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EmilyEmily

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    Learning to accept compliments.

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    Angel Olsen, Bad Bad Hats, Emma Ruth Rundle
  1. Get some hot beats in there and you will have written your first Hip Hop song!
  2. Without wading too deeply into the political discourse, it seems that sensible gun control, sensible background checks and strict laws that are enforced regarding transportation of guns across state lines is appropriate. Also, it needs to be pointed out that the NRA is simply a trade association dedicated to advancing the sales of its members products, no different than thousands of other trade associations. The big difference of course is that they were smart enough from an advertising and promotional point of view to align their members products with the politics of a hot button issue, thus re-framing and muddying the issues of safety, enforcement, regulation and access. Normally I wouldn't comment on these posts but I think sane and rational conversation is sorely lacking when it comes to certain issues that affect so many of us. Name calling is never productive, nor is not listening to someones position, even if you disagree fervently with that position. We can all do better. Whew... I'm surprised I made so much sense for a Friday. I think this has earned me a good weekend!
  3. Would this be the correct formatting for your lyric? The False Prophet The simple beggar man with staff at hand Lay prostate at the mullah's feet Writhing on the ground with a wailing sound He cried Allah please forgive me Don't heed The False Prophet Never feed The False Prophet Dirt encrusted mud tried to cover up Humiliation uncovered shame The mullah, hand held high, gave a sign Down the sword of execution came Don't heed The False Prophet Never feed The False Prophet They come like locusts, take everything Burn down our houses, leave nothing Chase us with guns and bombs so loud Run, run and hide or they'll shoot you down! Shoot you down! I saw terror creep deep in their eyes The terrible horror of satanic surprise The young man bloodied cut in his prime Fanatical cries celebrate Satan's crimes Satan's crimes! Don't heed The False Prophet Never feed The False Prophet They come in the dark They cut out your heart They don't care who you love They don't care you you are They're intentions are bad That makes them feel good They want you to think They are misunderstood But, they're lies and they're cheats They use brute force to speak Bully's of babies Devoid of good feats They slash and they burn Everything in their path And don't give a damn They think they are God's wrath But, with nothing to offer But bloodshed and death I bet They will get they're own yet Don't heed The False Prophet Never feed The False Prophet
  4. Jwallace - Thanks a bunch for reading and commenting. Actually, "glittery" is my favorite word in the entire lyric! I thought about all the use of daydreaming, dreaming etc., but it said what I was thinking and I liked the feel of it and the way it sang. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by. Paul - Thank you for your comments, input and suggestions. I hear it sung kinda like - O- verrr time, O- verrr time. Does that make sense? Yes, you may be O-verrr thinkkkking it - Lol I think one can day dream and be under stress together. I don't think they're mutually exclusive. First I'm dreaming and then I'm thinking. And the word over time ihas multiple meanings in this as well. Thanks for weighing in. I always appreciate your input. Lyrical - And the same goes to you too - ha!
  5. Hi, A very nice song. There's much to like about this, particularly you're understated presentation. I would change the chorus to read: I am the people I am the noise I am the voice I am the sound and I scream it loud I am the people I am alive I have arrived I am born, to live this revolution I just think this makes it more personal, stronger and more powerful. And if you are a feminist it highlights that as well. The universal "we" feels generic and dilutes the message. Other than that, a very memorable song.
  6. Hi Ron, Thank you for your comments and taking time to read. Kicks is a common word for sneakers/running shoes. Has been around ever since I can remember. Lay it all down simply means to walk away from all of it - everything. A reference to all that stuff we buy that we think we really need to fit in but really don't - i.e. consumerism It references or establishes a history between these two. I believed, as you noted, that it does add weight and that I didn't need to dwell on it. I know this lyric doesn't rhyme but the meter and words have a lift of their own that I believe move this lyric forward in a steady, calm and organic way. Sometimes, at least for me, it's actually easier to come up with a melody for a lyric that doesn't' follow strict rhyme. It offers more choices and a certain freedom. And lastly, I don't think I can tell you quite how long I have waited for someone to incorporate a quote by the illustrious Arthur Schopenhauer into a lyric critique... I am in your debt and awed by the inclusion of this piece of wisdom. Again, thank you for your comments.
  7. I posted this last week but decided to make changes and took it down. I did a bunch of rewriting but ended up going with the original version with just a few minor changes. OVERTIME © 2017 Emily Bond I’ve been day dreaming, dreaming the perfect dream Looking for a way to make my escape With you to a place where we won’t have to think About chasing these dreams anymore And I’ve been day dreaming about that perfect man The one who has a smile, just like you do So put away your hurt, that’s all in the past Throw on your kicks, I’ll show you how to breathe They built a highway with our name on it If we leave right now we can get on it We can get on it CH Over time, over time, my minds been working overtime Looking for that perfect moment to lay it all down We can turn our back on all those glittery things They’ll never last, no they’ll never last over time Over time, like you and I will I know a secret and I’m not gonna tell But I think you know it better than even I do We can make this happen, like running away If we don’t look back we’ll be children again They built a highway with our name on it If we leave right now we can get on it We can get on it CH Over time, over time, my minds been working overtime Looking for that perfect moment to lay it all down We can turn our back on all those glittery things They’ll never last, no they’ll never last over time Over time, like you and I will BR We can both say yes Leave everything behind us I know a place Where no one will find us CH Over time, over time, my minds been working overtime Looking for that perfect moment to lay it all down We can turn our back on all those glittery things They’ll never last, no they’ll never last over time Over time, like you and I will
  8. What a strangely alluring song! The lyric is both mysterious and quite literal - a nice blend of sense and style. (btw - I loved your Channel Trailer - You guys as sooo cute together!) I liked this. Would I have cut down a bit on the "atmospheric" elements? Yes, probably, but that seems to be your style so I'll just happily go along with it and enjoy your lovely music. I'm going to put some time aside to listen to more of your songs.
  9. Wow! If ever there was a line waiting to be quoted I'd have to say it's the one above - Yikes! The manner in which the words are strung together is awkward and unnatural, at least to my sensibilities. And I am totally confused reading the last verse - is this about an adult or child or what? It's very strange. I'm going to take a break and take 3 pills, 3 deep breaths and...
  10. What a fun song! Made me laugh out loud. (Actually I was eating a croissant when I listened, so it was more like choking out loud - Lol.) I enjoyed this quite a bit.
  11. Okay. In that case I don't think it matters how polished your bridge or chorus is. I'm sure she'll be deeply touched by the simple fact that you wrote a song for her about your time together. Just sing it from your heart and she'll melt
  12. As a general rule I’m not a huge fan of love songs that use words like “sparks,” hypnotize,” paradise,” “destinies,”.... oh well, you get the idea. These words tend to get overused to such a large extent that I usually think of them as either overly poetic or the mark of a lazy songwriter. And I have to confess that this lyric feels at times like it can’t quite make up its mind whether it’s a love poem or an achingly romantic lyric. But, having said that, there is something so unabashedly innocent and naïve in this lyric that I found parts of it to be endearing and sweetly sentimental. Yes, there are some language difficulties which I see have been mentioned by others and hopefully you will correct those. My most significant critique would second what SongWolfe mentioned about adding something, perhaps a bridge, which can provide a sense of ending or conclusion to this relationship. And whether it’s about a long and sad farewell or giving thanks for the opportunity to be so deeply and personally touched by this experience is up to you. Either direction would help to focus this and give it strength and greater meaning. I think you have a lot to work with and a couple hours of re-writing and polishing will be time well spent because when you're finished you will have a lovely and moving lyric to share.
  13. Touch Me ©2017 Music & Lyric Emily Bond V In my dream the city crumbles I can hear people scream I watch it through a mask of horror I’ve no idea what it means V In my waking haze I wonder Who’d be there to crawl inside Through the rubble if I lay dying Alone and lost and terrified PC Now I can’t sleep, my eyes won’t close Ohhh... CH Touch me, grab me, hold me Touch me, please Chase the fear away I need you next to me Touch me now, make me forget This dream that lives inside my head Touch me, grab me, hold me Touch me, please V All my life I’ve had this dream It cracks inside like thunder Something dark that I can’t name A fear I can’t discover V I sense you near but I can’t see you Are you there beside me now I wake up and the room is spinning Each second passes like an hour PC Now I can’t sleep, my eyes won’t close Ohhh... CH Touch me, grab me, hold me Touch me, please Chase the fear away I need you next to me Touch me now, make me forget This dream that lives inside my head Touch me, grab me, hold me Touch me, please BR The shadows resemble faces but I don’t know them I feel them reaching out like a cold wind Ohhh... CH Touch me, grab me, hold me Touch me, please Chase the fear away I need you next to me Touch me now, make me forget This dream that lives inside my head Touch me, grab me, hold me Touch me, please Touch me, grab me, hold me Touch me, please
  14. Another haunting lyric from you. This landscape of melancholy and sadness seems to be one that you are familiar with and comfortable journeying through. I'm aware that you give considerable weight to your word choices and the intended affect they have. So when you write a line such as " Like a dying prey fish eyes bulging in the dark," I assume it is intended to make a bold and unforgettable statement and paint a powerful and ghastly image - all of which it does. I confess it is not my favorite line but I defer to your sensibilities in this. Are you 100% satisfied with the bridge? I felt it could be tightened up just a bit. This thought about the chorus came to me. Perhaps it is to literal. Oh, the ghost of that girl The ghost of that girl, The bubbles in the water Swallow/ed her in their swirl. At times, when I read your lyrics, I wonder if you tend to overwrite in an attempt to tie up any loose ends. Perhaps it's just a stylistic choice. Anyway, some very nice writing on display.