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  1. Take This City

    Hey Moritz, Thank you for your critiques and for taking a listen. As far as the lyrics, I'm such a weirdo when it comes to changing them lol. I get so married to the lyrics and usually keep them as is. With this one I tried to keep it simple and just literally jot down what was on my mind and what came out of my mouth. and to me, personally, the simplicity of the words explain the feeling I was trying to give out. Of course, that may not register with everybody. But I do see where you are coming from regarding the lyrics. I love songs with piano and guitar, but I wanted to go with a different vibe for this one. It's not so much a love song but a song about wanting love, but finally realizing that it just isn't going to happen. So it's a bit more sad and moody I guess. Thank you again for your critiques!
  2. Take This City

    Thank you for listening and for your constructive criticism! I appreciate it!
  3. Take This City

    Thank you so much @Luke Min I really appreciate all of your words and your advice. I did add a little bit more to the verses. There is an updated version now in the original post. Thanks again! Micky
  4. Hey all, Haven't put a new song on here in a while. But been working on this and would love some feedback. Only one request...if you listen, pretty please listen from beginning to the end and read the lyrics. If you have the time. This song is a build up Thanks so much! Micky Lyrics I feel low tonight Feeling out of control tonight My body's moving slow tonight But my mind's at the speed of light I hope that you got home alright You didn't check in, but that's alright It's not like you were ever mine I'm just feeling a little bit low So I'm gonna go get lost in the streets Thinking 'bout you, if you're thinking 'bout me While I walk on the beach Damn, you would like that sunset... View from the hills Tops of the trees Remember when we drove up here that night? I wish me and you could take this city... So I'm gonna go get lost tonight Drinking too much 'til I feel it Take one ___ tonight Losing my head to the feeling Get you out of my mind God, I wish that we could take this city... I wish you and me could take this city I feel low tonight I've got no self control tonight My body's floating up so high But my mind's with you I hope that you got home alright You didn't check in at all tonight It's not like you were ever mine But I hope you got home I know you were never mine You made it pretty clear tonight And that's alright yea I'll be fine I hope you got home... I'm gonna go get lost in the streets Thinking 'bout you, if you're thinking 'bout me While I walk on the beach Damn, you would like that sunset... View from the hills Tops of the trees Remember when we drove up here that night? I wish you and me could take this city. So I'm gonna go get lost tonight Drinking too much 'til I feel it Take one ___ tonight Losing my head to the feeling Get you out of my mind I wish you and me could take this city God, I wish that we could take this city... So, I'm gonna go get lost in the streets Thinking 'bout you, if you're thinking 'bout me While I walk on the beach Damn, you would like that sunset... View from the hills Tops of the trees Remember when we drove up here that night? I wish you and me could take this city. So I'm gonna go get lost tonight Drinking too much 'til I feel it Take one ___ tonight Losing my head to the feeling Get you out of my mind God, I wish that we could take this city Take this city
  5. Denial - Slow Rock Song

    Very cool! Love the production and your vocals. Very strong voice and perfect for this genre. This is very Metallica. Really pro and great job on this!
  6. Love this cool 70s kinda vibe. Cool production. I also would love to hear the lyrics a little bit clearer.
  7. Thank you so much!! Glad you enjoyed it and I love the comparison
  8. Hey forum, I've posted this song a couple of times, but have just made a new mix (and shorter version of it) and would love to get some feedback on production and the song in general (music, lyrics, melody, vocal). Thank you! Lyrics: Tossing and turning fever is burning last night I dreamed of you last night I dreamed of you And we were walking down the same road I started running to you trying to get close And then I reached out my hand for you to see but you just kept on running kept on running away from me running away from me You unfold me Chorus: Don't you wanna come in my bed tonight? I don't wanna live the rest of my life without your love without your love Get out of my head and turn off the light Say you're gonna stay with me tonight Give me your love Give me your love I'll never say it Not to your face only when I dream of you Only when I dream of you And we were falling in a black hole And I was struggling to pull you close And then you reached out and took my hand and we Just kept on falling kept on falling eternally falling eternally You unfold me Chorus: Don't you wanna come in my bed tonight? I don't wanna live the rest of my life without your love without your love Get out of my head and turn off the light Say you're gonna stay with me tonight Give me your love Give me your love Don't you wanna come in my bed tonight? I don't wanna live the rest of my life without your love without your love Get out of my head and turn off the light I just wanna get you alone tonight Give me your love Give me your love
  9. End of Day

    I really love this. Almost Beatles- like. I love the melody and the lyrics. This is such a pretty, haunting, song. Couldn't stop listening! Not sure about the ending. I think it's probably best to stick to the original formula throughout. It turns into a very different type of song. This could be a very nice short song, like around 2:30. Really nice job on this!
  10. What genre...?

    This could be Ambient. It also sounds like a video game (in a great way). very nice production!
  11. Hey all!Haven't been here in a while, but wanted to post a re-mixing of a previous song I posted about two years ago. It's called Move Tonight. I've given it a bit of a makeover and would love to hear any thoughts on production and the song in general. Thanks so much!Mickyhttps://soundcloud.com/micky-shiloah/move-tonight-2018/s-MphcBLyrics:And I wanna know what happened that dayI never saw it coming no And all the events that led up to the nightWhen you got me aloneI think it started with an innocent hi But a dangerous toneAnd then as we drank our way into the nightI could feel it was moreWe were on the rooftop smoking upEventually we're high as fuckI was joking I was gonna jumpYou didn't even see meYou were playing make believeand sat there telling everybody that you weren't drunkI just keep on thinking that I wanna spend tonight with youBut i'll never get the courage I'll wait here for you to make the moveEven though it's against the rules(Even though it's against the rules)Chorus:I wanna tell you that I want youBut I'm afraid that you'll believe meI wanna tell you that I want youBut I'm afraid that you'll believe meCuz All I really wanna do is hold youAnd all I really want is for the nightBut I don't want to tell youCuz i'm afraid you might believe meand make a move tonightThe next thing I knowYou were hanging on You were hanging on to meDragging me down the stairsYou were pulling me, pulling meI was acting like I didn't give a damnThe whispers saying "Oh My God I think they're holding hands"And I was in heavenIt was like the best dreamI was so afraid of waking up and being alone with meI was taking it in as you were spinning me aroundYou were dragging me to your bedKept on dragging me dragging me downI just keep on thinking that I wanna spend tonight with youBut we're running out of time it's almost lightCome on and make the moveEven though it's against the rulesI'm right here come on and make a moveChorus:I wanna tell you that I want youBut I'm afraid that you'll believe meI wanna tell you that I want youBut I'm afraid that you'll believe meCuz All I really wanna do is hold youAnd all I really want is for the nightBut I don't want to tell youCuz i'm afraid you might believe meand make a move tonightRepeats
  12. Nice song! Here are my thoughts: I really like the pre-chorus and chorus. The verses seem a bit thin to me? Maybe if you layer the vocals more or add something else..because all of a sudden it wakes up really nicely during the pre-chorus and in the chorus. and i think that's because of the layering and the backing vocals. Chorus melody reminds me of You Got It by Roy Orbison. I keep wanting more bass and a stronger kick/snare to really get the chorus going. I am really enjoying it but wishing it would sound more full. That's just my opinion, though. Overall I really appreciate the lyrics and the melody. Your song Hits Me in The Face came up and I LOVE the production on that. It's different style of song, but something about the fuller drums and bass make me think it could work with this song. Great job on this!!
  13. my first ballad - "Lucid Dream"

    The melody is a very familiar one. It's something that has been used before, but it's a pretty simple one that can be effective if you put another top melody over it or a vocal melody. Also the percussion seems a bit out of time with the melody. But I think you can have something nice here. Are you thinking of laying a vocal over it?
  14. Dreams

    Thanks so much! Yea it goes from talking about dreaming of them, to the dream, and then to what they want to happen in real life but are too afraid to say. Glad you like it. And I agree, working on something too much can possibly take away. This one, I'm working more on the arrangement and the production. Possibly shortening it and also fiddling around with the title. Thank you again!
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