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  1. Greetings Mblack, Welcome to the Muse forum.This is TERRIFIC.Believe it or not,I could not wait till I finish listening to your very well done song which urges me to declare my true admiration.Can't find a nit...lyric is quite meaningful,music is great,your voice and vocals deliver the message neatly.Title is just FANTASTIC. What a unique repentant.Go ahead invest your money nothing to worry about. Best of Luck.
  2. Garyhale's ALABAMAS BEST goes to heaven teeporter's Beer and Cigarettes goes to hell Poor tee how UNFAIR It's just sheer blindness that "Beer and Cigarettes" is reviewed not according to its own merits as a lyric, but based on moral criteria . Well tee,please know that I like it especially the chorus. You managed to deliver the feeling of the imagery in a clear,simple and natural way. "Baby we're good together" said millions of times before and still generates the good shivers when said to one's baby. Yes,smoking cigarettes is a health hazard,but when I listen to a song about beer and cigarettes,I never think of the health effects.Heck... Your unjust preachers overlooked to deal with Garyhale's SINS found in his ALABAMAS BEST.He committed three grave sins according to their logic: 1- He grew drugs. 2-He smoked drugs which is worse more than smoking cigarettes. 3-He spoiled the cop and made him join the gang. Come on guys we are talking art... To make it clear I do love both "Beer and Cigarettes" and "ALABAMAS BEST". I hope that Gary is generous enough to send me two joints,one for me,and one for my"baby" to go with the case of beer you have already sent.Thanks a lot. All in all very well done tee,just remember your song "You Shine" I'm saying it to you. P.S. Sorry that I had to mention ALABAMAS BEST in order to make my point clear.
  3. Greetings Chris, BLIMEY, so good,so good. You really caught me Chris... Thanks a lot for this gift of fine artistry. A manly and heavenly voice singing instinctively just like breathing. Your song brought Joe Cocker (Unchain My Heart) to my mind.Also when other instruments entered the scene,again that reminded me of Skyfall music by Paul Epworth. Please don't get me wrong,you are not in anyway a copy of anybody else. You do have a distinguished elegant style of your own,which I like very much. I simply mean that your craftsmanship as well as the quality of your music is equal to theirs. "Watch My Back" is definitely Radio Ready. It won't be long till I see you holding the Academy / Grammy Awards. So promise to let me take a shot beside you. Although I am not music expert,I realize there are a few seconds of silence within the stream of music,perhaps if the tempo is a bit faster it would remedy that. All in all well done job. I guess many wannabes envy you lucky man . P.S. I listened to "My Baby's Gone" and I like it too.
  4. Hi Paul, Another very good one. I really enjoyed reading this lyric. The title is a hell of hook,takes one straight to the point. It's a very touching theme and the lyric is loaded with fine imagery.Just good stuff. You did it again.
  5. Greetings fabkebab, Thanks a lot for reading and commenting. I do appreciate your input. Regarding the "details" you are missing in the school/cool/fool part,don't you see that the kids had nothing in their minds except the"date" and the "first experience" they were eagerly anticipating... Perhaps details may interrupt the sequence of the "moment". I don't write music,and in case somebody collaborates,I am flexible and open for the music writer's suggestions,as it's got to be easy for him as well. Thanks for the VISIT and hope to see you again
  6. Hi teeporter44 It's really a good song,clear and simple ,penetrates fast. I like you singing Shine/Mine a lot. Good stuff. Best of luck
  7. Greetings IornKnee, I honestly would like to thank you for this Very bad song that I keep listening to. Simply a fine piece of artistry " no compliment " it's true.You made me feel riding the train and also put me in your shoes.I like it especially when you sing"she is in love" as it delivers the message just right. This song is really RADIO READY. Just good stuff.
  8. Greetings ecasasmusic, Very well done song,real piece of artistry. Music,lyrics and S I N G I N G all great. Yours is a promising future . Special regards to Ingrid,her good style reminds me of one good old song " Angel Of The Morning " by Juice Newton. Looking forward to listening more of such a good stuff.
  9. He Happy to see you again It sure eases the pain I dare not complain She Right from the start You promised not to part But you left one broken heart He I hit a separate road Ever since I've lost the code With no one to share the load She It won't do any good to blame I forgive,don't feel any shame You've already kindled the flame He I remember the inside ringing bell How in my soul you could dwell Since you got me under your spell She I can't forget the first time thrill When you chased me down the hill There was a space only you could fill He&She Once life wasn't cruel It was a Monday But we didn't go to school As ever you were bright and cool And I was scared to be but a fool He Young and raw We hid in the straw Damned the law She In all our fitness We shared quietness And let the sky witness He Shaking, I kissed your lips Touched your hips And fire was our tips She I heard horses running in your chest But you passed the test Sure you were the best He&She Once life wasn't cruel It was a Monday But we didn't go to school As ever you were bright and cool And I was scared to be but a fool He&She Happy to see you again It sure eases the pain I dare not complain
  10. Greetings Spanishbuddah, I enjoyed this one a lot. Very well craftsmanship,consistency is maintained and rhyming is flowing smoothly. The theme is original. Cleverly you manipulated the idea of "Opposites attract" to bring clarity.but to be honest, I don't get it fully.Yes I conceive the general meaning of the theme,yet,those minute details that make the whole picture are hiding somewhere in your mind. In fact,the lyric is provoking more questions than answers which is good. This lyric has immersed me in deep thinking,taking me to far away places,and I may look like making a mountain out of mushroom as you once said. Granted, we humans are constantly complaining 24/7. When we look at this,it seems quite irritating,but if we ponder carefully we will certainly discover that this complaining is the actual thing that gives meaning to our lives and keeps us moving froward though we pay a price. To illustrate this concept,I would like to give one crazy and revealing example. Just imagine that on this very earth there is only one race,one language,one geography,one food,one culture,one music, one climate,one sex where individuals reproduce by themselves... No doubt life would then be nothing but a monotonous boring hell nobody can ever bear. So to put it in a nutshell, LIFE/ THE WORLD needs two governing principles in order to function properly,that is to say we need "conflict and evolution",hence opposites should be around:Whites/Blacks,boys/girls, right/left,gays/straights and yes unfortunately WAR/PEACE. Rationally,war is one "great" human business,though I hate much. You see if you omit war from the book of human history,you will have no human history.These are the harsh facts. Before I close,I would like to say that the chorus is very catchy as well as the title.The one line,I am falling in love with is "Escape in a feeling no one can oppose" it is really fascinating because the concept of escape involves movement from a dangerous place to a safe one (outward) ,but here the movement is an inward one where nobody can disturb,really good imagery. Just my thoughts,keep or sweep as you see fit and thanks for sharing your lyrics with us. P.S. This comment was written earlier before reading fabkebab comment.
  11. Greetings Ty Cobb, Again the philosopher immersed in meditation shows up. The only drawback regarding this piece of artistry is that audience ought to have a high IQ score. Postman has delivered the " 3D " message of hope,encouragement and positiveness. I'm going to limit my comment to one aspect of the lyric,the meaning,as it shines in my mind. First of all,consistency is maintained throughout the lyric. The dove in verse 1 is symbolic of freedom and bravery , telling us to break the chains that tie us to the ground. Verse 2 says, if determined,just go ahead,move on,be alert,take good care of the many dangers along the way. One's got to pay the price of success , " Its travelers bruised and scarred " I think it's a fair deal. Who said verse 3 is not necessary? The thrown pebble is also symbolic and says a lot... A journey of a thousand miles begins with a SINGLE STEP.... So it doesn't matter " Going Slowly " As for the cream of the lyric,it's the chorus,crystal clear message,just leave it intact as it is. I fully agree with what Liam said. All in all, well done, still , you might like to perfect it as you see fit. By the way,the words " only fear standing still " somehow remind me of one good song " Life Goes On " by the great Shirley Bassey So enjoy the ride, and G O O D L U C K
  12. Ty you are 100% damn right doing what you do handling a comment/feedback.Please don't ever get rid of that SHINNING part of you that shows up instinctively. It's a blessing you should exhibit more of it. If somebody doesn't appreciate your diligent,sound and solid efforts to enrich this site,just move on and keep up the classy approach. Know that I follow you wherever you go, I like the above lyric as well as your elaborate comment. It's really amazing that some inflated chests don't endeavor to understand what is behind the literal meaning of the words. When Tracy says " And I prefer the poorer me " she actually doesn't advocate being a bum is great,but simply means that being materialistic is not a wise choice. It makes no sense at all if one owns the world but loses oneself...
  13. Greetings Liam, Another good one.Your naughty and bold guy is glaring. I heard the melody and I like it much,but don't you think the lyric needs something a bit wild to bring out the force of the lyric,especially " Middle finger held aloft to the universe " Just great imagery boy!
  14. Greeting and please excuse the late comment. As a new kid in town,I heard 4 inflated loud voices on this site, none of them caught my attention and admiration as you did with your song"Overthinking" Wow,your voice is so quiet and meek yet self assured and I like that. I really don't know what to say but to quote Joey M...Great job on lyrics and music as well. Real ARTISTRY in every sense,and such a fine recording "Radio ready" Allot of fun...CAPTIVATING
  15. Hi Liam, It's so " bad " that I keep reading the lyric and listening to the song. I'm warning you that if you do it again, I'll have to say B R A V O... This " bad " lyric really caught me. Still it tells much in very simple words loaded with fine imagery . The lines I love most are : And the snakes on the grass Who don't let me play Let me take a corner Same one everyday Bless you,you made me see a terrified ,isolated and lonely kid though you didn't use any of these words. Very smart and well crafted,also the chorus is no less great. Thanks for the classy gift and keep shinning as you are.