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Qindfish

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  1. Here's a sketch of a new song, just finished mixing my E.P so thinking about what style for the next one.t... I have only a few hours a week to play in so i wanted to experiment melodically. let me know your thoughts! link under lyrics mothers daughters everyone you were waiting for your song came to me twice in a dream first time nice the next time mean astronauts in fire trucks kids don't worry 'bout the bucks but if you kick them violently they will choose to steal there tea we al; get younger the more we play we all get dumber the more we take but i would steal a diamond ring just to see you pretty thing fathers grandsons OCD we were born a family but I would steal a diamond ring just to see you pretty thing some times i worry there isn't hope tired finance half written joke we were sitting by the stream sounds more raunchy then it seems came to me twice in a dream first time nasty next time clean some times i worry there isn't hope tired finance half written joke mothers daughters everyone you were waiting for your song If i stole a diamond ring i would see you pretty thing if I saw a diamond ring i would see you pretty thing
  2. Like Fleet Foxes in space! (good thing) I really like and have no really critiques. It's obviously short and i'm unsure if thats because it's a sketch or not. Either way it's a lovely thing in it's current incarnation.
  3. Wow I'm jealous this is great... I agree that the lyrics are a bit hard to follow... It doesn't have to be about something obvious but If you were to do a lyrical rewrite i would suggest avoiding "3 dollar words" ...which basically means avoid fancy words. Still really impressive!
  4. Here's a better mix.
  5. Here's about six hours with of studio work. One or two of you might remember I posted a sketch of this song. Well heres's the finished product, please let me know your thoughts no matter what they are. I walk the long and winding road in my knapsack is my load I love ou, I love you I pass a church and wonder, when do you die if born again? I love you, I love you On the rails with the guys galaxies in bloodshot eyes I love you, I love you It stops in san diego last and they said we’d get there fast I love you, I love you It’s night out and I need sleep I guess i’ll go sit by the beach I love you, I love you When I wake up my wallets gone and my phone with your name on I love you, I love you I check the phonebook for a trace but you're too cool to waste the space I love you, I love you Sometime later I find guys with galaxies in blood shot eyes I love you, I love you See you walking down the street but are eyes don’t ever meet I love you, I love you Guess you thought I was a bum With crazy hair and big beard on I love you, I love you I call your name and you turn round and you make a timeless sound You clean me up I look the same When do you die when born again? I love you, I love you I love you, I love you
  6. Hi like a lot, Reminds me of a more chilled chemical brothers. This might go against what your going for but I was hoping for a chorus. Thanks!
  7. Hi, as someone who's not familiar with the original track, I like this. My main feedback would be "the underwater effect" is awesome when contrasted with more present "tinnier" sounds. You do this some but I think you could take it further with a harsh buzzy high synth... Enjoyed listening thanks!
  8. Hi! Sounds good... Hard to tell how good it could be without hearing the melody. Production wise I was hoping the guitar would be more fuzzy.
  9. It's really good, making the complicated sound simple is where the magic happens imo. Good luck whatever you do!
  10. Thats cool, I made a little recording to better show what I meant melody wise... Don't worry it's private.
  11. Really outstanding melody. Maybe you'll take it further but the lo fi production is my sort of thing... The only thing that really stands out is the tightness of the lyrics. They could be a lot tighter. The content and ideas are great and it works written down, but going off ear it's very hard to follow. Looking at first verse I would say something like Easy to look away stand well back from fray I'm really just the same a Little bit like you I'm pretty sure you'd be able to keep the melody if you carry on in that style... Let me know if I can help, I really like it. EDIT I think you might have to change melody with that simpler metre i suggested E.G repeating the melody from line one in line three
  12. It's really a great song, it's hodgepodge nature reminded me of Shangri-La by The Kinks. I think if you wanted to take it further you should get someone else to sing it. You did a great job and it sounds all in tune but I think it might be better with a musical-esque female singer.
  13. Lot's of great potential for an amazing song... I would say If you wanted to extend it (and you have the ability) you might want to keep layering harmonies ala "Row Row your boat" or "God only knows" Also a real bass would do it a big service if your shopping this demo round. Great melody and rhythm.
  14. Thanks! Ukulele is a lot of fun
  15. Thanks! The sound was discovered through sheer incompetence but I like it.