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SongWolfe

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  1. SongWolfe

    Perfect Moments

    Thanks for that suggestion. I agree that memorial scars sounds good but I don't think it really works with the narrative. The lyrics are referring to two people who are currently going through battles and I think memorial suggests that all is done and dusted and in the past
  2. SongWolfe

    Perfect Moments

    Thanks. Great to hear that you liked it. Trying to get it turned into a song now.
  3. SongWolfe

    New Collaboration Contest: Emotional Impact

    If there's a collaboration element to it then I'd love to take part.
  4. SongWolfe

    Perfect Moments

    This was my entry in the July Lyric Contest, which finished mid table. Possibly a bit overcomplicated with both male and female vocals and lines alternated between the male and female singers? The idea behind it was of a couple who are having a volatile relationship, and they're both trying to make the most of any peaceful interludes before the fighting starts again. I think the music would reflect those shifts between volatile and peaceful with the verses being loud and the pre chorus and chorus bits being much softer. Perfect Moments (Male vocal for lyrics in black, female vocal for pink, and male/female vocal for blue) (Verse) Punching, screaming Duck and diving Reeling, writhing She sticks the knife in I got my war wounds Though I’ve never fought in a war Life hits like a Cat-o-nine Knocking me to the floor When every topic is a landmine Every day a battlefield It takes so much effort just to stay sane And not raise up a shield And in these moments we need to take joy where we can Live in the present and find a place of calm (Pre chorus) Sunshine glinting across the bay Slowly fades as the day gives way Dragonflies over bales of hay Uncut grasses in the verges sway (Chorus) Perfect moments Summer blossom Perfect moments Troubles forgotten (Verse) Grappling, screeching Block and parrying Feeling, crying He sticks the knife in I got my war wounds Though I’ve never fought in a war Life hits like a Cat-o-nine Knocking me to the floor When every topic is a landmine Every day a battlefield It takes so much effort just to stay sane And not raise up a shield Yes, in these moments we need to take joy where we can Live in the present and find a place of calm (Pre chorus) Sunshine glinting across the bay Slowly fades as the day gives way Dragonflies over bales of hay Uncut grasses in the verges sway (Chorus) Perfect moments Summer blossom Perfect moments Troubles forgotten (Verse) Punching, screaming Grappling, screeching Duck and diving Block and parrying Reeling, writhing Feeling, crying She sticks the knife in He sticks the knife in In these moments we need to take joy where we can Live in the present and find a place of calm (Pre chorus) Sunshine glinting across the bay Slowly fades as the day gives way Dragonflies over bales of hay Uncut grasses in the verges sway (Chorus) Perfect moments Summer blossom Perfect moments Troubles forgotten
  5. SongWolfe

    Uber Love - updated 08/10/2018

    Hi Paul, I gave this a rating of 3. I thought it was kind of a sweet little story. Someone being in love and looking out for the subject of his affections even though she was presumably unaware of his crush. I have no nits on the lyric writing; it's expertly crafted. But I do think the fact that it doesn't go anywhere probably prevented me from giving it a higher score. However, I guess the whole point of the story is that his love is doomed to go nowhere? Still think it may be worth seeing if you can come up with a little twist. Maybe he sees that she's ended up riding with another uber driver?
  6. SongWolfe

    Those Eyes

    Hi Ty, This was another lyric that I liked in the contest. Well done on making the podium! Not much to critique on this one. I think the roll roll roll repetition could be overdone. Probably a case of seeing how it sounds when sung to music. And, like Andy, I didn't get the brass ring reference. However, a listener not understanding one word or one phrase in a song probably isn't a big deal for listeners as long as the song sounds good. I think lyricists probably spend longer debating such things than is necessary!
  7. SongWolfe

    It's All Gone

    Hi Kuya, I got that the lie was that all the money was gone and I really liked this lyric. I rated it 3rd in what was a very strong field of lyrics. I think you've done a great job of weaving a story in a compelling way. It was humorous without ending up down the novelty quagmire. The refrain at the end of each verse worked really well for me. And the verses seemed to flow nicely. I didn't mind the Nigerian Prince one but 5 verses before the bridge is possibly one too many.
  8. SongWolfe

    JULY Lyrics Competition

    Well done to Discatticu, Kuya, and Ty. And thanks again to Iggy for co-ordinating. I thought the standard was extremely high this month. I had 2 lyrics tied for first, with ratings of 1.5. One was the winning lyric, Autobiography, and the other was National Bankers' Dance. Both stunning lyrics. (I work in banking, so probably should have given the latter a rating of 5 … but it won me over. ) After those, there was loads of other good lyrics and I had It's all Gone and High Gates tied for 3rd.
  9. SongWolfe

    Out on my feet

    Hi Patty, That's an interesting point. It does mean to be exceedingly tired. I think it's a pretty common saying in the UK and Ireland and I'd assumed it was in widespread use across the English speaking countries but maybe not. I think in this case I'll stick with it and hope that people will get the meaning from the context of the lyrics and supporting music. Dead on my feet does mean the same thing but I like the combination of 'out on my feet and out of my mind' It is fascinating though how certain sayings are more regionalised in their usage
  10. SongWolfe

    Out on my feet

    Thanks Paul. Good to hear that the bridge worked for you
  11. SongWolfe

    Out on my feet

    Thanks. Both for reading and commenting on the lyric and for checking our my LyricSlinger website! (Remember, it's got a Promoted Artists page, so let me know if you would like a link to any music or lyric site that you might have.) Yeah, this lyric might be a bit long. I'll have a think about whether it could be trimmed whilst retaining the story. One way to do that might be to go with Mike's suggestion of removing the chorus and possibly using it as a bridge instead. I also sometimes find that musicians come up with suggestions to trim lyrics when they start working on them so may end up being shorter than it currently is
  12. SongWolfe

    Out on my feet

    Thanks. That's a nice alternative that you've come up with. I quite fond of the current refrain so will probably keep it but will leave it a few days so that all the suggestions have a chance to sink in. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
  13. SongWolfe

    Out on my feet

    Thanks Mike. Yes, I think I'll probably change the start of verse 2. The idea of using my chorus as a bridge is an interesting one. I'll have a think about that. Might be an option to work through with a musician if I can get one onboard with this lyric. Thanks for making those suggestions.
  14. SongWolfe

    Out on my feet

    Thanks for reading and taking the time to offer your suggestions. Yes, I use RhymeZone a lot - a very useful reference point. The final 3 lines of each verse are deliberately the same - I guess it's a refrain that hopefully reinforces the meaning of the song. I think though, on reflection, it would be better if verse 2 didn't start with 'out on my feet'. Maybe that's one instance too much. I'll have a think about that and your other points when I come to the 2nd edit of the lyric. On the syllable count point, I try to ensure that each verse matches up as closely as possible in terms of prosody/syllable counts. However, my experience is that singers/musicians often don't necessarily need syllables to match up exactly. I think they're more concerned with stresses within the lines. Still, getting syllable counts close to matching up does help.
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