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LB76

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LB76 last won the day on June 17

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    Nick drake, cherry ghost, David Gray, the Beatles, jeff Buckley, stone roses, counting crows, rem
  1. Good video is that
  2. I totally got the meaning of this song. Cleverly written and as always with a sense of humour. I gave it a good score but unfortunately for this lyric it was, imo, up against some extremely good competition in last month's contest
  3. Alright john i know what you mean. I'm sure it fits your music just fine but it's a hard one to read without it. We all know this though with how our lyrics are read in other peoples heads. Something is always lost. I very much agree with the sentiment of the song. I've been saying for a long time that its us against them and it's sickens me that a tiny minority own a massive majority. Having said that I'm not a massive fan of songs like this, I think that in these type of songs too much effort is put into making the message clear that it takes away from emotion and even something more simple like how the words actually sound together. This is clever how it's written and the message is one that I'm right behind but this kind of lyric just isn't really me. Sorry, you know I'm still a big fan though
  4. I've revised this thanks to some advice from some fellow musers. It's put a slightly different spin on it but I think it works. Hattys passing through V1 Her rucksacks her home Holds all that she owns Free of all shackles She travels alone There's a watch on her wrist But it no longer tics Never a lover of time She once was a lover of mine Ch Hattys only passing through Like in the autumn of my youth She blew in on the wind Like a feather she'll leave that way too V2 Her mood is her guide She owns the outside Travelling lightly With nothing to hide With every memory she makes Another heart breaks Hope she remembers the time When she was a lover of mine Ch Hattys only passing through Like in the autumn of my youth She blew in on the wind Like a feather she'll leave that way too Bridge She brings the warmth in like the sun Throws the light on everyone Like the weather she surrounds you Then like a storm she is gone Ch2 Hattys only passing through Like in the autumn of my youth She blew in on the wind Like the summer she'll leave that way too
  5. I think it's the bridge that makes you realise what verse 2 and chorus 2 are getting at. It actually reminds of a lyric I wrote myself last year called a song about a sunset
  6. Great lyrics bob as simple as that, I mean it's a bit soppier and more poetic than what I'm usually into but it all works perfectly. Very easy flow to follow which always helps. Can't really fault it. I'd like to hear it to music
  7. Kuya i love some of them ideas. Im going to have a think on the shopping cart line. I was trying to steer away from apart or start to rhyme with heart as it probably is too obvious but art or part could work. Like a sunrise she surrounds you like a sunset she is gone is a keeper and will defo be in my revision. This lyric post is a perfect example of how muse should be used. Some great advice from all that's commented. I kind of Liked this one as it popped into my head in a counting crows type style And I think wihh these adjustments it might come out ok. Thanks again
  8. Thought this was very good and an enjoyable read. Good humour. Nothing to really pull it on. Just one thing that's confusing me but doesn't really matter. Over here in England a scooter is something slightly different than a motorbike. So I'm not sure whether it's what I'd call a scooter or whether it's meant to be a motorbike. I definitely see the fella booting a big beefy black and chrome motorbike rather that sat on a farty little scooter doing 45 top end. Anyway apart from that, very good
  9. Thanks John. I was aware of the she's but I can easily amend them and your right about the Listeria line. I needed something and I threw it in, but like I said it was a very quick draft that needs revising ( I literally wrote it while I was giving the baby his bottle). The shopping thing was like when the front wheels are knackered and it's has a mind of its own and goes where it wants. Thanks Ron. I'll be revising this lyric soon and be sure to take your suggestions into account. Your right the wild a heart is a typo. I will defo change the hysteria line. The snail roaming line just means that she wears her home on her back like hatty. Thanks again for the advice
  10. Hi Layla. Thanks for the feedback. I definitely don't think it's bad thing at all that you should interpret the lyrics differently. I always aim for my lyrics to be open to interpretation and if that's what you got from the lyrics then that's what it is about to you. I used to love discussing with friends what they thought a lyric was about and never knowing which one of us was right. Thanks again
  11. Thanks Simon. Yeah I've not had much time for writing anything new recently but I just had a couple of days off so I had a little play. Think they all need revising but I enjoyed writing them as it's been a while since I've really gotten into it
  12. Alright john. I love reading your lyrics because they are just the right amount of vague so their meaning isn't obvious but I can spend a little time to work them out. Kind of like a puzzle. Just like all my music influences. I'm not a fan of a lyric that just tells a really obvious story but then there're exceptions obviously. And I don't mean the whole story either, I mean I like to work out a line at a time or a verse at a time and I don't even care if I get it right. I love the verses in this and I also like the first bridge (Probably need the music to appreciate the second bridge). My only slight nit would be that chorus doesn't quite live up to the verses and bridge foe me, but again, perhaps with the music. I know what you mean about the title. It's a bit of a tricky one. Perhaps going with the more obvious one of moments in time might work better Enjoyable lyrics once again
  13. A very quick 1st draft. I was thinking a folky country type genre Hatty's passing through V Her rucksack's her home Like a snail she roams She has no shackles She travels alone Don't try to tame her She's wild a heart With all the direction Of a broken shopping cart Ch Hatty's only passing through She's just made a little time for you She blew in on the wind Like a feather she'll leave that way too Bridge She brings the warmth in like the sun Shares the light with everyone Like hysteria she'll surround you Then like a storm she is gone Ch Hatty's only passing through She's just made a little time for you She blew in on the wind Like a feather she'll leave that way too V Let the mood be your guide Own the outside Carry on hatty With nothing to hide Never get old Stay wild at heart With all the direction Of a broken shopping cart Ch Hatty's only passing through She's just made a little time for you She blew in on the wind Like summer she'll leave that way too
  14. I started reading this and thought "Not another one about someone's late granfather" but then it got good. Love the chorus especially the first line. Like the line I wish I was outside too. There're a lot of lines I like in this and I personally think the near rhymes work well. Pretty good Imo
  15. So what exactly is Ted talk?