses and make amends to those who were hurt along the way! Excellent !
  7. Rise up (Original Composition)

    I guess I'm coming in after the re-mix and I find the song interesting and mesmerizing. I'm more of a straight blues guy but I appreciate some orchestral music to broaden my horizons. Is this meant to include vocals or is this the finished product? Are these midi files or did you play any of the instruments ? I'm not well versed on this kind of music but I like what I heard.
  8. Smoke

    I really like the mood and pace of the song. The vocals matched the mood as well. The lyrics are confusing in that I never got the meaning. There was nice imagery but some of the wording was cryptic and vague. So without understanding the message I was floundering for something to grab hold of. Interesting song though!
  9. http://www.soundclick.com/arealrushus This one was recorded several years ago.The song is too long with too much guitar but I'm going to record a newer version but I was wondering if I should use the basic track or come up with something new? Any suggestions ? Lay Down Your Burden When I was young and so confused And all my trust had been abused I reached despair and could not cope Gave up on life and saw no hope chorus Laid down my burden at the feet of my creator Embraced my life stopped being a spectator Turned over my fears...released my pain Infused by the light...cleansed by the healing rain verse 2 As I grew older I found the love of my life Took on the world as a husband and wife We went for the fortune and the fame When we failed we suffered the shame chorus Laid down my burden at the feet of my creator Embraced my life stopped being a spectator Turned over my fears...released my pain Infused by the light...cleansed by the healing rain verse 2 Harden by time there are fewer delusions Gave up results and unwanted intrusions In fear of the unknown I look to the light A calming beacon thru the darkest nights
  10. Lay Down Your Burden

    Lay Down Your Burden verse 1 When I was young and so confused And all my trust had been abused I reached despair and could not cope Gave up on life and saw no hope chorus Laid down my burden at the feet of my creator Turned over my fears...released my pain Embraced my life stopped being a spectator Infused by the light...cleansed by the healing rain verse 2 As I grew older I found the love of my life Took on the world as a husband and wife We went for the fortune went for the fame When we failed we suffered the shame chorus Laid down my burden at the feet of my creator Turned over my fears...released my pain Embraced my life stopped being a spectator Infused by the light...cleansed by the healing rain verse 3 Harden by time there are fewer delusions Gave up results and unwanted intrusions In fear of the unknown I look to the light A calming beacon thru the darkest nights
  11. Regress

    When I read a lyric that I don't understand or don't agree with. I go for the basics. Are there good rhymes , does it flow nicely, did it convey a clear message, are there good words choices, Etc. I can say that verse 1 was well written and the chorus was exceptional but verse 2 got into some obtuse references and wording that lost me. I heard the message and doomsday scenario clearly but the problem for me were the word choices in the first 2 lines of verse 2. I did enjoy the lyric but the message not so much!
  12. F%$K Love

    Wow Emily! I have felt that emotion and I'm glad it didn't guide my future dalliances! Love is multi faceted! It can bring you joy and misery ! I always perferred the joy but experienced the misery with as much passion as your lyric suggests. Well written lyric with good flow and no ambiguity of message. I hope you find the joy in love the other side of thepain and misery in love!
  13. Slow Rolling Flame

    Thanks Spanishbuddha for your comments and suggestions. I went ahead and made the verse in question a bridge. Also the red dress comes off rather quickly and hits the floor. Anyway it's just a reflecrion of an evening of debauchery! Emily, well I 've come to undertstand that your sensibilities can be bruised and for that I'm sorry! This was a wild night out and an observation of what I saw. I don't know the histories of all the ladies nor their life situations. Not every lyric written has to have a social conscience and this is one of those. I'm an observer and I try to capture what I see in many situations that aren't always pretty or for that matter tasteful but it's a craft and I keep working on it! Sorry to offend! Arias, I was reminded in your comments about a creative writing teacher I had who disagreed vehemently with my subject matter but gave me an A for following his instructions completely! It's just an observation and not an indictment of strippers or the profession. This was just my take on a evening out with a bunch of guys doing something we don't normally do! Life is messy and I'm sorry it disturbed your moral compass the wrong way!
  14. Slow Rolling Flame

    After a night at a gentlemens club this little ditty was the result! A Slow Rolling Flame Verse 1 Heed my warning, She's a snake in the grass When you hear her rattle you better haul ass If you hesitate she'll take you by surprise Inject you with her venom cut you down to size Chorus A slow rolling flame dancing on desire Calls out your name a baptism by fire A smoldering ember ready to ignite Fan the flames ...your hers tonight verse 2 She's all dolled up and ready to strike Got her red dress on , wound up tight When the dress hits the floor , she's in control She slithers, she shakes, she works the pole Chorus Chorus A slow rolling flame dancing on desire Calls out your name a baptism by fire A smoldering ember ready to ignite Fan the flames ...your hers tonight Verse 3 With passion to burn ..unquenchable thirst She puts you in trance...you won't be the first Demons will dance like sparks in the dark Inhibitions will melt ...your senses will arc Bridge When you enter her world of flashing lights Loud music , exotic creatures of the night Embrace the experience or run like hell These are the modern day Jezebels chorus Chorus A slow rolling flame dancing on desire Calls out your name a baptism by fire A smoldering ember ready to ignite Fan the flames ...your hers tonight
  15. Punch Clock

    This lyric is depressing in that it introduces a trouble guy who finds his life has no meaning and all of sudden he grabs a machine gun and mows down scores of folks. So much missing from the story that would give credence to such a drastic move. There has to be a more drastic set of events to move one to this sort of action I would think?
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