Joey M

Thank you everyone who helped me develop the lyric for this song. I hope you like it. All critiques welcome. Leaning On A Lamppost Baby I’m a little wasted Went out walking by myself again Down to the tavern where we used to go Baby I miss you so And I took the bottle with me When I said goodnight to all my friends Still hurting, and I just want you to know Baby I need you so Ch I'm leaning on a lamppost Down on Memory Lane Texting you while standing in the rain Leaning on a lamppost And I’m feeling no pain Wishing you would take me back again People hold the door and ask me If I’d like to step inside I just politely tell them no Baby I can’t let go I can see you looking happy Dancing in the arms of your new guy Don’t wanna start a fight, so I’ll just go Baby if you say so Ch Br Looking in the window of the tavern where we met Never will forget your eyes matched your green dress While we were dancing across the floor The sweet taste of your soft lips when we kissed Leaving me wanting more Ch More than just a little wasted And my phone is running out of juice Guess it’s time for me to stagger home Baby I feel so alone Copyright 2017 ~ J. W. McMichael

Yea, this is real nice. I like the format you came up with, and really dig the pacing. I don't think it's too long, cus it's obviously up tempo with those short crisp lines. I think the opener, "it's always the same" X2, is great. Grabs me right from the start. Looks like it's a pre-verse, then a pre-chorus. Nothing wrong with that, I think. Personally, I like the edginess of "feel like a whore again". And it works great with "I know what lay in store again".....which is so essential, tieing the Ch into the opener "always the same". Nice chorus and well set up by the other stanzas. You make it look easy..... but it ain't. A really fine job on this one IMHO. Should sound great too.

Hey Cindy. Don't let it get you down....jus' keep writing. I agree with Mike that the double adjectives are fine. I think they are used consistently for a good effect on the meaning and the rhythm. If you take one of the sets of adjectives out, you'll have to take them all out....since they are so integral to the song. I like the song....dark with splashes of color. Hope you feel better and better.....

I love it. Yea, Karma is a bitch. Great idea. Nice job!

I agree with the others, Paul. This has everything going for it. Can't wait to hear it.

Yea, I stupidly deleted the previous. Sorry. I've made a few final adjustments.......especially to line 3 of V1 and line 2 of V2. This time I saved the previous version for you to see. Mike, I really needed your help on this one and appreciate your hanging in there!

I agree Mike. But you've found yet another variation......and it gets away from the old standard "lamppost" while retaining the more intimate and old fashioned flavor. lamppost......streetlight....... streetlamp Or did you mean to say go back to "lamppost".......cus I kinda like your word "streetlamp". I posted the revision.

Thanks Ron, After reading your nits, I made a change that may help...... in context to why he's not interfering: But I can see you looking happy Dancing in the arms of your new guy This way she's not just with some bozo....she's with her new boyfriend. The line "baby if you say so" at the end of that stanza could indicate the singer's texting to win her back is not going so well either. Not wanting to start a fight is probably wise. Not burdening his friends might not be wise, but he may not want to cry in front of them. He could just be saving face by saying he didn't want to trouble them....nor spoil their party...or something like that. I think "standing in the rain" is descriptive and adds to the emotional content of the song. It also helps make for a very singable chorus. So I don't see it as filler but rather an integral part of the lyric. It's a little sadder that he's wet as well as drunk. Since I am working with a music composition and melody which, although it is somewhat variable, has preexisting constraints on meter and flow, some of the longer lines are necessary. So the syllables and accents have been vetted at this point, and I feel the song is working within the requirements of the melody and, hopefully, the song style. The opening line for example really needs the syllables in the word "maybe". Otherwise the melody falls apart. Unfortunately, reading lyrics without a real sense of the melody, when one already exists, can pose some problems. However, having not yet heard the song, you have made some great contributions to the lyric. I really appreciate how much thought you've put into this. To see how we all feel about the song, I'll try to do a quick rough recording in the next day or two and let you folks know when it has been posted in the songs forum. You may like it better as a listen than as a read. I've had that happen before. I'm sure I'll get allot of additional feedback in the songs forum. The lyric and maybe even the music will probably receive some further tweaking at that point. Again, thanks soooo much for all your help! PS: Stagger my way home is a play on words. It is usually expressed as: find my way home.

That works much better Mike.....just the way you have it. I've made the revision and have also done some new wording in V2 and V3....if you get a chance. Thanks for working thru the bridge with me.

Yes, I thought about a little more meat to this lyric, but decided it probably works OK the length it is....mostly because the way it comes off when I sing it. I'll be recording and posting this song at some point. Maybe you'll get a chance to hear it and see what you think. I traveled with the trucks on the interstates to art shows all over the East Coast for many years. Felt a little like a trucker with several thousand pounds of pottery (I'm a potter) in my trailer. It did feel like a "never ending road". Interesting point, Ron. I wonder if there aren't allot of truck drivers that wish they had better options. I've known a few who wanted to get off the road. But I don't want to demean the profession. I will work on it and see if I can find something better to say in V2. Thanks for taking the time to point out a problem. PS Just came up with: Baby I'm holding you in my dreams And you'll remind me what happiness means When I get home and I'm rolling in your arms I think I like that it's a more optimistic sentiment consistent with his eagerness to get home. And there are no negative connotations this way. Thanks for the great input, Ron!

I see what you mean, Mike. I can make the following line work with the music if that eliminates the flow problem: Never will forget your eyes matched your green dress

Hi Gary, I sure do like the way you write country songs.....the way you render them too. For this one, I've got music with allot of big chords (especially Major 7ths) that aren't real common in country, and a melody that is more pop. If you get a chance to strum them you'll probably get the feel I'm after. I'll try to record it soon, so you can have a listen. But maybe I could do a countrty song along these themes and use something like that neat chorus you put together. Always appreciate your looking at my songs! V DMaj 7 " Em7 " F#m7 " Em7/A7sus4 X 2 Ch GMaj7 " Gbm7 " Em7/A7sus4 DMaj7 " etc. Br Am7 " GMaj7 " Gm7 " Gbm7 " B7 " Em7 " A7sus4 " DMaj 7 " Em7/A7sus4

Thanks Paul. You have found a couple issues that I should be able to take care of. Always a big help!

Thanks everyone, I really appreciate you're following this song. I just don't know how anyone can write a decent song without allot of feedback from other writers. I think this is getting there. I'm going to stay with "green dress" for now (until I do a rough recording for you to hear). I don't feel I have a problem enunciating. I've made several revisions and have tried to heed your advice on the various issues you raised....great advice, I might add. If you get a chance, I would love to hear back from all of you. Thanks again, Joey

I posted this humble country truckin' song some time back and got suggestions. I've made revisions to fix the problems folks pointed out, especially in Verse 2. I'm hoping V2 works OK now.......and that this is ready to record. I'd be grateful for any constructive suggestions even if country might not be your bag. Revised 5/12 ~ thanks guys! Please scroll down for original Rolling In Your arms I can’t wait to look in your eyes Gonna rock you right thru the night Them white lines gonna lead the way to you Been out on this road too long This old truck’s gotta get me home Meet you for a midnight rendezvous Ch Tryin’ to pass another road hog If I could see thru rain and fog These windshield wipers ain’t working worth a darn Baby I'm holding you in my dreams And you'll remind me what happiness means When I get home and I’m rolling in your arms Up ahead must be something wrong Things I’ve seen oughta make me strong Flashing lights and they’re setting up red flares Single lane and we’re movin’ slow Eighteen wheeler run off the road I’ll be glad when I’m with someone who cares Ch Baby I'm seeing you in my dreams And you'll remind me what happiness means When I get home and I’m rolling in your arms When I get home I’ll be rolling in your arms Copyright 2017 ~ J. W. McMichael ................................................................ Previous: I can’t wait to look in your eyes Gonna rock you right thru the night Them white lines gonna lead the way to you Been out on this road too long This old truck’s gotta get me home Meet you for a midnight rendezvous Ch Tryin’ to pass another road hog If I could see thru rain and fog These windshield wipers ain’t working worth a darn Maybe I could’ve had bigger dreams But you’ll remind me what happiness means When I get home and I’m rolling in your arms Up ahead must be something wrong Things I’ve seen oughta make me strong Flashing lights and they’re setting up red flares Single lane and we’re movin’ slow Eighteen wheeler run off the road I’ll be glad when I’m with someone who cares Ch Maybe I could’ve had bigger dreams But you’ll remind me what happiness means When I get home and I’m rolling in your arms When I get home I’ll be rolling in your arms Copyright 2016 ~ J. W. McMichael