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Joey M

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About Joey M

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    Inspirational Muse
  • Birthday June 14

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    Virginia USA
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    Composing music (all genera), songwriting, art and ceramic arts

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    Country, Pop and Jazz

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  1. This new recording has numerous lyric revisions including a completely new bridge. Thank you everyone who helped with the first version in the lyrics section, and special thanks to Ron Bryan who stuck with me thru several revisions giving this song his special touch by contributing several great lines that helped clarify the story and breathe life into the bridge. I would love to hear anyone's comments or suggestions. Leaning On A Lamppost Copyright 2017 ~ Music by Joey McMichael ~ Words by Joey McMichael & Ron Bryan Baby I’m a little wasted Came out walking by myself again Down to the tavern where we used to go Baby I miss you so And I brought the bottle with me Lately it’s been my best friend Still feeling hurt, I wonder if you know Baby I need you so Ch I'm leaning on a lamppost down on memory lane Texting you while standing in the rain Leaning on a lamppost outside our tavern door Dreaming things were like they were before People hold the door and ask me Would I like to step inside I just politely tell them no Baby I can’t let go I can see you looking happy Dancing in the arms of your new guy Don’t wanna start a fight, so I’ll just go Baby if you say so Ch Br Looking in the window dreaming of the night we met Feeling such regret Baby I should have known Someone else would come along The time had come to take another step But Baby I took too long Ch More than just a little wasted And my phone is running out of juice Guess it’s time for me to stagger home Baby I feel so alone Copyright 2017 ~ Music by Joey McMichael ~ Words by Joey McMichael & Ron Bryan
  2. Alright!!!! Big improvement. Yes, keep going with this. I just love it.
  3. I Want to Make You Mine

    This has such a nice feel....and so authentic. It has a sweet tenderness that is captivating. And what a fine idea.....a proposal song. Yes the lyric is straight forward........but what's not to like in something so lovely. I want to hear this in a far away pub with a brew in my hand.....just candlelight and a pretty freckled face sitting across from me as I disappear in my dreams of yesteryear. Looking forward to hearing more songs.
  4. Just Where Did I Go Wrong?

    I just love it! Great vibe.....and super fine vocal. keep 'em coming.
  5. I was scrolling down the list of titles and saw this song. Glad I did. First of all, it's a great title......a really fine hook. Obviously you are a writer first and a musician second. Nothing wrong with that. Your musical ideas are quite nice and certainly bring dimension and purpose to your lyric. You'll continue to grow as a musician....that's for sure. You are on the right track with the way you have structured your progressions and melody. You're actually composing beyond your technical skills. That shows real promise. I'm not very concerned about timing since that's an easy matter....you'll automatically grow into a more precise flow the more you play and sing, and your melodies will grow stronger as well. Those things are not as important as how nicely you are handling and coordinating all the other artistic aspects of the song. Having said all that and having read the other input you've received, here are my humble thoughts. They simply represent my perspective and beliefs about what makes for a fine song. I think you can get more structure into your lyric as well as your music so that your song can have much more impact. The listener is always trying to make sense of things and find patterns that are familiar from stanza to stanza in a song. For maximum power, a songs Verses need to be distinct from choruses. Verses tend to be similar to each other in rhyme scheme and meter......choruses tend to be similar to each other if not identical in meter and rhyme scheme, but distinctly different from the verses.. They usually soar above the verses musically, and should be different from the verses in terms of meter if possible. Above all else, they should really emphasize the hook......in this case, "would you even care". I realize that there can, and often are, too many rules. But, in my opinion, it's still a good idea to impose a little order on things for maximum impact. OK. This is a very dark song. Nothing wrong with that. In fact I really like your theme, lyric ideas and your nice use of imagery. It's all about expression and sincerity. And you are indeed an artist. But I thought I'd have a little fun with your lyric and rewrite the song the way I would approach it. Of course, there are an infinite number of possibilities, and every artist develops their own processes. I hope you will consider it a form of flattery that I got a little creative with you fine lyric.....just for the fun of it, and to help get you thinking about a few possibilities. I didn't take real long in the writing....so forgive me if I've drifted away from your intended meaning in places. I would label the different stanzas for this forum so people can easily understand the song structure. Again, yours is such a fine heartfelt lyric and a touching musical rendition. I'm just trying to get you to fly a little higher by showing you how another artist, might try to take it up a notch. Remember, the listener grasps memorable phrases, meter and lyrics that repeat in the song......something to get a handle on. The emotional impact of the final song has allot to do with patterns such as rhyme patterns, cadences etc. So, for example, all first lines of verses might have similar cadences though not necessarily identical. The same thing is true for 2nd lines, 3rd lines and so on. The same applies to the chorus or, in this case, choruses (they differ slightly from each other in my playing with your lyric). The music needs to be similar verse to verse and chorus to chorus. Often the choruses are stepped up a bit in instrumentation and groove pattern as they repeat.....but otherwise they need to have an awful lot in common. Above all else......be sure to repeat the hook that is at the center of your song. I notice you are a little tentative with your vocal. There is no such thing as a bad voice. No matter what a persons voice is like, there is a way to use it that is expressive and captivating. The most important ingredient is confidence and projection. The rest will come naturally with time.....including pitch correctness and vocal quality. Yours is a fine voice. Use it loudly and proudly. Your soul is just peaking out from behind your shyness. Let us see it (hear it). No need to be timid about such a lovely voice and spirit! To help you see patterns that I used, I've color coded the rhyme schemes in the verses, choruses and bridge and shown the hook in bold. Would You Even Care Verse 1 I know I’m nothing to you I know I don’t deserve your help But when I stand in front of you It’s the only time I’m not in Hell Chorus 1 I know I don’t deserve your concern But if you saw the blade in my veins In the only dream where I win Heard the cries I hold in If you found my body wrapped in chains Would you even care Verse 2 But the knife goes right into This ghostly body of air Where the light passes through As if there's nothing there Chorus 2 I know I don’t deserve your concern But if you saw the hatred burning my mind red Saw the holes all around my soul As the cruelty takes its toll If you saw me bleeding in my bed Would you even care Bridge You see I only exist When you speak to me Though I clench my fists And fight hart to be free Chorus 3 I know I don’t deserve your concern But if you saw the knives thrust in my heart As they go deeper And the climb grows steeper If you saw them rip my soul apart Would you even care Verse 3 ~ Out I may mean nothing to you But will you change my end? I’m standing here in front of you Won’t you lend me your hand? I hope this has been helpful in some small way. But you've got a really fine song already! Joey
  6. Like The Fool I Was

    Hi Cindy. So nice to hear from you. Thanks for listening and for the comment. Yea, I moved here to the Virginia Appalachians from a big city.....many years ago. It was bound to creep into my songwriting. I almost decided against ever recording this one.....cuse it's a little mushy. But I decided to go ahead since it got a good response in the lyrics section, and more than a little help from my friends. So I guess I'll be posting a few additional songs that I've written with a regional feel.
  7. Nice to see you're getting good reviews and some helpful tips. This is really quite good for a "muse in training" LOL. Looking forward to hearing many more from you.......and I'll be interested to see what you do to further enhance the chorus on this tune.
  8. Hello Piano

    Hey Paul, I mean every word. To me this is a truly beautiful song. Wow, and I thought you had indicated you didn't play much guitar. That is really nice work.....right up there with your wonderful piano playing. I taught myself a little keyboard over the past few years, but am very lousy with my left hand......just a few chords and no rhythm with that hand .....I think of myself as more of a guitarist. Obviously......you have both instruments going for you.......more than a little jealous!
  9. I appreciate the help I received with the lyric to this song, especially Gary Hale's work on the chorus and Tex's nice idea for the bridge. I hope the rendition doesn't disappoint. Would love to hear any thoughts on this song, Like The Fool I Was Copyright 2017 J.W. McMichael She said this world belongs to lovers, better grab it while you can Open up your heart and let me in You might not find another love like mine One that will last until the end All the gold in California won’t buy happiness If you don’t have someone who shares Somebody who you can tell your troubles to Someone to love who really cares Ch Ooh, like the fool I was I let her slip right through my hands Like the fool I was, too busy making other plans Life goes on but I can’t forget After all this time I ain’t over her yet Wish I never turned my back on love Ooh, like the fool I was On a hill in San Diego in a mansion by the sea Too big for a lonely boy like me Party with my friends until the laughter ends I’ve got all the toys I’ll ever need But all the riches in the world won’t buy happiness If I don’t have someone who shares That girl I knew used to tell my troubles to The only one who really cared Ch Br Is it too late for me to make things right I wonder where she's at tonight Haven't seen that girl since then Lord, I wonder what might of been Ch Ooh, like the fool I was
  10. What a great title. Just had to listen to your song when I saw it. You have so much feedback already. I'd just like to say I really enjoyed it. The lyric is well written and interesting. And the music is very catchy....allot of fun. I think your vocal is right on target. My only nit would be that the chorus could use a little more instrumentation to better distinguish it musically from the verses.....something to make it a little more exciting. But that's a simple matter.....and hardly a criticism. All in all....a very nice job. Joey
  11. Hello Piano

    Hi Paul, I LOVED it from the moment I first read your lyric and have so looked forward to hearing you play and sing it. Just as a read, the theme is the perfect compliment to such a GREAT hook......heart felt, personal yet universal, and so touching. I think the arrangement is great and your vocal is so nice......as usual. And I always love the intricacies of your work on the piano, but this is some of the best I've heard from you. What a super fine intro and outro as well. I think I remember you saying you don't play allot of guitar. Well, this is very nice work on the keyboard guitar. Sounds pretty authentic......nice licks. So well composed. The chorus is just perfect! It really hit me when I heard these two simple words.....Oh, piano. I'm pretty jaded after so many hard years, and seldom muster a sentimental tear when listening to a song......but this really touches my heart. A fine work of art in every way. I wouldn't dare to criticize a thing in something so wonderful. I'll have to leave that to folks who really know something about mixing. I'd rather just drift off into the sentiment and feel of your song. I have listened to it about a dozen times....and like it more with each listen. This is a timeless masterpiece. Truly inspiring. Nothing but superlatives for this amazing song. BRAVO! Joey
  12. Thanks Kleen and Fulvio, I'm glad to see the response from you folks. I'd like to do a few more feel good songs when I get a chance. Somehow, they're the most fun for me to sing and play. So glad you folks are liking it. Fulvio, it's always a compliment when artists who work in other genera actually like one of my country songs. That might be the real test.....winning over those that are not usually turned on by country.
  13. Let's Get Together

    ALRIGHT!!!! Love it.....love everything about it! Man you guys are tight! Sometimes when the writer's block dam cuts loose wonderful things happen. What the world needs now is........a song like this! Not only is this a super fine positive lyric and vibe, but the music is fun, really exciting and so accessible. Love the rap bridge! What can I say but, Clint, you're at the top of your game on this one.....and I am such a fan!!!!
  14. Till You Came Along

    I like the feel of this allot. The message is simple and the music is fun. A soft, gentle vibe...... a feel good song that accomplishes it's goals. I like your musicianship. Nice voice too. I think 'Til you came along" is a fairly well worn theme. But you've done something nice with it. So I don't have a problem with that. The verse melody and progression, though simple, are fine as far as I am concerned. But I'd consider changing up the chorus to distinguish it a little more.....both lyrically and musically. Till you came along Till you came along Something was missing................used this already in V2, line 1 Till you came along This is just a quick example: Til' you came along 'Til you came along Each day was the same My nights were too long 'Til you came along Til' you came along Life wasn't progressing And things turned out wrong 'Til you came along I do like the change up you've got in the bridge however. Just one little nit with this verse: It's not what you say It's not what you do The fortune teller told me your eyes would be blue........lines 2 and 3 don't seem to relate to lines 1 and 2. Although the fortune teller line is nice imagery, and I think you're saying that it's not the way she looks....."blue eyes', I'm wanting something that relates better to the first two lines. If it's not what she says and does, then what is it? You could try to answer that question in lines 3 and 4. Example: It's not what you say It's not what you do It's the way you make me feel inside Whenever I'm with you I'm not trying to be critical because I like most everything about your song, especially your musicianship and vocal performance. Just trying to give you a few ideas in case you can improve it somehow. Nice job! Joey
  15. Hey Tex, Really nice to hear from you! Hope you are doing well. Thanks so much for listening and your kind comment. Hi Clint, So glad you like it! It's certainly fun to sing and play. I'm pleased that it comes across well. Joey