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  1. Well done. The one thing I would suggest is to let the song build more quickly. There's a step up in the energy level with your third verse. i was ready for it when the second verse rolled around. It's a little too like a dirge in the opening and first two verses. You could boost the energy level still more. I could see boosting the tempo by 5 BPM.
  2. You could pitch shift a guitar down an octave i suppose, but thr simpler thing is to get a bass. if you can play guitar you have the foundations. You could buy a perfectly serviceable bass for $200. you can record it direct, no need for a bass amp.
  3. Hi all. First song posting here. I'm looking forward to listening, commenting, and posting more. This is a collaboration between myself and a couple of other posters over at the Homerecording.com site, which is my usual hangout. Johnny sang lead and harmony vox and played the outro guitar solo. Dave played the drums. I'm Ray. I wrote the song and recorded bass, keys, and all the guitars except Johnny's solo. Dave and I previously released an album's worth of my original songs with a different singer, but this is our first song with Johnny on vocals. All comments are welcome and appreciated. Thanks! Latest mix: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1eSqz2fFRae1h5fzOX1xUbZ3b9CSw4KkO/view?usp=sharing Bored in San Antone Words and music by Ray Taylor, 2017 We’re bored in San Antone That’s the most we need to know We’ll see it all and more When we’re together And I think I really dig you So what if it were true? We’d work it out somehow Or break it all in two And the Alamo looks smaller Than the tall tales and hollers We got a tale or two And mine’s got eyes for you Well it’s high ho Old Silver and away we go Excuse us if we don’t stand on formalities It’s lie low Storm coming and a wicked blow All the wicked know Is they ain’t bored tonight in San Antone Yeah, ooh, etc. Off a whirlwind tour of a cloverleaf On the south side of downtown Past the buff shops and the taco stands Where the highway spit us out I think I really love you Though who am I to say? There’s the right way And the wanton way And the games we’re wont to play Well the Alamo looks smaller Than the tall tales and the hollars I got no plans that don’t involve Your number Well it’s high ho Old Silver and away we go Excuse us if we don’t stand on formality It’s lie low Storm coming and a wicked blow All the wicked know Is they ain’t bored tonight in San Antone
  4. Robus

    In My Memory

    I agree that the song is too long. I had got the point by the end of that first section that starts "on that cold April morning." The verses that follow don't add new information apart from general ideas of despondency and loss. You could cull some of them, or consolidate the best bits into fewer, stronger stanzas. There are some phrases that are cliched and should be purged: "we passed just like two ships in the night." Personally, I didn't feel that your "from my memory x3" chorus ending was hooky enough. I'd work to make it just a little bit more memorable. Also, if it's FROM my memory, then that should be your song title. Well done. This is looking good so far.
  5. Robus

    Do You Know Me

    It's in need of a change-up. Come up with some chord changes, work from there. There's not much of a melody yet.
  6. Well, if you are interested in recording full arrangements it is very doable. There's a learning curve and some gear investments to make. But basically, if you can play you can do it. You need a DAW and audio interface and a drum VST like Addictive Drums, EZdrummer, etc. Those run as a plugin inside your DAW. You just build the arrangement piece by piece. Get a bass--an inexpensive one is fine. You don't need a bass amp. You can record bass direct right into your audio interface. If you are recording electric guitar, you can mic the amp with a mic like an SM57 or plug direct into your interface and run an amp sim as plugin inside your DAW. Amplitude and Guitar Rig are popular, though I wouldn't know as I always use a mic.
  7. Robus

    Adorable

    I like the song. The chord progressions and melodies were attractive. I liked that minimalist lead guitar work. Nice tone too. I would suggest: 1. Improve your mix. I know this is a songwriting forum, but the muddy quality of this demo doesn't show your song off in the best light. Turn down your bass. Try high passing your bass at 50Hz, your guitars at 100-150Hz, your kick drum at 25Hz, and your your toms at 100Hz. That should clean things up and let your arrangement be heard. 2. Vary your energy level. This goes both for the lead vocal performance and the arrangement. Maybe try to bring a little more passion to the vocal during the chorus? As for the arrangement, it doesn't really build. Perhaps simplify the opening part of the song, then add elements as you go. This is promising and could be made very much better. Hope this helps.
  8. Also promising. The lyrics work for me in a kind of minimalist way. More suggestive than specific, but they communicate. The melody is also minimalist, and better suited to your vocal range than the other song I critiqued. I'm not hearing much of a break or change in the energy level moving from the verse to the chorus. The melody and chord progressions are different, but the verse and chorus still sound too similar. The chorus isn't really shouting "I'm a chorus!" If I were arranging this, I'd bring in the keys and the second guitar, or something. Do you record full arrangements of your songs? I'd be interested to hear.
  9. Robus

    Swipe Right (studio)

    Hi, my first post on this site. This has potential. The lyrics are interesting though puzzling. The chord progressions are attractive. The biggest problem is that your demo is not presenting the song adequately. I cannot follow your vocal melody, because the singer struggles to follow it. I know where you are coming from. I've got a limited vocal range myself. That can make it a chore to demo songs. So I'm always on the lookout for singers to work with. You should do the same. The timing of the performance is also somewhat inconsistent. You can hear it in the strumming of the acoustic guitar in the opening. I hope this helps.
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