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Marc G

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About Marc G

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    Nirvana, Mudhoney, Christian
  1. Sounds good, nice subject.
  2. Jesus Spoke to Me v1: When I was a young boy, Jesus walked with me But I was lost in my old ways, my heart was not yet clean Once I hit some bumpy roads, I called out to His name I found a gift, greater than gold, and this is what He said Chorus: You have to learn to trust in Me I am the Shephard of the sheep There's no need to be distressed, feel at ease Be full of courage, and hear me speak v1: Now that I have been through, trials and stormy rain I've seen the Lord preserv-un', my safe dwelling space Through some rocky valleys, with snakes blocking my way Jesus led me through it, and this I heard Him say Chorus: You've got to give burdens to Me I am the grace that sets you free There's no need to strive, put your mind at peace Quietly listen, and I will speak V3: No other encounter, can comfort so much hurt No other religion, lets you hear God within No money or wordly things, are greater than Him speaking Talk to Him and you will know, the gentle love that comforts souls V1: Now I'm filled with joy and, hope forever more That my savior lives and, Heaven is in store I know there's a purpose, in trials that come my way Because I've seen He exists, by what I've heard Him say (He said...) Chorus: You've got to learn to walk with me, Jesus forever sets you free I know your burdens, come rest in Me Be still and listen, to hear Me speak Chorus: Comfort forever is here with Me Cast all your burdens onto Me Trust in My love, to bare your needs Quietly listen, and hear me speak
  3. Did you remove a song I critiqued? I hope I didn't sound harsh, I like your music.

    1. Qindfish


      No sorry! I took down as someone was asking to hear my stuff on soundclloud and I didn't want them to hear an early demo, in the end the soundcloud deletion didn't even take! Your critiques of more poetic lyrics (if that was you) was a good idea. I was worrying myself about just that! Sorry I could have probably done that in a more elegant way!


      Thanks a lot for listening.

  4. I really liked it. Good production, intro, theme. Lyrics are emotive, with an unusual angle like a previous poster said. A bit melancholy perhaps. The British accent and over-pronunciation compliment the song to me.
  5. Great discussion, I have the same engineering dilemma with mixing.
  6. Only a rare jazz song could be a hit, so I don't know how to critique it from that standpoint. Maybe try adding some more riffs, turning up the volume of background instruments and adding some fun lyrics.
  7. How to give it hit potential? It at least needs some drums and some theatric sounding MIDI effects. Try playing around with a MIDI instrument to add an accompanying melody.
  8. Excellent. I think it has hit potential and you should pedal it around to try and get it played. Mixing, vocals and instruments are superb.
  9. I'll use a critique form: Emotional impact:The guitar work has a mellow and uplifting impact. The lyrics are interesting but not quite hit material in my view. Some of the lyrics are great like "Don't go listening to the Mockingbird " Strength of hook/title: The lyrics "Break down the doors" on their own don't seem good enough to be a hit, not descriptive enough, maybe add some additional lines for the hook. The melody of the chorus hook I would rate at about 8 Originality: Not very original but still good. Sounds like Leonyrd Skynyrd Appeal: Appealing to country fans, about 7 Focus: Verse 1 could use some better lyrics, for example improve "better find your time" to make it more descriptive. The chorus might benefit from some alternating lines Phrasing/cadence: Good but can't hear the word "no" in "no day of glory" very well Arrangement: 7.3, some basic chord progressions but pleasing to the ear Musicianship: 9.5 Vocal delivery: 8, but sounds a little like Trey Parker singing a mock song on South Park Backing vox: 9.8 Recording mix/technical: 10
  10. I think I see what you were trying with the staticky "Radio Freeworld" and it is a good idea, but it would sound better if it had more static. I am trying to think of an Alternative song with a static effect to use as an example but I can't think of one right now. I try to critique from what I think would be likely to have mainstream likability rather than what is good. V! is an ok riff for the prog rock genre. The guitar "embellishments" you do at the end of each V1 riff are a little muddy and hard to hear. And to me it's hard to make out the words of the vocals. I think V1 vocals sound a little monotone. I just heard your other song "Incoming" and it has lots of cool guitar and drum work. I think it also has some of the vocals hard to discern, like this song. I can't tell if it could be a volume problem or something else in the mixing.
  11. Is it good? What don't you like about it? Please rate it between 1 and 10. Lyrics: Nicotine fiend, do you know what I mean? The feelings you get, when you need nicotine, The rush of adrenaline, from fresh dopamine, Tear off my filter, I don't need it to smoke, I'd rather filter your lies, they're all just a joke, Take away my tobacco, but let me proceed, Can't you see I'm in need, I'm a nicotine fiend, If you say I'm an addict, I must disagree, Your allegations are tragic, I'm a nicotine fiend, When my pack is empty, and your bullsh*t is full, I'm feeling that need, to go take a pull, If I lose all I have, including my mother, I'll still have solice, in lighting another. Unpublished work © M.G. and Brother
  12. The production quality is too low to have mainstream success. Also, the song topic would not be interesting to modern mainstream audiences. Needs more varied or interesting drum beats and guitar strums in my opinion.
  13. I think verse 1 needs more notes or strums of guitar to have a more mainstream appeal. And the singing to it needs to be more varied or melodic. The second verse has an appealing melody but the lyrics " You know you wanna, you know you wanna" and " You know you're gonna, you know you're gonna " don't add to the song. Better lyrics would be something poetic or clever about turning it on. The chorus of " I am Radio Free World " would stand out and fit in better if played only once at a time. I can see you have potential for great songs in your talent. Keep it up.
  14. I didn't hear distortion in the original mix but the newer mixes did seem to pop the instruments a little better. It sounds like a good dramatic melody for movie scenes.
  15. Does this song have commercial potential, or if not then why? Please be brutally honest, thanks! Sunny Day Picked up the phone, there's no dial tone Checked the voice mail, there's no one there If I could just, hear your voice once Then it would chase, all the clouds away It's a sunny day, It's a sunny day when you're here Don't go away, go away Brought the fire to my eyes, now I see the way Brought the sun into my world, don't wanna look away Don't look away, look away Road to the beach, heard the car screech Looked all around, you were not found It's a gloomy day, it's a gloomy day when you're gone When you're gone, now you're gone Now the fire has burned out, and I have lost the way My misdeeds have turned your back, what a gloomy day Picked up the phone, there's no dial tone Checked the voice mail, there's no one there If I could just, hear your voice once Then it would chase, all the clouds away From my gloomy day, you're my sunny day, now you're here Now you're here, when you're here Unpublished work © M.G. and Brother