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Tony P

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About Tony P

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  • Birthday 18/06/1962

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    Male
  • Location
    New Mexico

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  • Lyricist, Composer or Both?
    both
  • Musical Influences?
    Bob Dylan, Paul Simon, Styx, The Cars, Pink Floyd, Casting Crowns, Big Daddy Weave, many more....not necessarily in that order.

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  1. Tony P

    APRIL LYRIC CONTEST

    I'll be frank if you'll be earnest.
  2. Tony P

    Happy Birthday Me - UPDATED

    Ty, that's a great idea. prosody is key. thanks
  3. Tony P

    Happy Birthday Me - UPDATED

    Thanks for that...all real good comments. I'm moving on from this song - too many issues that, could be addressed, but just not in love with it enough. It was for a Birthday Song challenge so it took me out of my comfort zone a bit. I will put it in the "come back to it some other day" pile. I think it has some potential, but I've got some fresh inspiration on some other stuff right now. I appreciate the input - it will get put to use eventually. Tony
  4. Tony P

    Always Believe (Something Wonderful)

    Ty, I believe this is a real good lyric. Just a few minor tweaks and it's great, IMHO.
  5. Tony P

    Always Believe (Something Wonderful)

    Sounds perfect for today top 100 pop songs....lol
  6. Tony P

    Always Believe (Something Wonderful)

    Ty, I liked this lyric a lot and scored it pretty high in the contest. There are two lines that didn't fit right to me: "They showed him a path to do what's right As he followed in their footsteps he heard every night " ("As" sounds like at the same time....maybe "and" or "then") "And as always happens before all that long" (this line sounds forced and not natural to me...technically, it's right but just sounds awkward) Just my usual 2 cents looking for change. Tony
  7. Tony P

    Happy Birthday Me - UPDATED

    Thanks Robert.
  8. Tony P

    Happy Birthday Me - UPDATED

    Robert, that is a great critique!! The tough thing with this song is I wrote it from a birthday song challenge we had on another site. I began the idea of my life's journey with the refrain capping off the years as they passed. I agree with everything you said. Honestly, I think I got into a rush on it. I actually thought the same things on the first verse but took the lazy way out. You called me on it and I appreciate it. Lazy never produces quality! Seeing as it was just for a challenge, I probably will let this one go by the wayside after it's done for the challenge and relegate it to the "learning" pile....lol. I did try to force too much of a story in a small space and cram the metaphor too much. Thanks again for the great critique. That's the stuff that helps me improve. Tony
  9. Tony P

    Sock in Your Bed

    I think it would work as a somewhat comical country tune.
  10. Tony P

    Happy Birthday Me - UPDATED

    Here's a very rough recording of this song. I need a different singer - I ain't no singer...lol https://www.procollabs.com/project/1192
  11. Tony P

    Happy Birthday Me - UPDATED

    Hey Paul, Thanks for the kind words. Yes, I know I could soften it a bit more, but it's not who I am....lol. My songs won't usually appeal to those outside of Christian circles and I'm ok with that. I also ranked your song up there in the contest. It was a real solid lyric and I could easily hear it put to music. cheers, Tony
  12. This is a much more developed lyric than the original I put up for the April Lyric Contest. Please feel free to critique. VERSE 1: TODAY I LAUNCHED INTO THIS WORLD SEATTLE MORNING. MONTH OF JUNE THE DOCTOR'S SMACK WILL NOT DETER MY MAIDEN VOYAGE INTO THE BLUE EVERY DAY A NEW DISCOVERY HAPPY BIRTHDAY ME VERSE 2: TURNED EIGHTEEN NOW ON MY OWN NO GUARANTEES NO CERTAIN PLANS I'LL MAKE MY MARK WITHOUT A DOUBT SETTING SAIL TO UNKNOWN LANDS LOOK OUT WORLD 'CAUSE NOW I'M FINALLY FREE HAPPY BIRTHDAY ME VERSE 3: I'M TURNIG GRAY AND ALL ALONE NO LOVING KIDS OR BETTER HALF IT'S ALL I GOT TO KEEP AFLOAT THIS JOYLESS SONG MY EPITAPH TO MYSELF I SING SARCASTICALLY HAPPY BIRTHDAY ME INSTRUMENTAL VERSE 4: ADRIFT AT SEA COULDN'T FIND MY WAY THE SAVIOR CAME AND RESCUED ME I'M CHANGING COURSE IT'S NOT TOO LATE WITH NEWFOUND DREAMS MY NEWBORN SOUL NOW SINGS HAPPY BIRTHDAY, HAPPY BIRTHDAY ME HAPPY BIRTHDAY ME
  13. Tony P

    APRIL LYRIC CONTEST

    Man....I hope that's not true. sad.
  14. Tony P

    APRIL LYRIC CONTEST

    Ha ha ha...that hit my funny bone. I really liked your lyric also!
  15. Tony P

    APRIL LYRIC CONTEST

    Congrats to the winners! My favorites were: And Wedding Bells Chime No present Like The Time I knew mine was going to be scored low. It was a first run and wasn't very well developed. I will post the current version in lyrics critique forum for comments. Tony
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