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  1. Murphster

    Tornadoes

    This is a song I wrote a while ago and completely forgot about. I actually entered it into a lyrics contest last year and it didn't do well at all (I think my only attempt at the lyrics contest) I just filed it away as no good and never thought about it again. That is until the other night when it popped into my head and I played in on the piano, and my wife said it was really nice and asked me who's song it was! So that means this song is either; A.) Stolen. Always a possibility. B.) Better than I gave it credit. I guess this would have been my 1+1 were I entering this month. This is just a very quick and dirty demo I recorded this afternoon, my lack of piano skills made apparent, but I did record the piano and then the vocals in just a single take each. Would appreciate any feedback. Cheers The smell from the last lick of paint Still lingers in air I breathe The taste of your lips now so faint A hint to motivate, make me believe Windows now fixed for the view Been watching the road for a while This house now rebuilt, it sleeps two And it’s waiting here for you, to bring your style Then the wind will rise and kick up dust and mud, Paint skies above in shades of rust and blood, Turn and twist our world around, But we’ll stay strong and stand our ground, for one more round And we won't hide from tornadoes tonight The sounds from the last night we spent Still echo through halls like a ghost While morning brings light and repent We will stay here on the edge, and keep it close. Then the wind will rise and kick up dust and mud, Paint skies above in shades of rust and blood, Turn and twist our world around, But we’ll stay strong and stand our ground, for one more round And we won't hide from tornadoes tonight We will ride on tornadoes tonight Together we’ll understand, that life may not turn out like we planned There’s something inside us both, that needs to see our world against the ropes We just need to hold on tight… Then the wind will rise and kick up dust and mud, Paint skies above in shades of rust and blood, Turn and twist our world around, But we’ll stay strong and stand our ground, for one more round And we won't hide from tornadoes tonight We will ride on tornadoes tonight We can take on tornadoes tonight Tornadoes tonight.
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    Rhymes 8

    My relies are a pain in the arse Cos when I'm out cutting the grass They sit in the shade Drinking rum 'n lemonade And watch me burn up in the sun. They treat me like I'm their personal slave They don't let me shower or bathe So I smell like a tip My clothes are all ripped I've forgotten what it feels to have fun My relies are a pain in the arse Revenge is most definitely on the cards I'm biding my time This place will be mine I'll take back my life and be free My relies are now underground Locked up where they'll never be found All bound up with chain Tight enough to bring pain I taunt them with rum daiquiri My life has turned into a mess The guilt and the sorrow a test I must let them go Forgive and forgoe They deserve to be free of this farce I open the door to their hole The stench of the rot down below I realise right there I'd forgotten the air My relies are a pain in the arse. Next: Elon Musk isn't real
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    Collaboration Challenge: Emotional Impact

    So we have what I now consider to be a final demo I guess, but am in that stage where I think I have worked on this song for a day too long and need to stop listening to it for a while. It is absolutely the most amount of tracks I have ever put into a song, and been quite an experience keeping a handle on it all at times. SongWolfe has given me some awsome lyrics, and while I wasn't sure at first, they have really grown on me through the writing and recording of this. A great sign and I think a pretty decent song to be honest, but who knows? It's hard to tell at this stage. We have a couple of other ideas on the go, so time to have a look at those now I think. Great so far!
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    Best Movies Related to Music

    My favourite music documentary is "Amy", the story of Amy Winehouse. Heartbreaking but inventive documentary which features some great music and often raw Amy performances. I ignored her music when she was at her peak, but this documentary shows clearly what a supreme talent she had for writing songs and singing. With no tricks or playing with time it is just a straightforward telling of her life, in her own words, and leaves the impression that we actually did lose an awful lot when she was led down the wrong path.
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    Best Movies Related to Music

    Hmmmm... I watched it after it came out, a South African friend of mine recommend it to me. As a movie it is great, well made and tells an almost unbelievable story in a good way. As a documentary it certainly takes a lot of liberties and plays with time a little too much for my liking. Sorry to bust sny bubbles, but wasn't quite as "lost" as the movie would like to think. In fact he seems to have experienced quite a following in Australia during the time the documentary suggests he was unknown and toured here a few times during that time. I think the South Africans brought his music to Aus with him. Still a great movie, but I did feel a little cheated when I found out afterwards.
  6. Results are in..... Firstly I would like to say a big thank you to MopTop, Peko, spanishbuddah and Zeligovitch for voting this month. As well as a thank you for everyone who entered. Unfortunately we have two disqualifications this month, neither submitted scores for the competition. It makes me feel a little better than neither were in contention for a top 3 finish, although The S you were close in the end. So, for the awards... A huge congratulations to Ironknee who has bagged first place with "His Eyes". In second we have Paul with "Uber Love" and in third "Always You" from lyD. Congrats to all three, some excellent songs this month and really good effort in finishing above some of these. You have all three won free entry into next month's competition and a chance to fight it out for the song of 2018 contest and all the fame and glory that could bring. Cheers all! We are now in the scoring phase of the August 1+1 contest and as always that sense of fun and jovial humour give way to seriousness and an ultra-competitive spirit that sees dogs eat dogs and every Muser eat each other. Send me your scores via PM (click my name and select message for any newbies out there). The polls will remain open until Friday 7th, at Midnight Eastern Standard Time, US. Give each song a score out of 10, where 10 is the highest and 1 is the lowest - 10 would generally be "Oh. My. God. Freakin' amazing man." and 1 would basically suck. Use the template that follows to make things easier, just put the votes before each name. As per the handy hint I have provided free of charge below... 10.0 - REM - Shiny Happy People 7.0 - Prince - Can you see my neeple? 4.0 - Beyonce - This is a song for my sheeple 1.0 - Miley Cyrus - Here's the church, here's the steeple, look inside, here's the people. Now, this month's talented contestants are; The S - A Burden On Me Donnie - When Daddy’s Drinking Moso - Say You Wanna Be With Me fabkebab - doings and beings ScenesFromPalacio - Swimming Boy frevm - Runnin RoadDog - Bombs Away discatticus - The Price I Pay GocartMoz - The Dream Joan - Down from the Trees lyD - Always You PaulCanuck - Uber Love Ironknee - His Eyes Please vote, even if you haven't entered. If you have and you don't vote then unfortunately the rules dictate that you will be disqualified and I think that you get expelled from the Muse forums forever (need to check that actually as that may not be true). Best of luck to all. Welcome to the August Song Contest!!! This month we are going to be having a 1+1 contest. For any new members, or even long-time lurkers who still haven't plucked up the required courage to come and say hi, 1+1 means the entry must be only one voice and one instrument. Think accoustic guitar or piano, or be brave and just use a kick drum, or even a Lute. I will personally award one bonus point for any entry that relies on nothing more than a Voice and a Cello. TO ENTER: You must post your song in this thread.  The timeline is as follows: Entries will be accepted now through Midnight Eastern Standard Time (EST) Friday August 31st 2018. Voting (scorecards) will take place Saturday Sept 1st through Midnight EST Friday Sept 7th, 2018. Official Warnings: Please don’t start scoring until I officially post the scoring instructions. You must score all other entries or your entry will be disqualified from the contest and you may receive hate mail and unwanted, unordered, pizzas to your front door for the whole of September. I will post the results shortly after scoring is completed. Please review the revised rules, pinned in this forum. I have taken it upon myself to add some new guidelines (not rules) just for this month's contest and please be sure to pay attention to the following (breaking these guidelines won't disqualify you, but it might make me think negative thoughts and my Doctor has asked me to try not to anymore). Lenth: Songs should be no more than 4:00 in length. It's a 1+1, if I could I would disqualify every song that lasts more than 3:30. There is no need. If you want to noodle for 2 minutes then order a Thai from Uber Eats. Nobody really wants to hear you do it. Topic: I hate the world as much as anyone does. But what the world need now is love, love, love. So let's try and spread some with some happy, hopeful songs. It might help you to remember how things used to be. Skillz: I don't care about musical skills in the 1+1 contest, and I would love to encourage all voters to think the same. I want to hear brilliant songs and I like to think they can shine through any lack of instrumental genius. You could just hammer chords every 4th beat with your fists for all I care (like Mrs Murphster trying to make the Microwave go quicker). I think the 1+1 is an opportunity for the song to take the limelight, it's all about melody and words. When posting your song to the Songs Feedback Forum, please include: •Title •Writer Credits •Link to the actual song. Embedded SoundCloud or YouTube is so much easier, but I get we all have our own thing so as long as the link works (please check it does actually work). Please include the lyrics on your post. Videos are permitted. (Voters are encouraged to refrain from watching any video until after they've scored the song.) All Musers are welcome, nay encouraged, actually compelled, to submit songs as contestants or if you can't then please score the songs as non-contestants. Any questions or problems should be sent to me, Murphster via private message. (Please try and limit your problems to be contest related, I don't want to spend another month being the go-between in another Muser's custody battle). The best of luck to everyone. I am looking forward to hearing your songs! Murphster
  7. I have been going for a journey through YouTube today and as rarely happens, I stumbled across something interesting. A series by record producer Rick Beato where is deconstructs a song each episode and tries to work out what makes it great. Dubious? Yeah, so was I going in. But I have to say it is pretty awesome as a learning aid, in fact it is a little better than awesome. He started in January and there are 38 episodes to watch so far, I will post the first...
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    Collaboration Challenge: Emotional Impact

    It's interesting. SongWolfe has provided some lyrics that have been challenging, even forced me to write to the feelings rather than the sounds of the words. Which I guess is the point of this contest. Although the one that is first off the block is rapidly turning into a piece of Prog Rock! Quite a departure for me at least, but I like the idea of finally putting my early Pink Floyd influences to good use. It's fun. And as always very difficult, and a bit stressful, taking someone's work and messing with it. I have returned the favour however, and it is clear the branches of our collaboration may yield more fruit yet.
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    August 1+1 Song Contest - Results are In.

    Sorry, I should of sent you a message. I realised earlier that's what I should have done. My fault. I do feel better that you wouldn't have been top 3 this time, but you would have been 4th to be honest. Sorry.
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    August 1+1 Song Contest - Results are In.

    Okay, Results time! Firstly I would like to say a big thank you to MopTop, Peko, spanishbuddah and Zeligovitch for voting this month. As well as a thank you for everyone who entered. Unfortunately we have two disqualifications this month, neither submitted scores for the competition. It makes me feel a little better than neither were in contention for a top 3 finish, although The S you were close in the end. So, for the awards... A huge congratulations to Ironknee who has bagged first place with "His Eyes". In second we have Paul with "Uber Love" and in third "Always You" from lyD. Congrats to all three, some excellent songs this month and really good effort in finishing above some of these. You have all three won free entry into next month's competition and a chance to fight it out for the song of 2018 contest and all the fame and glory that could bring. Cheers all!
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    August 1+1 Song Contest - Results are In.

    Three hours left to vote and we are still missing two sets of scores from contestants.... If you haven't voted please do.
  12. Anyone else listen to this podcast? https://www.sodajerker.com/podcast/ If you don't already you probably should, over a 100 back catalogue episodes now to listen to with interviews from some of the greatest songwriters ever to have lived. Some of the more recent highlights I have enjoyed were The Lumineers, Jason Isbell and the latest episode with Noel Gallagher, which while maybe not as informative as previous interviews is bloody entertaining haha. They interview such a broad range of songwriters from a wide range of.genres there is something for everyone. Personally it has opened my ears to a much more diverse range of sounds and I am so grateful for that. Worth a listen folks... Cheers.
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    Sodajerker on Songwriting Podcaat

    I have just listened to Paul McCartney while having a lovely breakfast, and it was very good, awesome in fact (the podcast, but the breakfast was nice too). There is just something about hearing Paul McCartney speak about music, he just commands attention. Not because he is loud, or brash, nor because he is a particularly great speaker, but because you just cannot deny his sheer genius and capability and thus every word is worth listening to. It could, and probably will, end up listening to this 20 times this year. I wholly recommend it to all.
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    Sodajerker on Songwriting Podcaat

    Not sure if many listen to this Podcast but thought it worth mentioning that episode 122 has just dropped and it is Paul McCartney, which I am sure cannot be anything other than fascinating. Cheers
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    What makes this song great?

    Yeah, he clearly has friends. He has worked in studios and no doubt made contacts with a lot of producers/engineers over the years that he can get things. He will often point out that most of these were recorded into tape, so most have effects already on the track. It is pretty cool for me, I love the little details that he can pull out of a song, for instance a delay on a snare drum. It has been really interesting to just see how these tracks were built. I hope he keeps going with the series and keeps getting some useful material.
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    What makes this song great?

    I agree, it started of so great that song was the right word I think, the epioside 2 Police song especially focussing a lot on the chord progressions and melody. But yes, it does become more about the recording often. I really enjoyed the Police one, Every little thing she does is magic, a surprising choice for ep2 but he is not wrong, it really is a brilliant song. At the risk of sounding old, nobody makes them like that anymore! I did enjoy the Adele one too, seeing the actually pro-tools stems up on the screen was really interesting and a bit cool. Glad you liked it.
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    Chord Progressions

    Three chords. Although they did chicken out and change it up slightly for the Middle 8 - In fact while they do occasionally add a 4th chord as a quick change up to the chorus, I always think of this as a three chord song. The first time I heard this song I knew I had heard it before somewhere. I actually went on a mad mission with this to try and figure out what made this song so familiar, or at least what made this song work so well. I worked out that the chord progression was actually the same as the first three chords in Coldplay's Trouble (don't judge me but I still will argue that Coldplay's debut album, Parachutes, is a bloody great album full of brilliant songs). I don't think it is a coincidence that both songs work, these three chords do something, and were I smarter I might know why. As I said before, I consider this to be an amazing song, I spend far more time than I should trying to figure out why. And again, I play this a lot and I never get bored.
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    Chord Progressions

    Two chords. He was so confident that he didn't feel the need to throw a bone and introduce a new chord for a middle 8. I sometimes play this song on my acoustic guitar and never once get bored, and I am a shite guitar player with none of the skills that he had. Probably my favourite Prince song if truth be told, while the competition is fierce, there is something about this that is just perfect.
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    Best opening line to a song

    Adele - Hello. "Hello, it's me." To be honest, that is about as perfect as it gets.
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    Fire

    Just an observation really, doesn't need a new thread I suppose. Sometimes I listen to a song in the car and something brings the songwriter out in me, this was one and I just really love the idea. It is a song by Peking Duk and is called "Fire". The thing that I like about it is despite the chorus building up to the word "Fire" she doesn't actually sing it. In fact in a song called "Fire" the word isn't mentioned at all, that potentially isn't so rare, but the way the chorus almost says it for me is quite a clever choice. Simple things, simple minds etc.. probably true but still it has added to my list of "things I want to do with a song" the idea of doing the same. Anyway, it's a pretty decent song too.
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    keep'em or delete'em?????

    Kanye keeps them. And every morning he wakes up and changes one of them, he then even deletes the published track from Spotify and replaces it with the new version. I guess a bit like sneakily replacing a track with a better version during a monthly contest here. I love the idea of deleting them. But I don't, there may always be a reason to go back one day. Putting them on a external drive that then gets put in the garage, under a lot of junk, it probably good enough to keep them away from temptation.
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    Who Loves You?

    This such a Paul song, recorded so well and the harmonies are excellent. I like it, really simple structure, nice and short, and such wonderful use of words, a song that can make me smile. A word that can usually be used to sum up your writing is "Clever". Nice one. Cheers I think I know what is causing the confusion with the opening line, and although on first listen I did "get it". I think it was because you made the heart gendered, and called it she. I can see how it might cause confusion. An excercise for anyone questioning that would be to try it like this; I'd like to call your heart to testify No need to swear it in - it won't lie I only have one question And I count on it's reply... who loves you. I am not saying it should be changed, I love the idea of referring to it as she. I just think this example puts it into perspective. My interpretation is that the girl is the jury, her heart is the witness, I think Paul is just trying to convince someone to listen to their heart.
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    Last day of our lives

    It sounds awesome. I mean really really good job of the recording, and instruments nicely played. I like the sound of the vocals the way you have them doubled like that works for this song. Nice guitar sound, great playing. The outro is cool and again fits this song do well. 7minutes? Look, the length of a song isn't an artistic issue at all, the song is what it is. What it is is a sales issue, i.e. what are you trying to achieve? If you have ambition to write and record your own prog rock album then you have nothing to worry about. But if you were looking for a track to be your resume, to sell yourself and sell your music then you just need to think like a salesperson too and think about how to increase the amount of people who will actually listen to your song, keeping it below 3:30 mins is always going to help achieve that goal. There are no rules, just remember to work out who your target is and try to put yourself in their shoes. Great stuff. Nice one.
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    "The Memory Lingers On"

    I like it, quite a lot actually. I can hear this a little faster, and sang by a female singer to be honest. Although this might actually be because it reminds me of "The Sundays" at least the chorus does. It is a very nice chorus. I would prefer that the third line in the chorus started later, I get you chose to not let that progression resolve before the 3rd line and it does make make it more interesting, I actually think it would feel better were it just played out straight. The last line of the verses sounds awkward, maybe need to shorten them/tighten them up. I like the middle 8 I think what you have is fine and would work being sung over an extended instrumental. Needs another instrument for the instrumental, and I do hear harmonica maybe. All in all it is a good song, I would definitely work on this and see what you can turn it into. Nice one.
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    Tornadoes

    Thanks everyone. I do get embarrassed by hearing nice things said about anything I do. I don't consider myself a singer, never have done, just kinda don't have choice when wanting to get my songs out there I guess. Not until I have songs that I think are bordering on great and I can confidently hit AirGigs and pay for someone to sing on my demos. But to hear positive feedback is nice. Thanks Lol, yes, a little too much reverb. Thanks Paul, appreciate the listen Now that is embarrassing. Thanks though! I do like Roger Waters voice. I have to confess a sin that I never really got into Cohen, even though I know I should. He was never on my radar. But I used to listen to Pink Floyd "The Wall" every day when I was a kid. There is absolutely no doubt that that album is the biggest influence on me, even though I haven't listened to it in years. Cheers. I don't know Jenny Lewis but thanks for the mention because she is added to my must listen to list now, The biggest turning point for with with regard to writing was hearing a successful writer say he never worries about whether his songs sound like anyone elses. I used to drive myself mad worrying everything I did was ripped off, and maybe it was. But learning to ignore that is the one thing that just lets me move on and keep writing. I appreciate the listen, and the nice words. Thanks very much, it is so helpful to me. Thanks! Great suggestion on removing "then". Again, thanks for the encouragement I get from positive things said about my voice. If anyone wants a vocal tip from me on how to replicate my style I would have to say it mostly comes from Marlboro, and red wine. Probably not something to recommend.. 😉 Cheers.
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