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Mutrins

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  1. Entering my song If I Told You into the April contest. Thanks! Micky https://soundcloud.com/micky-shiloah/if-i-told-you-8-30 Song Title: If I Told You Music and Lyrics by Micky Shiloah We only talk when the lights go down We only see eye to eye When we're both looking at the ground And if I told you it was killing me to breathe Killing me to breathe Killing me to breathe next to you What would you do? Would you tell me that you want me The way that I want you? Is there a possibility of our worlds turning one from two? Chorus: And if I told you I like you Would you tell me you like me, too? Would you take a chance with me? A simple dinner and a movie And if we ended on high notes Could we do like the Eskimos? Would you let me hold you tight? And give you a kiss good night? 'Cause I could see us walking down by the water Or driving out to anywhere Happier than anybody else I swear I'll take good care of you And if I told you it was killing me to breathe Killing me to breathe Killing me to breathe without you What would you do? Would you tell me that you want me The way that I want you? Is there a possibility that I won't make myself a fool? Chorus: And if I told you I like you Would you tell me you like me, too? Would you take a chance with me? A simple dinner and a movie And if we ended on high notes Could we do like the Eskimos? Would you let me hold you tight? And give you a kiss good night? And if I told you I love you Would you tell me you love me, too? Would you spend your life with me? Run away and marry me? And we'll always have high notes We'll do just like the Eskimos And I'll always hold you tight And give you a kiss good night
  2. Thank you so much! Will try my best
  3. Thank you!!! I won't stop you! haha
  4. Hm seems to be working on my end..
  5. Hey all! I have a song called "Killer" and would love some feedback. It's an interesting little ditty lol Thanks! Micky Lyrics: I'm getting kind of wasted looking at you Won't you take me up to your hotel room We can have some fun not knowing me and you So let's give it a run give me 4, 3, 2... (one, one, one) Now we can keep it classy if you really want to Or we can f*ck around if you're feeling in the mood baby sit down in this chair and let me blindfold you Now don't you peak I'm a freak like you Didn't your mama tell you not to trust strangers? Especially strange men who are looking at you With a drink in their hand This was a bad idea but it could have been worse I'm not gonna hurt you--But I'm taking your purse Chorus: Cuz I'm not a killer I'm just a bad bad boy Currently unemployed So I gotta do what I gotta do But I'm not a killer I just take what I need to take And I make sure to mind my P's and Q's I apologize and thank you I'm not a killer You're smoking a cigar walking in NoBu Malibu I'm looking at your car dipped in that baby blue You know that color would go perfect with my Golden Goose shoes I'm making me a plan gimme 4,3,2 (give me one, give me one) I approach with a smile "Hello sir, how are you?" "Leave the keys in the car i'll park it safely for you" I sense a hesitation for a second or two But he gives me a nod and I tell him "Thank you" Now didn't your daddy tell you always trust your gut? Listen to your belly cuz it knows what's what It's super f*cking telling It said "bad idea", did you listen? No. But it's ok...you can Uber home. Chorus repeats
  6. electronic

    Solid production.! Would love to hear some vocals on this track and see where it can go
  7. Beautifully played!!
  8. Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed. Micky
  9. Thank you!!
  10. Hey TC! Thanks for your always thorough constructive criticism. Totally get what you mean about the mix. I've felt the same way. These songs are mainly demos but I will definitely go in and play around with what you suggested. I hope I can do it justice! Thank you again! micky
  11. Wow thank you so much for your thoughts. So happy you enjoyed it and appreciate all of the elements. I was very unsure about this one but it seems to be getting a positive response. This song has very dark undertones (at least, to me, because I know exactly what it's about) but I'm glad to hear it's hooky and fun! Thanks again!! Micky
  12. I have a track I worked on a few months ago and kind of left alone. Would love to get some thoughts!Lyrics are posted below. This song is about finally finding peace within yourself, at any measure. Thanks so much!Mickyhttps://soundcloud.com/micky-shiloah/just-let-go-9-16-doneLyrics:I was stuck in the middle of the ocean bluesurrounded by the waves with nowhere to gonowhere to goNo sign of land or your handPulling me to safety so I saidJust let goJust let goAnd as the blue sky turned darkI could see the stars more than everAnd as the water calmed down I could finally understand howI feel betterChorus:And now II never felt more aliveI never felt such a highThan the moment I said goodbyeTo everything in my lifeThat only kept me around for a whileThen dug me into the pileBut lightning struck me out of denialAnd now I'm ready to goI'm ready to let go of everything that's ever held me backI'm soI'm ready to go I'm ready to goI'm ready to let go of everything that's ever held me backI'm soI'm ready to go I'm ready to goJust let goSo I drifted away from the only coastline I ever knew, I've ever walked upon in my lifeI remember feeling the sand in my handsAnd the sun in my eyesNever knowing that it would be the last timeAnd then I reached the other sideI could see the sunrise pouring openAnd as the morning came I swear I could feel the rainIt was Heaven..Chorus:And now II never felt more aliveI never felt such a highThan the moment I said goodbyeTo everything in my lifeThat only kept me around for a whileThen dug me into the pileBut lightning struck me out of denialAnd now I'm...RepeatJust let goJust let goJust let go
  13. YES! That chorus is great. Very Oasis. I'm loving the guitar as well. Have you tried singing the verses in a lower register? It might make the chorus more impactful with more of a shift. But man, LOVE the chorus!!
  14. Love the guitar right off the bat. Very cool voice. It's got a certain cool rasp to it. To me, voices like yours sound "wet" and I love it. The instrumental is so cool, that guitar after the chorus is beautiful. I have to agree that I would love a more hook-y chorus that stands out and really captures us. You've got something going here, though. Only thing I might change is the chorus.
  15. Just put out an updated version!