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  1. This version is upgraded from the 1+1 contest entry, but I didn't do very much to it. I added a little piano in the chorus and effects in the Middle 8. I also toyed with some very subtle harmony in the chorus and doubled vocals in the Middle 8. But this isn't really very different from the contest entry. I wanted to do something for 1+1 and spent a few days playing with all the recordings of ideas I have trying to turn one into a song, but in the end I started this from scratch and had it written and recorded in a single morning - first time I have ever done that. The idea was sparked by an article I read about a loneliness epidemic in our cities, seems lots of people just go about their lives with no real friends or companions, it made me feel sad and this just kinda popped into my head. I had no idea if I had a song or not but when I came up with the final line I knew it could be a song. I know that line would turn people off, some folks don't like sad endings I guess, but for me it made this song. Until today I had no idea whether this song was any good, I was half expecting no votes in the contest, I was really interesting in seeing whether anyone actually like it. So glad that some did. Cheers. Any feedback welcome. She never had a moment in her life, her fear would stay away, and let her live. Heading off to work still feeling tired, Seems there’s much to take, but not to give And I can feel it in the... Things that unspoken, all talk of being broken, she can’t turn it round alone. The dream that she's hiding, on the train she is riding, just staring at her phone. She knows she’ll be alone…before love comes. He wouldn’t know a day spent free from pain, he walks the streets to breathe the city in. Watching people and dreaming of the day, where he might finally be one of them And I can see it in the... Way that he holds up, the life that he sold up, he lost so long ago. The friends that have all gone, the streets that have moved on, a world that doesn’t slow. He knows he’ll be alone…before love comes. I see all the lonely people that this city wasn’t built to hold. Side by side on the train, in the rain, just waiting till they get too old. Just a little smile to break the ice, could really spark to life a better world. But I know it from the... Way he's avoiding, the line she is joining, and she won't turn around. There’s something that's keeping, their chances so fleeting, the ways to see them bound. They'll both be in the ground...before love comes. Before love comes.
  2. November 1+1 Winners Announced

    My votes went to Triffid, Ironknee and DonnaMarilyn. I was voting this competition on song structure, lyrics, and how each one made me feel at the time. I guess that is the tricky one because different songs work differently depending on my mood too. Triffid was my favourite, and that was really down to it being about a little kid, something that is easy to relate to for me. It was a great idea and executed well. Well paced, structurally sound and as always a nice voice to carry it off. Really nice. DonnaMarilyn, I liked the idea, it was different and I really like someone coming up with a different idea and making it work. It might not be a perfect song but it gets points for sticking to its original idea and doing something with it. To me this is the "hard work" part of songwriting, anyone can get bored and take the song somewhere else cos it is easier. The skill is keeping on working with the original idea. Ironknee, who took a bit of grief for the similarity of this song to another, came up with a nice song. I can't really explain why, it just feels like the best song here, it works. I wish it had a middle 8, it certainly would have been easier to justify its inclusion. I might be swayed by the performance a bit, his voice works really well for this. But like the above song it stayed true to its idea and worked well. Nice one.
  3. Forever Loved

    Nice song Triffid, seems a bit of a cliche to end up writing songs about our kids, but once they come I struggle to find anything else to write about ;-) It's hard to say anything about the recording, it is for the 1+1, you are pretty much stuck with what you can do. It would be nice to hear a version of this that can utilise some more instruments and effects. Great song, it was one of my picks.
  4. I Ain't No Angel

    I stayed away from reviewing while the 1+1 contest was running. I like this one, and while the 'Knocking on Heaven's door' thing is there, and it does kind of take me out of the song before it has even started, I think there is a lot more to this song than that. It is pretty good, I liked it really, enough to be one of my picks in the contest. The only thing that really stops this from being a great song is the lack of a Middle 8, it really does need something to break up the 2nd and 3rd verse. This song seems like a AABA kind of song but missing the B. I think the song suffers because of that to be honest. Solid song though, and a great voice that does it justice. Cheers
  5. The Population of Lonelyville

    I remember giving this a decent score in the lyrics competition, though had to go check just to be sure, but glad I did because I like the lyrics - it is a bit of a fun song really! Nice to hear a song move from the the lyrics to being recorded, and to be honest it isn't that far from how I imagined it would sound. Great vocals, really carry off this style very well. Musically it is solid, classic country song done perfectly. Great stuff.
  6. ...or actually one of the best songs ever, and I shall explain. It's that time of year, and I have no idea but presume there have been threads here in previous years asking for the best Christmas song. But obviously as a new kid on the block, and the fact this place isnt the busiest corner of the block like maybe it used to be, I wanted to share. It isn't really supposed to be a name your best Christmas song thread but if that is what happens then who am I to complain? But the point of the thread was to draw attention to the absolute God like songwriting skills that this song offers up. I live in Australia, but not from here, and ever since I arrived here and discovered this song it has become my favourite Christmas song ever, leaving The Pogues in the dust (God forbid!). Because it is not just a good Christmas song, it is really good song. The singer/writer, Tim Minchin, is a comedian, who sings comedy songs and is really good. So hence why during the first verse of this song he gets lots of laughs because the audience are expecting a funny song. But then something strange happens and the chorus becomes something lovely, serious and a little out place. It is a wonderful thing to hear the change in tone, and it just grows from there, and by the end this "comedy" song ends up making my eyes all wet from something. I think it offers a great lesson in changing expectations and doing something different with a chorus. For a comedian it is a brilliant example of top drawer songwriting in my humble opinion. If you like what you hear then definately check out other songs he has done, including his very funny "prejudice" song. But for now this is Tim Minchin singing a song he wrote about living in the UK and heading back to Australia for Christmas... White Wine In The Sun.
  7. November 1+1 Winners Announced

    Before Love Comes Before Love Comes She never had a moment in her life, her fear would stay away, and let her live. Coming home from work still feeling tired, the merging of the days leave lots to give. And I can feel it in the... Things that unspoken, still talk of being broken, she can’t turn it round alone. The dream that she's hiding, on the train she is riding, just staring at her phone. She knows she’ll be alone…before love comes. He wouldn’t know a day spent free from pain, he walks the streets to breathe the city in. Watching people, and dreaming of the day, where he might finally be one of them. And I can see it in the... Way that he holds up, the life that he sold up, he lost so long ago. The friends that have all gone, the streets that have moved on, a world that doesn’t slow. He knows he’ll be alone…before love comes. I see all the lonely people that this city wasn’t built to hold. Side by side on the train, in the rain, just waiting till they get too old. Just a little smile to break the ice, could really spark to life a better world. But I know it from the... Way he's avoiding, the line she is joining, and she won't turn around. There’s something that's keeping, their chances so fleeting, the ways to see them bound. They'll both be in the ground...before love comes. Before love comes.
  8. October Song Contest - RESULTS!

    Really tough contest this month, there were some excellent songs. I personally liked Triffid's the best, but gave the winner my highest score as well. Congrats to everyone who entered. And thanks Paul for organising.
  9. Little Big Lies

    Cheers! Yeah, the lyrics do make sense to me, but maybe a bit too vaugue in places. Maybe not the best really. It is from a father to a son, but also the father thinking about his own father. The apple is the "apple never falls far from the tree saying". The singer when he becomes a dad realises that he has become more like his own dad than he wanted. So the song is effectively, or is trying to be, a "find your own life, don't be like me" song.
  10. Variation in song

    I agree that the Middle 8 here is probably key to pulling this kind of song off. It needs to be a big middle 8, definitely a change of key, whether that is just shifting to the relative minor/major or something more ballsy and a big change of key for effect. I am already a firm believe that the middle 8 is the key to any song anyway to be honest. I have a song that, like most of my songs is unfinished and waiting for the moment, and is based on just two chords. Actually a two chord "progression" stolen from Prince's The Cross, which I really like a lot. I will get round to finishing it one day but it will all depend on finding a middle 8. It could be a really great song, haha, it could be crap. But I love the simplicity of it. I am not a performer however and I can fully imagine how batshit boring thse songs must be to play for the guitarist or bass player.
  11. Variation in song

    I honestly think it is the secret to a classic song, I mean a real gold class song. I spend so much of my writing time just trying songs with the same simple chord structure throughout it is not funny and while I haven't quite pulled one out the bag yet I am getting close! ;-) There are a lot of examples out there, some would surprise people who would never have guessed. For me one of the greatest efforts is a brother and sister from Australia who took three chords from a great, early, Coldplay song and did this. If anyone would ask me to define a perfect song I would probably play them this. It is as close as...
  12. Apparently scores of 1.0 should be rare. I have a real problem this month then because I think I have two of them at least, and really need to think about this some more now. Can't compare them though, all judged on their own merits. I am done listening now, had another pass tonight and I am honestly blown away by the quality of this group of songs. Congrats to everyone and thanks for the opportunity to listen to something new and different tonight. I enjoyed hearing them all. Good luck! ;-)
  13. Where The Sun Keeps Shining Down

    I don't understand how I missed this one. Sorry, just listened to it for the first time now. I have to say that I found this pretty awful ly brilliant. Jesus, what a fantastic song. I find it hard to comprehend how really good this is. It has thrown me a little. First thoughts, and I still haven't read the previous comments yet (but can't wait to) was that it didn't sound heavy enough, I can't really explain that, it just felt too lightweight, is "underproduced" even a thing? I hope that makes some sense. But then the second part of the chorus came and I forgot all about that, in fact I spilled my drink all over my phone. So thanks for that, it's not waterproof. Your fault. I don't know where to pigeonhole this. Maybe a little of Chainsmokers, I think a strong hint of Coldplay just in that cool little riff that kicks in after the middle 8. It is awsome. Just brilliant. Who am I to even offer a critique of this. Well done. Cheers.
  14. Seasons of Life

    This is a song I have waited to say anything about, mainly because it left me unsure exactly what I thought of it. I mean I liked it but wasn't totally sure why. It reminds me a lot of Mary Black, probably never heard of her, she is an Irish singer who has a great voice and is probably a huge influence on Enya and Clannad, and when I saw your profile and saw your influence listed as U2 I thought there may be something there. Anyway, this is a incredibly well produced track, it sounds brilliant. Your voice is superb and really fits the sound so well. This song is so derivative and that might sound like a criticism to you, but I mean it in a really good way. I love songs that deliver what is expected, I think it is the real art of a songwriter is to produce something new while at the same time delivering something old. This song sounds so familiar, so warm and so welcome, while being original enough, which honestly, in my opinion, is the key to a great song. I think it is what most of us are really aiming for. As an example of a song that crosses no boundaries and doesn't really do anything new this is a pretty awesome one. I actually liked the poem, it worked for me, a bit 80's, a bit Wendy & Lisa, but worked in the song. Yes you could lose a minute or so from the running time but it is still a really nice song. A great effort, a big well done. Cheers.
  15. See About A Girl

    I am working through all the songs again on the list, I try to listen to them all on different days to try to be fair and diminish the chances of my own mood getting in the way. So tonight is listen on a Friday with a large glass of wine night, and I had to listen to this another three times. Even with a large glass of wine or four this one just gets better. I have found a fault however, which I had picked up before but just dismissed, at 3:12 you strum a chord which just sounds so wrong, not sure what it is but it sounds a bit wrong. Just an FYI. That is the only thing wrong in this whole song, and I am not scoring on performance really just songwriting. This is such a brilliant song, I had to come back and say it again. I really hope something happens with this song, it is a bit special.
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