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SongWolfe last won the day on May 26 2017

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    Varied rock - Alice Cooper, Axl Rose, Nick Cave, David Bowie, Bruce Springsteen

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  1. Some day

    Thanks Musical Key. Glad that you got the crux of the story and I deliberately wanted verse 1 to jump into quite a dramatic scene. Thanks for your soft spot comments - I think I tend to agree with them, particularly the first two. Had difficulty coming up with a title so maybe a sign that the chorus needs some work
  2. Some day

    Thanks Kuya. Just to be clear, he's not killed anyone. He's seen his friend killed by the mobsters. And he's not part of any street gang, just an ordinary person who finds himself caught up in a bad situation. Maybe need to think about whether to signpost that more The point around crack and cocaine is interesting. Just familiar with the term 'crack cocaine'. Will have a look at that and probably also make some other refinements
  3. Some day

    Thanks Gary. Yeah, maybe 'scary' was a lazy adjective. I'll have a think about changing that but I do think there are probably mafia members who are scarier than others. For example, the heavies whose job is to administer punishment The song's not really meant to be a nitty gritty real life portrayal. It's entertainment so I'm not overly worried about whether it completely rings true as long as it sounds good. And I think this guy really has no alternative but to go to the cops. The mobsters have killed his friend so they're unlikely to leave him as a loose end if he hands over the drugs. He's just an ordinary Joe so it's not as if he has alternative contacts who are going to get him out of trouble. Not many choices in that situation
  4. Some day

    Sometimes we have charismatic friends who can get us into trouble and that's the case for the protagonist of this lyric. I can picture this as a singer songwriter song, singer with acoustic guitar? Some day (Verse 1) Stepped out on a dirt track Dust in my eyes Wiped blood from my hands Waved away the flies You're Dead... and I'm all out of Alibis (Pre Chorus) Half a kilo of cocaine in my backpack Didn't put it there but I can't backtrack The deed is done Last chance gone Left you staring sightless at this blazing sun (Chorus) Not my fault Not my way Only following you Knew it would kick some day.. Knew it would kick some day (Verse 2) Got the world on my back Only hope now Get this shit to the cops Find a way out Or I'm Dead... and I'm all out of Alibis (Pre Chorus) Half a kilo of cocaine in my backpack Didn't put it there but I can't backtrack The deed is done Last chance gone Left you staring sightless at this blazing sun (Chorus) Not my fault Not my way Only following you Knew it would kick some day.. Knew it would kick some day (Bridge) Some scary Mafioso want me whacked Hollering and hooting ' bout the theft of their crack Dear friend you were a junkie An addict all your life But I knew I’d follow you to hell Even though I knew the price (Chorus) Not my fault Not my way Only following you Knew it would kick some day.. Knew it would kick some day
  5. How about cha-cha-cha? doodoo (which is another word for poo) gaga choo choo yada yada
  6. A Promise Made

    Write me a letter by Aerosmith as well. Can't recall the last time I wrote a letter though - letters and checks/cheques on their way to being things of a bygone time
  7. On King William Island

    Thanks Mike. Yes, they did. Not that it worked - not a single person survived although I think I read that there were reports (from local inuit) that a couple of the men may have survived for at least 5 years?
  8. Lady of the Lake (slight re-write)

    Thanks Steve. Have had a go at re-writing a couple of parts and 'invoking need in me' has gone!
  9. On King William Island

    Thanks Kuya. Think I may go with your suggestion. Maybe change that 1st chorus to: (Chorus) To King William Island Northwest bound No cursin’ or drinkin’ ‘til we reach firm ground I read that John Franklin forbade swearing and drunkenness. Five men were discharged before the ships set off from Greenland so if that was due to excess drunkenness it may be a rare case of alcohol being good for one's health Jealous of you having flown over that part of the world. The wilderness up there must be pretty stunning
  10. On King William Island

    Thanks Paul. It's a great piece of music, composed by a fellow countryman of yours. Even includes some bagpipes which sound really cool. I agree with you on the placement of the 1st chorus. Was working to a stated structure that had the chorus coming in there. Will give it some thought though - maybe there's a different variant of the chorus that doesn't jump to the fate of the expedition. Or may be scope to suggest that the initial chorus section is taken out. I like your suggestion for the last 2 lines. I initially had the last line as 'I wish I'd drowned' but my collaborator wanted something less bleak, more hopeful ... so I changed it to have the protagonist still with the ray of hope of being rescued. Or it could be interpreted as hoping that their bodies would eventually be found.
  11. On King William Island

    Thanks Mike. Yeah, working to a structure and time stamps so not sure if there's scope to change the chorus length. The propellers point is an interesting one. I was going by Google searches that revealed that amongst the state of the art features the ships had were steam engines, iron plating, and screw propellers. And delving into the word's history, I found this 'Propeller: 1780, "anything that propels," agent noun from propel. In mechanical sense, 1809, of ships; of flying machines (in a broad, theoretical sense) 1842, in the specific modern sense 1853.' You may well be right that sailors of the time may just have referred to them as screw blades or screws but think I'll keep it as it is to fit with the meter
  12. Thoughts on Offensive Lyrics

    This reminds me of this video clip that I saw telling the story of Dee Snider's testimony before Congress after being named in the PMRC's filthy list. The bit that particularly amused me is where he's being questioned around the accusation that his song 'Under the blade' was about sadomasochism/bondage and he explains that it was written about his guitarist's throat operation. When he's pushed on the point that it could be possible to interpret it as being about sex, he says 'songs allow a person to put their own imagination, experiences and dreams into the lyrics. People can interpret it in many ways. Mrs Tipper Gore was looking for sadomasochism and bondage and she found it.'
  13. On King William Island

    A musician recently invited me to write a lyric for a piece of music that he had composed. The brief he gave me was that he ideally wanted it to be about the ill-fated John Franklin Arctic expedition in 1845. It was fascinating reading up on that tragedy. Basically, two ships set out from the UK on a mission to try to prove that there was a northern sea passage in the Arctic that, if found, would open up speedier trade routes to Asia. Sadly, both ships got stuck in ice and all the men perished, although some lasted at least two years before succumbing to starvation and disease. Here's the lyric I came up with ... On King William Island (Verse 1) We set forth from a Greenland port Forging through the waves Left the whalers to their sport Calling more wind to our sails (Chorus) On King William Island Hunkered down Praying to the Lord That we may be found (Verse 2) State of the art, nary a thought Of an early grave No expense spared aft and port The latest propeller blades (Bridge) In eighteen hundred and forty five I boarded HMS Terror full of life Hardy from my years at sea There were no soft edges left on me. Worked hard, hands to the rope Of fame and riches we had hope For a passageway of open sea Was this era's great mystery. Then the ship struck ice Which closed around Stuck for two long years And not been found. (Chorus 1) On King William Island Hunkered down Praying to the Lord That we may be found (Chorus 2) On King William Island Run aground Scraping flesh from bones Not homeward bound (Chorus 3) On King William Island Hunkered down May the Lord have mercy May we all be found (Chorus 4) On King William Island Hunkered down May the Lord have mercy May we all be found.
  14. Once upon a time

    Thanks Donna. I toyed with changing the intro/outro lines to 'Once upon a time the west was won / Every gringo knew the lingo of the knife and gun'. Hopefully a good decision to keep it the way it is even if 'wild' and 'knife' don't rhyme
  15. Once upon a time

    Thanks. Yes, I grew up watching those kind of westerns. I like that suggestion - thanks for mentioning
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