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    family, travel, politics, brewing, music, gardening, creating, raconteurism

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  • Lyricist, Composer or Both?
    lyracist mostly. i play many instruments, but none well.
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    the old blues guys and the modern guys who emulated them

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  1. kuya

    Man Bun

    It's before your time Joe, and most everyone else here, but there was a musical called Hair from the hippie era and the title song Hair was fairly funny. If you've never heard it, do yourselves a favor and find it online. Hair original cast. It's very much the same individualist idea but expressed different. The song Age of Aquarious was from the same musical, too, I believe.
  2. Hello Mick, But their names will never hurt me? Are you sure about that? I would try for something more here. More profound or insightful or more painful. With Sticks and stones they'd break my bones But the names are what really hurt me the cool don't care what pain they cause To a guy who is weak and nerdy i think somewhere this is anti bullying month. Seriously. Or maybe it's september.
  3. kuya

    Distance

    Very nice first post. One observation from me with the lyric as is, is that most (but not all) of it is taking place in the now time. Someone could argue that there is no story development. No moving forward with the story. With the exception of good riddance. Your verses are mostly in the now, but if the "I'm" in your choruses changed to "I'll", suddenly the story is moving. You are now talking about the future. In the bridge, if it was "But I took bullets for you every day" then it becomes about the past. Maybe the verses too could be consistently in the past tense and the chorus in the future? Tense issues are tricky. But that's a good place to start playing around with this. The past the present and the future all walk into a bar---man it was tense!
  4. kuya

    Buddy Boys

    Hi Joe, I like to think I write hearing the music in my head for each lyric. I can always hear how it should be sung, and the cadence, etc. Most times I picture a particular singer singing what I'm writing and it helps with the actual wording. This one I pictured me singing it with my then-four year old son singing the second half of the chorus with me. I can whistle a tune for each lyric. If there was music software to convert whistling to music notation I'd be golden. If I can't hear it I wouldn't expect someone else to. Kids need fathers, or father figures. You get back at least as much as you put in, as you already know. Every kid deserves a great childhood and we adults have to step up (like you did) to make that difference. Thanks Joe.
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    Ball and Chain

    Hi BD, I also like this. But I write a lot of bluesy stuff. I understand Mike's point about changing you to I, and I agree but I'd wait until it was put to music to see (hear). See what works better. The bridge is an opportunity to create contrast. Maybe something like: I want to live I want to thrive not just exist not just survive ..... ( maybe a little more about an alternate future? ) welcome here. I'm glad you are ok now. We try to be a fairly positive group. We're all rooting for each other, even if someone might not care for a particular song once in a while. Thanks for your kind words on my BB lyric.
  6. kuya

    Man Bun

    Absolutely I think it's improved. The verses themselves show your sense of humor. Keep that humor in the verses as you tweak. The pov is the normal guy here reacting to someone else's overreactions.
  7. kuya

    Man Bun

    Hi again Joe, I don't get the cow reference. And I think the bridge could use a little more work. Whatever you do, keep your sense of humor in this social commentary. Almost like you are conjuring George Carlin. Remember you are mocking the absurdity of some uptight person getting bent out of shape over a manbun, of all things. If you were singing it out somewhere what are the audience reactions you are trying to evoke? And where in the song do they happen? Keep those lines that will evoke them. You're almost done!
  8. kuya

    New Collaboration Contest: Emotional Impact

    I know SOK is on vacation this week and Alstair already mentioned that many other members are on holday too. I think if we give the folks traveling or at the beach a little time (the rest of August.?) we'll have a lot more participants. How about some more newer members participating with either lyrics or music? We should be able to get about 15 or 20 of each.
  9. kuya

    Buddy Boys

    I don't write too many of these lyrics but this one is about remembering back to when my son was a tiny kid and all the fun we had. Buddy Boys Splashing through puddles (V) Feeding the squirrels Naming the birds In our own little world Playing with puppies Staring at skies Chirping like crickets Chasing butterflies Of all the good things in this world (CH) And all life's joys it's true: Nothing could be better 'n' Being buddy boys with you! Building a snowman Collecting toy cars Learning the planets Counting all the stars Kisses for your Mom Big boy hugs for Dad Your precious little laugh It always makes me glad Of all the good things in this world (CH) And all life's joys it's true: Nothing could be better 'n' Being buddy boys with you! Where will this world will take you? (BR) Oh we've still got some time Someday you'll be a grown up man But today you're Mom's and mine Of all the good things in this world (CH) And all life's joys it's true: Nothing else compares to Being buddy boys with you!
  10. kuya

    Let the heavens rain on me

    Hi John, I liked this entry in the contest and I like this newer version now. Much stronger lyric. Pardon me for posting both together so I can see the changes more clearly. I could certainly benefit by taking one / some of those classes. I bet it was fun to be around other writers like yourself, let alone the teachers. H Let the heavens rain on me ©2018 John Voorpostel My window panes are dark on this summer afternoon Cats and dogs are gathering into rivulets and pools I am tempted to lie down, feel my skin against the ground And face the rains, like all my flowers do Sometimes the heavens open up And rain all over me Nothing like a summer squall To set the heavens free So let the heavens set me free Let the heavens rain on me I guess I’m just addicted to the essence of growth Like water and sunlight and dark rich loam I celebrate each morning with the flowers in my garden, And feel the rains with all the seeds I’ve sown Sometimes the heavens open up And rain all over me Nothing like a summer squall To set the heavens free So let the heavens set me free Let the heavens rain on me Please don’t tell my garden that I love the sunflowers best They lord it over lavender, they’re taller than the rest And they’re first to catch the scattered drops of rain Sometimes the heavens open up And rain all over me Nothing like a summer squall To set the heavens free So let the heavens set me free Let the heavens rain on me Posted July 18 Let The Heavens Rain (Contest entry version) My window panes are dark on this summer afternoon Cats and dogs are gathering into rivulets and pools I am tempted to lay down, feel my skin against the ground And face the rains, like all my flower do Sometimes the heavens open up And rain all over me Nothing like a summer squall To set the heavens free And that lets the heavens set me free Yeah the heavens' rains set me free So let the heavens rain on me Let the heavens rain on me I guess I'm just addicted to the essence of growth Like water and sunlight and dark rich loam I celebrate each morning with the flowers in my garden, And face the rains with all the seeds I've sown Sometimes the heavens open up And rain all over me Nothing like a summer squall To set the heavens free And that lets the heavens set me free Yeah the heavens' rains set me free So let the heavens rain on me Let the heavens rain on me I don't tell my garden, but I love the sunflowers best They lord it over lavender, they're taller than the rest And they're first to catch the scattered drops of rain Sometimes the heavens open up And rain all over me Nothing like a summer squall To set the heavens free And that lets the heavens set me free Yeah the heavens' rains set me free So let the heavens rain on me Let the heavens rain on me
  11. kuya

    Man Bun

    Hey Joe, Chorus part two suggestion you look away then you look back wanna run your hands n' my man bun V2 L8 'fraid you might be gay [the singer's not afraid-- the 'you' is] good topic idea. Fun catchy lines! I'd suggest singing it in an exagerated way that makes the guy you're singing to even more uncomfortable.
  12. kuya

    New Collaboration Contest: Emotional Impact

    I'd say just be patient. There will be more interest.
  13. Hi Josh, I can still remember the first time I heard 'Monkeys versus Donkeys' by a guy named Wildman Fisher. Some music does not and should not fit into a neat little category. Keep at it.
  14. kuya

    Perfect Moments

    The issue I can't resolve is most of the song is absolutely violent yet the title is perfect moments. 3 verses of violence followed by a 2 line pre pc seque into LaLa Land. Times two. "In these moments we need to take joy where we can." I was thinking what perfect moments? When they're in the emergency room getting stitched up? When they're knocked unconscious? It could easily be construed that the couple is taking joy in the violence. (Which could work too!) The segue does not set up the perfect moments enough for me to make it work yet. Needs a couple tweaks. The perfect moments are the calm after the storm.
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